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Review of Thank You WDC  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Your poem evokes joy as I relate to the generous welcome given and all of the kindness and learning bestowed by WDC Power Reviewers Group. This is a great way to start our February Raid.

Language structure and mechanics are as happy as the poem is. I can visualize that you are in the right place and you are grateful. No issues.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your piece. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
This narrative was written about the writer's dad who was an atheist most of his life.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
Your character development of your dad is excellent. I feel I know him after reading your story. Bless him. He was courageous during the Korean War and after being saved for the Lord. His courage allowed him to ask forgiveness at the end of his life.

Well-written, good usage,description and mechanics. I noticed a few spelling mistakes. Your story needs editing, but nothing major.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reviewing your work.
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Review of Winter  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
This traditional poem paints a water color which appeals to your mind's eye.

Content, Language, Suggestions
Winter is portrayed with rich, descriptive words. The poem is loaded with imagery and lovely poetic conventions, such as assonance and consonance. It is well-written with excellent mechanics and usage. This poem makes my heart ache for a country winter.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review of Wonderland  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impressions:
This whimsical poem invites the reader to re-discover a sense of awe, perhaps the fascination that a child experiences.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
That wonderland is magical, especially as you come down the rabbit's hole. don't allow pain and anguish to control your happiness.

You might want to use varied language to express the same thought in the last lines of each stanza. Using the same language removes the luster from the poem.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reviewing your poem. Write on!
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power ReviewersGroup. I am here to review your story. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. I am reviewing to honor you as a Lightning List participant.

Overall impression:
This fairytale smacks of the Three Little Pigs.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
It is also a great adventure story of two children who lose their way in the forest in a storm, yet find shelter with their human wolf friends or are they some other wild animal?

How about a sequel to answer the question above?

Thank you for sharing. I thoroughly enjoyed your story of children.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers. I am here to review your poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. I am reviewing to honor you as a Lightning List participant.

Overall impression:
This poem is whimsical seen on a day full of sunshine.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
Loaded with imagery. I can just see the birds in flight. I love the second stanza. This poem appeals to my mind's eye. It makes me want to spend time imagining what the birds are imagining.

No suggestions. No issue.

Thank you for sharing this inspiring poem.
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Review of Holiday  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your Holiday story. Please use my suggestions as you see fit, I am reviewing to honor you as a Lightning List participant.

Overall impression:
Reading your story about your holiday was pleasant and relaxing.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your story, I like the way you wrote it from beginning of the day to end of day.

Have you edited your language? You might try to edit your verbs (action words) Try to make your sentences shorter (14 words).

Thank you for sharing.
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (2.5)
I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. I am reviewing to honor you as a Lightning List participant.

Overall impression:
The poet is caught without her writing tools.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
Not having the tools you need to write can make a person unhappy. Paper, pen, a beverage and even a folded map can bring sadness. How about trying another stanza showing what brings happiness?.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review of Shadow  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)

I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. I am reviewing your poem to honor you as a Lightning List participant.

Overall impression:
The poem is a study of the human being's shadow.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
This free verse poem reads magnificently well. The shadow is the poet's most trusted friend during daylight, but when the sun goes down, what happens to the shadow? In the evening is the shadow a fiend?

Language is fabulous. Loaded with imagery. Rhyme and rhythm are not an issue. Mechanics of poem...good.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem. Reading it was refreshing!
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. I am reviewing your poem to honor you as a Lightning List participant.

Overall impression:
This poem is a nice tribute to your grandfather, whose soul is 'pure and true'.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
You might want to try adding imagery about your grandfather. Or add a favorite time spent with him. Rhyme, rhythm, mechanics are good.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review of Reflected  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your narrative. Please use my suggestions as you see fit,

Overall impression:
I found this narrative believable. In today's world of science and medicine this situation could happen.

Content, Language, and Suggestions:
You might make this piece even more believable by referring to the signed authorization for testing given by the students' parents. More scientific information on the circle of mirrors would help the reader understand the principles behind thie equipment that gave personality analysis. Language usage and mechanics are very good.

