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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi T.J! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about reminiscing on a sunny afternoon.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Birds singing, grass growing, and fall's in the air. You sit in the sunshine remembering your true love. The years have gone by so fast. Most memorable to me is the following: Time changes, but you still feel the same way with a kiss. You are more in love with you true love than ever. Thank you for giving me some pleasant memories.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern present. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of Marriage  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Lina! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the marriage ceremony.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Sharing this day, preparing for the good and bad, this marriage was made In heaven and becoming more. Most memorable me is the following. True bonds are held in love and brought by God in front of family and friends and graced with harmony.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
This is a traditional etheree poem, non-rhyming and syllabic verse. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of In Elysian Fields  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a horse race between Pegasus and Shadowfax.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Two steeds met to race, vying for the lady's treat. Shadow fax feared he couldn't beat Pegasus. He, Shadowfax, flleet of foot, is meek and afraid of Pegagus. The lady reminds Pegasus that he's old. Pegasus feels the race is just a show. He wants to call it off and just be friends. Lady thinks neither should be disgraced. Most memorable to me is the following: Pegasus and Shadowfax now pull Diana's cart.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Effective use of personification. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Casey! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. , Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a lost vessel in the tradition of a Shakespearean sonnet.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
His vessel is lost at sea. His compass has failed. He plows through murky waters. The seagulls announce the vessel's arrival. Most memorable to me is the following: He prays for temperance when he is found. The Mayflower follows him home.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Excellent choice of words and vivid description. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of I FEEL THE STORM  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sssam! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about an ending relationship.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The storm is brewing outside. You demand her on your side. Her consciousness tells her what to do. She can't ignore that and follow you. A woman should speak her mind. Most memorable to me is the following: Let the storm blow and let the tension out. Kick start her soul; she is ready to part. Don't be sad for her. This is her fate. It seems that time should be allowed for her to think through her plan. Is this what she really wants? What kind of plan for her future does she have in place?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Imagery is effective, eg fierce wind. There is a rhyme pattern in the poem. Personification is used well, eg thunder shouted. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi SW Poet! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a man's muse who lost then found his poetry.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The world flowed freely until he watched the news. Then he lost the poetry. He wrote about fear and terror and the cowardice of men who took lives, but his ink clogged and his pen went dry. A friend would return the poetry if he'd use his words to inspire and share wisdom to help us all become whole again. Most memorable to me is the following: He refused to add sorrow and despair to the world. The poetry was found again and they could continue their journey toward wisdom.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymmed free verse. Nicely written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opening noons only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a broken heart that needs to heal.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
There are melon holy days when a person realizes he can no longer go on with his relationship for whatever reason. This poem is a classic example of sorrow because you know there is no other choice. He longs for the days when he had love in his heart. Now sorrow is taking its toll: He's lost the will to fight. His heart aches and beats alone. When he bows his head in his hands, the warm breeze fills the air. He knows he has to let love go and just be himself. Most memorable to me is the following: Sometimes the hardest thing to do is leave love behind.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Personification is used effectively, eg misery is his best friend. There is a very nice rhyme pattern with a smooth flow of words. Imagery is expressed vividly, eg my heart aches and beats alone. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. .

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Review of Poets Verse  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Thaddeus! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you in a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a muse that feels like a song.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Music can be poems and notes which brings about emotion. Blue songs bring you down. Some songs are light-hearted. The rhyming, timing and meter have to make sense and have reason. Most memorable to me is the following: Although old songs might be better, new ones might strike a chord.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a child's trust that belongs with daddy.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
If you had a boo boo, who would you want to fix it? Would you want Mommy to kiss it or Daddy to put an invisible bandaid on it? It seems that this young lady almost wanted a hurt boo boo so Daddy would fix it. He pulled an invisible bandaid out of his shirt pocket and deftly put it on her finger. When she grew up she realized the band aids were nothing, not even invisible and Daddy couldn't fix anything. Most memorable to me is the following: When a parent violates a child's trust and innocxnce, the child is let down.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation.. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. This unrhymed poem vividly expresses a dilemma. It is delightful reading.

