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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Elycia, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a song/poem about life, nature and people.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Nature and people are captured in your song. It seems that nature does well, but people cause some problems, eg littering and burning life around us and harming those we're supposed to protect.. There we stand staring at the wall and hopeless to get what we wanted. I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of appreciation of nature.

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Nice inline rhyming, eg falling leaves and bitter trees. Your description is vivid, eg Water runs beneath our feet through the scattered rocks. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Kelly Adored  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Jai, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture for Kelly, someone beautiful.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You speak of a beautiful girl gliding up the steps and describe her with slender hips and dove white breasts with virgin lips. I can easily visualize a young girl looking like this. No wonder the cricket drums rhythm when she's around. I enjoyed reading your poem and found it appealed to my senses of vision and sound.

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Very excellent pacing and cadence. Nice job. Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Effective use of metaphor, eg adorned in sunlight, weds the day and clothes her soul. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Random Poetry  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi Rebecca, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for you account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the difficulties in life.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You have compared the positive and negative sides of love. Sadness creeps in to your thoughts of love always. There are trips to the hospital, blood draws and painful injections. In the area of money, the rich are in; poor get the can. Our country needs help, not lies and hatred. You speak in a random way about things that are bothering you. I enjoyed reading your poem from the standpoint of listening to things generally bothering you. There is an underlying tone of depression and concern. The title of your poem "Random Poetry" is fairly appropriate in that there is no particular order to your concerns, just random. Areas for improvement: Focus on happiness and associate with happy people, eg your pastor, perhaps.

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Your poem is Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jeannie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes reviewing and why it is enjoyable to the author.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You stumbled across WDC and you've been hooked on the website for quite some time now. You truly appreciate an author's work and always have your favorite part. If something stands out in an author's work in your opinion, you'd like the author to know it. You have developed a personalized reviewing strategy. You also took notice of how an author wanted to be reviewed. You also appreciate an attractive display, eg with emoticoms and color. You have given extensive information on reviewing authors in Pat's garden and the Showering Acts of Joy group. In-depth reviews and individual attention are the names of the game. I enjoyed reading your article, as there is an underlying tone of concern and professionalism. The title of your piece "Why I Like To Review" is appropriate in that you are sharing the happiness you get. Areas for improvement: You might try organizing your thoughts with a general thought then 3 or 4 details to support your general thought with transition sentences between paragraphs.
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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Par 3: authors use NOT authors uses.


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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Intuey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes how music soothes the savage soul.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your poem is very easily visualized. I can just see you floating in a raft with not a care in the world, music soothing you and your savage soul. The beat of the music allows you to soar with the eagles.. Words from the music explode brick walls of your psyche that no therapist could penetrate. I enjoyed reading your poem immensely, as there is an underlying tone of peacefulness and privacy. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: You floating in a raft with music soothing your savage soul.

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Your poem is Unrhymed verse and very well written. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Wenston, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes early morning mists hovering over bean fields.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I especially liked your many metaphors in your poem. Fog is a blanket to sleeping earth. Sun rises and the hot breath of the day warms the frozen hands of the night that move to a rhythm too fast for snapping fingers. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of intensive labor to accomplish the tasks. Your title "Fog Over Bean Fields" is appropriate in that the fog over the bean fields provides warmth to keep the beans nourished. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: your lovely descriptive metaphors.

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Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Your metaphors are effectively written, eg trees wave their good mornings, fog is a blanket for earth. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jeff, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes what it's like to build sand castles in the sand.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I have watched people build sand castles. They truly look very complicated. The builder needs manual dexterity for the tiny pieces of sand he drips along the castle for facia finish. A blue sky and vibrant sun definitely helps seal the castle together. What a gorgeous product. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of appreciation of an artistic endeavvor. The title of your poem is appropriate. Areas for I mprovement: N/A. My favorite part: The competition is keen. The poet will be back for another competition next year.

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The form poem is a tri-fall. Rhyme pattern is abcabc, 6 lines in one stanza for three stanzas. Creates a fine flow of words. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Forsaken  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Slaad11, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the forsaken.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of repentance. You questioned your lowly human nature and wonder: Lord, why have you forsaken me? With your free will you are now helpless to anger and sin. YHe gives you love and forgiveness when you forget self and look above. He gave you a free will and His Son so you would know you've already won. The question should be: Why have I forsaken you? Areas for improvement: NA. My favorite part: when you finally realize you have forsaken the Lord.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Poem is made up of couplets. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Young love  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi R. T., I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes young love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The moon many times brightens the night for lovers. With the setting in place, the senses of lovers move them to say I love you. I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of love and promises. The title of your poem "Young Love" is appropriate. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Raft  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Barefoot Bob, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poem provides a canvas to paint a metaphorical picture down turbulent waters.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A raft and its waters were wed one soft and sunny day. The current of love tugged. It was too late to know who unleashed malignant tides beneath serenity's shady mask. Very well-written and loaded with metaphor and vivid description. As the tides calm, it's time to challenge again at dawn. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of the rough waters of life. The title of your poem "The Raft" is appropriate. Areas of improvement: N/A. My favorite part: Your magnificent metaphors.

