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Hi Hi Broken Inside! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
ThThis poem is about which path is most appropriate in life.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Which way is the appropriate way as she struggles with who and what she'll be? Backwards down the path represents danger. The future is a long road uphill all the way. Left? It is like the birch tree, strong and ungiving. Right twirls into nothingness. It's not forward or backward. Most memorable to me: In her heart she knows to stand still or be nothing at all. Sometimes your present status is most appropriate or it can get worse, like a fatal disease. You might arrest the problem, but you never get rid of it. It's time to appreciate what we have presently in life.

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Imagery is very good, eg the air moved, swirling and twirling. Rhyme is sprinkled through the poem. Personification is used effectively, eg the birch tree is strong and ungiving. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the wonders of seasons, especially the beauty of autumn.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Summer is gone. but love of nature endures. When autumn arrives, it's time to rake the leaves and do the yard work, but yard work can wait. Now is the time to enjoy the pleasures of children as they play in the leaves. Adults take part in their games too and spend time with family and drink fresh apple cider. Most memorable to me: Changes in seasons are like a theatre curtain. My favorite stanza:
Have faith that nature
will do what is right
and that far beyond winter
Spring is in the right.

All seasons have their special moments, especially if you are a lover of nature.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a nice rhyme pattern in your poem. Effective use of personification, eg have faith that nature will do what is right. Some nice imagery, seasons are like a theatre curtain. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. Suggestion: autumns should be autumn's; Summer's should be Summer's. (lower case s...my iPad is acting up.)

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about healing emotionally after a breakup.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You had her convinced you couldn't do anything wrong. We were not meant to be. You had her on a leash and she couldn't be herself. Most memorable is the following: Now she is standing on her own with her head held high in the clouds. We've all had our heads in the clouds at one time or another. After experiencing a negative, we're delighted to have a positive experience.

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There is a nice rhyme pattern in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. SUGGESTION: In Stanza 4: head how should be head high.

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about canines eating raw human flesh in the moonlight.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Howling dogs gobbled up raw human flesh in the moonlight. Imaginary creatures in the air stopped the howling. Most memorable to me is the following: There were many unusual words in your poem, eg snabbled,, sylphic, ululant, caterwauling. These words offer vivid description. Stanza 3 was quite difficult to de-code. I read many descriptive words, but I didn't see a verb that would explain what was happening.

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, they are not mentioned.and go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is rememberance of you mother.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
I enjoyed reading your tribute to your Mom, beautiful Iowa farm girl with a heart as big as the sky. You spoke of her courage during illness which couldn't be quenched. This message must have been soothing to your family when you spoke of the temporary parting and the promise of eternity beyond the puffy clouds. Most memorable to me is the following: Your farewell to your Mom said that she would now be with her true love. You would see her in paradise, where the worries of the world have perished and ceased. How comforting to hear that. I remember my Mom's funeral. It was a rainy day in February. The sunlight shone in through the large church window. I could see the ocean beyond. I couldn't see a rainbow, but I sure looked for one. Your poem reminded me of her funeral. Thank you for the moment of silence and peace, remembering my mom. God takes care of those left behind. God bless.

