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Review of When I Grow Up...  
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My overall impression of your letter says this is a very intelligent combination of dreams from your childhood and dreams from your adult life.

Writing is a wonderful way to experience your dreams. Congratulations on finding a common sense approach to dreamland.

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Review of Ocean Boy  
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My overall impression: You have painted a picture for the mind's eye. I have a fabulous idea of what the enterprising castle builder went through at the shoreline that day.

Language is vivid. Poem flows naturally. Language usage is good. Mechanics good.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My overall impression says this is a heartfelt poem of you and the love of your life.

I love the last stanza...your thought that you are reminded of what two hearts can accomplish when you look at your children even though the Lord took her home. Time will not take that memory from you. That is a beautiful thought.

Rhythm moves with grace. Language usage is good. No suggestions.

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Review of WINTER  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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My overall impression says the four seasons are quite different.

Winter is clever and erases the landscapes of the other seasons, but the other seasons write all over her virgin snow. Imagine debris of leaves and flowers all over the white of winter.

Rhythm could flow more smoothly. Some rhyme. Language and mechanics good.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My overall impression says your work is down to earth and realistic.

You have built suspense in this short piece and a plot that makes the reader wonder if you and Tawny are facing danger...the mountain lion. You deduce by observation of Tawny's behavior that the risk must not be imminent. Somehow you have lost the threat of the lion. You manage to get into the barn safely. The reader then relaxes a little. The reader is also happy to know you have vowed to never travel in the dark like that again. Why sleep in the barn and not the house? So here you are safe at last, even though wondering if that kiss was worth it.

Very excellent use of the language for description. Many times the reader has to logically deduce a conclusion you're hinting at. A period omitted, a comma splice. Nothing major but editing is needed.

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Review of HAPPINESS  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My overall impression of your poem says it is the small things in life that are to be relished.

We search for those moments of total bliss when the small fragments of life are really what are memorable. Many years from now, only the memories will remain, so put them in a safe place.

You could work on paragraph structure, eg paragraph two should have a general statement and supporting detail. Nice job.

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Review of My best season  
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My overall impression says you cannot get enough of spring.

The flowers, the rabbits, the butterflies all give you happiness. My favorite line..."Leaves peeped out of trees though few few". We forget that the trees are not magnificent with leaves until summer approaches.

Nice job. Rhythm could be smoother.

Are the first few lines necessary? If they're related to spring, you should mention that they are.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My overall impression says you are creating a personal statement.

You attended a speech by Steven Jobs in which he inspired you with his message. He encouraged you to work hard. If you fail, come back and be brace about it. Enjoy your life. Be confident and relaxed in public speaking. Can. You give an example of his failure?

You feel that your confidence in public speaking is missing. You need to conquer this fear.

You would like to work in the medical field. Can you give detail on which part of the medical field?

You would like to help others in their chosen fields and help them conquer their fears the way you have been helped.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My overall image says you were there for your friend who did not return your need for closeness.

Now you have bonded with someone else and you are no longer interested in your first friend.

You tell your first friend to go with the flow; life will run its course and he will have another partner. Have fairh.

Rhyme is consistent. Rhythm flows nicely. Language and usage are good.

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Review of Trapped  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My overall impression says you want to be freed from your darkest enemy~~yourself.

You see many doors and keys, opportunities in life that you're missing because you're locked within yourself.

Remember that opportunity knocks once. Perhaps, you can be motivated by that thought.

Periods are not necessary in this poem. A few commas are needed to show pauses.

This free verse makes a good statement.

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Review by GerMac
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My overall impression says this pie e gives definitions of third person limited, third person omniscient and first person. These are three types of narration and each gives points of view.

Third person omniscient allows the writer the most freedom. Third person limited gives less freedom than the omniscient but more freedom. thanks first person.

Your examples from "For Whom the Bells Toll" and "Anna Karenina" apply the concepts above and are helpful for the reader. "Anna Karenena" is told from many points of view, thanks to third person omniscient.

Language, usage and mechanics are good. Logical development is good.

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Review of This I Believe  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My overall impression says this essay compares your mother's evaluation of your painting with your peers' evaluation of your painting. You have learned a very important lesson.

Your mother feels the painting is perfect. Your classmates judge it otherwise. You are hurt, but honest with yourself and finally realize there is nothing more valuable than constructive criticism.

Language, spelling, usage, and mechanics are generally good. You should edit your work again, eg stair should be stairs.

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Review by GerMac
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My overall impression says there are only certain traditions you enjoy.

You gave a dictionary definition of the word tradition: it is an undertaking of a special event, ritual or pastime that has significant sentimental, cultural, historical, or religious value for a group or individual.

Some may go along with a tradition because other members of the group do.

You prefer to go along with tradition when it is relevant with the times.

Have you seen "Fiddler on the Roof" Tradition is referred to in that movie. You could reference that thought.

Well written. Usage and mechanics are good.

