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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nicely done - a story and an acrostic all in one *Smile*. I enjoyed the read. My suggestions would be to try and even the lines out a bit. When you have such long and short lines intermixed, it detracts from the ability to read and follow. In your second stanza, you doubled the word "night" - as in night night.

Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today. I look forward to reading more of your works...

Ken *Smile*
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Review of Seeds of Wisdom  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hiya SWP...

An excellent interpretation of the prompt... I really love the image of the eagle disbursing the seeds of wisdom on the wings of wind. It was a very emotional feeling. I do wish you had taken it one more stanza. Perhaps it was only my own reaction but it felt like there was more to be said and this was really the conclusion.

Regardless, I found this very enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing your vision with me.

Ken
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703
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Brilliant *Laugh* Never saw it coming until you put last piece of the puzzle into place and then picture became clear. I do so enjoy your imaginative writes! Ahhh to be young with my imagination in tact LOL... but thanks for letting me hitchhike on your fertile mind tonight.

Excellent!

Ken
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704
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi B. Scholl...

A very clever write - one that many will find humorous and bit confusing *Laugh* I'm slow - it took a few sentences to realize that the words were talking to the author. The single quotation marks worked well to define the speaker negating the need for the curly parentheses. I know - they were meant to be asides but really, with all the punctuation I think they confused the issue a bit.

I will admit - I'm not a big fan of using emoticons in stories but it seemed to work here. Unfortunately, the limited amount you have to work with on the site means that many key words were left naked *Laugh* and I'm not sure they added that much to this imaginative tale.

Thank you for sharing this humorous insight into a writers mind with me...

Ken
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Review of Robbie  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hiya CB...

What a terrific and touching story... You've given a voice to a lot of kids, I'm afraid. I like the feel of your writing - the flow was very natural and you managed in such a short space to give us a setting and set up the situation. Your transition from lying on the roof and imaging a happier world to regrets over reality was very smooth and kept me engrossed the entire time.

Thank you for sharing your talent and imagination with me today...

Ken *Smile*
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Review of James  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Tariq...

Welcome to WDC (again *Laugh*). With only 300 words to work with, you have to really drive the point home quickly - and I think you did really well. You set up the conflict, you gave us the protaginists, you laid out the scene... all well done.

A few minor comments - I assume you wrote this in another program and pasted it in here. Honestly, indenting first lines works well in letters - not in stories. As you convert from a word progam to HTML (which this site is in) spacing goes a bit crazy and since you were inconsistent in indenting (only 4, 5, 6, and 9 *Smile*) it gives the story a ragged look which distracts from the flow.

A second comment - you wrote this in first person, narrative. I like that point of view - it allows you to get into the head of the central character - but it's also the most difficult to read especially in a short, short story.

Overall, I think you have talent and I hope you keep stretching your writing muscles. I'd love see where you go. Thank you for sharing your "virgin" entry and imagination with me today.

Keep writing!

Ken
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Review of Hard Drive Veto  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Another star in the galaxy of your short writes... I suspect that you swooped up gold dust with this one *Laugh*

I love the characterization of the Robot - so much for the Asimov's three laws. A really good read and a wonderfully twisted ending.

All I can say is "no sweat!" *Laugh*
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Review of Story Telling  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Another great tale and thoroughly enjoyable read. You do have quite the imagination and you always challenge me to reach beyond myself and see the world through your eyes. Excellent!

In paragraph 5, you write "Shannon hurried to the town hall, she was already late." Perhaps a semicolon? *Smile* I'm always so pleased to find anything to comment on besides your brilliance. Thank you for being human *Laugh*

Ken
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Review of The Gig  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Jim...

OK - you got me *Laugh* What a clever tale - superior in the telling, superior in the ending. I'm not sure why you bolded the center section - it was a bit distracting *Smile* but the story was compelling and I just rolled over that part.

You are the master of flash fiction - I bow to your envious abilities LOL.

Excellent tale -

Ken
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Review of Priceless  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Jim...

Sorry I've missed you recently - I so enjoy your imaginative tales - and this is no exception! It is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Priceless"  [13+].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
Ahhh, the old steal the amulet and get trapped in the desert story *Laugh* Just teasing you! A nice, tightly written tale of choices.

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
I love the setting and even limited to 300 words, you manage to bring the spice of the desert into my imagination. You do have a genuine talent to putting 10 lbs of description into a 5 lb sack!

