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Review of Drifting Home  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Turtle! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the. public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about finding your way.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The poet speaks of the vessel adrift with no captain. Wind and waves carried him. He was in a hallow shell and gashed with fear. As he saw land, he felt he would be safe from the storm. He was guided by the morning light, at the end of his wandering and gained some peace and hope. His hands reached out for the fire of truth. They repaired the hull and mended the sail. With warmth his cup runneth over. He was saved from evil; his captain, his savior, was always the light that glows.

From the Reader: I feel that this poem, while it speaks of a treacherous experience at sea, also is symbolic, in that the poet is saved from evil by his savior, his captain.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. Some nice imagery, eg cold of darkened fear, fire of truth. Description is expressive. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Spidery! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the joy, love, and wonder of playing with a child.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
A sense of wonder and love overcomes the poet when she sees the laughter in a child's eyes. Those eyes look at the poet and blink with joy and never ending sparkle. They dance through their dreams and lift toys in the air. Their hearts are blissful.

From the Reader: Both child and poet have a sense of wondermentt; the child's joy is natural and the poet's joy is given to her by the child. Delightful!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Right Path  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Thomas! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. .

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about making the right choices along tha path of life.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Life's paths take you in many directions, looping, going back to the start, etc. The fork in the path offers many choices. Your mom and dad help you when you're young. Good friends and lovers help along the way. They suggest only, not make your decisions for you. Remember it's your path and only you can make the choice.

From the Reader: Your poem reminds me of Robert Frost's poem, entitled The Road Not Taken. The poem, especially the last two lines make a strong statement. In my opinion he is saying that the less popular and more difficult choice just might be the best choice. "I took the one less traveled by, And that has made all the difference." If you have access to Internet, you can bring it up on your computer.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed unmetered verse. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Fun! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about our Thanksgiving blessings.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The poet speaks of gathering around the Thanksgiving table, thanking our Lord for their blessings and special people. The poet remembers her youngest.daughter, who was born with 3 times the red blood cells and turned blue/black with no blood sugar. She was given a 5% chance of living and she would be a vegetable. The poet thanks God above that her daughter is doing fine today. In life there are no stumbling blocks, only stepping stones.

From the Reader: I agree with the poet. If we put our problems in a perspective, we will find we can make positives out of negative experiences. It's up to us!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem presents a well-developed thought and statement. Nice job. Fairly consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of A Perfect Smile  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. .

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's girlfriend's smile and gestures.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet's girlfriend's engaging smile is like migrating birds chirping atop a cluster of magnificent trees. As Earth graces us with its miraculous display, the poet is in awe of his girlfriend's enthralling gifts which form the poet's happy life. Her smile fills his senses with its warmth and angelic majesty. His and her love are blessings from God and sent in the form of her beaming smile.

From the Reader: Your poem with its lovely imagery hooked me from the beginning. No suggestions.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse is pleasant. Imagery is effective, eg like migrating birds. Description is vivid and expressive. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Un Named Piece  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Duchess Barbie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a re-construction in the poet's neighborhood.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The poet speaks of old house to new house, re-build or destroy. Rain or shine men go to work.

From the Reader: It seems that your community is part of a redevelopment project. The beautification of these communities is inspiring, especially if the community is is part of historical preservation, where the ambiance of the era is re-built, eg houses from the 1950's might be renovated to correspond with the 1950's, perhaps the fascia of the exterior or mouldings on the door. I find it fascinating that an historical period can be re-enacted. A real plus: many times the lots are bigger than contemporary neighboring homes. Of course, another plus, jobs are created. Also, there can be a need for people to donate their time re-building, especially if there has been a natural disaster. Do you have any interest in adding some of these thoughts to your poem?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Bob! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. .

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's idea of beauty in the eye of the beholder.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The poet looks at ordinary things and sees the spectacular in the surface of the leaf or the structure of a flower. To marvel at a marvel one must be alive. The poet sees one woman crowned with the light of heaven. He sees in her the vision his heart has sought. It is not an illusion: She is as glorious as he saw her to be for beauty is true in the eye of the beholder.

From the Reader: The phrase "for beauty is true in the eye of the beholder" is a coined term or cliche. It is a nice term, but it is overused to the point of being trite. Can you think of another way of expressing the beauty that you see in this woman? Well-written.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. Vivid description. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed. You might want to try a smoother flow of words and adjust for the rhythm in your poem, eg look at ordinary things NOT the eye which I look at ordinary things.

