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Review of They're my Kids!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Theophilus! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the four children of their proud parents.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the Reader: I'm convinced the best part of parenting is when the children are grown. We can appreciate by then who they are.

The poet and his wife are mighty proud of their adult children. Some of their children's choices are good. Some choices are bad. God has a plan for them. John is a musical dreamer. He moved in with Mom and Dad in Virginia. Sam is spirited with a quick wit. He is a tattoo lover. When the Towers went down tragically, he enrolled in the military to protect his country. Mark does what he thinks he should do. He ended up with a cast on his leg one year. John and Sam married outside their faith, but the Lord made both girls His daughters of Light. The family adopted Rachel, a tomboy as a young girl. Some of her choices are good and some bad. God has a plan for her too.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Fairly consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.
Suggestion:
Stanza 8: set should be set
High

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Review of Panpipes....  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cabin Fever! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's memories, especially of her childhood.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the Reader: You have done a good job explaining how your love of pan pipes music allows you to remember different incidents of your life. Soft, soothing music does wonders and helps us make connections with our past.

The pan pipes play and the poet is calmed by the memories of her childhood. She sees a field of grass and remembers turning to face the sun, closing her eyes, and dancing until she's dizzy then falls to the ground. She watches the clouds form different shapes and tries to catch one which looks like cotton candy. Time is lost but not wasted. She waits for her first new friend in her new school. Her father in military uniform boards the plane to go to war. A year later someone who looked like her father came back, weary and war-torn, ignoring slurs against him as he proudly stood next to the flag he represented. Most memorable to me: She taught her children's spirits as babies while keeping their bodies safe.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written with good description and nice imagery, eg clouds like cotton candy. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Safe  
Review by GerMac
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Beetle! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*
My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about safety and balloons.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the Reader: Balloons are wishes, like blowing out candles on a birthday cake and being safe about it..

Balloons tied in place are more wishes than substance. The poet is safe from that which scorns her. Most memorable to me: What will hold her when he's gone?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed, unmetered verse. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Summer Solitude  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Turtle! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you witch a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about reflecting on life.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the Reader: I've been there myself on a balmy day, perfect environment of peacefulness even with a book to enjoy and gently falling asleep. One could sleep forever on a day like this.

The rolling waves lap and retreat on the shoreline. The poet is falling asleep with a book across her lap. Pine musk fills her lungs . Her eyes are closed in contemplation. Most memorable o me: She is alone amongst chickadees and nuthatch. The gentle wind is mind clearing as it blows across her cheek. Fresh intentionally litter is on the forest floor. The edge of time glides gently along the shore.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Nice imagery, eg edge of time glides gently along the shore. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are njot obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Where I'm From  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Peper! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, {c} Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's upbringing and journey Into adulthood. Based on the life of George Ella Lyon, "Where I'm From".

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the Reader: Your approach to your autobiography is very unique and makes for a fascinating poem. You have described many influences in your life, whether they are the experiences of you, your family or others in your community. You have painted a colorful picture of the prurient interest in your country environment. I find it fascinating reading.

The poet is from the country. She's grew up with poverty, outhouses, no bathtub, laundry on the line and loud honky tonk music. She is from cutting wood during the bitter cold and cooling fans during the dog days of summer. She is from growing potatoes, green beans, corn and canning beets. Her brothers hunted squirrels and coons while she dressed up a dozen cats in doll clothes. She is from riding bikes and flipping go carts. Most memorable to me: She is from another universe, transformed by education., a little yellow house, a husband and two wonderful children.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed free verse poem. Some nice imagery, eg cooling fans during dog days. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment Isi a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of THE MIGHTY OAK  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor the Old Warrior with a review of a poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. e

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
In the poet's words this poem is about an Old Warrior who prepares to meet his maker.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the Reader: My highest regard for the dedicated patriotism of the Old Warrior. I, as a reader, thank you, dear sir. God bless you and your family.

The tall, majestic oak tree has a twisted limb from the blowing wind. Like the oak tree, the poet bears scars from battles and internal strife. The old oak tree is near the end, but there are memories of the lives that shared its shade. The oak tree taught the poet to stand before God, shoulders back, chin high, and wait for God's final nod. The Old Warrior fought to keep his country safe. Soon he'll rest in God's arms. The poet never asked for days or weeks. He knows only God can make a tree.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Live Out Loud  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Paul! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about choices.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the Reader: I like your reference to: A choice is a step and a step is a choice. There is a cumulative effect as small things become big things. Neil Armstrong when he walked on the moon said: One small step for man; one giant leap for mankind. As a group of people we are affected more by the giant leap than we are by the small step. You have alluded to the movement of feet in your poem, but I think you could expand more on that thought because THAT IS AN IMPORTANT STATEMENT.

It's not where you're going that's part of the life you're unraveling. Why waste precious time on your feet as they're moving? Try a raindrop. There's a humbling silence. You have laughter and anger, joy and sorrow. They're here today and not tomorrow. Most memorable to me: Tomorrows are schemes devised by Grinch who stole Christmas. Where are your feet going? Don't ask me. There's life in my face.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. The development of your statement seems fragmented. You might want to try writing it out in prose first and then re-writing it as a poem for logical development of your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sweet Georgia Brown! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your articles. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is about forgiveness.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the Reader: The writer uses the words 'should be willing' to forgive. I believe the Bible uses the words 'must be willing'. I agree with what you say and feel your comments apply to not only individuals but also organizations around the world.

