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Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi UW99! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your short stories, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are my opinions.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This short story is about Angel Pup's healthy lifestyle.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Indoor dogs need to take walks at least twice a day. This is also an opportunity for not only the dog, but also, people to get fresh air. I noticed Angel Pup leads a healthy life. She walks twice a day, takes three naps, plays with Daddy and goes to bed early. Most memorable to me: He goes to bed curled up by Grandma's feet.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
You should organize your short story by paragraphs, i.e. His morning activities, playing with daddy, and evening activities. I was not distracted by errors in punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.
SUGGESTIONS: Edit points:
1. Into a walk NOT out of a walk
4. Grandma and I NOT Grandma and me
6. take a nap NOT take nap
10. I awaken NOT I awaking
no deal. NOT no deal
They say NOT they say
softly, but NOT softly but
fed, I NOT fed I
next to my Daddy NOT next my Daddy
quench my thirst NOT replenish my thirst
As Granda heads to bed, I follow NOT as Granda heads to bed I follow
I join her NOT I join

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Review of "Anne" Experience  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi WiccanWriter! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a response to Anne Waldman's poetry performance.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Anne Waldman is bringing social conscience to newly opened eyes. She exudes humanity for the manatee especially. The manatee is an aquatic plant-eating mammal off Florida and the West Indies. The species is endangered. Most memorable to me: The poet attending this presentation begs that we take off our blindfolds before we lose the manatee, Sing a song and make it known. How many voices will never speak? Show the power of song; Sing about the hu-manatee.

I think you have the beginning of a song in your poem. Look it over and see what words you need to add. Best wishes.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout this poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cardawnia! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.[/b}

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about poet's temperament.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
When the poet laughs, he cries. He wonders if you can see his smile in amongst his frown. He can hardly tell the two apart. What has torn his heart? What is funny and what is sad? Most memorable to me: The reader will have to tell him how he is perceived.

I have to say your poem is confusing in a funny sort of way so you must have a sense of humor, which is of utmost importance.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Poetry Walk  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Neenah! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about poetry in a mundane world.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Footsteps on red floral carpet were hushed. The poet trudged up the stairs in disbelief. A twin flood light guarded the secrets of the authors within. The first session wasn't over and the poet was not authorized to enter. The next room was empty. Comfy chairs around a conference table with complimentary pens and paper beckoned. Soothing cool water in long stemmed glasses wes ready to parch throats. Listen then learn! Most memorable to me: The poet turned around and skipped down the stairs.

I question why the poet was so happy to get out of that hallway to the point she skipped down the stairs. The clue might be in the non-mundane world that she preferred, perhaps a walk in the forest.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Imagery is used effectively. Personification was appropriate, eg easel holds attention. Nice simile, eg like a dark wooden soldier. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing,

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Raven! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your essays. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*
My comments are opinions only.[/B}

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a personal statement by a student who would like to pursue a college degree.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
In your essay you have given background on your life, saying that you are from a family that has struggled financially for years. You would like to be one of the first in your family to get a college degree. You have an insatiable love of classical literature and you're never more content than you are reading classical literature. Most memorable to me: You adore Harper Lee's "To Kill a Mockingbird" You love her ability to put the reader right in the story. You admire artist Leonardo DaVinci who has done many great things in his life with just a basic education.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating that errors a4ere not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. SUGGESTION: Essays are meant to be persuasive. Try to convince the college administrators to award you a college scholarship. How are you qualified for the scholarship? What is your grade point average? What kind of community volunteer work have you done? Have you spoken to your high school counselors? What kind of classes have you taken that have prepared you for college? Make sure you tell them about any awards you have received. Best wishes.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Living, Not Dying  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Espero! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your letters. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are my opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a letter to family with a final request.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
The poet wishes to have a celebration of life when he passes away, not a funeral or a wake for his soul, which would already have left the ground. He believes God exists in the beauty of nature. He wants to be scattered in the land he loves. He asks that family stay together. Family is all we have. Most memorable to me: On his journey elsewhere he wishes to become a writer. He tells them he will always be with them.

