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Review of beauty  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi NUTTSS, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the truth in beauty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Beauty is unique in each person. There is beauty in each person in many ways, whether you're spinning around with the wind in your hair, falling on the grass like an angel, returning to your very own mother or glistening without makeup.

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Nice simile, eg like an angel, Rhyme sprinkled throughout poem of unmetered verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
positioned like an angel NOT position like and angel
it's rich NOT its rich
God's creatures NOT gods creatures
through the years NOT threw the years
their own beauty NOT the own beauty
your beauty NOT you beauty

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Review of Family Tree  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jade Amber Jewel, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the love of generations in the poet's family. The poet has done an immense amount of work putting together hter portfolio in just a few days. Very impressive.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: You have wonderful insights, realizing you come from a loving family who loved iyou from the start. You're a tiptop trio, but someday your Mom and Dad will be a duo again. Here you showed your maturity. You like being a niece, so it's nice that your Mom and Dad have brothers and sisters. If it weren't for grandparents, everyone would be too sad! None of you would be. Every teenager has a mighty appetite for that healthy growing body. I can understand needing a walk-about. I like this word walk-about. Did you create it? Your underlying writing style is breezy and upbeat. Very nice. I can say you are good at showing, not telling.

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Jade Amber Jewel, You have sprinkled some very nice rhyme throughout your poem about the love in your family generations. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Suggestions:
Next in our family tree are the aunts, uncles, and cousins NOT Next in our family tree is the aunts, uncles and cousins {subject verb agreement).

Best wishes,
Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of The Viewing  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kelso, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem was written by the poet for his grandfather's funeral.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The people who attended the poet's grandfather's funeral were all dressed in black. The poet's message said not to mourn our sudden loss, as the Angels wanted him back. Your soul is at last peacefully at rest.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of Hard Nights  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi WritingInMotion, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a love poem.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: He feels her kiss on his lips. He feels quaint and misses her touch that makes him faint. He can't let this grow. He has to slow his heart rate. He doesn't believe the one has been found. He can't string himself along. He says he's not that good. He says he'll be what she needs, not just what she wants.


*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
The rhyme in your poem is driving your thoughts. You might want to try expressing your thoughts without using any rhyme or very little rhyme which is part of free verse. That way what you have to say will really make sense. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Black Dog  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Gregory, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a canvas for painting a picture of beating yourself up.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet accepts defeat. His memories are daunting. He faces his plight of fight or plight. He wishes he could never e his own worst enemy. Never give in.A life of sorrow is no way to live. He'd trade sadness for cheer. Who would ever think he is a fighter? He'd face the world with much brighter days if he could get freedom from the black dog.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of AFFECTION  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dr. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio.
Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes love and beauty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Tears are not precious nor rare. There are not available in heaven nor earth. There are tears of love of the soul. Dark clouds of tears surge from an undiscovered pilgrimage of the heart. When the splendor of holy feelings is seen on the face, the edge of the sari wipes the tears away.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Morning Glory  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Lexi Joy, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only.

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes praising in the morning.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: A lovely refrain is found at the beginning of each stanza, i.e. You're my glory in the morning. Jesus, is the rain that gently waters the poet's secret deserts in his being, which represent the poet's weaknesses, I believe. Peaceful moments are shared with Thee. The word of God binds the poet's soul and makes him walk in victory. He receives manna to feed his soul. Milk and honey deeply flow. Sweetly and softly the poet will praise Him.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Metaphors are found throughout the poem, eg, rain, manna. Description is vivid and expressive, eg secret deserts in his being. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your eighth account anniversary. Congratulations! Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem sparks the imagination, especially when it's more than a rainy day.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Raindrops from the branches of a crystal tree tell the poet it's more than just a rainy day. Wet window wonders are created just for him. The silver drops meander, play and glide like children at play lost in the magic of the day. They paint a perfect filigree like branches on a crystal tree.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Very effective use of imagery, eg simile: like branches on a crystal tree. Effective use of metaphor, eg a perfect filigree. Consonance, a poetic convention, is used nicely. The poem, stylistically, is a French Rondeau form with a definite plan for the rhyme scheme and refrain. It is a complicated and lovely sounding form poem. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of A Daughter's Life  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Pro Scribe, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary, which I found on your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's love of his daughter, Jenna, through different parts of her life.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet loved his daughter as a newborn. He appreciated her ability to test everything when she was an adolescent. As an adult she peeled the onion of love's intricate architecture, she molded the clay of her unique future. Jenna is a wife and mother, bringing new love into her life. Jenna is a daughter and connects indivisible to the poet's heart, more than he ever thought possible.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. Very effective metaphor,eg she peeled the onion of love's intricate architecture. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

