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Review of Peace Of Me  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a contest entry:
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This item number is not valid.
#885607 by Not Available.

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This is beautiful with awesome rhythm and rhyme...wonderful imagery! The last line brought a tear to my eye...good luck in the contest!

God bless you and KEEP writing!
*Bigsmile*jacky

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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 The Blessing From God Above Open in new Window. (E)
I worked very hard on this it's straight from the bottom of my heart.
#902089 by Lyrical Just Author IconMail Icon



*Balloon3*1.Flow of Piece/Readability
Nice flow....nice rhythm and rhyme...


*Balloon4*2.Grammar
appropriate


*Balloon5*3.Punctuation
I would recommend commas after the lines:3,5,9,11,14,and 15. I'd put a period after line 6. In line 14, you need a comma after "sad"


*Balloon6*4.Spelling
In line 6, you have "your" when it should be "you're"....You need to capitalize you "i" in "I'd" in line 14.




*Balloon4*5.Overall Impression
This is a very nice piece. I can feel your emotions. With a little work it could be perfect. I'd be happy to up the rating to a five if you correct the spelling and capitalization errors. The punctuation changes are up to you....*Bigsmile*



God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*jacky
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Review of When All is Well  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
What an outstanding piece! The ending made it all the more powerful. God bless you! May you always be bathed in God's love!May you grow stronger in the Lord each day, and may you be bathed in the colors of the rainbow!

jacky*Smile*
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Review of The Bench  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


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*Balloon2*Review for:
 The Bench Open in new Window. (13+)
Loneliness can affect more than just the living
#896274 by super sleuth Author IconMail Icon



*Balloon3*1.Flow of Piece/Readability

An easy, chilling read....I saw no problems.

*Balloon4*2.Grammar
I saw no problems.


*Balloon5*3.Punctuation
I saw no problems.


*Balloon6*4.Spelling

I saw no problems.

*Balloon4*5.Overall Impression
FABULOUS! This bitter-sweet tale left me with chills...I loved it.....an excellent Halloween read!


God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*jacky
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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This is a MUST READ.....

This well written piece is intense and terrifying. It may give me nightmares.....

You did an excellent job on a terrible topic...

God bless you and KEEP writing!
*Bigsmile*jacky

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Review of So! No! Go!  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this piece...very imaginative...very creative. I love to read and (try to) write different forms of poetry. You wrote in this creative style, while incorporating a message, and without sacrificing flow. Nice rhyming scheme. Great job!*Smile*

Keep up the good work and keep writing....
THanks....jacky

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Review of Starship Sentry  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an awesome piece...well except for that "weird alien thing" comment. I took offense to that, *Laugh* --

My favorite lines: A symbiotic relationship long ago developed between Sentries and humans and their souls. Souls were the multidimensional aspects of all beings, and human souls were as close to the Source as any being the Sentries had ever encountered. They gravitated to them as a result.

I believe that is true...I get chills every time I read those lines...

Since this is going to public review, I won't reveal the surprise....but it is truly wonderful....and wonderfully written.....

Thanks for the experience....

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*jacky
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Review of In a Daze  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)

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*Balloon2*Review for:
 In a Daze Open in new Window. (ASR)
Poem for Stormy's poetry contest
#858266 by Jedi Moose Author IconMail Icon



*Balloon3*1.Flow of Piece/Readability

Beautiful easy flow...
*Balloon4*2.Grammar
appropriate


*Balloon5*3.Punctuation
Excellent punctuation...making the flow perfect


*Balloon6*4.Spelling
I saw no problems....


*Balloon4*5.Overall Impression
A beautifully haunting piece! I enjoyed it!



God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*jacky
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Review of Broken Promises  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)

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*Balloon2*Initial Thoughts
 A well written poem about broken promises...

Now For The Review


*Balloon3*1.Flow of Piece/Readability
 you have a talented way with words....nice flow and imagery


*Balloon4*2.Grammar
 good


*Balloon5*3.Punctuation
 I prefer punctuation, but your piece works without it


*Balloon6*4.Spelling

I saw no problems

*Balloon4*5.Overall Impression

Very nice....I can feel your emoition....


God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*jacky
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful piece...I thoroughly enjoyed it!

I especially loved the ending...I did't see it coming....

There's a lot of imagery and emotion in this tiny piece. Keep up the good work and Keep writing!
God bless you!......jacky

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem reflects the thoughts of a depressed man..

You did a good job on this, I enjoyed the rhyming scheme......I enjoyed the read...

I think the flow could be helped with a little more consistant punctuation....

Thanks for the experience! *Smile*

Keep up the good work and keep writing!...Bless ya', jacky.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A one hundred word horror story.....

OOOOOOOOOOOOOh! How awful....How terrible....and How awesome! *Bigsmile*

You did a fabulous job with so few words! Thanks for the scare! *Bigsmile*

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*
jacky

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Review of Night  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Initial Thoughts
 This is a powerful piece...a story of suicide.

Now For The Review


1.Flow of Piece/Readability
You are a skillful writer. I could feel the emotion. You vividly display the painful imagery.

I think it would help the flow even more if you would put a space between paragraphs when it is written in this block style.


2.Grammar
 Appropriate...


3.Punctuation
 There were a few occations when I think a period would have worked better than a comma: There is no wind, the only motion is the girl, her body shuddering with silent sobbing. Before this sentence, you have several long, comma separated clauses. I feel, that it would be more dramatic if written: There is no wind. The only motion is the girl, her body shuddering with silent sobbing.



