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Review of The Sleeping Aid  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi HuntersMoon! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:.
This dear poem is a limerick about Little Bo Peep's sleep!

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The lilt of this limerick comes from Little Bo Peep wondering if the sandman had stolen her sleep. She finally drifted off durging a conversation with herself. She decided she had a boring personality. Most memorable to me is the following: Little Bo Peep wondering if the sandman had stolen her sleep.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar, or punctuation. Suggestions:N/A

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Review of Propensity  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jatog! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Has old adage ~ "You have to kiss a few frogs along the way to find a prince" ~ come out of nowhere for the poet?

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You say you kissed a frog in May. You wonder why you would 'lip smack a slimy...' You say you kissed him on the lips just for kicks. Now you don't know why you're frog yearning. Maybe you're learning to have a yearning. If that's the case, then maybe this saying is appropriate. "You have to kiss a few frogs along the way to find a prince." When that happens, then you've practiced on a few frogs and you'll then know the difference between a frog and a prince! Doing the dirty work makes you appreciate some class!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Most memorable for me: "lip smack a slimy". Good imagery. Rhyme sprinkled through free verse poem. Smooth flow of reworks.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Debbie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your evaluative piece, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece refers to the writer's outlook on rating and reviewing writing pieces.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your evaluation of rating and reviewing is quite interesting and written creatively. I enjoyed what you had to say about those who offer sincere and astute suggestions, those who share personal experiences that match your writing, grammarians and those who tell you to change only if you agree, You note that some are insensitive. I add here that if you aren't kind and sensitive, you probably shouldn't be reviewing. Write only if you want to, not because you have to. It seems here you're asking reviewers to take responsibility for their words. I have another addition. If you're really very negative about a piece, move along and let a more objective party review. Also, try to understand the writer's viewpoint as well as your, the reviewer's, viewpoint. A good quote to end on...Always err on the side of conservativism.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. Most memorable to me is as follows: I agree with your evaluation. I'm glad you have decided not to take rating and even reviewing personally. Being reviewed requires a thick skin.

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Review of Weeping Willow  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Dawn! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem, which has human qualities, is about a tree's sorrow.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem is a pantoum. It is about a tree's sorrow. This tree has a broken heart and will die if left alone. The fight is lost; to leave the house is a dare. Shade is found under a willow tree.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. You have used personification effectively. Most memorable to me: the tree will die if left alone.


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Review of Tomorrow ...  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Wolfbane! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is one fabulous Epistle form poem written to the poet's child about the environment.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You and I both wonder if our children will have to compromise and accept less than they deserve in life. You wonder if a legacy of loss has been created thanks to progress. Most memorable to me is as follows: "We can't continue to consume, consigning our future to doom." If we don't re-pay our debt, we'll betray our children. There should be no greater responsibility than this.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your imagery is excellent. It paints a canvas of color and show not tell, eg "shifting clouds go tumbling by". I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. I wouldn't change a thing in your poem. The Epistle form is positively wonderful. Rhyme pattern is perfect. Rhythm creates a smooth flow of words.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Wolfbane! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a canvas of what it is to be responsible and take on the burdens of others.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem is creative. You ask the question: Why do nice guys finish last, when actually "They are gentlemen who are very well versed". You say that nice guys don't live their lives in shame, whereas, those who are crass are purse thieves and car thieves. Most memorable for me: "It's with truth and honesty they're stepping up their game, The more life will throw at them, the harder they will play." "They are triumphant over chaos at the end of the day."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in grammar, usage or punctuation. Nice rhyme pattern. Good rhythm. Suggestions: gentlemen NOT gentleman

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi HorrorMovieGeek! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This essay is about a young person who feels he is a loner and only speaks when he has something to say.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your essay is well-written and speaks of what your mind has to say. You say you are quiet, and you enjoy exploring your own mind. A wall exists because you want to be friends with yourself. You don't like saying something when you don't mean what you say and you're just faking it around others. You feel you'll have a friend when someone likes you for what you are. I have to agree that a real friend accepts you for what you are. Then you'll have s sincere friendship.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Your essay is well written. Suggestions: N/A