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Review of Pelican Cove  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a barbaric western tradition.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Is this a barbaric tradition? It seems to me it is. Two Pelican birds dress in cowboy hats. Twelve more dress as feathered horses in black. They waddle down Main Street playing the part of a the founders. All they want is fish to eat. They helped settle Pelican Cove. In their move west they dive bombed people. After all 14 had died, Pelican Cove was founded. Most memorable to me is the following: This is still tradition, and why it is called the Wild Wild West.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Good rhyme pattern. Effective use of personification. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious, If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of Commas  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about grammar and its importance.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
A befuddled soul I have sympathy for. He's like an absent-minded professor. He never understands a comma. He ponders each time a line has pauses. His mind gives nothing when it comes to conjunctions. Most memorable to me is the following: Angels named momma love poets, but only God loves a comma. I enjoyed your poetic creativity. It pointed out to me that words are important and grammar could be a higher priority. I find your poem is quite humorous. Many people get impatient with grammar. Demanding stuff!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Fairly consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of Africa! Africa!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about nature in Africa.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Have you noticed that in nature things seem to happen in two's? There seems to be a correlation that occurs, eg When thunder rolls, birds hesitate. The sun glazes the mountains and a silhouette makes the clouds look blue when dusk is setting. Palm leaves look like fountains blowing in the wind. Most memorable to me is the following: When the sky is split with lemon orange hues, night is near.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice rhyme pattern, personification is effective, eg look for winds to chew. Your description is vivid. Imagery is good, eg palm leaves are like fountains. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of Bearing God  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about God born by Mary in real flesh and blood.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You have written a heart-warming, and spiritual poem about God's miracle of life, Jesus Christ, who is God's son. This poem is beautiful and Mary, the mother of Jesus Christ is beautiful too. You speak for Mary that her body cradles Jesus Christ, this infant to be, and she cannot see this God in herself. She believes and waits. The Baby Jesus grows in tiny increments of blood and bone. God molds Mary, as she is bearing fruit of the season. The God-made man crowds Mary out. She is being pushed and shaped. God grips her with a tight embrace. Mary gasps as the baby Jesus pushes against restraining flesh. Mary receives Him iin agony and joy. You melt as God, Baby Jesus, emerges. Most memorable to me is the following: He, God, is all Mary is and Mary is all undone. This is a human re-telling of pregnancy and labor. Do we have a citing from the Bible that tells this story? I have been taking a Bible Study class and I'm a graduate of a parochial school and I wonder which book of the Bible would this be from?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is filled with imagery, eg you are bearing fruit of the season. Vivid expression exists throughout your poem. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are unmentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of A Crystal World  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about nature with a hidden message for society.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Stalactites from heaven reach to earth, wanting the ground steady and sure. Stalagmites from earth reach to heaven, wanting the sky to be free. The ice of the stalactites drips to the ground. Stalagmites never find freedom. Both stalactites and stalagmites are buried in the earth. A tree stands still. It has decided to be an elm, adapting to seasons as times change. Most memorable to me is the following: Memories are happy, but the world is deceived. Grey shadows of the soul have an inner despair and the world is revolving. I find it is difficult to find the secret message for society. Perhaps you might want to give further information on how you're using stalagmites and stalactites to show the secret message for society, if this is what you're wanting to do.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Some imagery, eg stalactites and stalagmites. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only.

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Review of I Still Love You  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
He loves the touch of your hands embraced in his. Your soft voice affirms the love of the two of you. To the end of time you will be one life. He knows of one miracle in his life...the day he found you. Life would be meaningless if he had to live without you. Most memorable to me is the following: His love for you will shine in heaven. The truth in his heart knows he still loves you. He has no strength without you.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. Some rhyme sprinkled through your acrostic poem.

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Review of Time is Near  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is written for a friend who is in prison and due to get out soon.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Time is near yet far. The closer it comes the farther it seems. Happiness if fleeting, but well remembered. Most memorable to me is the following: Tears spring forth. Renewal and faith is in the future.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of Segment 1  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This short story is a mystery of the afghan crochet.

e:idea}--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Imagine all of this going on after hours. Segment 1 of series of a mystery of the.crochet afghan for Janice's Grammy. Janice paced the floor with her baby, Rebecca, in her arms. Once Rebecca fell asleep Janice tiptoed into the area over the garage where her art room was. Tom, her husband, had no idea of how much money...and I'll add, or energy...she spent on supplies. Most memorable to me is the following: She checked all of her emails related to crochet, turned off the computer and slipped into her bedroom. Another successful night: . Tom didn't wake up. I'm looking forward to Segment 2.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed, My comments are my opinions only. Plenty of intrigue is built in your first segment and plenty of conflict and tension by Janice. You've done well introducing your characters. The plot is shaping up. Nice job.

