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Review of The Destroyers  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tofara! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your piece, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is an introduction to the Rozvi Empire of Zimbabwe.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: The Rozvi Empire is strong, intelligent, powerful and cunning. They do not have a need to be militaristic anymore. They have used their intelligence to develop propagandizing.

The nostalgia elders spoke of a time when life was life and death was another life. Children gathered around to hear stories of those who passed earlier. Rozvi ceased ruling with unquestioned spears.

The song was a wall of mourning, a somber melody about people who felled the Giants of China and India, but were shattered on the plateau of Guru. USW. Elders fell more about the Empire, telling of the Moyo journey NEW and South spreading their philosophies. They ruled because they were cunning. Rozvi said, "We're mighty in war. Will we not lose all we have gained? We are also intelligent. Our plan is to propagandize into the minds of other clans that we are gods. Everyone else will be lower than the weakest Moyo in South Africa in everyone else's minds. Rozvi invented propagandizing. There was no longer a need to be militarily strong. The Rozvi will still rule and are still gods. Rozvi ceded their right to rule from the spear to the cloth.

There was turmoil in Zulu, an offshoot of Nguni. Their only god was Nhulunkulu. Most memorable to me: The irony...Nguni used the same tactics used at the Portuguese wall. They said they should never have thought of defeating the Rozvi

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Overall, your piece is well-written. I have a few suggestions for language usage. I was not distracted by errors in grammar. This comment is a disclosure, stating your errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are unnoticed.
Suggestions:
1. Avoid the use of ellipsis dots, for example...unless you have left out information.
2. Paragraph 1: fell NOT felt
3. Paragraph 2: also intelligent - omit comma
4. Paragraph 2: "This is what we'll do". Add period after the word do.
5. Paragraph 2: prophecy Rozvi. Add a comma after the word prophecy.
6. Paragraph 2: (See what I mean) Add a question mark after the word mean.
7. Paragraph 2: Add a period after the word saw.
8. Paragraph 3: defeating Rozvi NOT to defeat

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Review of Marylin Monroe  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Tofara! am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about co-dependence.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: I envision a picture of Marylin with a few too many sitting in the lazy heat with wind in her hair and on her dress. You have done a good job of painting a picture by describing Marylin. %

Most memorable to me is: Clinks of empty bottles on the concrete with lazy heat blowing in her hair and on her dress.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed, unmetered free verse. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi T. Winfrey! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a man who gave more than he had to give.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
From the reader: If a man gives more than he has to give, he has nothing left to give, especially when he gives his angel all his trust, love and dreams and she puts a gun to his heart and pulls the trigger.

The poet crawled as a prisoner of his sin in the past. He was ambushed by an angel and he smiled. She was the most beautiful thing he had ever seen and his closest friend. She showed him how to stand and removed blindness. She followed hiim in full faith. He fell to his knees, embraced her, gave her all his love, trust, dreams and happiness. Most memorable to me: tThen she put a gun to his head and pulled the trigger.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Edge! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a man who wants to win in his quest for love.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet seeks by day and cries by night. If he finds hatred, you hate him because of his creed. If he seeks peace, you tree him. Most memorable to me: Don't pass judgment and say he won't succeed with his need for love.

Sometimes it seems nothing goes the way you want it to go, no matter what you invest in life. Could be just around the corner. Best wishes.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Glyn! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. {-b}

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem was inspired by 1John 4:19.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
People ask how the poet can serve an invisible God. Because He loves the poet too. They question how the poet knows God loves him. By faith and because He sent His only son to pay for his sins. Some worldly people say God is a crutch, but they cannot see His hand in action. Most memorable to me: God is working in the world today, answering every cry. He first loved us even with our sins.

The poet, who operates on love and emotion, could get educated about the Bible so he can defend God. I feel it's important to have faith and to know God loves you, but it s also vital to know God is omniscient, omnipresent, invisible, etc. so you can defend God with Christian tenets.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a fairly consistent rhyme pattern in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Suggestions:
Stanza 1: how I can NOT how can I a
Stanza 1: odd because NOT odd, because
St. 1 & 3: cannot NOT can not
Stanza 2: He does for NOT He does, For
Stanza 3:how I know He does NOT how do I know He does
Stanza 3: for my sins NOT to His my death
Stanza 4: way answering NOT way, Answering
Stanza 5:omit comma
Stanza 5: situation, but NOT situation, But

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Review of The Beach  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Patricia! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. , Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a day at the beach.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The water gets thin as children jump and shout. Water sparkles and palm trees sway. Sand spreads like a beautiful quilt. Most memorable to me: Gorgeous shells and sprinkles of shiny silt are present, as the poet listens to the sea's lullaby.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a consistent rhyme pattern. Simile is effective,e eg like a beautiful quilt. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.
Suggestions:
lullabies is spelled lullaby.
seas should be sea's.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Silly Cupid  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dreamer! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the symbolism of flowers in a love relationship.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet's spouse says Cupid is full of mush. Once only did he say I love you and that was enough. He believes holidays were meant to take money from men. She received a flower in the past, but he had won an argument. Most memorable to me: It was not the flowers she wanted, but the guy who came home every night.