4.Spelling

I noticed no problems..

5.Overall Impression
 An awesomely powerful piece. I enjoyed partaking in the emotions you skillfully put to paper. Thanks!


I hope you are enjoying it here at writing.com! I love it here!
God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile* jacky
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a story of a writer with an obsession....this reader highly recommends this piece..

This was an awesome story. I went from being intrigued, to disgusted, to being totally held in a trance...you are a skillful writer, I very much enjoyed the read.

Keep up the good work and keep writing...thanks!

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Review of Dumped!  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
A nice poem......I enjoyed it.....

You have a couple of misspellings: carcophony...derserved

Don't forget your spell check...I would misspell my name without it *Wink*
I hope you're enjoying writing.com. I love it here!
Keep up the good work!
God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile* jacky
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Review of My Child  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Initial Thoughts
 A delighful poem for a child...

Now For The Review


1.Flow of Piece/Readability

beautiful flow...awesome imagery.....

2.Grammar
no problems noted...


3.Punctuation
perfect


4.Spelling
no problems noted

5.Overall Impression
 Your sweet poem touched me.....a reminder that life is as fragile as a butterfly....and out children need out tender care and protection....thanks for the heart-warming experience......jacky

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Initial Thoughts
A beautiful acrostic...relating to nature..

Now For The Review


1.Flow of Piece/Readability
Wonderful flow....awesome imagery


2.Grammar
appropriate...


3.Punctuation
wonderful use of punctuation..


4.Spelling
I saw no problems...

5.Overall Impression
This was just fabulous! You skillfully took the prompt and created a beautifully touching piece of flowing imagery....thanks for the experience!

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*jacky
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Rated: E | (5.0)


Initial Thoughts
 Thank you for inviting me to your port. This is a beautiful piece a gently flowing poetic prose.



Now For The Review


1.Flow of Piece/Readability

Beautiful flow and imagery....easy read..excellent use of phrasing and words...

2.Grammar
 I saw no problems

3.Punctuation
I saw no problems

4.Spelling
I saw no problems



5.Overall Impression
 It was a lovely journey through your wonderful piece.....thank you. I hope you enjoy it here at writing.com...there are so many wonderful and helpful people here.....and now we have another! You!

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*jacky
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Review of Hold the Pickle  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ever eaten at a K-Mart deli?

That description alone was enough to get me to read it!
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This is a wonderfully written piece! I can't say I remember bursting out in a laugh so loud from reading a story.....*Laugh*.

Thanks for the laughs.....really funny...jacky

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*
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Review of The Portal  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very nice story with a 'feel good' feeling about the writer's first trip to an old library...

I enjoyed your piece....thanks for the experience.

I did notice a few typo/misspellings:
first, unmistakable, genres, sci-fi, nonfiction, good-bye

(spelling happens to be my worst enemy--I can see it in other peoples work--but never my own *Smile*)

Keep up the good work!
Welcome to writing.com! *Balloon1**Balloon2**Balloon3*

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*, jacky
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Review of My T-shirt  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
OH....awesome....your poem gave me chills. I'm just running through and looking at newbies..and I found you and your wonderful piece! Bravo!

I also loved your bio--you certainly have a poetic soul! Thanks for the experience! *Smile*

Keep up the good work!

Welcome to writing.com! *Balloon1**Balloon2**Balloon3*

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*, jacky
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Review of Seniors  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Nice work! I enjoyed it! If I may offer a few suggestions?....

There are several misspellings....just run it through the spell check.....

A couple of other things that will help--double check all your spacings....you have some things running together.

It will also help to make sure you have spaces between your paragraphs, when using this block style.


Keep up the good work!
Welcome to writing.com!

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*, jacky
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Review of Sanguine Lust  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

I enjoyed your poem...you have vivid imagery, wonderful rhythm and rhyme, and perfect punctuation.
You have a beautiful way with words and phrasing. Thanks for the experience!


Keep up the good work!
Welcome to writing.com!

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*, jacky
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Review of Bethlehem  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Initial Thoughts
Well, right off, I learned something: Note: In Hebrew, the name Bethlehem literally means "House of Bread" I didn't know that. Thanks!
Wow, what a beautiful and powerful piece! This poem describes Bethlehem's loss when Herod ordered her children to be slain.


Now For The Review


1.Flow of Piece/Readability
 Perfect flow....each eloquent phrase fits flawlessly into the next...you have a beautiful way with words...awesome imagery..


2.Grammar

no problems noted....

3.Punctuation
 My pet-peeve is punctuation. There are so many nice poems that could be perfect if only the reader knew what the writer had in mind when they wrote it. Your punctuation is perfect...I can clearly hear your voice....


4.Spelling

no problems noted

5.Overall Impression

I love this...The chills and hair standing on end continue as I ponder the words. My favorite line: Who told the gentile Magi,
hurrying east, what they had done
by mouthing their dilemma,
whose final solution
none but Herod knew?

This is a question I had never pondered. I'm impressed. Thanks for the experience! Keep up the good work....I wish I could give this one higher than a "5".....jacky

God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*
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Review of Sacred Ground  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very sweet, gently flowing piece of poetic prose that gives this reader a quiet appreciation of the beauty of the simpler in things in life. There are a few places that need a little punctuation changes, but the everything else is perfect. The flowing imagery is flawless...thanks for the experience.......keep up the wonderful work! jacky
God bless you and KEEP writing! *Bigsmile*
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