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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Debbie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your free verse poem paints a canvas of color about being part of the scenery in life and in death.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem is very creative and formatted nicely on the page. There is a build up of drama in what you have to say in life and death. You say that you are unnoticeable and everything.about you lacks judgment ~ silent witnesses and an afterthought just like the trees. The trees are home for some and shade for others. You crafted the knot and strung the rope, but others are responsible for you. You weren't even confident you could be dead. The weight of the rope is not enough to snap your neck, yet you were meant to suffer. You end up with undeniable truth.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Some good imagery: a panorama of undeniable truth, You have a nice flow of words ~ creating a smooth cadence. Lines are pleasant and unmetered. Suggestions: Should be much crueler than I not much crueler than me. Should be whom not who eighth line from end.
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Review of A character study  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Smee! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your stories. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:{/b
This is a character study of a classic geek.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your piece is creatively written and describes a young man who wears thick rimmed glasses, has a rake-like physique and 3 rings in his left ear. Sporting a goatee and a smart look in his lavender shirt and dark tie, his complexion is very clear and his hair is blonde and well groomed. Having been exposed to a mix of accents from the local universities, he could be from the country, but more likely from the north. He selects a quiet seat and prefers to sit alone with a book that he thumbs through as he absently puts forkfuls of food in his mouth.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, mechanics or punctuation. This piece is very well written and has a tight active style. Good job. No suggestions.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Debbie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This free verse poem paints a canvas of a violent storm and a helmsman whose life is threatened.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem is creative and describes sleeping creatures and a dead soul. Most memorable for me is as follows: "Tempest wreaks havoc in a violent squall". The helmsman panics as his ship is broken. He finally calls God and asks Him to rescue him. He repents. God tames the storm. It subsides and there is peace on the water. The helmsman praises "To God alone and His merciful ways".

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Som nice imagery. Poem has rhyme sprinkled throughout. Good flow of words in a cadence. Suggestions: He and His when referring to God are spelled He and His not he and his.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Debbie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your stories. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story is very imaginative and describes the adventure of a young boy in the Black Mountain Forest in the middle of the night.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Nice job. Well written and creatively put together. I can imagine a lampshade coming to life with a glowing light and the resourcefulness of the boy, Luke, who explores the forest and comes across a wizard who proclaims Luke to be Commander Fearless when Luke touches the stone and energy surges through his body. With his title in hand, Luke will hunt criminals for the rest of his days.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, punctuation and grammar. Most memorable for me: I like the contrast from a warm, secure home to adventuring in the forest at midnight,

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Debbie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your stories, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Brett and Alex are the only family members still alive.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your story is creatively written. I like the close bonding between brother, Brett, and sister, Alex, adult siblings. The description of getting into the high truck and riding in it through the desert and then going off-road with it, an exhausting experience, was quite descriptive...a little like Jack London. Most memorable for me is the following: The two of them sat in front of a fire that night and looked at Brett's drawings, a rare experience, as he rarely shared them with anyone. He had drawn lights around Alex's and their Mother's drawings. Alex was surprised that he saw them as the same. Are you referring to auras? I think you need to bring closure to your story, or is this just Part One? I'm hanging in midair. What is resolved?

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. I thought the following phrase was confusing..."from the pot... How about using a different word for pot, perhaps stew?

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Santa! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your short stories. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:{/b
This story is about an ant who is caught up in deceit and the rat race.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your story is creatively written and about an ant who suffers from peer pressure and keeping up with the Jones's. All you did was work. No time for any relaxation at all. Of course, it came as a complete surprise to me when I discovered your main character was an ittybitty ant! The ant wanted to know where you were. You said you'd help with the adopted kids. One day while taking a walk, you saw a young boy beaming a light with his magnifying glass. The ant knew his time had come. Deader than a door nail!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. I like your clever use of personification. Nice job. I was very surprised at the ending.
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Abigail Stevie! I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your piece speaks of the influence of social networking sites on teenagers.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You have done a very good job writing your essay. Your piece is well-documented, citing your references. You state that the physical health of teenagers is endangered. I think you mean at risk or threatened, rather than endangered. Teenagers' diets are at risk, since they tend to eat more junk food so they can stay online. Their mental health is threatened by their desire to be available online night and day. Thus, more anxiety and depression. On the other hand parents, teachers and friends can bond better by sharing what they are doing online, except they get less sleep when spending so much time online. You need a thesis, stating what you intend to prove and a conclusion. Did you prove what you were trying to prove?

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar, or punctuation. In the second to last paragraph you used much, which should have been many. Use should have been
used.