*NoteG* Content:
You tell of Faraday - a thief with a penchant for bad luck. His misadventure in thievery and its ultimate cost is well told in this tale. Great imagery populates your tale and the exotic landscape unfolds as we're pulled deeper into the story. I think, however, you needed another 100 words. The ending was a bit anticlimactic and did't quite close out the story...

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
Nothing to note - but then, there seldom is *Laugh* Well written!

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* and a *Halfstar* I reall enjoyed this and can't wait for chapter 2 (*Pthb*) No - I'm not serious *Laugh* A nicely told tale. Your imagination and talent continue to shine untarnished. Thank you for continuing to share both.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Dr M C Gupta

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "O MY HERO, COME: ~Pi~ Form "  [ASR] as a judge for the February round of "Paper Doll Gang Form Poetry Contest"  [13+].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
*Smile* I know a Ghazal when I hear one! OK - not in form but certainly in tone.

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
Nicely penned. You've kept the poetic feel in spite of the varied lines and awkward structure of the Pi form.

*NoteG* Content:
The tone is certainly one that has the undertones of pain of longing and the beauty of love in spite of that pain. It rings of ancient times yet, it opens to a modern interpretation with the references to "ventures to planets, stars" and the "Stellar Queen."

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
Nothing to comment on *Smile* You've mastered the form and your writing is impeccable.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* Well done with a difficult form. Thank you for sharing your talent and imagination with me.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Review of Anonymous Hero  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Jim -

I'll take your challenge *Laugh* but first...

What a terrific story! Individual acts of heroism, the audacity of those who understand their duty, all combine to make a "I can't stop reading" tale. You managed to transport me to this world and understand that bravery and futility can coexist.

I saw nothing to comment on; I can only offer praise for an exciting read!

Ken
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Review of Third Eye  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
You've got to love those 80 year old martriarchs. It's clear if you try to kill them, what happens *Laugh*

A wonderfully imaginative story straight from a mind as sharp as any in the Choy organization. Well written, well told, and well done!

Ken
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714
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi AJ...

Nicely done. I really liked Ms. Carlton's character - having known a few of those old fiesty broads in my time *Laugh*

Content wise, a nicely told story of the trials and tribulations of the handicapped in the modern world. You've added enough detail to sketch a well-rounded picture of the central character in limited space. Nice action that kept the story flowing and me along with it. My only confusion came at the end with "at least she was going to the right place." It didn't seem to fit. I think the story could have dropped the last line and ended on the note of humor.

Technically, I saw nothing to comment on. Well crafted.

Thank you for sharing your imagination and talents with me today.

Ken
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Review of Digital Sneeze  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely done, Jim!

So, how did I read this? Aren't all technologies off line now? *Laugh* Just kidding you a bit. A nice twist on the "War of the Worlds" with us catching the cold. I really like the theme of this - it's just plausible enough to make me think. The tie in through the SETI program was pure brilliance or should I say "hyperionance?"

Well thought out, enough science to make it believable, enough fiction to fill in the missing pieces.

Excellent read!

Ken

PS - Yep, I'll take up the challenge *Laugh*
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi J White

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Angelique Louise-Kristabelle Mortimer "  [13+] on behalf of "Invalid Item"  .

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
A modern day fable *Smile* Nicely done - moral and all!

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
I really like the tone and pacing of this. You carried us along with your characterizations and images, setting a solid foundation for the introduction of the prompt.

*NoteG* Content:
You tell the tale of the title character, her near non-existence, and how she found her moment of fame - and accepted it with grace and intelligence. A well told story that kept me reading. You built this story from the ground up - a nice achievement in so short a space. The ending was perfect *Laugh*. My only comment would be to have introduced Mrs. Smittee earlier in the story - perhaps as a teacher or the chip shop ower - much like you did Mikey, Shaun, and Larissa so the final lines would have had context.

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
A few minor mistakes - certainly nothing that detracts from this fun tale and not worth mentioning.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* A well told story in a fable style that I'm sure many will enjoy. You mixed the challenges of childhood with a pinch of humor and created a heart-warming story of finding one's self. Thank you for sharing your rich imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Review of Red Door Road  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jay Bradley

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Red Door Road"  [E] on behalf of "Invalid Item"  .

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
An interesting fantasy - although it's a bit undefined, it read well. I found myself adding my own meanings to it to help place it in context making if feel interactive.

