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#4309310

Review of Pass

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

Hi Shawn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem was written as an assignment for a class.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem; it took me back to my high school days. You seem like a very honest person. Grammar: I've never written one NOT I've never wrote one. The word wrote would be past tense or with the word have it is still incorrect. Have written means you began writing poems in the past, but you haven't ended the act of writing yet. Your poem is Unrhymed verse.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4309239

Review of The Speedy Rat and the Slow Turtle

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Rated: E

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Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.publc review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a fable of a rat, the younger, and a turtle, the elder.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I get your message: Never quit! I enjoyed reading your poem, as you made a good point. The rhyme in your poem is consistent. The rhythm in your poem has a good cadence. The description is expressive,. eg, rat has miscues another never erases, while the elder turtle never stalls.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4309099

Review of With Faith Miracles Still Occur

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Rated: E

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Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of faith and miracles.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your poem is just exquisite and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, from the refrains that began questioning God to the strong belief you have and are thankful for, upon seeing miracles. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. There is a very good rhythm. Description in your poem is expressive, eg the wind howling at the cloud veiled moon. Very well written poem.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4309095

Review of Under The Stars

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Rated: E

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Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's beloved, instant love.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem of love and your beautifully written villanelle. You've done a great job explaining the rhyme pattern of a villanelle. The rhythm has a smooth flow of words, The description of your poem is vivid, eg, We lie in the dunes;, hear the sandpiper's cries. Well written.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4309092

Review of My Little Star

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Rated: E

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Hi Jean, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poem paints a picture of the poet's firstborn.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found a mother's deep love for her daughter very touching. I am retired, look back to my youth and wish I had four children, not two, of these wonderful creatures...children. Nice statement made. The rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. Polishing your rhyme pattern will make it more consistent. There is a smooth flow of words. Description in your poem is very expressive, eg God had plucked for me a star.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308887

Review of In Transit

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Rated: E

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Hi Logan, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints picture of a short journey.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem about a short journey. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. There is a nice flow of words. Good use of metaphor,eg, the ghost of you just stood and stared.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308850

Review of Of Flies and Sweet Tea

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the benefits of sweet tea.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about sweet tea. I was reminded of the things that go with sweet tea: energy and summertime. Your poem is Unrhymed. Rhythm flows naturally. Oh! Those nasty flies! No issue with poetic technique.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308849

Review of Travelin Minstrel

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Rated: E

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Hi T. L. Finch, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, , which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes Bob Dylan's contributions to the world of poetry and music.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem, recollecting the days of Bob Dylan from the 60's. I remember his stories of the toil of the common man and his superior talent. The rhyme pattern of your poem is consistent. Your cadence is good and there is a smooth flow of words. Description in your poem is expressive, eg, soft spoken young man with unruly hair. Truly a legend.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308647

Review of Education La La Land

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hi GreyPoeticSky, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes the writer's experience in the public school system.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your article about your experience with public school education. I am a retired educator myself so I have some sympathy for your situation. I taught mainly at the middle school level, so I have no background at the high school level. I think there is some validity to what you have to say, especially with regard to test scores and disadvantaged children. You can't undo children's backgrounds, as you only have them six hours a day five days a week. I'd do the best I could in your situation. Frustrating, for sure. Well-written article. Best wishes on your job search. I have no language issues with your article.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308645

Review of What Am I?

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Rated: E

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Hi Intuey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of one of nature's grand shows.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem of a shooting star, one of nature's most brilliant shows. I like your concept of what am I? The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent, and you have a smooth flow of words. The description in your poem is vivid, eg, a trail of fiery light.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308643

Review of Unpredictable Pet Stream

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Rated: E

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Hi Don Two, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems,, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This picture paints a picture describing that there is a serious change in the pet stream.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I fully enjoyed reading your poem and its nuances. . Talk about raining cats and dogs. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. There is a good cadence and smooth flow of words. The description of your poem is quite expressive, eg some ominous thunderheads rumbled around.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308363

Review of Gachoner

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Rated: E

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Hi Brokenhunter, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for our March Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a fairy creature from Irish folklore.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem of Irish folklore, especially the wonderful Irish brogue. What fun reading for St. Patrick's Day or any day! I found the background information was very helpful. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Very good rhythm and flow of words. Suggestion: ne'er listen ye to words so dear NOT ne'er listen you to words so dear. You might want to check the referent for to gachoner man, while tending sheep. No other issues. Well written poem.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308285

Review of The Howlin' in the Gloamin'

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Rated: ASR

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Hi Cerulean Son, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review one of your poems for our March Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a lesson from a wise Irishman.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I truly enjoyed reading your poem and found the message and brogue were delightful. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. The cadence is perfect and you have a smooth flow of words. The description of your poem is wonderfully expressive. eg, me lids have barely met their mates when me peace was broken. No issues with poetic technique. Happy St. Patrick's Day.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308272

