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Review of Breath and Skin  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a symbiotic relationship that must exist.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You feel you are being exposed for what you are. You support illusions for gain and experience for profit. The truth displayed is a side-effect. You live through each other, but your partner means nothing to you. Most memorable to me is the following: "an unknown symbiotic relationship that must exist".

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Good flow of words and rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Suggestion: You don't mean nothing should be you mean nothing to me; otherwise, you have a double negative which is actually positive.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Sweet Poison  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ms. Luna! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
You have painted a canvas of color which describes what losing your partner does to you.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You opened your heart and now you feel foolish to have done so. You remember "Raindrops pouring with my tears." Most memorable to me:
"This pouring rain is singing,
Letting me sleep and stop dreaming."
Rain does create some peacefulness. I'm sure listening to it helped you.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar and punctuation. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem and rhythm creates a smooth flow of words.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You speak of venturing into the pumpkin patch. A wiitch.casts a spell with lights. Most memorable to me is the following: "
"Light casts its glow illuminating marks
The witch does use to cast a spell..."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Very nice rhyme pattern and rhythm. Imagery is excellent. .

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Review of Write Freely  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Lifeaholic! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a plea for honesty.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You ask your friend for unrestricted words of the heart, life's transparency and words filled with fresh air. Most memorable to me is the following: "I'd like to think your words will fill my soul ~ giving me wings for finding freedom." Honesty and freedom are quite a match and what most people work for and appreciate in others.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Your poem is unrhymed and unmetered.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of On Mother's Day  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Brom21. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a mother/son relationship on Mother's Day.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
A true mom is as you described her...one who wipes tears and soothes fears, rears you in the Lord's way and takes care of you no matter how old you are. Most memorable to me is the following: "but I know even when you leave me behind, My soul will hold you and you will shine." That's a wonderful message for a son to think his mom will always be beautiful.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Nice rhyme pattern and smooth flow of words.
Suggestions: Line 1: me NOT my
Line 17: Add word how.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of I Notice  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jace! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a canvas for painting a picture for your poem written for your wife, Laura.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You say that your wife has noticed your shell. You notice the expression on her face when she talks to others about you. You don't know why she loves you You notice her. Most memorable to me is the following: "I feel the love you have for me."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. Suggestions: N/A

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's thoughts about the bright side of a worsening market condition.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You relate that the sweetness of blossoms lessens with economic hardship, We count our blessings as business worsens, eg it could be worse! Banks are not lending as blossoms reach for the sky. The sweetness of blossoms cannot endure recession. And then blossoms have a new beginning in the spring. Economy starts improving again. Most memorable to me is the following:

"Our massive hardship we will learn
is filled with flagrant strife;
But blossoms claim their spring-like turn,
Our financial reward in life."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. Well-written and subtle piece. Nice job.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lou! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a web of deceit experienced by a lover in a relationship.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You have done a very good job of painting a canvas of color which depicts dirty, impure spider legs and webs. ,A cobweb of deceit clings to your face and that is what your relationship amounts to, all the while saying "I love you. Trust me." Most memorable to me is the following: "...soft threads that become the ropes that moored me"

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar, punctuation. Effective imagery. Nice placement of poem.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Born To Write  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Intuitive White Walker! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes how poetry calms your soul.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
I agree. Writing poetry helps a person get their story out, write a song and other soothing experiences. The mind does work full time when one is trying to express himself. Most memorable to me is the following: Journaling in the middle of the night helps you write your innermost thoughts.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Suggestions: N/A

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi CB! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your short story. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Heart*

*Bulletg*- MY OVERALL IMPRESSION: -
Your short story goes back 25 years, so Dawn must have left an indelible experience with you.

*Bulletg*- SETTING/THEME:-
The setting is the high school campus and the bus on a field trip. The theme of your short story is perhaps required but unacknowledged love in high school.

*Bulletg*- PLOT/HOOK: -
You hook your readers with that shy, mysterious, tormented crush that high school boys get. The plot focuses on a treasured time of being chosen by Dawn to let her rest her head on your chest and you both fall asleep. As you got older, did you kick yourself for not taking the opportunity to get to know her? I'd say the plot points out how young people do not know how to engage in conversation. Can you expand on this by showing another time when you were more adept in conversation?

