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Review of Birdbath Beauty  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi ConnieAnn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewers pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of nature's sweetness.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Baby bluebirds enjoy their birdbath in the heavy raindrops, but dash for cover in warm houses when they feel drenched. Mama bluebird is happy to see them out of the rain. Clouds are reflected upside down. The title for your poem, "Birdbath Beauty", is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of childish playfulness. Most memorable: Clouds reflected upside down.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mary Ann I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the memory of your husband.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You say you're lonely since he left. You cried for a year, and played your songs. You feel his presence when you awake. Your children help you through this devastation. You long for his embrace. Until he calls you to join him by his side, then you will once again be his bride.

The title of your poem "Without You I'm Lost" is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of sadness yet hope for your future. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: You'll wait for him to call you to join him by his side when you will be his bride.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the clouds bringing the storm in. If you're going to see the forest for the trees, you need to stop what you're doing and watch.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem "Don't Let the Dance Go Unnoticed" is very appropriate. To me it means if you don't look, you'll never see the beauty described in your poem. Your title hooked me right away. I enjoyed reading your positively lovely imagery. I easily visualized what you had to say. There is an underlying tone in your poem of an ability to paint words in the sky with imagery. I felt the clouds were bringing in a storm, as I evaluated what was said.. Perfect day for a glowing fireplace as you watch what is going on outside.

Gowns billowing with the gowns of a celestial waltz caress the deepening sapphire skies. As the winds whispered ethereal music, the clouds danced.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Description is vivid and expressive, eg the winds whispered ethereal music. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Christmas tree  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the tragedy in the world of Christmas trees.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem "My Prejudice Which I Freely Admit", is very appropriate and hooks the reader right away. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of raising a question of our treatment of the environment. Areas for improvement: N/A

In your haiku you speak of the beautiful Christmas tree which is now gone forever. Your poem brings to my mind the idea of not cutting down the Christmas tree, or buying a living tree which can be re-planted or even buying an artificial tree which has some desirable benefits, thereby saving the Christmas tree spoken of in your poem. I think you're justified in bringing up this issue.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Hands  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi. Cheshire, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of remarkable hands.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your title "Hands" is appropriate but could be more creative. Put on the creativity hat and let your thoughts flow. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of iimagination of a person who can't get enough painting imagery. Nice job. Areas for improvement: You might think of the number of times you started a line with the word hand. If I were painting this picture, I would try to express the word hand in different parts of the lines.

Hands are storied. They can build, mold, shape, and speak. Hands can reach for heaven and believe in make-believe. Thoughts explode as fingers touch pen to paper. Inner emotions become reality as heart and soul become one. Hands are taken for granted for their life giving talent. Bent and cracked they are silenced from the song they used to sing. Hands caress and love.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid, eg A finger can move mountains or search unknown heavens. Effective imagery: soaring mosaics of sky and water. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Seeking Oneself  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of fears and rejection while growing up.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your title "Seeking Oneself" is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of answering the question Who am I? Areas for improvement: N/A.
Most memorable: Finding out that your true friends never rejected you.

You wanted to be the ultimate gift for both friend and foe. In school being part of a clique was not foolish. You feared the clique's disapproval as well as the opportunity. Your close friends never rejected you. You grew up, took a breath and moved on. The need was gone by then.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. Good choice of words and smooth cadence. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of And so, it begins  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tide, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the snow and rain.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title for your poem, "And So It Begins" is appropriate. You enjoy the day and hear the rain still pattering. We now have a fresh clean neighborhood. The snow is on its way. You've picked the perfect day to write. You can look out the window, hear the rain, see the snow if it gets here, see God's earth and be inspired to write. Perfect! Now you can wrap your brain around each thought. Areas for improvement:N/A. I enjoyed reading your poem.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Star Stuck  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi RainbowFish, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of catching a falling star from the star's perspective.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem is appropriate, "Star Struck", which is literally tue,but who struck whom? I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it was whimsical and playful, but also serious. Caress for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: You found yourself in the cold, clutching grip of the girl who thought Ibwas pretty.