Suggestions:
icy NOT icey
paradise NOT Paridise

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Review of at the party  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rhyssa! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about an object that is used to celebrate winter holidays annually.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Made with papier mache and tissue paper, the object is painted bright colors. It may be a donkey, butterfly or other creature or thing. It spins and spins, is struck by a stick, and is cracked open. Dark chocolate pieces scatter on the ground until tiny hands eat the chocolate morsels that have escaped the crinkle of cellophane. . This celebration is held every year.

From the Reader: Did you mean butterfly wing and not flutterby wing? I hear the imagery of your poem, eg gurgle of laughter. This is unusual for me. I more often visualize. Hearing the sound is refreshing. I enjoyed reading about all five senses in your poem.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Many expressive metaphors and onomatopoeia , eg escapes the crinkle of cellophane. Unrhymed verse. D Personification is used, showing human tendencies of the piñata, an inanimate object, eg I break apart (sense of touch, one of five senses). I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Neva! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems from the public review pages. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. My comments are opinions only. .

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a favorite breakfast combined with the ebullience of winter.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The poet relates that hot chocolate coffee from a carafe makes for morning laughter and dawn's joy. Munching on chocolate raisins hidden in oatmeal, frozen yogurt, and almonds and sipping coffee from a white porcelain cup brings laughter echoing memories of seasons past.

From the Reader: I find that every word of this poem is delectable. Like a Monet painting, in which the artist skillfully paints blotches of color to get a special effect and the big picture, you will be tempted by this delightful poem. You will be crazy for this poem close up and at a distance too, at the breakfast table viewing the snow or crunching steps in the snow outside. Either way it has you hooked. Ummm-good!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. Personification is used effectively, eg makes morning laugh. Imagery almost has a taste, eg chocolate laughter. Description is delicious. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Octogre thing! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for our Hallow-Scream Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is written for Star Tiggy's birthday party!

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
Ten pumpkins on porches lined up in a row. Carved faces haunt the night. Fiendish eyes aglow, all prancing in the darkness as if without a care. Twenty eight vampires swoop down and have a blood feast on Halloween night. The poet will have new pumpkins next year to dance the dance of fear.

From the Reader:

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dorianne! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a hallowicious celebration.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Goblins, gremlins, et al scream or howl at what pleases them most. A graveyard of 13 witches dance around the cauldron with the brew of blood and stew made of eyeballs, maggots, and venom. Toads meat sandwiches are pure delight. Cerberus chased a black cat, a spider tried to ride on a bat, a sorceress put on quite a show. Guests were transformed until they left. Event to be held in inferno's hell next year.

From the Reader: What an exquisite and authentic Halloween event. You might try further explanation of next year's agenda for the netherworld.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Excellent consistent rhyme scheme. Very fine and expressive description. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Reap of Sowing  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Anthony! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your short story, Reap of Sowing. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. .

*Bulletg*- MY OVERALL IMPRESSION: -
Bullying leads to tragic karma energy which involves spiders.

*Bulletg*- SETTING/THEME:-
The setting of this story takes place:
1. in part on the school playground,
2. in the more remote tree-lined area of the school's property,
3. on the forbidden pathway of the school's woodlands.

The theme of this story is bullying, which is never a positive attribute. In this story bullying is very severe. I'm afraid what happens in Reap of Sowing is quite realistic.

*Bulletg*- PLOT/HOOK/CREATIVITY: -
Opening hook happens when Birsha is tied to a tree with a sock shoved into his mouth on the tree-lined remote part of the school's property. Damien and Richy beat him with branches. Damien spits in his face and punches him in the mouth. Chayna happens along. At her request, Damien releases Birsha from the tree. Damien and Richy go back to school, leaving Chayna with Birsha. She has a glimmering pill which helps a person do witchcraft. She goes back to school.

Birsha gains the confidence he needs to follow Damian and Richy home after school. Birsha scares them with odd sounds along the forbidden pathway. The spiders attack and the boys are overcome with spiders stinging and biting. They fall over. Soon birds, insects and more spiders join the flesh eating activity.

Chayna shows up, tells him he's gotten the witch enraged with Birsha's anger so he must take the antidote. "I've been dead five centuries, and I'm not about to go back." The skies turned ebony and threatening. A pentagram...An inflamed secret symbol used by witches to create magic. ...was placed in hands. Whose hand? Barisa, Chayna, the witch? The questions arise: Did Barisa take the antidote? Who has been dead five centuries? The witch, Barisa or Chayna or is Chayna the witch?