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Poetic convention of consonance is used. Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent for lines 2 and 4. Stanzas 1 and 2 rhyme occurred in all 4 lines. Good inl-line rhyme, eg From limpid pools and wiser rules. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:

Stanza 1: it's NOT it's.

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Review of Fireflies  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chazzz, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a childhood memory.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your childhood must have been adventurous; I had that thought as I envisioned you catching fireflies and putting them in a jar, thinking you had luminaries as you meandered home at dusk. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of exploring. The title of your poem "Fireflies" in that fireflies is the focus of your poem. Areas for mprovement: N/A. My favorite part: catching fireflies.

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Description is vivid, eg as darkness envelops the grass. Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Metaphor is noteworthy, eg, as darkness drowns the house. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: envelop NOT envelope

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Review of Two Lovers  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This kyrielle poem describes lovers stealing a kiss in Central Park.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
When in love, you have all kinds of courage. The future looks brighter than ever and gives you Hope of proceeding. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of love makes life interesting. The title of your poem "Two Lovers" is fairly appropriate in that you have found the setting for a couple. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Kyrielle poem has eight syllables. Your rhyme pattern is consistent. Nice pace which is upbeat, eight syllables in a line. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a meeting with your current girlfriend.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
What can I say about your love so I don't interfere with your intimacy with your beloved? She has taught you about love, honesty and courtesy. You separate, knowing you'll see each other soon, but it seems like an eternity. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of happiness. The title of your poem "A Poem For You, My True Love" is appropriate in that it shows your enthusiasm and respect for this woman.Areas for Improvement: Stanza 2, line 7 should be your NOT you.

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Description is vivid, eg our fire, Ilove, and attraction is so unwavering, so intense. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of For John  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chazzz, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes John, while looking for employment.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your beloved is John, unemployed and searching for employment. A laptop, Internet and the phone are not his tools right now. He needs to work and needs to find a job, but he loves his free time endeavor and puts any money he has in it. Cherished are his writing of poems and songs. When he can, he will. Your poem reminds me of the parents of a friend of mine who scrimped and saved until they had pennies to put in their classic book collection, one a month. They went without dinners, but years later they had a set of books they treasured. You may be in the same position with John's poems and songs in the future. Good luck. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of precious ownership of songs and poems and a job too. This title is appropriate. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Allegiance  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This patriotic historical describes our American flag.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
This is one fabulous patriotic poem. It earns a 5 rating easily in my book. Just a comment or two: Stanza 2: any need to mention Betsy Ross here? Stanza 4: any mention of the title of the song The Star-Spangled Banner" desired? In your Notes section, in 1954 "under God" was added to the Pledge of Allegiance". I remember. As a sixth grader I got teary-eyed the first time we added "under God" I get teary-eyed to this day when I say "under God".

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Your rhyme pattern is consistent. Metaphor is well-known, traditional and effective, eg the colors are retired. History and patriotism is magnificent. This one couldn't be better. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This acrostic poem describes New Year's resolutions.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I have never been crazy about New Year's resolutions. I always seem to fail with my resolutions even if I'm successful for awhile. Even if I succeed, I eventually go back to my old ways, or just forget the resolution. I see you and I agree on the outcome of a resolution, so why participate? Making a short term resolution would be more sensible, perhaps lose 10 pounds in 4 months. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of "Who am I kidding?" The title of your poem "New Year's Resolutions" is fairly appropriate.

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Your acrostic poem spells out New Year's Resolutions. Each line has eight syllables. Meter was not considered. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: New Year's NOT New Years

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a canvas for the painting of a picture.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You'd like your memory fixed so you can remember what you just said, your glasses are perched on your head and your keys aren't lost. You remind me of a cross between Bob Hope and Phyllis Diller. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of humor/reality.The title "Everlasting Thoughts" is appropriate in that you would like everlasting memory rather than everlasting gifts. My Favorite Part: Your many admissions in the poem. Areas of improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Poem tells a humorous story. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of an outing with the kids.n

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
After typical bickering of where they would go for the day, the family decided to go to Zombie Park. I feel preliminary bickering is necessary to family decision making. They were frightened by a zombie who had no chin and asked them to fill in a survey giving their name and address. They hurriedly left, enough zombie. They agreed they wouldn't tell mom about the frightening day. I enjoyed reading your humorous poem, as there is an underlying tone of family bonding. The title "A Visit to Zombie Park" is appropriate as that is what occurred. Areas of improvement: I think you can work on being succinct. My Favorite Part: I can identify with family bickering. Write on!