If we want God to forgive us, we must be willing to forgive others. We have all offended others and will do so in the future, either intentionally or unintentionally. If we want others to forgive us, we should always be willing to forgive others. You might need help from someone you have hurt in the past or you might hold a grudge and find it difficult to. ask for help. Forgiving someone who is wrong can make you feel good about yourself. Most memorable to me: Forgiving is good for your health, as it releases.stress. Why waste a day on grudges when you can fill the day with love?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating. errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Suggestion: Pragraph 4: totally wrong NOT in total wrong.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I Doremi! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes images created by music in the mind's eye of the poet.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: These beauteous images are described to the tunes of music. Envisioning a hummingbird in the hollyhock is full of musical notes. Lovely imagery.

The poet listened to the garden fountains play and dreamed of hours of sunshine. Many fragrant and colorful flowers graced the area. A hummingbird in the hollyhock and a bumble bee in the phlox. Most memorable to me: In the distant bay were masts of many ships. He heard the mast and sail through a whistling gale. The poet longed for windy skies and heard the voice of freedom shout.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Imagery is excellent, eg seagulls cried at play. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Smell the flowers  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi R.J. Simonson! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honk or you with a review of. one of your pieces., Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is about remembering to smell the flowers.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: The writer is saying we might be surprised in life. When things seem at their lowest point, a real positive might come along. I know a woman who lost her son in an auto accident when he was twenty five years old. Just a few weeks later she discovered she was pregnant with another son. Her fall was the news of her twenty five year old son passing. Smelling the flowers was the happiness she felt getting a new son.

Life is a journey. Most memorable to me: Remember as we pick ourselves up from our fall, if it weren't for the fall, we might never have smelled the flowers.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Thea! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. .

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the beauty of a Georgia autumn.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: I would love it if you could label the " sevens" of the photos taken on your Georgia walk in Georgia autumn walk. Your photos are exquisite.

Tho writer's autumn walk lifted her spirits and her muse. The beauty in autumn in Georgia can't be beaten. Most memorable to me: After her autumn walk she felt a lot better and had several photos to share.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Answers  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rhyanna! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes answers that are everywhere.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: If you love the ocean, it will motivate you to meditate about the past and the future. If there are future changes that are needed, you will focus on them when the ocean is your to enjoy.

The peaceful lure of the ocean pertains only to you. The calming voice howls through the trees. Listen for it speaks of unknown answers. Dance among the shadows of the night for your voices of the past. Don't fear the future, just hold it within your grasp. Most memorable to me: The future is yours to change. Hear the song of the bird in the morning light for it sings of hope and faith. Surrender to the knowledge that is around.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Good description. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Happy  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Okami! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a poet who is counting his blessings.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: The poet is happy with his possession. It has its flaws, but it belongs to him. At least he is fortunate to have a possession. He is counting his blessings.

The poet has a stick. He doesn't complain. It's heavy,and has thorns, but he doesn't complain. Most memorable to me: His body is bruised, and his hands are sore, but he's happy because the stick is his.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. You have used the word stick numerous times. You might want to try varying the use of this word.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Nectar Thief  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Wolfbane! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about elusive hummingbirds.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: It's the thought that counts. The photo might be a little substandard, but the poet had the joy of snapping the camera and enjoying not one but six hummingbirds.

The endearing hummingbird has comments to make in this poem. He tells the poet not to get too close or he'll fly away. He's just been robbing the poet's vine tree. The nectar is free. The poet responds, telling the hummingbird he has been trying to get a photo for two years but each time he flies away. Most memorable to me: Six hummingbirds made his day. He took a minimally acceptable grey photo of six hummingbirds.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Neva! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about gratitude and the benefits of adversity.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: I think of gratitude as looking on the bright side of things. There is goodness in all things. We need to find it and capitalize on it while praying to God and asking for forgiveness.

The soul improves with each problem it encounters and each test passed. Gratitude in adversity is the key to spirituality. Most memorable to me: In your prayers give thanks for each test you are given. The grateful soul becomes a butterfly or a star.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. Some nice metaphors, eg butterfly and the star. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of A Love Poem  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. .

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about genuine love and not so-called contemporary tomfoolery.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: In my opinion you have the perfect marriage, an eternal partnership that is part of God's peaceful and even magical realm. The word magical suggests a fantasyland of perfect marriages. How fortunate you are.

This blessed couple does not believe in tomfoolery. They are a timeless partnership of promise. Most memorable to me: Peace springs forth in a journey that does not end. They will prosper for all eternity in God's sacred and magical realm.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem with vivid description. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.
Thank you for sharing.

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Review of And There You Are  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Keaton! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's sense of a unique beauty of a woman.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: This poem reminds me of a well-preserved classic woman, beautiful in all respects even with her flaws. She is more beautiful with flaws than without flaws and she fully accepts her aging as well as her flaws. Your poem adds up to this conclusion where I'm concerned.