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Review of Battle of Wits  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Bunnie Patti! I am GerMac, affiliated with Newbies Academy Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your free verse poem is like home. Everyone has had a battle of the wits on the Homefront.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-"
You said your keychain never has a battle of wits with an unarmed person. You describe countless battles you have lost before they began. A nod of the head is yes; a shake of the head is no. Left is right; right is left. You lost countless battles before they started. Now that you've lost your keychain, you decide you will believe he who corrects you.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Began not. begun. Periods are not needed in a poem except at end of stanza. Several instances capital letters are used beginning of next line after use of comma. I like your use of personification regarding the keychain.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Summer of 1816  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces during our June Review Raid, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-
This is a most interesting piece about the effect of climate changes caused by the eruption of a volcano in the Dutch East Indies a year earlier.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
There was a cool summer in July with snow predicted. The farmers waited until June to seed their crops, but a cold front killed crops. Some hearty grains survived, but the cost of hay and corn went up from $1 to almost $3 per bushel. The farmers couldn't feed their animals and thus, had to sell them. That year people lived on rabbits, etc. They burned wood in the summer that they wouldn't normally burn. This was known as the year of no summer in Europe and the United States.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in usage. grammar or punctuation. Very interesting non-fiction from a historical perspective. Suggestions: N/A. Most memorable: I find it amazing that a volcanic eruption could cause these major climate changes.


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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our June Review Raid, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-
This traditional poem glows with the sights, sounds and smells of summer.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
The summer sun doesn't allow you to hide your head like winter darkness does. The smell of grilling fills the air as friends and family gather where old conversations start anew. The last line sums up the poem: "The world...fills with rich diversity and shares its gifts with you and me."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Some nice imagery, eg "nature's symphony of squirrels and birds in the trees." I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar, or punctuation. Personification used in last line is effective. A second good example: "the squirrels and birds ...invite me out to sit, unwind." Suggestions: N/A

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. This review is for your account anniversary today. I am here today to review one of your poems for our June Review Raid, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*


*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-
Carl's son is terminally ill. Carl knows his son has too much to offer others to be taken from earth.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-{/b
Carl was most upset and couldn't focus. His mind wandered and he couldn't understand how his son could be so sick. Carl felt alone, and in desperation he offered himself in his son's place."your life for his, he'll live to be a man." Carl knew his son loved others. He couldn't love them enough. One week later Carl died. Carl's son lived a life of love, for he'd heard his father's call. I really like your ability to make this poem feel like a story.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in grammar or punctuation. I noticed the referent was not clear a few times. Example: Stanza 1, Try Carl'd not he'd been stabbed with a knife. Nice rhyme and rhythm. Most memorable for me: "He'll die when you would have, it's all in the plan." No suggestions.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our June Review Raid., Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-.
Sunshine and Poppy get along fabulously well, especially when he helps her make a strawberry stand and lets her share some of the extra strawberries with friends.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Poppy, Nanny and Sunshine worked together to get the essentials done for their day in the sun. Poppy had too many strawberries this year, so they painted a stand, made a sign and picked and cleaned strawberries. Soon the whole neighborhood had stopped by. Sunshine had a fabulous day. Most memorable to me as Nanny tucked Sunshine into bed, she said, "Sweet strawberry dreams, my little Sunshine!"

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I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation. Good attention to detail.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-
We have plenty of love for our children . Our love for them is unconditional.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem is written very creatively. I like what you say about the garden of love. Our love is passionate as the red rose, like a climbing white jasmine. It climbs until it reaches our hearts. It is locked away, yet no key is required as our love cannot be removed. Most memorable: It comes with no conditions. It is theirs forever. I totally agree that love for our children cannot be removed.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your lovely poem is unmetered and unrhymed. Nice similes, eg "passionate as a red rose". I was not distracted by errors in usage, grammar or punctuation.


Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-
Grandmothers have a way of letting you know they love you but also being firm in a kind way.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem is creative with help offered. Your grandmother tells you eventually she'll meet her maker, just like everyone else. In the meantime, she aims to pass on some important gifts. Remember to smile in a crowd because someone there might be closest to your heart. The kindness you share might be exactly what you receive. Above all, don't let people take advantage of you just because you're kind. Most memorable for me: "Don't let a moment pass where you're not loving something." This is an excellent lesson. If we remember to love something every moment or even everyday, we will be loving people...with love in our hearts. It would be impossible to hate under these circumstances and the world would be a better place.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Some nice imagery..."all things sweet with delight." Rhyme is sprinkled trough your poem. Read your poem to yourself. Add and subtract syllables as needed for a smoother flow of words. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation.
Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Untitled 3  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Newbies Academy Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. If they make sense to you, please feel free to use them.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-{/b
Exercise is an activity some can't get enough of. Others refuse to participate in it unless the doctor orders it. If people are required to exercise for they health, they might find it is the best thing that has ever happened to them.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
Your poem is very true. Having an exact regimen of exercise helps us strengthen those areas needing more strength and helps us flatten tummies and get rid of flabby legs and bottoms. I agree! I'm one that has to be motivated too, but once I give in to the regular program, all kinds of good things happen. Next, we should have a poem about pushing away from the dining room table!

