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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Espero Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Your Past May Catch Up With You" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Joe's success. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because of the lesson it taught.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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Review of The Omega  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Moonstone Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Omega" Open in new Window. because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (February 15, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the type of work that was accomplished in The Omega. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to make this story the beginning of a novel about The Omega, with Ananova as the main character.

My favorite part: I like Ananova because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Ananova.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Door Encounter" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Allie’s door being locked. The conversation between mother and daughter moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite sentence, Her hair was badly chopped. I like this sentence because it reminded me of giving myself a hair cut at about age five.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Allie.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Hyperiongate Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing " Bye, Bye Miss American Pie" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with death tapping a man on the shoulder again. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, AmyJo-Downhill slide begins! Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "My Perfect Valentine" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first line of this poem hooked me with the speaker's statement I had dreams. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, To have not a Perfect Valentine, but a human one, I like this line because it expresses the speaker's hope of finding someone to love.

Final Thought: I am giving this well written poem a 5.0 because of the way it expresses the emotion of hope.

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Review of The Box  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dan I Am Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Box" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Stephen having to empty his parent's house. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was the logical ending to the story.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the wishes.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Scrnwrtr1 Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Premonition Beginning" Open in new Window. in response to your request.

First Thoughts: Chapter 1: The first paragraph hooked me with the hallucinations becoming a gossip item.

Chapter 2: This chapter moves the plot forward, while reveal more of Kristen's in confronting her fears. The end of the chapter

Chapter 3: This chapter does a good job of revealing Kristen's mother's personality, while foreshadowing some of the issues Kristen faces.

Suggestions: The change in point of view and voice in Chapter 3 is not distracting. Putting the change in a different chapter helps the reader to understand the change, while giving them a chance to consider Mary's information. Mary's information will help the reader understand Kristen better.

My favorite part: Chapter 1: This chapter does a good job of revealing Kristen's traumas and causing the reader to sympathize with her.

Chapter 2: Kristen's determination to face her fears.

Chapter 3: I like the straight forward way Mary presents her background, because it helps the reader to understand the family dynamics that led up to Kristen's trauma.

Final Thought: I am looking forward to reading the rest of Kristen's story.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jed Hirst Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "When Einstein Went Missing" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the sun. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction of the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the description of the bridge, because I could visualize it in my mind.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me smile.

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Review of Cake  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Cake" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph hooked me with Alice rushing to the kitchen. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the idea of a cake turning someone into a dog.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the cake turning someone into a dog.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Dream Recorder Invented" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the invention of the dream recorder. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to use this dream recorder as inspiration for a novel.

My favorite part: My favorite part is the recorder's ability to let people enter other people's dreams.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the idea of recording one's dreams.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, JCosmos Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Secrets in the Singing Telegram" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Adela Sayed being stuck in Kabul. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the singing telegram because it is a creative way to send a coded message.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the smooth flow of the plot.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, JCosmos Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "National Chocolate and Pizza Day" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, theme, and mood of the poem. The rhythm of this free verse poem moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with a decision.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because it was about chocolate and pizza.

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Review of A Dinner Disaster  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Charity Marie - <3 Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "A Dinner Disaster" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker unable to find the spaghetti. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because the dog ate part of the salad.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Max.

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Review of Diamondback Bike  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, fufu Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Diamondback Bike" Open in new Window. because I discovered it in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (February 8, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Thoughts: The descriptions are part of the action and move the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: My favorite part is the description of the author falling off the bike. Even through I rode my bike in town and on a cement walk, this non-fiction essay brought back memories of me falling off my bike.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the memory of the bike.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Friendly Neighborhood Derg Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Valentines Day-LOVE!" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of love forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last last stanza is my favorite because it closed the poem with a positive message.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its message about love.

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Review of The Surprise  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Surprise" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Bob saying it did not look right. The conversation among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the part where the baby fixed the problems.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the climax.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, zigglezaggle Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "thoughts on why we're here" Open in new Window. because I discovered it philosophy genre page.

First Thoughts: This thought-provoking editorial gives the readers something to think about concerning time and the meaning of life.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the idea that we make our own meaning in life.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this editorial because it caused me to think about the meaning of live.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "A Tooth Fairy Tale" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the dark genre page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the man at the bar.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the metaphors and similes used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this metaphor, his skin the colour of a newspaper left too long in the sun.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because it made me smile. Harry is very creative in solving his employment problem.

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Review of Early Beginnings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Early Beginnings" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Jeff being in it making a sandwich. The conversation between Jeff and his mother moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because Jeff's mother took the credit for his success.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Morning Walks  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jacky Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Morning Walks" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: "Look at that!” hooked me and drew me into the story. The conversation between the couple moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the white rabbits because their conversation made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJean Julyishereboom! Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Groundhog Union #33" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the groundhog union having a meeting. Chester's speech moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Chester because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Chester.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJean Julyishereboom! Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "The Bogosity Factor" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's anxiety rising. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the word bogosity because I had to look up its meaning.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because I learned something.

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Review of Passing Me By  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, AmyJo-Downhill slide begins! Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Passing Me By" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven " Open in new Window. forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and speaker of the poem. The rhythm moves the descriptions and the emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotion of this poem is frustration.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with a decision.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the description of the traffic. It reminded me of driving in Las Vegas.

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Review of Just a World Away  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jatog the Green Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Just a World Away" Open in new Window. because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (February 1, 2023)" Open in new Window..

First Thoughts: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, plot, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxed the plot of the poem and made me smile.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing poem because of the smooth flow of the plot.

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Review of Time for a Change  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, PureSciFi Author Icon, I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon, I'm reviewing "Time for a Change" Open in new Window. because I discovered it on the Please Review page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the screaming. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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