Thank you. I enjoyed your narrative.
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Review of Power of names  
Review by GerMac
Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall impression:
Names of Power Members for crossword puzzle~~This is a fun activity!
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Review of No One  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
.The person seems to be telling the reader that these thoughts are private, heartfelt and from the whispers of his soul.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
She is alone. Tears on her pillow at night are the only real indication that she feels alone. The rest of the poem describes her daily activities and what she experiences when there is "No One" else in her life.

The use of the word "and" in each stanza tells me this is a series of rote experiences that drone on each day. There does not seem to be much emotion involved.

This poem is depressing, but it communicates the point well. You might want to write another poem, expressing what she might do to bring about happiness in her life. Perhaps she likes having no one, but that feeling is not portrayed.

You might try including some imagery. Good mechanics. Is it necessary to include the assignment at the top of the poem? Perhaps an introduction saying that the poet is attempting to see someone else's viewpoint could replace the assignment.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your work for the January Raid for young adults. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
This is an adventure written about young love.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
Pelo and Pooca plan to wed, but Pelo's father, the chief of the tribe, requires that Pooca journey to the mainland to find provisions for the tribe's medicine man and bring them home.

The adventure goes as planned. She is escorted by two young men, purchases provisions and gifts, returns home, and she finds her way back to Pelo, her future spouse.

Nice imagery, eg "shined like a sunflower on a bright summer day, only rivaled by his dark blue eyes".

Some extraneous words should be eliminated, eg "see me off on this task" could be ""accomplish this task". "Clouds here and there" not "a cloud here and there". "Alright" should be "all right". "Brought to her" should be "taken to her".

Spelling and mechanics good.

I enjoyed reviewing your work. Thank you.
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Review by GerMac
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Review Group. I am here today to do a review of your story for the January Power Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
Very enjoyable setting in English courtyard with Lord and son, steel swords, English courtyard, and noblemen dueling. The children of Lord Petrus ventured into the forest to find frightening adventures.
They were typical inquisitive children even though from nobility.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
This adventure is sophisticated. The children experience "kid play", such as seeing a spiderweb, feeding sunflower seeds to a bird, and getting lost in the forest. The plot could appeal to adults and young adults, as well as these pre-adolescents. The reader becomes aware of that when the woman they meet tells them she plans to take their life energy so she could appear human while she is on earth.

The author introduces characters that the reader can get to know in future adventures eg a dog, the woman who has a very contemporary home, probably a spaceship in disguise. The children can have exciting experiences in the utter as the plot thickens. The children feel conflict with the woman. They like her, but they're afraid of her. I hope they learn to trust each other in the future.

Language is very advanced standard English. I felt that some "kid lingo needs to be interjected once in a while. All in all, A very well written story.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your work.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review the poem you have written for January Power Raid. Please do as you see fit with my suggestions.

Overall impression:
This is a poem for friends who have lost their friendship.

Content and Suggestions:
Our friendship tree protected us from the elements for many years. That tree got very old. We moved and got on with life. Within the tree there is still a root and a shining seed so if you need a friend,,if you're feeling beaten, I'll be here under the friendship tree. No issue with the content of this poem. Point is obvious.

Language:
Good imagery, rhyme sprinkled throughout poem, smooth cadence. Good mechanics.
Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review of Green  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem written for young adults. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
The world beckons us to explore and venture forth.

Content and Suggestions:
Take risks and dive into uncharted waters. You might not be safe, but you at least will have the chance to find yourself. This poem reads very smoothly and the point of it is obvious.

Language:
Well-written with beautiful imagery. Free verse, rhyme sprinkled within the poem. Very smooth cadence and rhythm. Very good mechanics.
Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review by GerMac
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem in the January Raid Review. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
A young boy is forced out of his home and takes up living on the streets.

Content and Suggestions:
He is young and abused by others, trying to care for his needs and get a few coins for food. He lost his dad to AIDS when he was six years old. He knows the Almighty, has faith and is cared for by Him. His meager possessions are stolen from him. He survives another night, thanks to the Almighty.

Language:
This is a free verse poem. It is well-written, good vocabulary, good mechanics. Try to develop a rhythm with a cadence. Careful of hops!