Regards,
GerMac

 
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Review of This feeling  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Brittany Lorraine, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's feeling for her loved one as she tried to fall asleep.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: You know the poet's heart is breaking when you hear the sound of small stones hitting the glass. You know the beloved has arrived when you hear that same sound. The heart break is sudden and lingering. The feeling of the beloved's teeth on her lips when they kissed. This is the way the poet wanted her loved one to feel for her.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Good metaphor, eg sound of small stones hitting glass. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of The Doctor  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi. Bluejay, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your limerick for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This limerick is about a doctor who hired a nurse.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: There was a wealthy young doctor who hired a nurse. She was late every day. When counting her pay, she found she had been docked.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Friend  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Fireexi, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary, which I found on your portfolio. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the meaning of friendship.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Little did the poet know how his friend would capture his soul. He cherishes their friendship which has grown over the years. Although roads may separate them, their bonds will never be broken. The poet insists that they will always be friends.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Yeti Man  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jack, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's outlook on the Yeti versus the Igloo coolers.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet tells us he's a Yeti man. He deserves the very best. An Igloo is just a cooler. His passed the grizzly test. He doesn't have any bears on his bench. With a $300. cooler within his reach, his cooler weighs five times more than the Igloo chest. With 10 pounds of ice in his he has to lug twenty-five pounds. With ten pounds on the Igloo , there's 14 pounds to lug. An Igloo wouldn't do. I'd save too much and be uncool too.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Light and Life  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dungeon Warden, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about nature's beauty in the sunlight.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Light is pouring through adorable flowers and leaves to unite in praise of reflected sunlight. You might consider painting a picture for the flowers and leaves, rather than telling about the adorable flowers and leaves, ie, show not tell.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poet needs patience and adjustment for his lack of pride at work.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet feels that in his new role he doesn't know enough about the jobs of others. He'll be in his prime when he is accepting jobs where he's known for ideas and knowledge and can show people how to make a huge profit for the company. Until then, he'll have to settle being a person with an unglamorous job, one where he is not seasoned. Make history later.


*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Try reading your poem aloud to get a smooth flow of words. Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Letter To GOD  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your writing pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is a letter to God, asking Him to lead the human race.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: I take your letter seriously. We ask God to communicate with the leaders of different countries and point out to them that we are not responsible on Earth. Our lakes are drying out, our trees are being cut down. Our bodies of water are being polluted with litter. Our Earth is suffering with global warming. If man didn't live on earth, we would have a paradise here. People are not capable of communicating with others. We need you to run our earth for us. Please help us. We love you and we know you love us.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
IWell-written. Good logical development.. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Claimed  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Oliver, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is one of unobtainable beauty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Her deep grey eyes attract him. Her voice is a soft, tender tone. Her Raven black hair is woven in soft gentle plaits, like water over a gentle fall. His desire of her claims her in unrequited love as he reaches out with his desperate grasp.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Garden Statue  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. {c:orange} Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem tells a story about a garden statue.
*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: The poet feels the statue is very ordinary and grey, yet he is compelled to purchase it. He discovers it is an angel, cradling an object close to her breast. He later displays the Angel in his yard. His wife complains of such a display, says she cannot imagine what the ornately cast angel is cradling. You cannot tell what the cradled object is.