I agree. Celebrations of life are very important in today's world. You can grieve, but you can also emphasize the positive part of life. This makes more sense than capitalizing on the negative.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your letter. Some imagery is used, beauty of the forest. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating that errors are not obvious. if they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Living, Not Dying  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (1.0)
Hi Espero! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your letters. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only. [/b}

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This letter is a letter, a last request to his family.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
The poet's wish is that his family celebrate his life, not his death, of his soul that has already left the ground. He doesn't want a funeral or a wake. He wants family to pondder good memories of him. He believes that God exists in the beauty of nature. He wants to be scattered in the land that he loves and stay together as a family. Most memorable to me: On his journey elsewhere he hopes to be a writer. He'll always be with you.

I agree. A celebration of life makes much more sense than profuse grieving for a person. You might still grieve, but at least you can have a few happy moments officially remembering the person.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Some imagery is used, eg beauty of the forest. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating that errors are not obvious. If they exist and aren't mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (1.0)
Hi! Jeannie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group, participating in the September Mysterious Mystery Review Raid. I am here today to review your mystery. My comments are opinions only. *Heart*

*Bulletg*- MY OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Bo, Todd's dog, has a fixation to dig everywhere in Bardstown. Why is this?

*Bulletg*- SETTING/THEME:
This mystery takes place all over Bardstown, in Detective Hall's office, under Elmer's sycamore tree, and in Todd Anderson's home. The theme: There is something fishy about Bo, Todd's dog, digging all over Bardstown.

*Bulletg*- PLOT/HOOK: -
This is a mystery and the plot asks the question 'who dun it'? First of all, what was done? The dog dug up a gun, a box of cash, and a note to Todd Anderson from Marty Wilkes. The note says that Marty has a gambling debt and he doesn't want to pay Todd for a loan Todd gave Marty. Marty and Todd argued and fought over a loan. The gun went off accidentally. Todd pulled his body to the bathtub, poured acid on the body and buried his bones all over Bardstown. Eventually Marty's skull was found.

*Bulletg*- CHARACTERS/DIALOGUE:-
The characters are described in great detail, so the writer could do what she pleases with tem in the future. This story could be the groundwork for a future mystery novel.

Dialogue is used effectively in this mystery to distinguish between characters, and who did what to whom.

Detective Hall
Bo, Todd's dog
Elmer Jones
Todd Anderson
Marty Wilkes
Joyce Root

*Bulletg*- LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR:-
Well-written, I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

*Bulletg*- MOST MEMORABLE:- TO ME IS THE FOLLOWING:
The writer's attention to detail grabs the reader.

*Bulletg*- SUGGESTIONS:
I have just a couple of suggestions. Detective Hall should have turned Todd Anderson over to the city police, not the town of Bardstown. What is the significance of Mania? Is this part of Bo's name? I would like to understand the meaning of the title. The writer did a fine job of building the mystery and helping the reader understand what was involved in the mystery.

Thank you for sharing your mystery.

Sincerely,
GerMac

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Review of WHY?  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Cute Angel! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about pain and loneliness. My comments are opinions only. [/b}

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
The poet asks himself why he can't see straight nor think right. Why is he not happy? Most memorable to me: He fought the good fight, but lost. He ran but there was no place to hide. Only time will tell.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating that errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Lament  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile* My comments are opinions only.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the concern of the poet who says if he never sees you again, he is better for having met you.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
In my life there are more failures, just another thing left unsaid which give testament to empty hopes and dreams. The strength that holds us together is not enough. Desire is filled with regret. In my soul is a misplaced connection that is meant for another life. Most memorable to me: I couldn't bear another moment reduced to simple lament. If we do not meet in this lifetime, let me feel the lack.

You seem to want to face reality. You seem to feel that simplifying a relationship and not admitting truth is worse than the pain itself. I believe that dealing with truth is a good beginning for making the relationship healthy again.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating that errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of etchings  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lilac Mist! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the importance of vivid description. My comments are my opinions only.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
Exactly! I remember creativity flowing in the wee morning hours when I was a young co-ed. I used the phrase "It wrote itself" because I had no plan for my term paper. I just did what came naturally. You talk about an artist painting an apt observation which was a picture of life blooming. Most memorable to me: You say words solidify what you feel. You pour yourself onto the canvas of her soul when you see her smile and hear her voice.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. You have referred to the concept of showing, not telling...most valuable in writing poetry. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Death Walks On  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Hephaestus! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes death the inadvertent approach of death. .