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
I really enjoyed the mystery of this and that kept me reading. Nice imagery in your phrasing.

*NoteG* Content:
You describe a mysterious door that the central character (undefined) passed each day. His fascination and love/hate relationship with what it stood for provides the conflict that builds suspense. The span of the tale seems to be a lifetime and, in the end, the central character finds the determination to go beyond what is seen into the unknown. From a story perspective, you left a lot to the reader. He seemed to know what the door was but we never find out. He had both a fascination and a fear of the door and again, we never fully understand that. Even the conclusion was left without closure for the reader.

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
Actually, I think for story this long, you did really well. A few minor notes: In the opening line you write "...me thinks that door doth mocked me." Tense issue: should read "mock." In paragrah 2 you write "..Just then, a withering, old man "... I think you meant "withered" unless you meant he was dessicating something *Smile*. In paragraph 3 you end it with "... take another route to reach the familiar fog." There really wasn't anything that explained what the fog was and why he was going to it. There were following references to it but - like fog I guess - it seemed to have just appeared and I found myself wondering about its signficance.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* I think you've created a unique tale here based on the prompt. If you're like me, you probably saw this story in your mind (visually) and translated it to the page. Remember that the reader doesn't have access to all the nuances of your mind and so when you go back and read, try to see it from a reader's point of view and not the author's LOL. Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Review of Decision  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi MissingAnarchy

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Decision"  [13+] on behalf of "Invalid Item"  .

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
A really touching and powerful tale well told.

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
You've taken one of many divisive subjects and treated it with respect and compassion. The story was excellent as was the telling - you kept the suspense all the way to end and my attention as well.

*NoteG* Content:
You tell to two friends - one needing to make a life altering decision and the other needing to be there - from loyalty, from love. You write from a truely human perspective - not allowing the "decision" to overwhelm the story nor to minimize the choices facing the central character. Well done!

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
If I had one comment to make, it would be that you tend to write in a passive voice which I think lessens the impact of your work (I know of what I speak - I do it all the time myself *Laugh*). For example, you write "Sarah, who was neither listening or responding, stared at the entrance ..." instead of "Sarah wasn't listening or responding. She stared, trance-like, at the entrance ..." I only point this out to make you aware of it.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* A really well told tale, full of emotion and suspense. Thank you for sharing your imagination and obvious talent with me today. I'm returning your GPs - both because I'm judging this and it wouldn't be right to accept them and because I need no other inducements - your story was reward enough.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Review of Survivor  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Melfiina

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Survivor"  [E].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
A survior's tale to be sure but more than that - a message of hope for all those who currently are fighting this dread disease.

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
I appreciate that you took "a small slice" of the our subject's day which allowed you build up the picture of the morning. Nice imagery and phrasing.

*NoteG* Content:
You describe the "first day of the rest of her life" as a cancer survivor. You wrote this entirely as a narrative, never mentioning her name. This keeps the reader outside of the story. I think you could add impact by moving the reader into the story a bit by changing this from a character to a person. The other suggestion I would make is to add senses. This was primarily visual - what about the taste of the first day, the smell of the first day? Adding sense information also tends to help readers get into the story.

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
A couple of minor considerations: I think there's a typo in the first line of paragraph 2 - "owned" instead of "owner." In paragraph 4 you write "The only sign of life were birds..." There's a conflict between singular "sign" and multiple "birds." I suggest changing it to "signs." Finally, in the last paragraph you write "mass of emotion" which needs to be "emotions" and in the last sentence "... letting it usher her in to her ..." should be "into" which indicates movement and typically answers the question "where."

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* A nicely told story of hope and the promises that tomorrow always holds. Thank you for sharing your talent and imagination with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dr M C Gupta

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "SWEET DREAMS: Archimedes Pi Form- winner"  [E] as part of "Paper Doll Gang Form Poetry Contest"  [13+].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
A beautiful telling of desire through classic usage of language and form.

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
Short but with a wonderful poetic feel that brings the reader into this world you've created.

*NoteG* Content:
You tell of love and the slumbering maiden's desire to retreat into dreams where she can be closer to her lover. This is much deeper than the 24 words would lead the reader to believe. I love the imagery you've constructed with the simple phrase "my heart lost in his thoughts." This has multiple meanings and expands the emotional content of the lovely poem.

