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Review by hbar
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am not even a good amateur writer so I'll just say all the grammar and punctation looks good to me.

I don't know that there is necessarily anything missing here as you keep the article limited to what you think about heaven and angels. I am going to assume (and it's an awfully large assumption) that this article is for some christian publication?

What I do see as a problem however, and please not this is just my subjective opinion and pretty much meaningless, is that the traditional christian assumption is made of good and righteous people going to heaven. This is probably not that big a deal, but I would like a definition of the 'good and 'righteous,' what or who are they?.

The thing that you may feel is missing and what I believe you would/will get a debate on is your view this is yours and be definition is not wrong it just could be different from some one else's and that doesn't make it wrong or bad, just not the same. It seems to me you have put thelimitations of the human on God and the interpretation of heaven and angels described, with no argument or fact to back it up, just beliek or faith. Now, ther is probably nothing wrong with this if everyone who reads your article has your belief and faith, but what about those of us who don't have your faith?

As noted this is just my opinion and in the big picture meaningless. I think you have clear, well written article that presents your belief well and what I have responded with is nothing that is missing but essentialy a couple of qualitative points/arguments by the 'devil's advocate'.

So.. to make a long story short (to late I know), I can't really see anything missing unless you are trying to convince your audience of someting as opposed to telling them what you think.

I hope that something in all this was helpful to you.
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