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-{/b
Death takes lives at random with no real reason. It is a celebration when death wails as you enter your coffin for an eternity. Most memorable to me: Death is neither good nor evil. It bides its time to take the next soul.

Your poem strikes me as quite authentic. I agree. Death has no ax to grind. It is not prejudiced toward one soul or another. It just takes the next soul at random.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is unrhymed with some in-line rhyme. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Anguish  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Mina! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the anguish of guilt which is getting worse every day.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
You rile and confuse the poet. She worries about your memory. She wants to know if her sin was so great that your ghost haunts her daily. She confesses that you'll never know why she did what she did. Most memorable to me: The pain of guilt gets worse every day.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Some vivid description, eg haunted by your ghost. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

My comments are opinions only.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Suffocating  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a woman who is suffering from a low self-image.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-{/b
You feel your self image is suffocating. You are told your a beautiful woman with an excellent body. This thought comes from your spouse, but you just can't believe it and you feel you don't belong. Voices are raised when these thoughts come up. Most memorable to me is: You feel you need counseling. The idea of suicide has crossed your mind, but you'll fight this.

In this situation I would seek the help of my family minister to begin with. Depending on what he has to say, I would seek professional help if I were in your situation.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Description is vivid, eg thoughts gnaw to the bone. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar, or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

My comments are opinions only. {/c)}


Thank you for sharing.

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Review of delicate hands  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Romance_Junkie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems, for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about an exploration into the unknown.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The hands of a surgeon is alluded to by the poet, except for his disdain for other people. They skip back and forth with reverence. A leisurely study of Blake, moving as the mood strikes him. He investigates the navel, venturing into unknown country. He alights on an unknown shore. With the arrogant humility of man who has found a treasure, it hurt at first, then it did not hurt at all. Most memorable to me: It happened in a place they least expected.

This poem sounds like the owner of the delicate hands was extremely discreet. Alighting on an unknown shore must have been a surprise. It almost seems like an examination by a professional. I can hardly keep up with this cryptic work.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE /PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

My comments are opinions only. .

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Carol! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about friends in deed.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet announces that she is your friend, never far away. You talk and she'll listen, wipe your tears away til they glisten, hold you tight til you struggle, finally cuddle. She'll laugh with you, cry, walk, run, fancy fun with you and make years for you. Most memorable to me: She wants to put your burden on the table and devour it like ice cream. Walk toward tomorrow where things are easier. There is so much laughter yet to be. Putting the burden on the table and devouring it like ice cream makes use of the poetic convention of simile. It moves the reader emotionally, but also to put the burden on the table, motivated by devouring ice cream is very excellent communication. I have a very good friend I plan to try that on to see if it works!{/c:borange}

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:

Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. . My comments are opinions only.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Schism  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Mindcrime! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a child who wanted to explore the world and didn't want anything more to do with his parents.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
This poet felt everything seemed wrong during childhood. Parents were old and said to take care as life wasn't long. They fought all of the time. They couldn't agree on point of view. Most memorable to me: He could return the favor and take care of them now that they're old. He finally packed a bag and left to explore the world on his own. .
It seems that the son did not support the idea of returning the favor to the parents or he wouldn't have seen their home as the home of memories. I disagree. While he should be able to explore the world, he should also keep in touch with his parents should they need his help.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of A Mom's Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about what it's like being a Mother.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
A million requests and demands fill the billet as a mother. Mothers won't trade their chrildren for anything under the sun. Each day presents new challenges, but the hugs, the kisses, smiles and love surpass all others. This mom thanks God daily for her treasures and even an unmade bed or two.. She nurtures their talents and strengths. Most memorable to me: I agree with her completely. There is nothing more worthwhile than being a Mother.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
ThThis poem is about which path is most appropriate in life.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Which way is the appropriate way as she struggles with who and what she'll be? Backwards down the path represents danger. The future is a long road uphill all the way. Left? It is like the birch tree, strong and ungiving. Right twirls into nothingness. It's not forward or backward. Most memorable to me: In her heart she knows to stand still or be nothing at all. Sometimes your present status is most appropriate or it can get worse, like a fatal disease. You might arrest the problem, but you never get rid of it. It's time to appreciate what we have presently in life.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Imagery is very good, eg the air moved, swirling and twirling. Rhyme is sprinkled through the poem. Personification is used effectively, eg the birch tree is strong and ungiving. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review of AUTUMN  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the wonders of seasons, especially the beauty of autumn.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Summer is gone. but love of nature endures. When autumn arrives, it's time to rake the leaves and do the yard work, but yard work can wait. Now is the time to enjoy the pleasures of children as they play in the leaves. Adults take part in their games too and spend time with family and drink fresh apple cider. Most memorable to me: Changes in seasons are like a theatre curtain. My favorite stanza:
Have faith that nature
will do what is right
and that far beyond winter
Spring is in the right.

