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Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall impression:
Names of Power Members for crossword puzzle~~This is a fun activity!
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Review of No One  Open in new Window.
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
.The person seems to be telling the reader that these thoughts are private, heartfelt and from the whispers of his soul.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
She is alone. Tears on her pillow at night are the only real indication that she feels alone. The rest of the poem describes her daily activities and what she experiences when there is "No One" else in her life.

The use of the word "and" in each stanza tells me this is a series of rote experiences that drone on each day. There does not seem to be much emotion involved.

This poem is depressing, but it communicates the point well. You might want to write another poem, expressing what she might do to bring about happiness in her life. Perhaps she likes having no one, but that feeling is not portrayed.

You might try including some imagery. Good mechanics. Is it necessary to include the assignment at the top of the poem? Perhaps an introduction saying that the poet is attempting to see someone else's viewpoint could replace the assignment.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your work for the January Raid for young adults. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
This is an adventure written about young love.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
Pelo and Pooca plan to wed, but Pelo's father, the chief of the tribe, requires that Pooca journey to the mainland to find provisions for the tribe's medicine man and bring them home.

The adventure goes as planned. She is escorted by two young men, purchases provisions and gifts, returns home, and she finds her way back to Pelo, her future spouse.

Nice imagery, eg "shined like a sunflower on a bright summer day, only rivaled by his dark blue eyes".

Some extraneous words should be eliminated, eg "see me off on this task" could be ""accomplish this task". "Clouds here and there" not "a cloud here and there". "Alright" should be "all right". "Brought to her" should be "taken to her".

Spelling and mechanics good.

I enjoyed reviewing your work. Thank you.
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Review Group. I am here today to do a review of your story for the January Power Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
Very enjoyable setting in English courtyard with Lord and son, steel swords, English courtyard, and noblemen dueling. The children of Lord Petrus ventured into the forest to find frightening adventures.
They were typical inquisitive children even though from nobility.

Content, Language and Suggestions:
This adventure is sophisticated. The children experience "kid play", such as seeing a spiderweb, feeding sunflower seeds to a bird, and getting lost in the forest. The plot could appeal to adults and young adults, as well as these pre-adolescents. The reader becomes aware of that when the woman they meet tells them she plans to take their life energy so she could appear human while she is on earth.

The author introduces characters that the reader can get to know in future adventures eg a dog, the woman who has a very contemporary home, probably a spaceship in disguise. The children can have exciting experiences in the utter as the plot thickens. The children feel conflict with the woman. They like her, but they're afraid of her. I hope they learn to trust each other in the future.

Language is very advanced standard English. I felt that some "kid lingo needs to be interjected once in a while. All in all, A very well written story.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your work.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review the poem you have written for January Power Raid. Please do as you see fit with my suggestions.

Overall impression:
This is a poem for friends who have lost their friendship.

Content and Suggestions:
Our friendship tree protected us from the elements for many years. That tree got very old. We moved and got on with life. Within the tree there is still a root and a shining seed so if you need a friend,,if you're feeling beaten, I'll be here under the friendship tree. No issue with the content of this poem. Point is obvious.

Language:
Good imagery, rhyme sprinkled throughout poem, smooth cadence. Good mechanics.
Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review of Green  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem written for young adults. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
The world beckons us to explore and venture forth.

Content and Suggestions:
Take risks and dive into uncharted waters. You might not be safe, but you at least will have the chance to find yourself. This poem reads very smoothly and the point of it is obvious.

Language:
Well-written with beautiful imagery. Free verse, rhyme sprinkled within the poem. Very smooth cadence and rhythm. Very good mechanics.
Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem in the January Raid Review. Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
A young boy is forced out of his home and takes up living on the streets.

Content and Suggestions:
He is young and abused by others, trying to care for his needs and get a few coins for food. He lost his dad to AIDS when he was six years old. He knows the Almighty, has faith and is cared for by Him. His meager possessions are stolen from him. He survives another night, thanks to the Almighty.

Language:
This is a free verse poem. It is well-written, good vocabulary, good mechanics. Try to develop a rhythm with a cadence. Careful of hops!

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your piece for young adults.
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Review of The Young Jester  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to do a January Power Raid for young adults~~YA.

Overall impression:
This is a heartfelt poem about how a young boy with leukemia helps his friends. Doctors have told him all they can do for him is ease his pain. He has found a place to talk to God. He discovers he has certain skills as a jestor and a magician. He keeps his sick friends happy by performing for them. He and his friends enjoy when he acts like a fool. He wants to help them forget their plight. His mom wants him home. He is feeling better, but she knows others need him more than she does.

You could expand on how he discovered his other skills and more on his talks with GOD. There is a nostalgic and sweet thought here.

