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-Welcome to Power Reviewers March Mayham Raid --
My overall impression: Your narrative speaks of contemporary living in 2016.
Everything seemed a little slower paced that day. He felt like he had a little extra time.
His cooking skills even seemed better. This was confusing to him because in his fast lane of life, when he thought he could relax, he couldn't. He was always stressed even when he wasn't stressed.
Then it occurred to him that he had left his smartphone in the other side room.
You might ponder these suggestions. 'as if time had suddenly slowed down' not 'has suddenly slowed down'
'Today I seemed to' not 'I seem to'
'Living life in the fast lane sometimes' not Living life in the fast lane, sometimes it'
'sometimes makes one more stressed' not sometimes living in the fast lane it makes one more stressful'
You might think of adding a short explanation about the effect of leaving the smartphone in the other room. I laughed at this. The reader sympathizes!
Good language usage.
Thanks for sharing.
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GerMac
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