*Bulletg*- CHARACTERS/DIALOGUE:-

Richly and Damien...bullies, Of the two Damien is the lead bully.
Barisa, enacts strategy to accomplish his new found goals
Chayna...female witness to bullying, insightful and just
Witch or is Chayna the witch?

Dialogue is effectively used and reflects the way the students speak. Nice use of quotation marks of those speaking with as little description as possible and does not interfere with plot...lifelike.

*Bulletg*- LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR:-
You have chosen to write in third person, present tense, which is acceptable, as long as you are consistent with present tense. The dialogue, I feel, accurately reflects how kids speak, especially with each other. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. See Suggestions below.

*Bulletg*- MOST. MEMORABLE:-
Most memorable is the spider attack.


*Bulletg*- SUGGESTIONS:-
Paragraph 2: My eyes glare at him NOT My eyes settle a glare over him.
Par. 18: in search of an answer NOT in search for an answer
Par. 23: She shows a shimmering blue pill resting in her palm. OMIT Her cupped hand raises back up
Par. 32: Ricky and Damien NOT Richy to Damian
Par. 54: Renaissance NOT renascence
Par. 36: bewilderment NOT bewildement.
NOTE: The words anyways and towards are not considered standard English, which would be anyway and toward. You have chosen words that might fit their dialect. Your choice.


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Review of Autumn's Chill  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Wolfbane! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for our October Hallo-Scream-Scream Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about animal life in the forest next to the brook.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The rushing wind makes a whispering sound. Red and orange leaves blow into the brook. Wolves are on the waterfall as bears use their sharpened claws like a hook to catch dinner to survive. The bluejay arrives and his beak lands on a worm. Squirrels forage for food and run up and down the trunk of the tree. It will be a sad day when the tree cannot provide shade. The deer stop in a misty forest glen. The herd makes their way inside a cave. Clouds manage land with rain, providing soil and minerals. When I left the wilderness, I left pain.

From the Reader: It seems that you could explain more about the pain you felt when you left the wilderness. This is an interesting commentary on animal life in the forest.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid and expressive. The poem is a rubayait. form. Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of A Fall Guest  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Whiskerface! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for our October Hallo-Scream Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about making friends in the neighborhood.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet watches as Autumn arranges leaves with his rake,. The poet climbs his roof to take a photo. He makes a leafy gold dragon shape for his front yard.

From the Reader: I'd be proud of the gold dragon in my front yard too! A sight of gold leaves shaped like a dragon for neighbors to enjoy, until the wind blows it all away. How about lining some chicken wire with cellophane to give the dragon a longer life. I'm sure this would be a fun Halloween sight. Then you could add some dragon sounds for authenticity. This is something adults enjoy doing and then inviting neighbor kids, moms and dads in for hot apple cider.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Dancing Leaves  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jyo! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for our October Hallo-Scream Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the scurry of dancing leaves in autumn.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The leaves metamorphose, losing chlorophyll from the sun in autumn, to reds, browns, yellows and oranges. They leap with graceful twists and turns, pirouetting to the base of the bare trees. The rake chases them to their end until the leaves have another performance next year.

From the Reader: Your piece truly is what a poem should be. Every word is colorful and supports your theme of leaves dancing. Gorgeous and a pleasure to read. Thank you!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid. Your poem is loaded with imagery, metaphors, eg with her frosted cloak and personification, eg dances in ecstasy. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of When Autumn Comes  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Glaedrfly! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review one of your poems for our Hallo-Scream Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's loved one who passed away in autumn.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The poet remembers that twenty four years ago his loved one carried rainwater to the hard ground. Leaves covered his and her shoes. He hated the wet, pimpled leaves for letting her go. Darkness crept in before he could get his last glimpse of her gleaming blue eyes, now crystallizing in their sockets. Autumn is remembered for death and hunger for warmth. Flowers won't bloom on saggy branches like his. Her last box was packed and she never came back. She died in Autumn. He loves her now like he. Loved her than and maybe even more.

From the he Reader: This poem, a Remembrance of sadness of your loved one's death, has a beautiful quality.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well written. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Imagery is used effectively, eg gleaming blue bulbs. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Love  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Prosperous Snow. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. /b}

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about caregiving.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
Love for a mother translates into adoration and affection. It is multi-faceted: forgiving her anger, caring for her and overseeing her medication. "Minutes joyfully sacrificed"

From the Reader: I enjoyed your pyramid form poem and your thoughtful description of caring for your mother. You've described caregiving and parenting to perfection when you say "Minutes joyfully sacrificed".