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Your poem tells a story, which I always enjoy. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your humorous poem, which I found in your portfolio. (I'm still snooping around.) Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This humorous poem paints a picture of your canine Valentine.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
If you're looking for your true love, get a dog: She'll love and appreciate you forever and listens to what you say. I enjoyed reading your poem and laughed all the way through it. There is an underlying tone of humor and animal love. The title of your poem "The Perfect Valentine" is appropriate as that's what she is. Areas for improvement: N/A. My Favorite Part: She listens to you.

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Well-written in the humorous vein. Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your humorous poems, which I found in your portfolio. (I've been snoop in' around there for awhile this morning! 😀 Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This humorous poem paints a picture of aging wisdom. Are we there yet?

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Senior jokes are the best around. This is better than Mad Comic Books, remember? I love how you predict weather with your knees and get credit for being a sleuth. Your ear, eye/shorter arms, deeper panting and stay awake jokes leave me giggling like a young girl. You must not be quite a senior or where's your wisdom? I'm the one with the wisdom! I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of humor and looking into the future. The title for your poem "The Wisdom of Years" is appropriate in that wisdom comes with years, especially if you have enough of them. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: Your knees predict the weather.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Metaphor is effective, eg the hill of time. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
His Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the story of Cookie Monster and Mark.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Cookie Monster, the miniature poodle, went looking for cookies to munch. He followed the crumbs and found Mark with his bag of cookies in the park all alone. Cookie Monster stayed by Mark all night long. In the morning Cookie Monster was awarded with a great, big cookie flavored bone. I enjoyed reading your story poem as there is an underlying tone of loyalty and adventure between Mark and the dog. The title"Cookie Monster the Miniature Poodle" is fairly appropriate, but it doesn't give any hint about what is to happen. My Favorite Part: Cookie Monster's protection of Mark.

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Well-written, delightful story poem. Cookie Monster and Mark must be quite a pair. Rhyme pattern is consistent, except in stanza three. You might want to check it out. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
For clarity you might try punctuating, i.e. Cookie Monster, miniature poodle,

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Review of To Run Dry  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Minja, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of writer's block. Letters become words just like snowflakes twirling around before landing on the ground.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and your beautiful metaphors and imagery. There is an underlying tone of frustration with writer's block and wanting to wish it away. The title "To Run Dry" is very appropriate in that you've said exactly what happens with writer's block. My Favorite Part: like snowflakes, they are ably dancing the last dance. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Nice use of metaphors, eg eternal serenity. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Quiet Fire  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jace, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your prose pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This prose piece paints a picture about a quiet fire.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
There is an underlying tone of.casting your fate to the wind in your prose piece. so I can't say I completely enjoyed your piece,, as I am more cautious than that. I must be missing a piece of the puzzle, perhaps some background. How could children dive with safety into the leaves while screaming with delight? They must have dove into the pile of leaves a hundred years later. Before that it would seem unsafe. My Favorite part: Those which provided life and shelter to many now have one task to fulfill. What is the message of your poem?

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Turtle, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes differences between a house and a home.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I like the differences you describe between a house and a home. A house is a physical structure; a home also provides warmth and beauty. A house gives safety, but the nuances of a home aren't there. Many times a man notices that a woman's touch is not present in the house. For a house to be a home, a woman's touch helps. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of security and safety. The title, "This House, Our Home is very appropriate in that it alludes to the differences. Areas for improvement: N/A. My Favorite part: A house is a place to hang your hat. A home is a place to hang your heart. This is a 5 rating in my book.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of No Pity  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Elisa I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a poet's feeling that she is a frustrated, bad poet.

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You say you think you can let go of the hurt you've felt on these lands. The last of your stink has floated into the clouds. You never have been good fighting against the crowds. So long, stinkers! are your parting words. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of disgust and throwing up your hands. The title of your poem "No Pity" is appropriate in that it seems you have none for yourself or any other members. Areas for improvement: I admire your courage and ability to make a decision. Perhaps a few days of rest and a fresh outlook will be helpful. Best wishes.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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