*Bulletg*- CHARACTERS/DIALOGUE:-
Dawn and CB
There was no dialogue, part of being a gangly teenager.

*Bulletg*- LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR:-
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Some nice imagery and description.

*Bulletg*- MOST. MEMORABLE:-
Most memorable for me: a couple of high school kids whose hormones were jumping all over the place.

*Bulletg*- SUGGESTIONS:-
You might want to work on the plot and get a storyline going.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ekant! I am GerMac, affiliated with Newbies Academy Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. If they make sense to you, please feel free to use them.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is a comparison of positive and negative thinking.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You have stated that thoughts, feelings and actions of the human mind interact with each other in a direct or indirect way. Some are positive and some are negative. Positive thoughts get positive or desired results. Negative thoughts are hard to manage and control. Negative thinking interferes with emotional, mental and physical well-being of a person. Many with negative thoughts can appear to be positive. Those who have negative thoughts need to focus on a program to get rid of the negative. If you have positive thoughts, there is less room for negative thoughts. Most memorable for me is the following: Create a program for yourself to bring about positive thinking. I read a book entitled Psychocybernetics years ago and found it valuable from a teacher viewpoint. Also Thoreau's Walden Pond provided good insight on behavior management.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Suggestions: You have a thorough outline included with the article. Is that to be considered an appendix?

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Review of A POEM A DAY?  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Nbnelson2! I am GerMac, affiliated with Newbies Academy Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. If it makes sense to you, please feel free to use it. I found your poem in your portfolio. I enjoyed visiting it.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about counting your blessings when you are looking for a thought worthy of poetry.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most writers can identify with your feelings of having nothing to say, not even a game or a gloomy thought comes to mind. There's no idea or theme until you find that empty cup. Most memorable to me is the following: "This is my poem, All I've written today." There you have it...an empty cup that might have been full of coffee, now empty, you now have the makings of a book of poems if you're going to describe counting your blessings. Up to you!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This free verse poem is sprinkled with rhyme throughout the poem. Rhythm creates a nice flow of words and a smooth cadence. Suggestions: You might think of dividing your poem into three stanzas, perhaps, thus making the pacing of the poem more dramatic and providing a hook for threader's focus. Ah me, ah me should read as "Ah me! Ah me! I finally say." The exclamation point shows emotion.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Miss Beazley  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi flyfishercacher! I am GerMac, affiliated with Newbies Academy Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, I found Miss Beazley in your portfolio and fell in love with her innate intelligence! Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is about a wise old alley cat and some teenagers who chase her down the alley.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The theme of your piece is "a big game hunt" in which three teenage boys chase a poor old alley cat for sport. Most memorable for me is the following: I really enjoyed your relating of Miss Beazley's intelligence and how she brings the teenagers out and shows their lack of intelligence. She is far beyond them. She draws their fire out and hides in the basement and finally leads them to the end of the alley. They think they are chasing her. You have many nuances in your story...for example, she does a time and distance problem to make sure she gets in the right spot at the right time. This is quite satirical. They fire and accidentally hit the cop standing behind her. You really capture the alley cat in her environment of the tenements, restaurants and bars. Trash cans and graffiti covered brick walls that are dimly lit and complete with a dumpster for each business set the scene. Great job.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. You have some effective imagery, for example, ..."sliver of late afternoon sunlight..." Suggestions: Have you thought of using third person omniscient where there are two distinct points of view communicated rather than a narrator present? You might enjoy hooking your reader that way, although your style is also effective.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi MelanKolik Ben! I am GerMac, affiliated with Newbies Academy Group. I am here today to review one of your articles. I found this article in your portfolio and was interested to read about prejudice. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is about the causes of prejudice and what can be done to rid society of prejudice.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The theme of your article in my opinion is as follows: Can prejudice be removed or is it within us by evolution? You have been creative in your presentation by showing several causes, but you're even more creative in your innovative approach to solving the problem of prejudice in society. First of all, I like what you have to say about the causes, along with examples. Causes to consider follow: 1) ignorance, which can bring about emotions of disgust and anger, and worse yet, violence. 2). Feelings of superiority; thereby, refusing to associate with the so called lower class. 3). Misinterpretation and interpreting tenets of religion, for example., in their own way. Insecurity and their roles played in society and a resulting lashing out. 5). Evolutionary tendency where their own thoughts are based on prejudice. You logically conclude that to rid ourselves of violence and war, the people have to understand themselves and others. Acceptance of each other is the answer and must come from the people of society.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in grammar, punctuation or usage. Suggestions: In the first paragraph you could re-word the sentence to read "...leads to the question: Can prejudice be removed or is it within us..."
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Review of Family Recipes  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Pumpkin! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your article , Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article is about one families' food over generations.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me is the following: Your relating of making fruitcakes, a process that takes several days. You do a wonderful job of describing the importance of new foods and the old favorites that connect your family to the past. It is so true that we remember our loved ones by the foods they make. How important to our health to have good foods no matter what the financial and emotional problems there might be. I like how you feed bodies and hearts too. There's always room at the table.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Good information to share!