You were plucked from the sky and you hurtled to earth. The girl who thought you were pretty gripped you. Your chest caved inward. You don't want to melt your frigid captor.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Consonance is found in your poem. Personification is used effectively with the star being given human traits. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
Spelling: also NOT all so

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Dr. M. C. Gupta, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a picture for painting.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem is fairly appropriate, "War Cemetery". It seems like an unemotional and matter-of-fact title for the remains of soldiers taken from the battlefield. I enjoyed reading the vividness of your poem. There is an underlying tone of sadness that runs through your poem. Areas of improvement: Capitalization/punctuation. Most memorable: The visitor was advised to be proud, but don't weep.

Silence is all around as one respectfully grieves at the unknown soldier's grave. There is a solemn memorial for those who died for their country. They wreaked havoc with their guns and lances. Now in Mother Nature's lap, they are lulled to a gentle sleep. Visitor, take care. Be proud but don't weep.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid, eg Their souls witnessed in the field a veritable death dance. Rhyme pattern is consistent. Punctuation and capitalization could be an issue. There are specific rules for punctuating poetry. If a poetic thought covers two lines, there is no punctuation and no capital letter ar the beginning of the next line, eg see stanza 1 below. Language usage : lances and guns, NOT singular lance and gun. I was not really distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Stanza 1 Suggestion: To make a complete sentence in this stanza add "is" line 1.
Serene silence is all around,
Gentle wind, rustling of leaves,
Cuckoo calls in the distance
as one respectfully grieves.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Turtle, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your article paints a very fine picture of the analysis of reading a poem.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Too often I read information that doesn't really help me because it is just a list of generic questions, such as those presented at the end of your article, just a list to jog your memory a little. I found that the analysis and logical discussion throughout most of your article was put into a lvery helpful format for both reading and reviewing and eventually writing better poetry. Thank you! I am not going into lengthy discussion, but your analysis will be most helpful. I even learned a new word or two: synecdoche. I tend to want to be succinct; I might be sacrificing some insight by leaning heavily on a succinct approach.

Your title is appropriate, but on WDC writing.com, I think it would help to include reviewing as well as reading. You spoke of using a pencil. What about technology? I don't mark up the poem itself, but I take notes on the computer or on my notepad. I'm a retired educator, so I'd like to mark 'em up. Not practical for me. For others like instructors, yes! I thoroughly enjoyed reading your article; I'm going to make it my Bible. There is an underlying tone of academia and practicality, which combination I fully enjoyed. Areas for improvement: N/A other than a minor point or two above. I'm thrilled to discover your lovely, perfect article.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Day of Rest  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
HI Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages.. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a day of relaxation to clear your mind of daily stress.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A day of rest consists of a soft cuddly pillow, a warm cozy blanket or tidying up. Simply, it is a way of lounging at home at a slower pace to clear your head of the stress of daily living. You earn your seventh day of rest like God did when He created Earth. Only after supreme effort do you get to relax and lounge within the confines of your home. L

The title of your poem "A Day of Rest" is appropriate for today's workers and those who are familiar with the Bible. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of a well-rounded lifestyle. Areas for improvement: N/A. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Lauren.  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Mary Ann, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of Lauren who still gives the same big hugs after all these years.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You knew her as a young girl. She ave big hub
gp's then. Bedtime dames and she wasn't ready. She would shout and scream. At times she was spanked. Now grown, she has her own home. You, Nanny, visit her from time to time. She loves you and you love her too. Not much has changed your relationship.

