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Review of My Poetry  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again, Jay! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about showing, not telling, poetry.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Rhyme in poetry can blast sounds of red. Some images have quiet, melancholy sounds. Brass rips rhythm like the honey on your chin. Poetry wafts upon the cigar's cloud. Poetic curves of bliss reminds the poet of his true love. Most memorable to me is the following: Companionship is the greatest gift, a friend who never betrays.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. The senses are of utmost importance in writing.

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Review of What Makes Carly  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Carly! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a pre-teen, an only child who came from a broken home.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-!
After the home was broken up, the mother moved, wanting to have a new start. The father died, leaving the pre-teen in hiding again. One day the sun began to shine. The young pre-teen made friends and became whole. and true. Most memorable to me is the following: With people who care, it is made easier and it becomes not so dark and scary.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi I was u! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a woman who taught a man that the world is bigger than he thought.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet thinks ignorance is bliss, especially with regard to his first real experience of love. He feels he has been led astray by a woman and now knows the world is a lot bigger than he thought it was. He'll continue seeing her. Most memorable to me is the following: He lacks truth and has pity for her.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist, and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tophers! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our August Speculative Spectacular Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. Happy WDC Birthday!

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about escaping pain of disease through modern technology.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
In the poet's lifetime there is a chance he will escape the pains of disease. The depletion of hope will fade away like dreams of the past. He might find peace in a digital cast. A failed organ is no concern, and neither is losing an eye. Most memorable to me is the following: If reality ends up just a tether, he'll cut that cord too, for anything's better.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Effective rhyme pattern and flow of words in this thoughtful sonnet.

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Review of E.T. at Home  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jatog! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our August Speculative Spectacular Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. Happy WDC Anniversary,

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about E.T.'s visit to a Dude Ranch in Texas.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
A dude ranch in Texas is quite a place to visit, especially when you have the good fortune of meeting E.T. He was there to ride horses and breathe country air. He descended to Earth and met Dixie at her front door. She wondered if he was a foreigner, but she didn't ask. He hopped the saddle with ease. The horses winnied and neighed. He and his horse crossed the brook with a sigh. Most memorable to me is the following: As an alien on Earth, E.T. felt quite at home.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Very effective use of rhyme pattern and smooth flow of words. What a refreshing poem!

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Harry I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our August Speculative Spectacular Review Raid. , Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about mankind's status as seen through the eyes of aliens.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Will mankind be admitted to the Galactic Confederation? Aliens have reported him to be fairly intelligent with good potential; however, he is unpredictable and very emotional. Mankind are thought of as kind and charitable, but Man flew planes into towers and slit their throats. Man has fought wars throughout history and harmed his environment. Many will starve and die. A few will become rich and fat. Man is made up of contradictions. Most memorable to me is the following: The Galactic Confederation will re-visit the idea of admitting mankind in 500 years.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Nice rhyme pattern . While your poem makes some interesting points, it seems that the scope of the historical is too broad and should be limited to a smaller time period. Well-written.
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Hoovsie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our August Speculative Spectacular Review Raid. Happy WDC birthday! Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about Hoovsie's leadership at the helm for a Star Trek trip.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Our friendly bovine poet remembers a song from the 60's. Every night he celebrates with a dream and standing on his bed. I somehow envision him jumping, not standing. He plans to travel to Jupiter and Mars. He'll moo out the orders as Scottie beams him to universe borders. A question he asks. Will there be a mutiny with no Captain Kirk and William Shatner. He'd like a combo of the original human cast with today's animals. Most memorable to me is the following: If there's one cling on, home to Mama he'll run!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for the Speculative Spectacular Power Reviewers Raid in August. , Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a legend which states the dragon will return.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Dragons will return for those who can understand through times mists for those who can discern. A maiden who was to be sacrificed sought protection. It would cost her true love that had passed. Surely the dragon's magic can share her plea mingled with tears. She touched the ancient dragon's heart and returned his youth to him. The dragon knew his time was short without protection . The dragon would disappear without it. A covenant was made. He'd find her love so she'd be his wife. The older Dragon's magic faded; he couldn't find the spirit he sought. Some day he'll succeed. .Most memorable to me is the following: Her patient heart still yearns and in her hands the future seed when dragons will return.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Good rhyme pattern and smooth flow of words. Effective imagery, eg time's mist. Well-written poem. and interesting fantasy and subject matter.