I agree. The flowers are an attractive symbol, but there is nothing like holding the man who provides for and protects you and has promised to protect you for a lifetime.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a fairly consistent rhyme pattern in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in visage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating if they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of My Dream Lover  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Novel Ideas! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's dream lover.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet says her dream man holds her in his arms. She thinks she died and went to heaven when he looks at her. She thinks she is the best thing in his world. Most memorable to me: She feels he'll never leave and break her heart. She awakens and will not mourn. Her dream lover is always waiting, but he is only a dream.

Nothing like your ideal man spinning you out of this world, your awakening and finding he is only a dream. I remember as a young woman being very disappointed that I had indulged in dreamland and there was no such thing as my infatuation.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNfCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Some nice imagery, eg like the summer breeze. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors. are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Empty wound  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Envi! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. .

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about an empty wound.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet speaks of pain that never leaves and no one sees it. There is pain from the feelings left. The wound doesn't bleed. The eyes are filled with rage when they look at the face. Most memorable to me: Feelings swell from a broken cage. The feelings can no longer be traced. The line that was there is forever broken.

I find that your poem is difficult to understand beyond the broken cage. You need further clarification as to what the line is that was broken and could no longer be traced.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. You might try reading it aloud to help bring about a smooth flow of words. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation..This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of I thought of you  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cerpas! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's concern for an aging, I'll friend who needs to know Jesus Christ.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet speaks of his chest clenched tight with fear. He fears for his friend's aging and ill health and tells his friend to open heart and mind to Jesus Christ and He will guide his partner. Most memorable to me: The poet is fearful for his friend's next life with Jesus Christ.

Yes! Jesus Christ will guide us. He does soon much for us with the smallest request for help. Just pray! Praise His name.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Elements  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Mystori! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the four elements.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me : The poet speaks of fire keeping him warm; air whispering soft as breeze on skin is spirit; water trickles down his spine with a lover's touch as in love; earth a show of beauty as in mountains.

The four elements are vital to living beings and objects. This poem is a pleasant way of giving emotional appeal to our very important elements. Reading this poem aloud and asking children to illustrate the four elements could be a fun way to end a unit on the elements for third graders.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Without you  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Sunnyblue! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. . My comments are opinions only. , Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem speaks to how much a person can love.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet says she loves her partner like thunder loves lightning, raindrops love storm clouds, and waves love the ocean. Most memorable to me: The poet says there wouldn't be a me without a you.

There is a connection between thunder...lightning, raindrops..storm clouds, waves...ocean and above all, me and you.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice imagery and simile, eg thunder loves lightning. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Richard! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. , Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a love poem and things in nature.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
He's given you his heart and he'd give you the earth if there wasn't a war. He's given you his soul, and he'd give you the sky if it wasn't unending. He's given you his body, and he'd give you the ocean if it was at hand. Most memorable to me: He'll give you the moon, shining like silver. It glows with your love.

The poet establishes his place in the world, his relationship to the earth, the sky, the ocean and the moon. He also describes his relationship with his love when he speaks of his heart, soul, and body.. These things are all part of one unit, like a well-tuned clock.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a rhyme pattern in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Lucinda! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems,for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about temporary depression. .

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet sees only clouds above her head. Her future has crashed. She has no hope or joy. Most memorable for me: Darkness wants to swallow her. It embraces and swallows her.

This is a dismal outlook. You might look into relieving depression through physical, emotional and spiritual activity. Best wishes.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is unrhymed and unmetered. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Roscoe! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are my opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes different predicaments we get ourselves into.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me: When the horse you've bet falls and loses the race; you've entered a Reader's Digest contest, but can't cancel the subscription; pure snow has drifted and so has your girlfriend, you are no longer her sweet dear. You conclude "Such is life."

Life offers predicaments in which the only response you can make is, "Such is life." It seems there are no corrections to make. I didn't see a title for your poem, but "Such is Life" seems a natural.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout you poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Last Light  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Turtle! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a moment at sea.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The deck rolls and a thin line of red is stretched across the west. Seagulls dip and rise and counter the rhythm of the ship. At the horizon there are black clouds that blanket us for the night. Most memorable to me: The sea is calm. Change is in her nature. She has her own mind and doesn't for long.

Your imagery and description are wonderful and make for a poem that moves the reader emotionally. No suggestions.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. Nice imagery, eg Seagulls...counter the rhythm of the ship. Description is vivid, eg black clouds that blanket us for the night. I was not distracted by errors

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of WHAT WAS IT?!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about running from fear.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
It had fangs. It was huge. The poet was pale and scared. It chased her for fun. The poet turned to claim her victory. She saw...a butterfly. Most memorable to me: Moral of the story is to know what you are running from. Know when to stay.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the unmetered poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Night Hawk  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Wolfbane! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a positive approach to insomnia.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Is there anyone who has never counted sheep because he can't sleep? Has the front door ever swung open in the rain and has the dog ever howled during the night? Most memorable to me: Have you ever had a solution to stay up the rest of the night writing poems?