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your piece for young adults.
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Review of The Young Jester  
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to do a January Power Raid for young adults~~YA.

Overall impression:
This is a heartfelt poem about how a young boy with leukemia helps his friends. Doctors have told him all they can do for him is ease his pain. He has found a place to talk to God. He discovers he has certain skills as a jestor and a magician. He keeps his sick friends happy by performing for them. He and his friends enjoy when he acts like a fool. He wants to help them forget their plight. His mom wants him home. He is feeling better, but she knows others need him more than she does.

You could expand on how he discovered his other skills and more on his talks with GOD. There is a nostalgic and sweet thought here.

Language:
Thoughtful poem. Rhythm is choppy. You should tighten the number of syllables per line. Rhyme is very good.

Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Thank you. I enjoyed reading your poem.
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Review of Unspoken  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please do with my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
A poem of young love and uncertainty.

Content and Suggestions:
This poem appeals to the reader emotionally. All of those sweet and gentle experiences are portrayed, but there is also risk involved. Expand on the risk you referred to.

Language:
Very nice imagery. Work on rhyme. Rhythm is choppy.

I enjoyed reading your heartfelt poem. Thank you.
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I am GerMac. I am reviewing your work today. I am affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. Please use my suggestions only if they make sense to you.

Overall impression:
Your title says it--Today's Tests = Tomorrow's Testimonies. You say to keep the faith. You go on to discuss your pain and illness, but you know the battle is not yours.

Content, Suggestions and Language:
You are accepting of His plan and know that His plan is His time and His terms. You are trusting of His judgment. He healed you and delivered you. This is your testimony. I suggest that you develop a smooth rhythm or cadence. Some rhyme sprinkled within the lines is effective in free verse.

I enjoyed your very spiritual work. Good health to you. Write on!
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I am GerMac. I am here today to review your poem. I am affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. Please do as you see fit with my suggestions.

Overall impression:
Your poem has potential to move the reader emotionally, but you might
need to do some tweaking here and there to accomplish this.

Content and Suggestions:
What is the focal point of your poem? You have struggled throughout life, but your title insinuates that you have known happiness in the past: "I Don't Sing Anymore". How about compare your past happiness with your present sadness. You might be more inclined to count your blessings today.

Language:
Some nice imagery. Try placing rhyme within the lines rather than at the end of lines. Rhythm is choppy. Try to develop a smooth cadence. Good language usage and mechanics.

I enjoyed your poem. Write on!
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Review of Restless  
Review by GerMac
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My name is GerMac. I am affiliated with the Power Reviewers Group. I am here to review your work today.

Overall impression:
The powers that be have issued a secret paranormal occurrence. Sean, a 16 year-old enters a trance.

Content and Suggestions:
Sean enters a trance, experiences weightlessness, sees girls at a much younger age, turns blue, throws up and comes out of the trance. I suggest you explain what got him into the trance as a warning to avoid this kind of experience.

Language:
Good usage and mechanics. Use of quotation marks and dialogue is very good. No issue.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your work.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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A sun-filled, lazy day. No one goes far from home on a day like today, so relax and enjoy the simple things in life, like secret recipe lemonade.
Content:
Mom and Dad have enjoyed many sunny days like today. In fact, they have become "a pair of old shoes. This is the Lord's day and nothing is supposed to accomplished, so sit back and give thanks to Him.
Language:
Beautiful imagery shared, good language and mechanics.
I enjoyed reviewing your work. Thank you from GerMac
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Review of Out We Fly  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Overall impression:
This piece has potential. Try expanding the ending to show how your grandmother has long entrapped and is now a free soul.
Content:
I enjoyed reading about caterpillar season, with hundreds of them locked in a room. You are allowed to stay alone while your parents go to the hospital with your ill grandmother. You are responsible about being home alone until the locked room gets to you and you release hundreds of butterflies. Could this represent your grandmother's entrapped soul that died and hence, set free?
Language:
Good mechanics and language usage.
Thank you. I enjoyed retviewing your work. If time permits, please review ode of my pieces. From: GerMac
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