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Review of Itch  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tony! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's daily experience.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet's soul stirs. He feels dull, has the eyes of a devil, the grin of a clown. Could everyone win or do some lose? If so, how does the world choose? Do right by people, not financial gain. Most memorable to me is the following: Face lies inside I'm crying. Keep moving forward.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of My Helpmeet  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Pony Tale! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the meaning of a devoted wife.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
A fan conjured from the heart of God, eyes and ears for no one else but to attend to him, his very own devotee to cheer. When he needs admiration, he can rely on his other half. She lives to watch him blossom. Most memorable to me is the following: "a heart of overflowing love reflecting in her deeds."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Gentle Musings  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi deeJ! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your letters. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This letter is about dealing with depression.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The strength the writer found recently is slipping away. Her mind struggles for clarity. She has chosen the next direction she should choose, but those thoughts don't seem real. Her feet can't keep up with her brain. Most memorable to me is the following: She pleads for someone to remove the sadness. Tell. Her tomorrow will be sunny. You might try talking to a minister about your sadness. Maybe he can help.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Stepping back  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Laura! am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about focusing on oneself and doing what pleases you for a change.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Some can't see sunshine through the fog. Everything goes wrong. It's just a choice. You allow it or you don't. You can get caught in the fight, the determination to succeed or please yourself. Most memorable to me is the following: You can focus on what makes you happy and let everything else go.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Some good imagery, eg life is going nowhere and you can't see the sunshine through the fog.

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Review of The Course  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about life's journey.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Sunlight shines through the trees. Hope lights the way and with faith the poet rides the course. Most memorable to me is the following: "I sail along not knowing what awaits me, but with rising dawn continue on."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Why Do I Write  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi MsCaseyLuna! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about writing, a silent power.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Power comes from words. Pen and paper are weapons and silence is the poet's foundation. There are ideas the poet cannot say, She writes about right, wrong, and appreciating life. She writes about who she is. Writing is in her heart. Most memorable to me is the following: Writing is power and notoriety.

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jellybean! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the creation of a thought.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet's landscape of thought is bare. She is searching for a thought that will grow into an idea. A thought came out of the tiniest flicker. It branched out, got louder like a song and danced like a leaf. It blossomed with potential. Most memorable to me is the following:
"An idea I sought
An idea I got
To write a poem
About creating a thought."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. There is rhyme throughout the poem, mostly in rhyme pattern.

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Review of Signs of Autumn  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Connieann! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the signs of autumn.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The autumn equinox is here when an egg will balance on its end. A pile of leaves and a sweater mean winter's getting near. Most memorable to me is the following: Chop some firewood and clean the fireplace. It's almost winter.

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Review of A Mothers Love  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a mother who doesn't choose the poet.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The poet has a heart full of despair. He is breaking with only a weak drive. You, Mother, had two choices and you didn't choose the poet, Most memorable to me is the following: Why was it so easy for you to watch the poet walk out that front door?

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Review of Monday  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Turtle! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the weather and how it affects the poet.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Dampness looms. There is a sullen mood as grey is in the sky, bringing down the poet's plans for the day. Most memorable to me is the following: Pray for sun. "If only the sky were blue, as opposed to my blue mood."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist, and not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Network Marketing  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi pavan! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is about network marketing and direct marketing or word of mouth, which costs less than traditional marketing that takes 25% of the proceeds.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
In a phone company as number of people increases, the value increases. If is important to hone selling skills. Robert Kiyosaki wrote a book entitled For People Who Like Helping People. Most memorable to me is the following: His Network marketing and a business institute are good partners for business education to develop people skills, leadership, reaching a goal and financial freedom.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Back to school  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi martiangirl! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is about the aloneness Liz feels after returning to school.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Liz was dressed in all black with her hair tucked under her ball cap, not wanting to be noticed. The theatre was the only place she ever felt like she belonged, but today she didn't even think that. She was alone. She walked past the theatre people and felt they didn't want her. She didn't want them either. Most memorable to me is the following: So what made the tears stream down her cheeks?

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation, This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

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Review of Graveyard of Time  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi LostGhost! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the time you've missed is buried like a ghost.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Time is buried in the graveyard where dreams and lifelines are missed.. Most memorable to me is the following: Minutes, hours and years lie in wait, wondering why they've been dumped in the graveyard of time.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating they are not obvious. If they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac


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Review of Epiphanies  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Whiskerface! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your essays. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This essay is written about the power of writing.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
A fear of failure stopped you, the writer, from writing, but now after deciding you need to become another type of person, you find writing calming and a release. Writing gives you insight into yourself. Most memorable to me is the following: You shared that writing is power and wisdom is strength.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating that any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed.

Thank you for sharing your essay.

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GerMac


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Review of Autumn's Chill  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Lee! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you for your account anniversary with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about autumn chill.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The mind grieves when Summer's gone. The thought of the coming winter is a thrill. Leaves drop and limbs bare themselves to icicles. Most memorable to me is the following: There's a moment of calm for autumn, crunching leaves and crisp air.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating any errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Rhyme sprinkled through poem.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac


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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dragonline! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you for your account anniversary with a review of one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about lost love.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
He.craves those moments he's never had with his mother. As she ages, the cravings will be gone. How many rejections can he take? Most memorable to me is the following: She continues to ignore him.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating if they exist, and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. This is a free verse poem.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac


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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Marti! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you for your account anniversary with a review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a reflection on life and the seasons.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Time is too short to wish a season away. Time goes faster each year. The poet is happy to be here whether it's cold or hot. Most memorable to me is the following: "Just happy to be living this wonderful life."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating if there are errors and they are not mentioned, they go unnoticed. Rhyme pattern is present.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac


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