The title for your poem is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of bonding, which continues to later life. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: The tether came out occasionally. In my family we referred to the tether as the cat o' nine tails. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Good use of metaphor, eg the tether came out.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of What Goes Around  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review poems. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of life, what you reap is what you sow.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your poem reminds me of an old adage: "What goes around, comes around." We should never look down our noses at anyone. All people, including the poor, the disabled, the intellectually challenged, the vagrants and more have a special ability in some way and should be treated with respect. Another old adage: "But for the Grace of God, there go I." We could be superior and have it all until a fateful day takes it all away. Arthur suddenly after a fall was found penniless. He had nothing. He learned a lesson the hard way.

The title of your poem "What Goes Around" is appropriate" and gives a hint of what's to come. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of didactic instruction. Most memorable: When Arthur fell and found himself with nothing. Areas for improvement: N/A. Very well-written. The point of your poem is well-taken.

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Description is vivid and expressive. Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture that gratitude is an attitude at Thanksgiving or other times.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Thanksgiving Day is the happiest holiday of your childhood. Grandfather knew how to pray. You silently counted your blessings. You removed the turkey, stuffing, cranberry sauce and ham. Then you put the food away.

The title of your poem is "An Abundant Thanksgiving Box". Your title sounds similar to restaurant boxes that are purchased. No-one prepares the dinner. You just remove the food and put the box away when finished. The meal is delicious, but not prepared by Grandmother, which I can't help preferring. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there was an underlying tone of contemporary holidays plus a Grandfather who knew how to pray. In fact, the last line of each stanza is that refrain of Grandfather. Areas for improvement: You might think about the rhyme pattern in your kyrielle poem. The rhyme pattern is consistent, except for Stanza 1. Food and childhood do not rhyme. Rhyme is according to sound, not spelling. Your rhyme patterns are quite different from what is shown in the note at the bottom of the page.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of My Project  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of projects in general.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Experience guides us with steady hands, responding to people's needs. The pieces are assembled. Now create the plan with closure in the distance. Each detail is mastered. Execution now occurs. Tasks are managed with resources and pride. Approval is the last item needed to move the project along.

The title of your poem is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as I liked the underlying tone of planning and organizing. Areas for improvement: N/A. I understand what you are writing about, as I have done forward planning myself.

Rhyme pattern is consistent. Nicely done.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dr Gupta, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the lingering memories of love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your once beloved's memory lingers in your heart. You sang of songs of love in the past. Now she and you have company through your poetry only.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "Lingering Memories". I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of nostalgia for the past. I can identify with that. Most memorable: singing songs of love in days gone by. Areas for improvement: N/A

Your rhyme pattern is consistent, abcb with a good syllabic count. Your description is vivid and expressive.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of what it's like to suck on a peach seed.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A hummingbird flitted from flower to flower, sucking the nectar of life. Is this how God felt at the moment of creation when He proclaimed BE and the primordial atom exploded . Did He laugh at the eons of time, the creation of stars, planets, creatures, civilizations? Then light and life were spread through the darkness and no existence.

The title of your poem is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there was an underlying tone of inquisitiveness and research. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Consonance is used in your title. Metaphor is used effectively, eg consuming the nectar of life. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, sthey are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Bear, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of Grandma's down home cookin'!

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Grandma's old apron hung to her knees. The kitchen aroma sat you down. Nothing but smiles as we dove in. Mashed potatos, gravy, fried chicken, collards and fresh okra melted in your mouth. Corn on the cob with butter from their cow, peach cobbler and still nothing said. After dinner we talked about old times awhile.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "Down Home Cookin'". I can just taste it all. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of folksiness in your poem. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of New Year Dreaming  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Connieanne, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
New year dreaming is special to writers.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You think of all the places you'd like to go on this Earth. The Taj Mahal to Big Ben in London and many others. If you can't go today, you can travel through your muse in your mind. Remember your mind can take you anywhere at anytime. You'll be transported by words to lands our minds suggest.