Later it is time for Santa to bring exquisite, lavish presents, except for the statue, which the poet can't capture. The angel statue is sad with head bowing. There is a message: We've gotten too commercial when we cannot appreciate a simple statue that represents love of others, especially family. Time to put real constraints on gifts. Focus on an evening church service and draw names for simple Christmas gifts. Up the status of the statue and lower the status of the lavish gifts. The writer might want his family to analyze the meaning of Christmas at his home.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public eviewing pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
A majestic unicorn encounters a talking acorn with no brain

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: A majestic, stately unicorn strolled down a wooded forest lane. Moans came from a magical acorn, who said he had yet to discover his brain. His words: "I have a quaint home. I warn strangers of the fox." The unicorn thought he was caring and nice. Both tirelessly made new friends with wondrous beginnings and ends. Neither had an abundance of brain power.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
IRhyme pattern is consistent. Description is vivid. was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of WHO AM I  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Alka, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles,, which I found on the. public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
A daughter's grief is sensitively explained so others may understand.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: This article explains social mores and traditions. A daughter does not own her parents' home. When she marries, she will become part of her spouse's family's home. Her brother is the real member of his parents' home. As he gets older, he thinks parents are a burden, is disrespectful of parents and shouts at them. A daughter has a desire to accompany them and cook them meals with love. Society's laws say daughters are not eligible for these kindnesses. Daughters have two families and are submissive. Daughters are the cutest dolls and dress up family relations.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions: You will one day NOT you, will one day
do the social laws NOT does the social laws
truly NOT truely

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story poem has a fabulous story to tell. Listen!

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: Right away I'm sitting on the edge of my seat, wanting to be entertained by the poet's story poem. At midnight the poet took Rusty and Pepper on their evening walk. There was a definite chill in the air, the first since March. The reflection of the full moon serves as a neighborhood nightlight, which caused the droplets on the lawn to sparkle and fade. The sound of a distant train is muffled by the nearby serenade of the frogs and crickets. What a glorious relief from a sticky summer.even though Fall is still weeks in coming. Mosquitos and migratory birds, lawns and leaves are told it is time to prepare for the change in seasons.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed free verse. Well-written with a logical conclusion. Good use of simile, eg as a full moon serves as a neighborhood nightlight. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This love poem describes a man in love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet says his beloved is his love, his life, his all. She is there at his request and call. She will always be there for him. He will love her more with each new day. His love will stand the test of time. He loves her more every day.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent, Otto form. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of "Love"  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi T.L. Finch, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes love as an entity.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Love is the heart's mender and quick to forgive. Love's gentle beat is there when lovers meet. Love comforts the lovers in sadness. It hears them in times of need. It's a spell when lovers kiss. Love never misses its cue.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions for Stanzas 3 and 4:
its seed NOT it's seed
its cue NOT it's cue

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Review of GOALS!!!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ember, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The writer's goals for the week include expressing her imagination and other items of creativity.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: In the area of art the writer plans to draw five objects. To keep her creativity flowing, she plans to write two articles. In the literary arena she wants to finish her book before it's due at the library. Help at home, wash the dog, and other chores. This young lady has a very well-rounded set of goals which she should continue developing. I believe in the process of setting goals for a period of time and getting input from other associates. In five years you could have a very professional process that can amount to productivity. Best wishes.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written and organized. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story poem is about rain, a blue jay and an unexpected visitor.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: There was heavy rain day after day until today morning dawned cloudless and sunny. The poet had neglected filling his feeders. There were birds galore on his lawn and a bluejay landed at his feet. The bluejay flapped his wings aggressively in front of his face. He tried to get the poet to stop walking. Much to the poet's surprise, a muscular snake, a deadly, aggressive water moccasin, slithered the poet's way. The poet took two steps backward, took an ax and be-headed the snake. The snake was after a squirrel or bird for dinner. The poet knew in his heart that the bluejay had saved his life. The poet saved several animals that day and might have saved his own life too.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written with a logical conclusion. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: Stanza 6: in NOT to

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GerMac

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