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
In both form and technique, this was a flawless write. Well done.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* The only fault I could find was that your talented write was too brief *Smile* You have a true feel for the flow and rhythm need for successful free verse and I would have liked to seen a bit more. Thank you for sharing both your talent and imagination with me.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Nicki_Mist

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Love Always Forgives"  [13+] as part of "Paper Doll Gang Form Poetry Contest"  [13+].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
Nicely done - you've captured a complete story from the image.

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
I like that you didn't go with the obvious - you dove into the "back story" and brought out the story within the image and not just the surface impressions.

*NoteG* Content:
You tell of a couple who - like most of us *Smile* - had an argument. In anger, he leaves and she worries. You conclude with a happy ending. Simple language creates the images that you've woven into this tale of love and it's ability to forgive. I noted that in S1L5 that you used the word "weeped" which is not a word *Smile*... present tense would we "weep" - past tense would be "wept."

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
Other than noted, I think you did well with an awkward form. I saw nothing else to comment on.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* A well told tale using a difficult form. Thank you for sharing your talent and imagination with me today. Well done.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Review of Serene Beauty  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi aralls

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Serene Beauty"  [E] as part of "Paper Doll Gang Form Poetry Contest"  [13+].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
A beautiful poetic expression of love ...

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
A unique form and flowing verse combine to bring the reader into the image. Well done.

*NoteG* Content:
The poet sees his love asleep and expresses his feelings of love... nice imagery sets the scene and well chosen language illustrates his passion and emotions. An engaging read.

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
Both in form and technical content, this was perfect.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* There is a softness in your words that seem to capture the slumbering image and transports the reader into the moment. Thank you for sharing your talent and imagination with me today. Very well done.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken
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Review of Channel Blocker  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Hyperiongate

My name is Ken – aka 🌕 HuntersMoon - and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Channel Blocker"  [E].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
Too funny, Jim. Your wonderful sense of the absurd shines in this! I so appreciate the ending ROFL

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
Your creative descriptions are totally unique. "Disgruntled onion" is so perfect. I'm sure this is the winner for the day!

*NoteG* Content:
You tell of a family with at least one member who channels (no pun intended - OK, maybe it was LOL) whatever he sees on T.V. The humor shines as he recites a list of plans all engendered by various channels as his wife ticks off her cancellation plans. Too darn funny.

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
Ah haa! At last! Two issues to bring to your attention. You have two paragraphs that run together. You need to add a space. And - the piece de resistance - you mispelled "buy" in paragraph 6 - "I could by me some..." See what happens when you rush? *Laugh*

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* This is so brilliant that a typo doesn't diminish it in the least. This is a "must read" for anyone needing a laugh - and we all do these days. Thank you for the laugh - It's very much appreciated.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Review of Precious Cargo  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Hyperiongate

My name is Ken – aka 🌕 HuntersMoon - and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Precious Cargo"  [E].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
Another clever twist, finding ways to use the prompts in a (mostly) non-literal way.

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
I, for one, appreciate how you weave your stories to include the prompts without resorting to the mundane. A clever conceived tale that held my attention - not just for the story value but also to see how you'd work in cocoa *Laugh*

*NoteG* Content:
You tell the story of a future galactic space port and the "backward" humans with their "precious cargo." Seen through the eyes of the port master, Astra, you paint a wonderful picture of this distant time and introduce us to the variety of species that we may one day encounter. As ususal, your ending is both humorous and enlightening. A true "eye of the beholder" moment.

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
Do I even need to comment? *Laugh* One day I will find something - but not today.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* I never tire of your imaginative tales. Once again, my thanks for keeping me entertained and helping me see beyond the obvious.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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Review of God's Snowball  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Hyperiongate

My name is Ken – aka 🌕 HuntersMoon - and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "God's Snowball"  [13+].

*NoteB* First Impression/Thoughts:
Brilliant as always... a great tale, well told. I loved the ending - perfect! In fact, it was "good to the last..." *Pthb*

*NoteO* Creativity/Impact:
While mostly narrative (a pitfall of the 300 word limit) you managed to capture this reader's imagination and pulled me into the story.

*NoteG* Content:
You tell of the near-end of the world - or at least the end of man's involvement with the world. One man see's the truth and prepares and leaves a legacy of hope.

*NoteR* Technical Notes:
Try as I might - I could find nothing to tease you about! This was a complete well written story in every sense of the word.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* How could I rate this less? *Smile* Wonderfully engaging and a teriffic read! Thank you for sharing your wonderful imagination and talent with me.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It’s offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback… nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken

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