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This was an enjoyable read. I don't usually read goofy teen romance stories, because I can't identify with it. My growing up years were quite different from the average. But I really liked how realistic, down-to-earth and detailed this is.
The first thing I must tell you is: there is no such thing as "auburn eyes!" That was driving me crazy as I read it. She kept saying it over and over. Auburn is another word for red, usually referring to hair. Please change that to "green eyes" or something. You can call his hair auburn, but a 14-year-old may not be familiar with the word.
I liked how the workings of the play intertwined with their real lives, and I appreciated how April's parents wanted to protect her. April's emotional turmoil and the way she acts seemed to match how she felt about the situation, and everything made good sense and balanced out to a happy ending. I was relieved neither of them did anything stupid.
Naming a specific song from the era was a fun touch to help "set the stage"... Which reminds me, you have Mrs. Jenkins writing on a "tablet" in one scene. A tablet in today's world is an iPad or Galaxy Tab, so you may want to call it a "writing pad" or a clipboard to be less anachronistic.
I kinda felt like Dad's giving Kevin "the evil eye" was a bit of an exaggeration, as that phrase has a highly specific definition. Just "the look" should do, unless you want a cliche such as "looking daggers at" 
I love the ginormous font you've used here, it helps open it up to seem like a much shorter and easier read. Which reminds me, a word count at the top or in the subtitle is a courteous touch so readers know what they're getting into. WdC rarely provides a word estimate on the preview.
Also, you desperately need scene dividers. Just three centered asterisks will do to visually clarify the divisions. I was thinking, too, it might be fun if you labeled each scene like a play is written: Act One, Scene One, etc. Of course it's pretty much all one act, so you can simply label the different scenes or whatever you like. And at the end you can write "curtain" as a little flourish, instead of "the end" (which no one around here ever uses, come to think of it...)
I couldn't help being reminded of Taylor Swift songs as I read; music is my touchstone to understanding boy/girl stuff, as I've never experienced it myself. Your story has a universal theme which is instantly relatable and accessable to anyone, however. I liked learning the behind-the-scenes details of setting up the play, and I was rooting for April and Ken by the end of it.
There wasn't anything I found "cringy" or would suggest you do differently. The characters are colorful and well sketched, both supporting and main. You have a few minor typos, mostly extra words or phrases here and there and a "you're" instead of "your." Remember to set each piece of dialogue off in a separate paragraph; sometimes it was hard to tell who was speaking.
Maybe a couple extra descriptive words about people's appearances might bring it to life more (does Charles Kring, the playwright, wear horn-rimmed glasses and run his hands through a shock of funny hair? Etc...) But a young girl might not notice these little details about others, especially if she becomes obsessed with a boy.
Speaking of which, maybe a word or two more on how it was difficult for her to focus on anything other than Ken during the time they were getting to know each other, might make it more realistic. She doesn't have to let her studies suffer, but a bit of distractedness or daydreaming here and there wouldn't hurt. Though of course there was no contact outside of school... It's not like they swapped numbers. And in those days there wasn't any texting and all home calls would be public!
Yes, definitely a fun and easy read. I hope this review was helpful. Thanks for reaching out; it's always nice to have something a little different for a change.
Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing 
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the subtitle and add a picture, though I guess the title is draw enough 
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