Your beauty is crafted by a genetic artist of the highest caliber who has his finger on the pulse of everything beautiful. You're perfect except that perfect pales by comparison. No one knows you Ike you know yourself. You are wonderfully flawed. You can embrace true happiness without regard for anyone else on this earth. Most memorable to me: The spark of your love is our Lord Jesus Christ. He is the master of your life. He is the splendor of all that is right with who you are on both the inside and the outside.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Nice imagery, eg you're as amazing as any siun in any sky. Good logical development. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Harry! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes daring to find love.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: How many times are young eligibles told that their true loves might be around the corner. They're sure it will never happen, then sure enough a young person finds himself in love, married, a father with responsibility. Life moves swiftly from this point on.

The poet had a yearning for a woman, but they were too young. With her rudeness he learned to guard his emotions. Later if he thought a woman was a potential mate, they parted. He grew cynical from life lived alone. His heart became cold as stone. He expected to die with love unknown. Most memorable to me: Then he found happiness with a woman whose eyes locked in a stare with him. To find love one has to trust and dare.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a consistent rhyme pattern in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they ar unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Leighphet! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is about the evolution of modern day restaurants.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: I am acquainted with the restaurant business and appreciate the modern development of the industry in a suburban area. Yes, we are fortunate in today's society.

Restaurants have changed from family to industrial to economic impact over the years. Earlier in an agrarian culture, farms did all food preparation. Then there was the birth of towns and formal education. Bartering was no longer acceptable. Skills were specialized. At one time one dish only was offered to customers. Most memorable to me: Restaurants with fast foods offered healthy alternatives.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written and organized. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed. A few suggestions:
Paragraph 4: comes NOT come
Paragraph 4: was also NOT has also been
Paragraph 7: trips NOT trip
Paragraph 8: they NOT it

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Natalia! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your short stories, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This short story is about a mouse and an owl who saw things differently.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: You have done a nice job teaching what courage is in your fable. Be brave at all costs, just like the mouse says.

A great horned owl slept by day and searched for food by night. The owl watched field mice he might eat every night. One day he saw a different mouse. It had an orange tail. The mouse wasn't bothered by the owl and went about his business. The owl loudly screeched, hoping to scare the mouse. The mouse kept working. Finally, the owl asked the mouse why he wasn't afraid of him. Most memorable to me: The mouse calmly said, "Is living life with fear living? I choose to live life without fear even if my life is shorter."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:.
Effective fable with a moral. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

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Review of My baby  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Wolfwonder! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's dreaming of having a baby in the future.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: Parent child bonding is stronger than most anything on earth.

The poet's baby will always be lifted above the world for all to see. A love as strong as the poet's will forever last a lifetime. You, Angel, are stronger than you know . You are part of the poet and the poet is part of you. Most memorable to me: The poet will always be there for you.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Jack! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is about Hawkfield Gallery.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The scope of this article is in the area of art works, not music.

Art and music are experiencing a boon with the advent of digital technology. Music is prone to piracy because if the nature of digital technology. Art works are harder to duplicate . To get an original piece of art one needs to get a reputable art collector. Most memorable to me: can visit the Hawkfield Gallery online. They specialize in American Impressionism fine and folk art, decorative songbirds, wildlife bronzes, and shorebird decoys. They have a catalog available. The collector will assist you throughout the process of buying and selling artwork. Gallery is located between Cape Cod and Boston.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nicely written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of I Flicker  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Voxx! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, which I noticed in the review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a moment of sober nests in a storm of chaos.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: Honesty with yourself is very important no matter what you think.

The writer has had no booze tonight. He is a storm that never settles. His being is a focal point for chaos. He is a dying man who doesn't fear death. Most memorable to me: The moment when the night sky is illuminated is his moment when he can think and see clearly. In that moment he knows exactly what he is: He is a storm. He's alone.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Second Chances  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi April! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*My comments are opinions only.
*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes life in the "hereafter" and a second chance.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: Love of a child is powerful, as evidenced by this poem of corpses.

The cojjrpse heard the sound of gold coins clanking on the ground with which she was buried. Her skin was fresh with a new glow and a renewed vigor. She was a former queen, a stranger in a strange land. She noticed a small tomb next to her and a small baby boy smiling. She no longer cared how she ended up there. Most memorable to me: They had been granted a second chance.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed, unmetered free verse. Description is vivid, eg II sit shrouded in cloth, crunchy from the stale air of my tomb. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar, or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Espero! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your tribute. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This tribute was written for the writer's grandparents.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: I am very interested to know more about William Webster's life as a Quaker and a scholar. You might think about including information about him in your tribute.

Katie's parents took in a boarder named Louis. He and Katie fell in love . They had 14 children, 37 grandchilcren and a rocking chair. They knew the importance of giving the children the security of being rocked to sleep, especially when the children were ill. Louis went home in 1977. They had 57 great grandchildren. The writer encouraged family members to write and not leave family history a mystery. Most memorable to me: They were encouraged to be proud of their bloodline.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
The rhyme pattern is fairly consistent in your piece. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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