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Interesting pyramid form. Good description. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rhyssa! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found in the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. {\/c}

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem states that childhood books are lasting friends.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet met Laura Ingalls Wilder in the privacy of her own bedroom. Laura Ingalls Wilder's life over time inhabited the poet's world, log cabin and maple snow. Her worries made the poet's worries forgivable,. They tormented their sisters and together they had guilt. The poet lived in a quiet place and didn't have to keep up with the crowd.

From the Reader: Laura Ingalls Wilder is a fine writer. Children and adults alike adore. She is especially the idol of young girls. I like the nature of your poem, in which you speak of you and Laura tormenting your sisters. You're really talking about picking up those ideas in her books.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Free form poemI. Rhyme sprinkled through poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Soulraider! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is about future uses of hydrogen.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The writer feels that hydrogen is the fuel of the future. As coal, natural gas and oil deposits diminish, hydrogen can be a he lead life giver for the future. It is used in buildings, factories and homes to power energy needs. It can be used in cars, buses and trucks for cleaner and more robust autos. It can create electricity which is cleaner and cheaper. Big energy corporations can rest their heads as power plants, networks and resources are created.

From the Reader: You might want to organize your article into paragraphs for easier reading.


*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Carol! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which was on the public review pages.n Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a to do list inadvertently written by a mother.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
Suessically speak-ink, the poet speaks of this surprise happening by itself. Trssh is out, Rosa is iin. Boxes have gone to recycling and old clothing has gone to the bin. The poet thas time to herself to enjoy her book. Time to take monies to the bank and packages to the p.o. There's another trip to the grocery store, pick up the kids, go to the gym then to the salon, laundry is forever. Steve is home early. She'd better get ready. She has to run.

From the Reader: What statement is made creatively speaking? It seems that a mother's to do list is your theme. There is a musical quality to your title, which is very clever. I have used a representative sampling of items from your poem.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Consistent pattern of rhyme. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Roman Road  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Drifter! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. .

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about Romans from the Bible.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The poet came upon a bedraggled beggar who looked like Christ. The poet is no longer ashamed of the gospel given to him to quell his fear. God offered to care for the poet, who was lost in a sinking ship. Sinners were crippled on crutches. God sent love that would last. God works for all things good. The poet has received a passion for redeeming grace and purpose in being Christian. Nothing can sever His walk with God. The poet says although he is a sinner, he now shares the bread of eternal life.

From the Reader: Can you share why Romans is your favorite book from the Bible?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Your poem is full of lovely metaphors and imagery, eg sinking ship. Alliteration is used effectively, eg crippled with crutches. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kings! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found in the public review pages. {c::red} Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the difference between memories and dreams.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
When the poet is down, young dreams bring him around. He does not think of the past because the past can always haunt you. Think of the future because the future belongs to us. Think of young dreams and don't complain. Focus on the present and not tomorrow. Enjoy laughter.

From the Reader: There is some contradiction when you say the future belongs to us; yet you say do not think about tomorrow. You might clarify this ambiguity. I sympathesize with your position.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme. pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Autumn Leaves  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cubboo! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about raking autumn leaves and what ever else comes naturally.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The poet smiles when she rakes leaves in a pile. When they are heaped high, she'll hide inside.for awhile.

From the Reader: This is a poem that appeals to children and adults too. It seems to me children from Pre-school through sixth grade would love experiencing a mile high pile of leaves! How sweet it is!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
This is a Englyn Urodi Union poem. It is a pleasing formula of syllables. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Mary Ann! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a beautiful crocus flower.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
A beautiful crocus bloom stands out in the flowerbed. Precious and gentle petals grow. The crocus needs protection from strong winds. Lovely purple, white and indigo flowers.

From the Reader: This is such a sweet poem. I would love to have a basketful of these dear blossoms.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.
Suggestions:
I think you meant to say the petals or their petals NOT thei petals.
Try punctuating: grow and NOT grow. And

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Review of Tough Love  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about tough love which empowers parents, children and others involved.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-.
The poet feels that no progress was made and words were vicious attacks. Tough love is the mold and the most caring of all. Kids proud and strong must welcome pure tough love. The kids believe that even though they do not like tough love, it bestows blessings forever. There are many benefits to tough love.

From the Reader: You might try giving an example or two of tough love to help the reader understand the meaning of tough love. I am aware it has been used in the prison system.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. Well-written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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