All seasons have their special moments, especially if you are a lover of nature.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a nice rhyme pattern in your poem. Effective use of personification, eg have faith that nature will do what is right. Some nice imagery, seasons are like a theatre curtain. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. Suggestion: autumns should be autumn's; Summer's should be Summer's. (lower case s...my iPad is acting up.)

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Review of Healing  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about healing emotionally after a breakup.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You had her convinced you couldn't do anything wrong. We were not meant to be. You had her on a leash and she couldn't be herself. Most memorable is the following: Now she is standing on her own with her head held high in the clouds. We've all had our heads in the clouds at one time or another. After experiencing a negative, we're delighted to have a positive experience.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
There is a nice rhyme pattern in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only. SUGGESTION: In Stanza 4: head how should be head high.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about canines eating raw human flesh in the moonlight.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Howling dogs gobbled up raw human flesh in the moonlight. Imaginary creatures in the air stopped the howling. Most memorable to me is the following: There were many unusual words in your poem, eg snabbled,, sylphic, ululant, caterwauling. These words offer vivid description. Stanza 3 was quite difficult to de-code. I read many descriptive words, but I didn't see a verb that would explain what was happening.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist, they are not mentioned.and go unnoticed. My comments are my opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is rememberance of you mother.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
I enjoyed reading your tribute to your Mom, beautiful Iowa farm girl with a heart as big as the sky. You spoke of her courage during illness which couldn't be quenched. This message must have been soothing to your family when you spoke of the temporary parting and the promise of eternity beyond the puffy clouds. Most memorable to me is the following: Your farewell to your Mom said that she would now be with her true love. You would see her in paradise, where the worries of the world have perished and ceased. How comforting to hear that. I remember my Mom's funeral. It was a rainy day in February. The sunlight shone in through the large church window. I could see the ocean beyond. I couldn't see a rainbow, but I sure looked for one. Your poem reminded me of her funeral. Thank you for the moment of silence and peace, remembering my mom. God takes care of those left behind. God bless.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is about success in life and in business.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You quoted several authorities and noted that moral integrity is more important for a person than intellect or fortune. The difference between top producers and the average is honesty. Students in Japan are taught values, among them integrity. Students in the U.S. are not taught values officially because of the separation of church and state. In the U.S. college students buy term papers so they can graduate. Because of honesty, sales teams sales went up 30%. Most memorable to me is the following: According to R.W. Emerson. no man can help another without helping himself. Were students from private high schools and colleges included in your study of honesty and integrity? If so, how did they do? A more In-depth study with statically analysis would be far more appropriate.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a celebratory wedding poem written for a friend.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
(Verse is based on a well-known children's poem which I recognize as "The Owl and the Pussycat".) The owl and the mermaid met online on a dating website. The owl was studying for a Ph.D and the mermaid loved to write. Most memorable to me is the following: Three years later they were married on an.island prone to rain. The owl took the mermaid' s hand as they sailed away under the stars. I imagine if there were young children who were part of a new blended marriage, they could really enjoy this poem. It could be part of the wedding ceremony.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Sweet imagery. IRhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. My comments are opinions only.

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