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Review of I'm not old  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Jenny! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the way we see ourselves aging.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your attitude about aging is wonderful. With that attitude you'll feel young when you reach 110 years old. I enjoyed your comparisons, eg from blonde to grey, to white hair. You had high energy at 23, still some at 45, and don't bother to bring it up anymore. When you don't have any. You have bright eyes, glasses, and finally blind. The whole poem you drew comparisons, but you never stopped saying you were young, even if it's only in your mind! Most memorable to me is the following: This poem should be passed down to your grandchildren.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of So Glued!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the qualities of glue.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
This poem describes sticky glue, crazy glue, and wood glue. Sticky glue bonds and fixes most anything. Crazy glue is good for major breaks. Wood glue gives strength when dry. Most memorable to me is the following: You don't want an accident when working with glue because glue might not fix it. Make sure you have glue on hand for those items that do respond. You say that this is a children's poem. My feeling is that this poem is far too abstract to make any sense to children. You'd have to write several poems for the different types of glue and lower the level of vocabulary. Also, emphasize safety and the importance of having someone help the child. Just my thoughts.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they aren't mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. Nice rhyme pattern and flow of words.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rhythms! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about love' s simple pleasure.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet found his wife's photo and kissed it, then cuddled with her pillow. He wondered if she had put breakfast on the table or was she walking Rusty. Did sunshine warm her locks or did dark clouds threaten her. Most memorable to me is the following: He was dreaming of a lifetime of the simplest true pleasure, sharing love. I relate to the most simple things in
love being the best things in life. Those simple things make a person happiest.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. There is a nice rhyme pattern in your poem. Good flow of words. Suggestion: I noticed one mistake...earths should be earth's.

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Review of Poem for Billy  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tonny! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a dad's love and joy for his brand new son.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Every morning the poet smiles, knowing he'll get to see his brand new son. He felt he had met his son in his dreams. His son saved him from a faked and dull existence. The poet's heart swells with love for his son. He'll do right for him and guide him through life. Most memorable for me is the following: The dad will give the son his love and make him proud of his dad. I relate to your poem. My spouse felt that way and made plans everyday to teach him math principles by drawing lines for a basketball court. Best wishes and joy!

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. Rhyme is sprinkled through poem.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about pollution and waste.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
There is a warning predicted by tears. Pollution and uncontrolled waste have been great concerns for our planet. Most memorable to me: We refuse to acknowledge what is going on and watch the cries of the earth fall on deaf ears as our planet is dying. Global warming, oil spills and waste sadden anyone with conscience.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are just opinions. Good rhyme pattern. I like the quatrains and the triplet. There is a special flow to the words.

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Review of The Caged Bird  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi iKiyasama! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a woman who longed for a time when romance roamed free.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
When she had romance in her life, she married her lover and entered a world of promises while they made plans for future Angels. Now her days are long and lonely. Most memorable to me is the following: She finally gets to spread her wings and fly again. People in society feel this same way or divorce wouldn't be rampant. I've noticed this myself.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation, This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Whitemorn! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about writer's block.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me is the following: Where does a writer go to avoid writer's block? A writer used to use a quill. Now he uses a keyboard. The poem needs to have meaning. When the plot thickens, they should be moved to emotion. Most memorable to me is the following: Until there are thoughts, "I'll just sit here to wait to begin."

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of Watchful Tree  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Winklett! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about Boo, who should be in sixth grade were it not for his condition.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Summer is over and Boo should be in sixth grade except for his instability, symptoms of branching cells and neurons gone astray. His mood is temporary. Most memorable to me is the following. People don't ask and there aren't any photos. Your creativity is cryptic and must be symbolic. It is difficult to understand. Suggestion: You are the poet and, of course, you can do what you'd like to do. You might want to give more background on Boo's condition and who he is..

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Review of Memories  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dawn! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about sweet memories of reflection.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The colors of a painting darken as time passes. We gaze back at the history we lived. Children chased butterflies and the peel of bbbbnntheir laughter was heard. Memories held within the soul were refreshed with blessings of hearts recalling. Most memorable to me is the following: Looking back and enjoying those precious memories.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem states that it is very different for artists to be recognized.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet feels a grain of sand is exquisite and near perfection caused by the ocean waves action. Constant polishing of the gain of sand occurs but is unnoticed on the beach. In nature the most magnificent of individuals is unnoticed. Competition causes many artists to be unrecognized regardless of the quality of their artistic products. Why does the artist continue to produce quality art pieces when there is small chance of commercial success? Most memorable to me is the following: "A true artist creates because he must." He gets satisfaction in producing uniquely his.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. These comments are my opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Facade! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a place not far away.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet feels that the walls hold secrets, ceilings hold fears, floors hold doubts. Windows are portraits of mistakes. The bed is his crucifix. He is hounded by fears of a fierce purgatory. He is hounded by fierce, predatory fears. His soul will quell and consume. Faith becomes hope. Hope becomes doubt. Most memorable to me is the following: The poet lives not far from your. heart with a spurious heart. concealing the truth that alone He died.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only.

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Review of Illumination  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the light that surrounds us.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet cowers in darkness. The poet's love found him with her light. Her warmth reveals his heart. He feels her presence. He contemplates, but there is no revelation. He tries to leave her presence, but he has lost his freedom. His love is all around him with his light. Most memorable to me is the following:

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only. This poem is a Ghazal with five complete, independent poems. It has a refrain, a rhyme pattern and very complex and unique. The flow of words is smooth.