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Review of The Memory  
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My overall impression says precious memories are meant to be kept close to our hearts so they can be cherished especially when we are in our golden years. This poem is from the heart.
It's the small things in life that are most important, eg, the kids on the slide. Keep those in a safe spot.

The rhyme and rhythm are fairly traditional in your poem. Language usage and mechanics are good.

Thanks for sharing. Write on!
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Review of As she waits  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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My overall impression says this sweet poem is about a pet, perhaps a dog. She is very unhappy waiting for her master. Her extreme sadness shows in the lowering of her ears.

Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Rhythm is fairly smooth. Usage and mechanics are good. Written for animal lovers.

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Review of You Saved Me  
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My overall impression of your poem says you are endeared to your good friend and fully bonded.

Your good friend has saved you from yourself, your depression and darkness. Your friend makes you feel like you are on a cloud and fills you with happiness. Words cannot express your love. Your friend has saved you from darkness. You now have a good life.

Well written and from the heart. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout. You might look at the rhythm again and read the poem aloud. Add or subtract a syllable here and there to see if you can even the rhythm.
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My overall impression of your story says to count your blessings and emphasize the positive.

You had encounters with deer, a skunk, a country woman and a low tire. You might have been frightened, but you knew you could count on our Lord.

I found your story had conflicts which were resolved, good description of the setting and the country roads.
You might think about showing, not telling about the main character. You did this well. I felt I was observing the main character. You might have written this in the third person, he.

Well written. Good mechanics and usage. A few words misused, eg to rather than too. You might elaborate on just how disastrous it would be to go home smelling like skunk. I found reading your story was restful even with the many surprises along the way.

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Review of February 18 2014  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My overall impression of your essay says that you have a terrific desire to write. You wonder what your sister's illness is. What is the doctor's diagnosis?

You state that we have symptoms of disease our entire lives. These symptoms exist in our behaviors. We even blame ourselves and others for our illnesses. You worry about how you will react when your sister calls to tell you the doctor's diagnosis of her illness. How would you react? Can you prepare yourself to write and record details by "place the moment in a future lens" so you can write it down later? As you cried on your spouse's chest, you rehearsed what you would write in the future. You planned to "paint a different version of life than the one I was living. This you feel is a coping mechanism.

You wanted to be transported to a time when you were detached by time and ready to write it down.
"I lay like that willing myself to keep breathing."

Nice description of snow melting and snow in the middle of the night. I noticed a few words that need to be edited...nothing major. Good usage and mechanics.

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Review by GerMac
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My overall impression of your poem says you have a sensitive and concerned family member who is critically ill.

You make a touching statement and one that I relate to. You are, on fact sick to your stomach with worry and heartache over your family member's health.

Your poem is rich with imagery. Although no one enjoys being in this position, your imagery is vivid.

Language and mechanics are well done. I think I would shorten Stanza 2. Too many words can add to the confusion and out of control feeling and anxiety you are experiencing. Two shorter sentences would help the reader focus on your problem. I think you are on the right track showing examples of your pain.

Have you thought of looking for a support group to help you through this difficult time? Writing about our thoughts can be helpful.

God bless you. Thank you for sharing.
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Myy overall impression of your narrative poem says you have a tale to tell. Gleefully related, "Gather 'round while I tell you a favorite story. This is how it goes."

The rest is now history. Your family supports you in your quest to feed the hungry. The whole family contributes. You now have not only family friends, but new friends too. My only suggestion...in the last Stanza you might want to emphasize "and my new hungry friends" or "and my new homeless friends".

Rhyme, rhythm, description of the happening, mechanics and usage are all well done.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reviewing your narrative poem.
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Review of In The Heart  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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My overall impression of your poem says that if you're sincere and honest about people, thinking and feelings,you will keep them in your heart because that's where love can grow. No issue with language or mechanics.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading your poem.
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Review by GerMac
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My impression of your poem paints a picture of nature and especially roses.

This free verse is loaded with imagery. Lovely poetic conventions, such as consonance and onomatopoeia. Rhythm is a little choppy. You might try reading the poem aloud again to bring about smooth writing, adding a syllable here and there. Rhyme is tastefully sprinkled throughout poem. Use my suggestions as needed.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My overall impression paints a watercolor for the mind's eye, which says "Until we meet again...".

This poem could be lovers separating temporarily. It could be an explorer sending a message for those he's left behind and those who have gone to new land before him.

I have no issues and no changes for the language of this poem: imagery, mechanics, usage, rhythm...The whole poem is simply exquisite.

Thank you for sharing. I thoroughly enjoyed reviewing your poem.
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Review of A Perfect Love  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My overall impression of your poem sees you as infatuated, but also love is "deeply within our souls". Your fiance is your missing link and you're life is now complete.

You speak in the superlative...intensely, magnifying. This is new love.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed your poem.
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Review of Love's Journey  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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"You've completed me in so many ways"and "souls blend as one" are heartfelt and memorable words in this poem of love.

"God gave me a gift" are precious words of celebration. Your language is full of imagery and sincere love for your fiance.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reviewing your poem.

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