Review of Dingle in the Distance

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Rated: 13+

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Hi HOOves, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for our March Review Raid. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a trip to the Dingle Peninsula in Ireland.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I truly enjoyed reading your very sensitive poem about the Dingle Peninsula in Ireland and your mother's sweet, dying face, reminding you Christmas joy is "not in getting, but deep in giving". The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. The cadence and smooth flow of words is delightful. The description in your poem is vividly expressed, eg Will I ever return to this southern town, softly singing, soothing this enduring frown. Your poem is loaded with description and moves like silk. Thank you for this St. Patrick's Day gift. Here's to a rainbow and a pot of gold on his day. No issues of poetic technique. Happy St. Patrick's Day.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308183

Review of Poetry From the Mind

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Rated: E

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H Bloodrebel, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the hand the poet has been dealt. N

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I am reviewing your poem entitled "The Hand". It is very cleverly written and makes a good statement. Description in your poem is expressive, eg, I seem to have been dealt such a hand, just in the wrong game. Rrhyme is sprinkled through your poem. There is a smooth flow of words in your poem.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4308040

Review of The City

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Rated: E

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Hi Donald, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the atrocities created in Flint, Michigan by leaded pipes and polluted water.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You have done a good job reporting the atrocities in Flint, Michigan. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. There is a nice cadence and flow of words, Description in your poem is vivid, eg, the stench, creating madness.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307912

Review of The Bridge

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your story poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story poem describes how things aren't always better on the other side of the bridge.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your story poem and truly I agree with counting your blessings. I as the reader was slightly distracted by reading your choice of rhyme...see and se...two homonyms. You might think about omitting one of the words and using a different word. Your rhyme pattern is consistent. Good cadence and flow of words. Your description is vivid, eg, a tropical forest where fruit did abound. Beautifully written.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307611

Review of Sky Father Will Smile

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Rated: E

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Hi Whitemorn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of aging.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem about aging which was compared to the sea, with ears crashing and vision fading to sea fog. Effective use of metaphor takes place throughout your poem. Your poem is Unrhymed free verse. Nice simile, eg Old bones and thin skin, like cooked kelp.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307568

Review of The Sweetest Love

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Rated: E

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Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems,mwhich I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem tells the story of love for the poet's beloved.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem of love for your beloved girlfriend. Your poem is Unrhymed and has a very nice flow of words. The description in your poem is vivid, eg, As the fledgling spark of sunlight gives birth to the rosy deep hued dawn. Effective metaphor, eg, in that wonderfully woven, predestined fabric.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Even for A Moment

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Shami, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is a lovely spiritual realization.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your spiritual piece and found it very insightful. Nice transitions from one paragraph to another.
Suggestions:
Paragraph 3: and any other human set NOT and any other human sets
Paragraph 3: Its NOT it's
Paragraph 4: flow NOT flows

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307486

Review of Sarah's Bunny

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Moarzjasac, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the sadness of a sweet baby lost in her sleep.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I was greatly saddened and sympathetic when I read your poem. What a fabulous picture to think of your closing her bedroom door so Sarah's spirit can sleep. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Rhythm creates a sweet cadence and smooth flow of words. Your description is vivid, eg, He cuddles his hoard of empty plastic Easter eggs.
Suggestion:
Stanza 4: held close to my beating heart NOT to held close to my beating heart

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307378

Review of Paradise+ TO

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Mary Ann, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem celebrates holidays at the beach.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about spending holidays at the beach. Description in your poem is vivid, eg White sands beneath my feet. The rhyme pattern is consistent. Rhythm is enhanced by a smooth flow of words.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307375

Review of AUTUMN (1)

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Maria, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of autumn.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about autumn, with the cold months of winter ensuing. Description in your poem is vivid, eg blankets grace the foot of each bed. Metaphor is used effectively, eg sheets over the furniture of Summer's retreat. You might want to consider the suggestions below.
Suggestions:
Stanza 2: announces NOT announce
Stanza 4: below. NOT below...
Stanza 5: stop- NOT stop ---

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307237

Review of A Reason To Live

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Jaya, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of nature.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem; very sensitive to nature and a reason to live. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. It has a smooth flow of words and cadence. Description in your poem is vivid, eg My heart glows at the vocal silence. Good use of personification, eg I hug the emerald ranges in my mind. Your description throughout this poem is excellent. Good job!

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307235

Review of What AM I?

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a few scribbles laying claim to words.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem "What Am I?" and discovering the answer. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Description is expressive, eg bleeding ink flows through quilt staining the sheet with my identity. Nice cadence and a smooth flow of words. No issue with language usage, punctuation, grammar or spelling.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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