Hello Writer_Mike
Thank you for taking the time to enter "Musicology Anthology" in 2022! Enclosed please find the following official judges' review, for your consideration. I reviewed select stories from your entry.
Bridge Over Troubled Water
I like the overall structure of this story, but at under 500 words, it reads a little bit like an "info dump" where one character is just downloading a whole bunch of information to the audience via a secondary character. This creates a bit of a lack of conflict in the story since there are no stakes; it's just a recounting of what's already happened. I would have loved to have seen the backstory spread out a little more so it wasn't just one character essentially saying, "uh huh, go on" when the narrator character needed a pause, but the actual backstory itself was compelling and I think there's a lot of potential for a larger, more developed story in here.
El Condor Pasa
Steve is definitely a compelling character as the reader watches his backstory unfold. There's a sense that he's a fully-realized character with plenty of past experiences to draw from, but the dynamics of this story suffer from the same issues as the last one, where there's not really much conflict because it's a character sitting in the bar, essentially recounting his biography to an audience.
Cecilia
I like that this entry is starting to explore the world of the bar a little more. The fact that it's not just a one-to-one exchange between a character conveying information to another character and instead expands on the other characters and the environment of the bar is helping to build this into a really compelling continued narrative. Nice job!
Keep The Customer Satisfied
This was a fun, entertaining vignette and I liked the historical tie ins and the information about the drinks, but it felt like this didn't have a lot of connection to the larger narrative you're building. It read a little bit like a "bottle episode" from a television series (like a Halloween or Christmas episode) where it's not part of the regular season arc, but sends the characters on a little side quest along the way. Nothing wrong with that, of course, just an observation. ![Smile *Smile*](https://images.Writing.Com/imgs/writing.com/writers/e21/smile.png)
So Long, Frank Lloyd Wright
As a Frank Lloyd Wright fan (and fan of architecture in general), this was the story I was most looking forward to reading. I enjoyed the debate about modern architecture and its drawbacks.
Overall
Overall, I really enjoyed your entry and thought you did a great job coming up with different ideas for stories based on the songs in the album. It was a pleasure to read!
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Respectfully,
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