Language:
Thoughtful poem. Rhythm is choppy. You should tighten the number of syllables per line. Rhyme is very good.

Please use my suggestions as you see fit.

Thank you. I enjoyed reading your poem.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review your poem. Please do with my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
A poem of young love and uncertainty.

Content and Suggestions:
This poem appeals to the reader emotionally. All of those sweet and gentle experiences are portrayed, but there is also risk involved. Expand on the risk you referred to.

Language:
Very nice imagery. Work on rhyme. Rhythm is choppy.

I enjoyed reading your heartfelt poem. Thank you.
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Review of Wrapped in Winter  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. Please do with my suggestions as you see fit.

Overall impression:
This poem about has lovely imagery. I easily see myself in many of these scenes of winter.

Content and Suggestions:
The poet portrays the effect of the snow on neighbors, kitten and dog, cricket and frog, friends skiing and singing, hibernating animals and dormant nature~~all of nature covered with snow.

Poem might be easier for the reader to follow with action shown using complete thoughts rather than phrases.

Language:
Nice imagery and mechanics. Well-written poem. You might want to re-write parts of the poem using complete sentences. This should help with rhythm.

I enjoyed reviewing your poem. Thank you. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I am GerMac. I am reviewing your work today. I am affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. Please use my suggestions only if they make sense to you.

Overall impression:
Your title says it--Today's Tests = Tomorrow's Testimonies. You say to keep the faith. You go on to discuss your pain and illness, but you know the battle is not yours.

Content, Suggestions and Language:
You are accepting of His plan and know that His plan is His time and His terms. You are trusting of His judgment. He healed you and delivered you. This is your testimony. I suggest that you develop a smooth rhythm or cadence. Some rhyme sprinkled within the lines is effective in free verse.

I enjoyed your very spiritual work. Good health to you. Write on!
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I am GerMac. I am here today to review your poem. I am affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. Please do as you see fit with my suggestions.

Overall impression:
Your poem has potential to move the reader emotionally, but you might
need to do some tweaking here and there to accomplish this.

Content and Suggestions:
What is the focal point of your poem? You have struggled throughout life, but your title insinuates that you have known happiness in the past: "I Don't Sing Anymore". How about compare your past happiness with your present sadness. You might be more inclined to count your blessings today.

Language:
Some nice imagery. Try placing rhyme within the lines rather than at the end of lines. Rhythm is choppy. Try to develop a smooth cadence. Good language usage and mechanics.

I enjoyed your poem. Write on!
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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My name is GerMac. I am affiliated with the Power Reviewers Group. I am here to review your work today.

Overall impression:
The powers that be have issued a secret paranormal occurrence. Sean, a 16 year-old enters a trance.

Content and Suggestions:
Sean enters a trance, experiences weightlessness, sees girls at a much younger age, turns blue, throws up and comes out of the trance. I suggest you explain what got him into the trance as a warning to avoid this kind of experience.

Language:
Good usage and mechanics. Use of quotation marks and dialogue is very good. No issue.

Thank you. I enjoyed reviewing your work.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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A sun-filled, lazy day. No one goes far from home on a day like today, so relax and enjoy the simple things in life, like secret recipe lemonade.
Content:
Mom and Dad have enjoyed many sunny days like today. In fact, they have become "a pair of old shoes. This is the Lord's day and nothing is supposed to accomplished, so sit back and give thanks to Him.
Language:
Beautiful imagery shared, good language and mechanics.
I enjoyed reviewing your work. Thank you from GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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#1300305 by Maryann Author IconMail Icon

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Overall impression:
This piece has potential. Try expanding the ending to show how your grandmother has long entrapped and is now a free soul.
Content:
I enjoyed reading about caterpillar season, with hundreds of them locked in a room. You are allowed to stay alone while your parents go to the hospital with your ill grandmother. You are responsible about being home alone until the locked room gets to you and you release hundreds of butterflies. Could this represent your grandmother's entrapped soul that died and hence, set free?
Language:
Good mechanics and language usage.
Thank you. I enjoyed retviewing your work. If time permits, please review ode of my pieces. From: GerMac
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#1300305 by Maryann Author IconMail Icon


Overall impression:
You lose that which you don't care for, whether it's nature or people.

Content: The flower, river, and moon are discussed in this beautiful poem. If the flower is plucked and not cared for, it dies because it is not loved. The river changes direction and flows into the ocean. You can no longer differentiate the two. It is not love because there the river does not flow. The tree does not give you comfort in the winter. It is lacking summer fruit and shade. There is no love when you cannot experience its comforts. When the moon hides its silvery glow, you are lacking love. When the mistress agonizes over unkept promises and waits for her lover who doesn't show up, love is lacking.