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Review of Sunglasses  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the statement made by the sunglasses you wear.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-}
Sunglasses make a statement about who you are. You may be romantic, dramatic, or a diva. Sunglasses make you a member of trendsetters. Sunglasses don't change how the world sees you. Most memorable to me is the following. Another person wanting to make a statement might wear Ray Ban to Starbucks. Who you are shines through in some respects by your choices.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. You have sprinkled rhyme through your poem.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Revival  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Medea! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a revival when the poet was a child.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
This poem is a recollection from your childhood days and thoughts, where you attended a revival and sought forgiveness for your worldly crimes. Most memorable to me is the following: I have been present at church services where blessed adults spread their arms and prey upon the meek, the humble. I doubt that children would have that kind of judgment, but adults would. After service you sit in groups and gossip, rarely telling truths.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. These comments are my opinions only. There is a nice rhyme pattern and a smooth flow of words in your poem. Effective imagery is used, eg sheep show up from near and far, all with different intent.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac


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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Incurable Romantic! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. Congratulations on having your port open since 2000. Happy WDC Sweet Sixteen!

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about making your love letters hit home with your partner.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
This is a powerful "How to" that emphasizes points to be made in guidelines to writing love letters. Be sincere in what you say to your partner because she will know your intent. Know the inside of your partner. If you do, her comment might be what this lady responded with: You have healed my heart so I can love again. Give specific examples of your thoughts. If you have romantic nicknames, use them with each other. Most memorable to me is the following: Know your partner's literary preferences and include portions of them in your love letters.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure. Errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of For I See  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. Congratulations on having your port open since 2000.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a man who loves a woman and how she affects every aspect of his life.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The adoring man sees no boundaries when his lover is around. She breathes the morning air and he awakens anew. She looks to the sky and he sees heaven. She prays and he is saved. Her pain is his burden. Her peace is his harmony. Most memorable to me is the following: He sees no limit when she is near. Their character displays one face. I believe when a man loves a woman, all things are possible and the two of them complete each other's existence. The poet has poured his heart and soul into this love poem.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
You description is pleasantly vivid. Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Imagery is effective, eg our flight passes beyond the surface of time. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of An Old Skillet  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a favorite old family black, iron skillet.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
I was attracted to the title of your poem, "An Old Skillet", then when I read the first line, grungy old skillet, I knew I was hooked to the end. I read with enthusiasm, all about using your old skillet to cook breakfast, your own meals and camping. Most memorable to me is the following: You felt you should probably kill it and buy a black, iron skillet replacement. What you bought is money well spent. I can only guess the reason why you think it's well spent. You plan to use the next skillet the same exact way. It's cost effective because you'll need a replacement in 50 years or so. I identify with that because I have a large turkey cooking pot with lid that's been around since my parents were young marrieds and I inherited it from them.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Excellent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. These comments are my opinions only.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Without Him  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sophy! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the impending loss of a woman's spouse.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem told from the daughter's perspective of how her mom describes what I call "a pair of old shoes" is delightful. Most memorable to me is the following: This is what I call the innocence and purity of older love. Her mom thinks her dad looks like an old man, thin and needs to eat, but sheIs not ready to lose him. She then keeps a vigil at his side. God bless this family.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your free verse poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinion only.

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Review of Emily  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Fyn! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about families of a different nature.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The collie was a long time resident of the house and barn. She had been around for many years and more than one family. Emily felt as old as the house. I fully enjoyed the imagery of the smell of the Apple log fires. The chipped blue and white pitcher was filled with warm milk and carried from the barn every morning. The birth room upstairs in the old house had a special family history. All children were born in that room, including Emily's son, who Emily never held because she died before she could hold him. She was a ghost. Most memorable to me is the following: I enjoyed the new family's attitude. The mother told the real estate lady as the family was moving in that she hoped a ghost lived with them, as she looked forward to living with a ghost.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only. Your poetic prose makes for delightful reading.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's one true love.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet is wildly inspired by his love for his wife. I was hooked on this love poem from the beginning and really enjoy hearing about a man who appreciates a woman. He is madly in love with his wife, her cooking ability, sharing of her dreams, concern for his health,. Most memorable to me is the following: She is his true love. He is fascinated with her good deeds, appreciation, forgiveness and self-forgiveness. He will give to his angel forever.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac


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