If you've ever done any of these things, you're in the right place.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Consistent rhyme pattern with a smooth flow of words. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Big Bad Wolf! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are my opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is about September 11, 2016 and how that day impacted the author.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The author remembers the important part of things in his life. If it's not important, he doesn't recollect it. There are events that he can't forget no matter how hard he tries, eg Grandma' s and Grampa's deaths. Some events burn in his mind forever, eg in sixth grade, the class had to say the Pledge of Allegiance twice because they didn't say if right the first time on September 11, 2001. That day planes flew into the Towers in New York City. There was no John Wayne present to tell them everything was okay. Most memorable to me: Every year since then there has been a special program on the tv history channel.

Important information of historical significance could be included about September 11, 2001. What about the aftermath coverage by media? What about detailed information about what went on in the airplane right before it crashed into the building? More historical detail could be researched online.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Harsh Judges  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Big Bad Wolf! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your essays. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are by opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This essay is about judging character based on a picture.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
An assignment in a class asked students to identify a photo of a man with a long black beard and a black turban. He had a friendly look with sadness in his eyes. The writer thought he might be a camel herder who was looking for his brother. Most students thought he was a terrorist and wrote what they'd do with him if they caught him. In reality, he was a taxicab driver from New York City. IThe writer felt his guess was one of the more fair guesses. The class was full of hatred and prejudice. Most memorable to me: If this assignment were given in 2016, would he be thought of as a cabdriver or a terrorist?

I am reminded of the adage, "You can't judge a book by its cover." You might get an inclination from a photo, but you can't tell much about the person. You can generalize as to who he is, but you can't get much documented information.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a.disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.
SUGGESTIONS:
Par. 1: head with NOT head, with
Par. 2: omit Me!
Par. 5: amongst the most fair NOT amongst the fairest ones
Par. 6: he'd have been torn NOT he'd of been torn

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Review of Determination  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dobie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your short stories, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*
. My comments are my opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This short story is about the best laid plans.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:The poet watches her as she performs her calculations to complete her goal. She carefully works her plan out to succeed and feel superior. She leaps on the china cabinet and down it and the knick knacks go with her tumbling behind. Most memorable to me: You laugh and you'll pay for laughing at a cat.

I found that reading this contest entry was as delightful and relaxing as playing with a kitten. I expected all the calculating and goal setting to belong to a human being, not a kitty cat! Nice going.
Is there a lesson/moral to be learned? If so, we can call it a fable. You might want to incorporate a lesson in safety. Anyone hurt?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well written with a pleasant twist at the end. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Misunderstood  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Jules! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a woman who waits for help.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
She's tried to scream and cry and be polite. No one sees, hears or cares. Her tears have all been shed. Most memorable for me: She waited for help. No one cares.

In today's world she might have a cell phone for emergencies. If she is sick, she might not be able to move. This kind of a situation is a good reason to have a cell phone. If she has no cell phone and cannot move, she needs to keep a stiff upper lip and be tough as long as possible. I don't have any other suggestions except to contact a church or a police officer.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled through your unmetered poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and aren't mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Mario! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are my opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about free will and regret.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-{/b
When he was at his lowest point, he asked himself what different choices he could have made to produce a different outcome. Later he wondered why he should feel any guilt for anything. There's no such thing as free will. There's an unbroken chain of events long before he came into being. Most memorable to me: He decided he should surrender grudges, vindictiveness and hatred from past injustice.

Metaphysics is just one school of thought. That is one philosophy of life. I am more inclined to give credibility to a religion, Christianity. Free will does exist under Christianity and we are responsible for our acts. We're even responsible for each other. Just another person's viewpoint.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Nice imagery and metaphors, eg pit of shame and free will is an illusion. Vivid description, eg leftover hatred from a past injustice. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and aren't mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Prier! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your short stories. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. My comments are my opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story is about an old neighborhood store. The

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-{/b
Mr. Daniels owned a neighborhood store. The writer spent a great deal of time there, observing things like a duck that lifted his head to sip water. Mr. Daniels insisted the duck was not a toy and told the children not to play with him. The duck was a lesson in thermodynamics. One day some kid would invent a perpetual motion machine. He had a shop where he repaired things for the house and made things of wood. He had a tombstone of his own. He must have known a date which he kept secret. Most memorable to me: Mrs. Daniels died and the store closed. The poet was sad because the store closed, not because Mrs. Daniels died.

Children have imaginations that run wild. This is no different. The boy thought a date of Mr. Daniels' death was given to Mr. Daniels which he knew all along. All he had to do was inscribe it.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Coffee  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Micah's! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a recview of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are my opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the perfect moment.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Poet is sitting on front porch in an old leather recliner sipping coffee European style in a glass. She holds warm glass like cuddling next to a fire. The fall air is chilly with the moon peeking out. You can make out the outlines of the trees and fence in the fog. The farm is peaceful. Goats and cattle have bedded down. Dogs bark at a distance. Most memorable to me: This is a perfect divine moment.

I agree. This is a perfect moment with the peacefulness and privacy of the farm.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written. Some nice imagery, eg taste the season. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating if errors exist, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac


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