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a gardenia's journey to its new home.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me is the following: (I love this line. It's quite neighborly.). "I even have neighbors, my best friend's a zinnia, But I smell sweeter 'cause I'm a gardenia."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Imagery is excellent, eg "bask in the glow Of sunshine and blue sky and breezes that blow." Personification is effective and.makes me think this is a talkative little gardenia! Suggestions: setting should be sitting because the gardenia is thought of as human.

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Review of WHAT IS A TEAR?  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dr.! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the melting of the heart in real emotion.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me is the following: I find it fascinating that if the feeling of the emotion could be communicated by the lips, there would be no need for tears. You must not be thinking of the cleansing of the eye at this point.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar, or punctuation. Imagery is delightful, eg "glistening like a pearl", "silent cheek". Rhythm creates a smoth flow of words. A pleasure to read.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Prosperous SnowI. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about storms and how they compare to life's difficulties.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me is the following: Just when it seems the soul can take no more and it will curl up and die, the sun comes shining through.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem of unmetered lines and free verse.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a love relationship.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-{/b
Most memorable to me is as follows: "A oneness only a few souls on Earth have ever witnessed." You have an unusual love between you in that you never feel separated by distance or extremes. How envious others are of your genuine peace and serenity..

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. This free verse poem is sprinkled with rhyme. You might want to count the syllables in your lines, and read your poem aloud, for a smoother flow of words.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of My Mother's Hands  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Huntersmoon! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the poet's recollection of mother's hands and lines on her body. The poet still feels her hands of comfort on the shoulder.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-{/b
Her strong hands met demands to protect the family. Her hands showed love, never pride. Most memorable to me is the following: Lines on her body might speak of duty, but to the poet they shine with beauty.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Wonderful rhyming pattern. It is a pleasure to read your poetry.


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Review of Stand Firm  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi nhisgrace! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a devotional of prayer.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You paint a canvas of color to express your desire to stand firm against Satan, a sly but intelligent weasel who tries to kill and steal. You say you do not wish to disappoint your Heavenly Father, who has restored love to mankind. We need to stand firm.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Suggestions:N/A. Most memorable for me: Staying away from temptation.
Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Beneath the Stars  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Bernie I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poets describes a dream of lovers "asleep in your arms, awake in your heart."

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You have written fabulous imagery. You have painted a canvas of poetic color, "the music of our heartbeats become one rhythm, one melody".

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in grammar , usage or punctuation. Most Memorable to me is the following: "stars on a black velvet sky", "like diamonds glimmering".

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Schnujo! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poet has a patriotism, love of America, and a Christian bearing.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me is the following: You say "God gave me a life more full than I'd asked, And all I'd done was to hold Him steadfast."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Nice rhyme pattern and good flow of words.

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Review of One More Step  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi BD Mitchell! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
If you think you can't do anymore, don't quit, just take one more step until you can finally accomplish a little, bit by bit.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Most memorable to me is the following: "The darkest road can be traveled if I just say, 'I'll take one more step'". A person can accomplish most anything by taking one step at a time! I agree.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Most memorable to me is the following: "The darkest road can be traveled if I just say, 'I'll take one more step".

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Elizjohn! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
There is some frustration using the verb to be in grammar. It is not recommended in fiction writing or poetry.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem describes your folly ~ the verb to be. The verb to be plagues your words and hinders the stories you imagine. Your ending is appropriate. "I drift on a wave with the verb to be." Waves are powerful and they can be out of control.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Most memorable for me: Linking verbs, eg verb to be are not encouraged in writing, where the objective is to show not tell with precise, vivid verbs. Suggestions: N/A

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