The title is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your lovely poem and found it to have a perfect cadence and flow of words. There is an underlying tone of traveling practically in your mind, just in case you can't travel in the real world. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of life and how life is like a ping pong game.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Life is like a huge ping pong game. It falls off the table or goes into the net. Unforced errors and huge slams determine the winner. Accumulate enough points and you're the winner. Lose enough and you have to make them up next match. You feel fortunate to have played In the game of life. We must breathe and feel lucky sometimes.

The title of your poem, "Life is Like a Ping Pong Match", is appropriate and says what your poem is. I enjoyed reading your poem. There was an underlying spirited, friendly competition. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Simile used well, eg like a ping pong game. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rainbow Fish, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a house that's not really up to snuff.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Presents topple to the pot and someone's Santa sits. Santa doesn't deny the milk: He guzzles it and sneaks back the way of smoke. He leaves no presents, just a note, asking the family to leave him proper foods next time.

Santa is not pleased with this family. Proof accorded by his not leaving any presents, only a note which says to leave him proper foods next time. He feels shorted. The title of your poem is "Generous but Ravenous". This title seems inappropriate. Santa didn't show generosity and neither did the family. You might want to put on your creativity hat and change the title a little. I enjoyed reading your Scrooge-like poem. There is an underlying tone of being niggardly. Areas for improvement: N/A.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Consonance is used well, eg stumbles, slobbering. Rhyme pattern is consistent. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Skies of Blue  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Intuey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of nature's beauty, which is all around us, especially under blue skies. The

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The birds take flight brought by the morning sun. Bushes sway and flowers dance to Earth's rhythmic sound. Life awakens for another day. The Universe holds answers I am never told. Love shiness from above. I stand in awe as I take in the view. Such beauty under blue skies.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "Under Blue Skies". Nature's beauty is bivouac, especially when the skies are blue. I enjoyed reading your book. There is an underlying tone of wonder for nature's beauty. Areas for improvement. N/A

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Your poem has a consistent pattern, except in Stanzas 4 and 5. Metaphor is nicely used, eg softness of light. Consonance is used well, eg sway side to side. Description is vivid, eg flowers dance. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Two Worlds  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Turtle, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a cry for escape from two worlds.

Q*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You asked to be taken from these wasted lands with concrete fields to the forest which commands the sky and the seeds of growth and the songs of spring. You ask that they sing you to heaven to wild fields and flowers. You ask that you are not shackled to iron trees. You wish to be granted your last command. May the works of God be all you see.

The title of your poem "Two Worlds" is appropriate and describes the comparison between concrete and God's gifts. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of torment by one world and peacefulness in the other world. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Description is vivid. Imagery is found throughout your poems. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of I can’t go home  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a canvas for the picture painted of homesickness.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You want to go home and no longer roam. You wish you could to see your friends. Was it really that good? If you did go home, there would be no more worries, and loneliness, just joy. You're not sure if you should. You just want to smile.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "I can't go home". You want to. Should you? I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of sentimentality for days gone by. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Rhyme pattern is consistent, except Stanzas 2 and 3. In this form poem you've used the quadrilew. It is complicated and interesting. Thank you for giving the technical aspects for the quadrilew. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Doom of a Boo  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Waddle, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a ghost who doesn't know Luigi.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Boo learned the hard way as he watched doom unfold. A man came to foil King Boo and his evil plan. Boo greeted Luigi at the door, but he didn't know what other ghosts knew. Boo thought Luigi was nice, but he was wrong about the man with the vacuum. Boo was sucked into the machine. He learned the hard way: Get caught in the vacuum and you go into the picture frame.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "The Doom of a Boo", as it tells about the downfall of a ghost. I enjoyed reading your poem, but I had some confusion as to the point of your poem. I think you meant to say, when you're doomed in the vacuum, you go into the picture frame, which means you're plain ol' framed or setup for the kill. There is an underlying tone of tom foolery in your piece. The poet enjoys fooling his readers. Areas for improvement: Rhyme pattern in Stanza 4. Make your message more clear.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent except for Stanza 4. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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