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Well-written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is about success in life and in business.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You quoted several authorities and noted that moral integrity is more important for a person than intellect or fortune. The difference between top producers and the average is honesty. Students in Japan are taught values, among them integrity. Students in the U.S. are not taught values officially because of the separation of church and state. In the U.S. college students buy term papers so they can graduate. Because of honesty, sales teams sales went up 30%. Most memorable to me is the following: According to R.W. Emerson. no man can help another without helping himself. Were students from private high schools and colleges included in your study of honesty and integrity? If so, how did they do? A more In-depth study with statically analysis would be far more appropriate.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a celebratory wedding poem written for a friend.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
(Verse is based on a well-known children's poem which I recognize as "The Owl and the Pussycat".) The owl and the mermaid met online on a dating website. The owl was studying for a Ph.D and the mermaid loved to write. Most memorable to me is the following: Three years later they were married on an.island prone to rain. The owl took the mermaid' s hand as they sailed away under the stars. I imagine if there were young children who were part of a new blended marriage, they could really enjoy this poem. It could be part of the wedding ceremony.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Sweet imagery. IRhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about reminiscing on a sunny afternoon.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Birds singing, grass growing, and fall's in the air. You sit in the sunshine remembering your true love. The years have gone by so fast. Most memorable to me is the following: Time changes, but you still feel the same way with a kiss. You are more in love with you true love than ever. Thank you for giving me some pleasant memories.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern present. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the marriage ceremony.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Sharing this day, preparing for the good and bad, this marriage was made In heaven and becoming more. Most memorable me is the following. True bonds are held in love and brought by God in front of family and friends and graced with harmony.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
This is a traditional etheree poem, non-rhyming and syllabic verse. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a horse race between Pegasus and Shadowfax.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Two steeds met to race, vying for the lady's treat. Shadow fax feared he couldn't beat Pegasus. He, Shadowfax, flleet of foot, is meek and afraid of Pegagus. The lady reminds Pegasus that he's old. Pegasus feels the race is just a show. He wants to call it off and just be friends. Lady thinks neither should be disgraced. Most memorable to me is the following: Pegasus and Shadowfax now pull Diana's cart.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Effective use of personification. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a lost vessel in the tradition of a Shakespearean sonnet.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
His vessel is lost at sea. His compass has failed. He plows through murky waters. The seagulls announce the vessel's arrival. Most memorable to me is the following: He prays for temperance when he is found. The Mayflower follows him home.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Excellent choice of words and vivid description. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about an ending relationship.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The storm is brewing outside. You demand her on your side. Her consciousness tells her what to do. She can't ignore that and follow you. A woman should speak her mind. Most memorable to me is the following: Let the storm blow and let the tension out. Kick start her soul; she is ready to part. Don't be sad for her. This is her fate. It seems that time should be allowed for her to think through her plan. Is this what she really wants? What kind of plan for her future does she have in place?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Imagery is effective, eg fierce wind. There is a rhyme pattern in the poem. Personification is used well, eg thunder shouted. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a man's muse who lost then found his poetry.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The world flowed freely until he watched the news. Then he lost the poetry. He wrote about fear and terror and the cowardice of men who took lives, but his ink clogged and his pen went dry. A friend would return the poetry if he'd use his words to inspire and share wisdom to help us all become whole again. Most memorable to me is the following: He refused to add sorrow and despair to the world. The poetry was found again and they could continue their journey toward wisdom.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymmed free verse. Nicely written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opening noons only.

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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a broken heart that needs to heal.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
There are melon holy days when a person realizes he can no longer go on with his relationship for whatever reason. This poem is a classic example of sorrow because you know there is no other choice. He longs for the days when he had love in his heart. Now sorrow is taking its toll: He's lost the will to fight. His heart aches and beats alone. When he bows his head in his hands, the warm breeze fills the air. He knows he has to let love go and just be himself. Most memorable to me is the following: Sometimes the hardest thing to do is leave love behind.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Personification is used effectively, eg misery is his best friend. There is a very nice rhyme pattern with a smooth flow of words. Imagery is expressed vividly, eg my heart aches and beats alone. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. .

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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a muse that feels like a song.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Music can be poems and notes which brings about emotion. Blue songs bring you down. Some songs are light-hearted. The rhyming, timing and meter have to make sense and have reason. Most memorable to me is the following: Although old songs might be better, new ones might strike a chord.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a child's trust that belongs with daddy.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
If you had a boo boo, who would you want to fix it? Would you want Mommy to kiss it or Daddy to put an invisible bandaid on it? It seems that this young lady almost wanted a hurt boo boo so Daddy would fix it. He pulled an invisible bandaid out of his shirt pocket and deftly put it on her finger. When she grew up she realized the band aids were nothing, not even invisible and Daddy couldn't fix anything. Most memorable to me is the following: When a parent violates a child's trust and innocxnce, the child is let down.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation.. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. This unrhymed poem vividly expresses a dilemma. It is delightful reading.

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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a tribute to those who were lost and those who survived on September 11, 2011.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The twin towers are no longer standing after September 11, 2011. The voices of those who were waiting and fighting to survive can still be heard. Friends amidst smoke calmed fears. Most memorable to me is the following: Even though the towers are gone, the strength and spirit still live on.

