I really liked the structure and the pacing of this piece. The imagery was also excellent, which created a feeling of a solid, well-rounded poem.

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Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. It was well written, easy to read, and memorable. Well done!

I'm impressed by the way you were able to tell a complete story with a beginning, middle, and resolution in only three sentences. That's very impressive, especially considering that you were able to resolve the narrative with a surprising ending.

I think some more specificity in this piece would help clarity. "A man who talks about promises and other good stuffs" and "couples of balls" and other generic references leave the reader a little confused about what's specifically happening in the story.

Overall, I think there's a ton of potential in a micro-fiction story like this, although I think there's an opportunity to add a bit of clarity and polish to really make it stand out. Nice work!

I liked the way you addressed different types of sky in this piece, from the day to the nighttime. It gave the work a really cohesive, thematic tone that worked really well for it.

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I thought you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I thought you did a great job of packing a lot of narrative into a comparatively short piece. I also really liked the introduction to this piece, where you tell the reader at the outset that some of the things you're about to say are true, and some are not. That's a great way to capture the reader's attention!

I thought the pacing and delivery could have been improved a bit. While there's a lot of action that happens in this story, it's all told with a bit of a one-note, detached style that doesn't give the reader a sense of which details are important, when the tension should increase, etc.

I think you have a great foundation for a story here. The basic narrative elements are there, and they just need to be finessed a little to really make the story stand out. Nice work!

I thought you did a great job capturing the feeling of wrestling with writer's block. The poem was evocative and clear, with vivid imagery. Well done!

There were a couple of small imperfect rhymes (hand/demands, blank/tanked), and I thought calling it "dear Writer's Block" toward the end of the poem contrasted a bit with the otherwise negative connotations you're eliciting.

Overall, this was a creative, well-written poem. Nice work!

I thought you did a great job with the imagery in this poem. Each line was vibrant and descriptive and really helped paint a picture for the reader. Well done!

While the sensory details were excellent, I didn't get a distinct sense of which season is represented here other than the clue from the prompt and the title. This could be due to the fact that our associations are different, but "parched earth" is the only thing that for me speaks of summer, as "birdsong" is more associated with spring (at least to me). And I'm hopeless with seasonal fruits, so I'll just have to take your word for it that mangoes are a summer fruit!

Seriously, though, my only real quibble with the piece is that if the goal is to capture a season in the form of a haiku, I'd perhaps want to select things that are more unmistakably "summer" in nature so that the seasonality comes though in the poem itself as well as the title.

Overall, I thought this was an enjoyable poem with great description and just a bit of room for improvement in terms of more fully capturing the seasonal prompt in the poem itself.

I enjoyed this poem. I thought it was short, evocative, and told a story which is not easy to do in so few words. Nicely done!

I found the repetition of the lines ending with "drinking" to be a little repetitive, especially since the second line of the poem already communicates that a "wild night of drinking" occurred, which makes the line about Sam Adams "starting drinking" to feel like a bit of a redundancy.

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Good work!

The detail and description in your story was excellent, creating a vivid and specific image in the reader's mind. I also thought the character development and the dialogue were realistic and engaging.

The "horror/scary" elements of this genre piece felt a little muted. For me, the genre more than anything is defined by an atmosphere of tension, dread, etc. and I didn't get as much of that as I was hoping from a story written for a Horror/Supernatural prompt where something "scary or spooky" was going on. I would have loved for those genre elements to really be exploited a little more.

Overall, this was a solid, well-written story with excellent detail description and good character work. Nice job!

I liked the worldbuilding in this story. You did a great job of packing a lot of setting and narrative into just a few hundred words. Nice job!

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Overall, this was a fun read. Nice work! Thanks for entering the contest!

I liked the action and the description in this piece. The pace moved along nicely and the characters were interesting. Well done!

While following the prompts of other contests is beyond the scope of judging criteria for "The Bradbury Contest" , I did note that the prompt for that contest was Horror/Scary and it was one of the selected three genres of the piece as well. On that front, I'm not sure it was successful; there was very little that was creepy, scary, suspenseful, or horrifying about the narrative. Supernatural, sure... but it was missing that tense, dread atmosphere that I associate with pieces in the horror/scary genre.

Overall, this was a fun read. Thank you for entering the contest!

I enjoyed the worldbuilding and the setting in this story in particular. The sci-fi elements are worked into the narrative well, without being too distracting or pulling focus from the story.

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Overall, I enjoyed the read. Well done!

I enjoyed the characterization in this story. Terry and Thunder were both fun, intriguing characters that were entertaining to follow along with throughout the narrative.

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Overall, this was a fun read. Nice work!

You did a great job developing story and keeping the pacing moving along through dialogue in this story. It was only about 800 words and it read much faster than that. Well done!

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Overall, I thought you did a good job on this piece. Nice work!

I thought you did a great job with this story, particularly the way you depicted some really sensitive topics. They were handled with a deft touch and were really compelling. Nicely done!

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Overall, this was a really good read. Nice work!

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a great job with the imagery and the structure of the piece. The stanzas were short and concise and allowed the piece to be read in smaller bits and pieces that all complemented one another.

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Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I love discovering new features of the site, and somehow I missed this one a couple years back. I had no idea you could create automatic responses based on submitted reviews!

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Overall, this is a super cool feature!

I really loved the imagery in this piece. The first stanza, in particular, was a beautiful metaphor comparing the soul to a wilted flower.

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. It was vivid, concise, and well written. Nice work!

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought the structure and the imagery were particularly well done, and I thought your use of descriptive language really made this poem stand out.

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Overall, I think you did a good job with this poem. Well done!

Nice job on this poem! I really liked the imagery and the structure of this piece, especially how the poem is a shape poem that takes the general form of a tree. Well done!

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Overall, I thought you did a great job on this piece. Keep up the good work!

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought the structure and the imagery, in particularly, were really well done and the poem left a definite impression on me.

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Overall, I think you did a great job with this piece. Well done!

I thought this was a really well-presented, informative item. I tend to agree with you that, outside of Mary, Eve is probably the most prominent mother figure in all of the Bible.

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Overall, I think you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I think that the structure and the presentation of this piece was really strong, given that it was assembled from stream-of-consciousness source material. The imagery and metaphors were great.

There were a handful of small technical errors ("nourishment" in the first line should be plural, "Often it seems out of the parents' control", etc.) that did detract from the piece's readability a bit.

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Nice work!

I'm impressed with the way you were able to condense the narrative of Moby Dick into exactly 100 words. In exercises like this, every word counts and I think you did a great job with it.

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Overall, I enjoyed reading this piece. Nice work!

I thought you did a great job capturing the raw emotions that can come along with caring for someone. Love and relationships are complicated emotions and you managed to communicate your feelings on the matter clearly and concisely.

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Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Well done!

I thought you did a great job on this piece, particularly with the imagery and the structure of the piece. It was a strong read from start to finish, and really evocative. Well done!

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Overall, I think you did a great job with this. Nice work!