Language:
Very effective imagery. Language is well written. Good spelling and mechanics.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overall impression:
This piece caught my attention right from the beginning. I found it delightful remembering childhood days and being thankful for all memories, even those that are frightening.


Content:
Children raised on the family farm are fortunate in that they have opportunities to learn about the lives of all of the farm animals. Many legends are shared and passed on from parent to child over generations. Special stories about cattle giving birth are passed on, as well as unexpected scary events about hungry snakes on a hot day in Oklahoma.

Language:
Very good command of the language. Good logical development makes the story easy to
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Adorable, refreshing detective vignette. I can see a series developing.
from this Mother Goose nursery rhyme.

Content:
Who dun it? It seems that the King and Sally have made off with Dumpty's money after they squandered their own fortune. They set up the whole entire ordeal when Humpty fell off the wall. Sally ended up tpoached. It looks as though they now have an heir to the throne. They're in a position to protect their kingdom and their sheckles. Poor old Humpty! Where he stands in his brother's court remains to be seen.

Language:
You need to divide your thoughts into paragraphs. Some mechanical problems, especially with sentence structure.

Thank you. I really enjoyed this piece.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overall impression:
I relate to this family of wolves easily. They seem almost human.

Content:
Dark Stream is proud of his parents, brothers and sisters, and can hardly wait for acceptance. Personification makes the animal behavior seem human, when wolf packs, in reality are vicious wild animals. Have they treed any animal or human beings? Has the author researched undomesticated animal behavior?

Language:
Generally, good language and usage. A few little flaws...towards, it's.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I can easily relate to this family of wolves. Personification makes them seem human, when in reality wolves, especially wolf packs are vicious, wild animals.

Content:
The wolves' behavior showing acceptance of Dark Stream could be expanded with effective description. I'd like to hear more about the wolf pack's non-domesticated wild side for honesty's sake. Have they treed any animals or human beings in this scenario? Have you researched this animal's behavior?

Language:
'Towards' should be 'toward' (several times) 'It's' should be 'its'. Good language, imagery and description.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Overall impression:
The poet does a fine job of moving the reader along emotionally, all the while capturing the heart of the reader.

Content:
This poem expresses terrific sentiment and emotion. Very nice job of describing passion, heed and sorrow. On a lighter note, affection is shown "tracing my cheek's tender skin".

Language: Plenty of imagery. Good rhyme. Stanza #3 rhythm needs some work. Generally, rhythm is good.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Overall impression:
Even though the poet has lost an old friend of his, the reader enjoys the poet's "throwing the ball or two, as far as his arm could throw" until he awakens and discovers it was only a dream.

Content:
The reader experiences sadness right along with the poet. "I gave him a hug and he drifted away"...connotes that the poet fell into deeper slumber. The dream was probably gone by that time.

Language:
It takes only a word or two in order to communicate the regret the poet feels at having lost his old friend, the dog. Good rhyme. Good cadence of rhythm.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall impression:
I offer a refuting of this piece. You've heard that "No man is an island."
Man needs acceptance. Are we going to annihilate ourselves through the rejection of reproduction?


Content:
Man has a need for acceptance. Human ecology tells us that we are interdependent on each other. This piece insinuates that man can meet all of his own needs. I don't think so. Although Ralph W. Emerson would like to see "self-reliance", many men and women cannot cook for themselves or launder their own clothes, to give a couple of examples.

I agree, rejection of others would bring about freedom, but the idea seems quite impractical. And wait until old age hits you. Even if man is completely self-reliant, illness has a way of humbling you and bringing you to the ground. If you're fortunate enough to have a wife or husband, you will be cared for when you are barely conscious and cannot even put your shoes and socks on.

Language: Well-written standard English and usage.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Overall impression: A jilted heart is painful, especially when she is given nothing. Her heart "is buried under snow".

Content: The woman is not willing to compromise her affections for her prince with another woman that he is spending a lot of time with..."in a sky of another lady."

Language: excellent imagery. Rhythm creates a nice cadence, steadily pulsating. Rhyme is found sprinkled throughout the poem, but only to tastefully add to the cadence. "...in a sky of another lady has shown." ...interesting imagery, vivid description and a memorable to end the poem. "Oppressed tears" ...vivid imagery again. Good job. I enjoyed your poem. Thank you.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Overall impression:
Short ' sweet piece of wisdom


Content:
Free verse makes a lot of sense. It gives dramatic splash to the point of the poem and helps the reader focus on the meaning of the poem. Let your idea flow naturally is what this poem says to me.

Language:
I agree. Getting bogged down with rhyme at the end of the line can be very harmful to the poem. Rhyme and poetic techniques within the line can be very effective, eg assonance, alliteration, consonance rhyme.

Thank you. I enjoyed reading your poem. E
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