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There is a rhyme pattern and a smooth flow of words. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a barbaric western tradition.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Is this a barbaric tradition? It seems to me it is. Two Pelican birds dress in cowboy hats. Twelve more dress as feathered horses in black. They waddle down Main Street playing the part of a the founders. All they want is fish to eat. They helped settle Pelican Cove. In their move west they dive bombed people. After all 14 had died, Pelican Cove was founded. Most memorable to me is the following: This is still tradition, and why it is called the Wild Wild West.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Good rhyme pattern. Effective use of personification. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious, If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of Commas  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about grammar and its importance.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
A befuddled soul I have sympathy for. He's like an absent-minded professor. He never understands a comma. He ponders each time a line has pauses. His mind gives nothing when it comes to conjunctions. Most memorable to me is the following: Angels named momma love poets, but only God loves a comma. I enjoyed your poetic creativity. It pointed out to me that words are important and grammar could be a higher priority. I find your poem is quite humorous. Many people get impatient with grammar. Demanding stuff!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Fairly consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of Bearing God  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about God born by Mary in real flesh and blood.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You have written a heart-warming, and spiritual poem about God's miracle of life, Jesus Christ, who is God's son. This poem is beautiful and Mary, the mother of Jesus Christ is beautiful too. You speak for Mary that her body cradles Jesus Christ, this infant to be, and she cannot see this God in herself. She believes and waits. The Baby Jesus grows in tiny increments of blood and bone. God molds Mary, as she is bearing fruit of the season. The God-made man crowds Mary out. She is being pushed and shaped. God grips her with a tight embrace. Mary gasps as the baby Jesus pushes against restraining flesh. Mary receives Him iin agony and joy. You melt as God, Baby Jesus, emerges. Most memorable to me is the following: He, God, is all Mary is and Mary is all undone. This is a human re-telling of pregnancy and labor. Do we have a citing from the Bible that tells this story? I have been taking a Bible Study class and I'm a graduate of a parochial school and I wonder which book of the Bible would this be from?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is filled with imagery, eg you are bearing fruit of the season. Vivid expression exists throughout your poem. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are unmentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about nature with a hidden message for society.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Stalactites from heaven reach to earth, wanting the ground steady and sure. Stalagmites from earth reach to heaven, wanting the sky to be free. The ice of the stalactites drips to the ground. Stalagmites never find freedom. Both stalactites and stalagmites are buried in the earth. A tree stands still. It has decided to be an elm, adapting to seasons as times change. Most memorable to me is the following: Memories are happy, but the world is deceived. Grey shadows of the soul have an inner despair and the world is revolving. I find it is difficult to find the secret message for society. Perhaps you might want to give further information on how you're using stalagmites and stalactites to show the secret message for society, if this is what you're wanting to do.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Some imagery, eg stalactites and stalagmites. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only.

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Review of Flowers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about pink flowers, a reflection of nature's beauty.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Every woman has to love flowers, especially pink flowers that share a message. I know I don't! You can peek. between the petals and see the pixie script upon shaded leaves that say "I'm beautiful." Flowers share their scents regardless of the day. The flowers believe if you pick them, the world won't be so grey. Most memorable to me is the following: The poet writes poetry about pink flowers, love and the sky. His heart will not let him say goodbye.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Effective personification with flowers speaking. There is a rhyme pattern and good imagery. I was not distracted by errors in usage or grammar. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of I Still Love You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
He loves the touch of your hands embraced in his. Your soft voice affirms the love of the two of you. To the end of time you will be one life. He knows of one miracle in his life...the day he found you. Life would be meaningless if he had to live without you. Most memorable to me is the following: His love for you will shine in heaven. The truth in his heart knows he still loves you. He has no strength without you.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. Some rhyme sprinkled through your acrostic poem.

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Review of Time is Near  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is written for a friend who is in prison and due to get out soon.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Time is near yet far. The closer it comes the farther it seems. Happiness if fleeting, but well remembered. Most memorable to me is the following: Tears spring forth. Renewal and faith is in the future.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the statement made by the sunglasses you wear.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-}
Sunglasses make a statement about who you are. You may be romantic, dramatic, or a diva. Sunglasses make you a member of trendsetters. Sunglasses don't change how the world sees you. Most memorable to me is the following. Another person wanting to make a statement might wear Ray Ban to Starbucks. Who you are shines through in some respects by your choices.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. You have sprinkled rhyme through your poem.

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