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Review of Paper Slaves  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tonny! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is describes greed and power.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet feels we are more reliant on technology and power now than we have ever been. He wonders if trading our souls for a slice of pie cut into a million is easier than following one in a herd led by corrupt corporate shepherd with blood stained bank notes. We have fat wallets and hungry mouths. Integrity is pushed to one side. Most memorable to me is the following: Can we get back to loving and treating each other right or is the poet fighting a losing battle.?

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are only my opinions. Rhyme is sprinkled through the poem of free verse.

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Review of Atlas  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Facade of Alabaster! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the part played by Atlas in keeping the world alive.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
I am enamoured with your fabulous imagery related to theatre. How glorious! The world is on Atlas' shoulders. The world is a stage; the venue is a galaxy; time is eternity; the audience apathetic stars; actors are aimlessly responding to a monotonous queue. They play their parts with diffidence or confidence. The most memorable to me is the following: Then backstage. You, Atlas, toil; your burden you uphold selflessly. You strive to keep the human spark alive.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are only my opinions. There is a rhyme pattern in most of the poem. Very smooth flow of words. Imagery is wonderful. Suggestion: Rhyme pattern throughout the poem would make the smooth flow of words even easier on the tongue.
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet and his love spending the day together.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
What fun activities to look forward to for the poet and his love! Going to the zoo, the farm, the park. Passion would climb, and he would reminisce. The poet and his love would have dinner in town on a day when he'd fill her heart. Most memorable to me is the following: Their love would re-start and they would not part at the end of the day.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. These comments are only my opinions.

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Review of A Sleepless Night  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
H. Prosperous Snow! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about issues other than insomnia.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
At midnight the poet can't sleep. She has duties to keep. Most memorable for me is the following: She sits down to pray at dawn. She has duties to keep.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. There is a nice rhyme pattern in this rounds lay poem.

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Review of Gardening  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem says with time comes healing and hope.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
On Memory Lane the poet and her lover peek at the pale lilies. They are like death on a child's face. The longer you stare, the less you see.The changing winds stir dust which stings the lover's eyes as it clouds the whites of her eyes. Most memorable to me is the following: Memories roll down her cheeks. Maybe mud will help the lilies grow.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Fivesixer! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's attitude for his lover.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
To keep our friendship the poet's lover needs the poet to apologize. The poet can't since he can't claiim tolerance about something he doesn't understand. Most memorable to me is the following: The poet says, "Fighters and lovers no more."

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only. Unrhymed poem.

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Review of It ain't me, Babe  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tonny! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about changing people and relationships.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet has good wisdom, judging by this poem. She speaks of giving her lover what he needs. When they were younger, their paths crossed because they didn't know who they were. They no longer compliment each other. They are ending on good terms. Their love has become one of friendship and respect. Better this way than grow old with regret. The poet will be all smiles thinking of the fun times. Breaking up is tough and there will be tears, but it's better this way. Most memorable to me is the following: We all change and we need to keep moving forward.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are only my opinions.

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Review of Sonnet  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi DJ! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about ultra pain the poet is experiencing.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet feels crucified with thorns in his heart and tears of blood. He's losing his sanity. If his memories were happy, they are now buried in mud. Most memorable to me is the following: Many words are left unsaid.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are just my opinions.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about kids on the corner with nothing to do during spring break.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Spring break is here and kids have nothing to do. There are blue skies and sunshine, but it's too cold for fishing or working on tans. They shoot 8ball and go to the arcade, then to mall. They text friends. Now they complain they are bored. Most memorable to me is the following: Summer vacation and spring break is here with kids who have nothing to do. .

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are only my opinions. Rhyme pattern is present.

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Review of Manthano  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the knowledge of anguish or the anguish of knowledge.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poem "The Words I Know" came to visit the poet. The poem's gloves were thoughts the poet never wrote. The poem's shoes were books and pockets were full of rain. His coat was full of bolts of water. His smile was the poet's pain. His eyes were everyone the poet knew. The poet's first word, heart, the poem wouldn't give to the poet. Bones were sorrow. Some see dreams arranged in graves. Most memorable is the following: Who moved the other to change? Is it I or you?

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation? This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are only my opinions. Interesting use of personification by a poet who is attuned to words. Rhyme pattern ABab, etc.

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Review of Meaning  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Turtle! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the introspection of a wise poet.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet says the faults we see in others are just a reflection upon ourselves. The poet reflects upon the world of the moment, but he mainly reflects. The poet knows nothing. Most memorable for me is the following: His life is lost on the waves and wind as he searches for home. Wisdom is a trait we wait and work our whole lives for. When we see it, we should embrace it and don't let it get away.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. These are only my opinions. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the essence of the Soul.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The width, depth and height of the Soul should be thought of daily. The Soul!s width is represented by a moment in time and filled with love, confidence and satisfaction. There is an almost lusting desire. The depth of the Soul has future sanctity and forgiveness. Hope and prosperity touch the poet's significant other. Most memorable to me is the following: The height of the Soul is from God in heaven. Piety and eternal life are God given.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Bermuda Triangle  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the confusion felt by the poet to find the one he loves,

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet's world is awashed in darkness, rejecting the warnings to run for shelter. Part of the poet walks beside his lover. He won't be lost to her. Their stars that trick and trap their fates will go to that mythic place where terrors melt loving eyes. Most memorable to me is the following:
"Home at last, arrived.
The ship within its harbor,
The sword within its sheath
The lover's fingers intertwined."

Suggestion: lover's should be lovers'

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only. I am not a professional editor or critic.

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