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by language usage or grammar. I have some suggestions for punctuation, as follows:
for my heart NOT For my heart

deed, NOT deed
great, NOT great
block, NOT block
shock, NOT shock
success? NOT success
pounds, NOT pounds
light, NOT light
with NOT With
pride, NOT pride

I find that reading a poem with stanzas is very relaxing and helps me focus on the meaning of the poem. You might want to divide your poem in 5 stanzas of 6 lines each. Works perfectly in your case.

Thank you for sharing.
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Review of The Jeweler  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. If the make sense to you, please feel free to use them.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-
This delightful traditional poem tells a tale of romance and love once beheld.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:-
You have an effective comparison for your poem. The many diamond facets are compared to you and your personality. You say your flaws stand out like an open book. You changed with great effort to please your partner. Now your diamond facets make others look lame. Hence forward, you find your facets imust be lacking as he turns his back on you. Rejection is the proof.

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by usage, grammar or punctuation. You have chosen a diamond as your imagery. Your title is appropriate . You have an abab rhyming pattern. Rhythm creates a smooth flow of words for a good cadence. I have one suggestion: To be consistent, think about changing your fourth stanza so you have an abab pattern. At the moment you have an aabb pattern.

Thank you for sharing. I really enjoyed reading your poem.

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Review of The Rose  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your prose pieces. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. If they make sense to you, feel free to use them.

*Butterflyb*-- OVERALL IMPRESSION:-
Life has a beautiful side to it and a side of hardship. Suffering hardships can make a person stronger once they have healed.

*Idea*--THEME/CREATIVITY:
The rose reminded you of yourself. You were different from the rest in so many ways. You had chosen the "path less traveled" and had a unique life because you had. You could never regret taking the journey you had taken. "She had left her footprints in it...wore scars from the thorns she came upon throughout her journey. Each one made her stronger once they healed."

*Pencil*-- TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage or grammar. Excellent job with personificatio, eg "The rose stood straight and tall, exuding its confidence". Your imagery is also excellent, eg It was soaking up the rays of the sun, "wearing it like a magic cloak". Here are some suggestions for you to think about, as follows:
its NOT it's (several times)
tall, NOT tall
That less traveled path...incomplete sentence.


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Review of Too Late  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi JCD! I'm GerMac. I'm affiliated with Newbies Academy Group. I'm here today to review one of your short stories. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. *Smile*. If they make sense to you, please feel free to use them.

*Bulletg*- MY OVERALL IMPRESSION: -
An athlete can find truth in a race. Learn motivation from practice, and master the real test of endurance during the track meet.

*Bulletg*- SETTING/THEME:-
The setting takes place on the local high school's track for practice and on another high school's track for the track meet.

*Bulletg*- PLOT/HOOK: -
With a new nickname of Choo Choo the high school athlete and teammates perfected teamwork, remembering you're as strong as your weakest link.. Developing concentration, controlled breathing and a steady pace is of utmost importance. "With every passing run, the fear of pain is abated." Set your goal. Pursue achieving that goal with determination. "Happiness is reserved for the mediocre." The dream is peeled away and I awake like I always do..." Okay! So it's only a dream! You can use the dream for motivation to practice and get closer to achieving your goal. Should your title be "Too Soon" rather than "Too Late"? You might think that one over!

*Bulletg*- CHARACTERS/DIALOGUE:-
High school track athlete
Three other high school track athlete teammates
Dialogue N/A

*Bulletg*- LANGUAGE USAGE/PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR:-
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation.

*Bulletg*- MOST. MEMORABLE:-
Most memorable for me is as follows: Procedure for executing a win, i.e. Concentration, controlled breathing and steady pace.

*Bulletg*- SUGGESTIONS:-
Think about your title as noted above.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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