This is a great little poem about allergies. I think you have covered the subject pretty well, and reading it made me smile. Your couplets are all super. I see no grammatical or other errors to detract from your work.
Congratulations on being featured in one of Stormy's Poetry Newsletters.
Congratulations on being featured in Stormy's Poetry Newsletter. This is a nice little poem about love.
I wonder, if the broken pieces
will ever fall into one again - in these two lines, I don't think you need a comma after 'wonder', but you do need one after 'again.'
Other than that I saw no errors. Best Wishes, Cynaemon
Congratulations on being featured in "Newbies in the Spotlight." I really enjoyed reading your little story about the guardian angel, and loved the ending and finding out it was a cat. Nice and unexpected little twist. I saw no obvious grammatical or other errors. Keep up the good work.
This is an interesting little poem, and the sentiment is so true. Words can literally destroy a person. I like the way you have conveyed the thought and the power behind words and what they can do. I saw no obvious grammatical or other errors. Good job.
This is a really nice prose poem. I think it is well-written and there are no obvious grammatical errors. I like it as a poem, the way it is written. I guess I am surprised that you would rather have it in prose form. As you are the author, the decision was and is really yours.
It has a lovely sentiment, and I would think the receiver of it would be very thankful and happy with it.
This is certainly a sad little story, but it has a nice ending. I hope it isn't true. It has a solid beginning and middle too. You have told your little story well. I saw no obvious grammatical or other errors in your story.
This is an interesting little story. I think you mean 'benefitted' society, not 'befitted.'
Also, I was wondering why Brianna waited so long before using her cell phone. Or at least that was the impression I got, since you said her chances of being found were dwindling. I think you have a good idea going here but it could use some work. Writing a 100 word story is a real challenge.
This is an interesting little essay. I am not sure I agree with you, as I always found ways to be creative and to write and make music even when I worked full time. I do agree that one should do things when they are young.
Anyway, technically this is fairly well done. It does ramble a little, but there are no major grammatical errors or typos to distract one.
I do hope you will continue to write. I think you have potential.
Great little story about a stop sign. What an interesting subject about which to write. I love the way your subject takes on a human persona and thoughts, even though it is obviously an inanimate object. I saw no grammatical or other errors.
What an interesting story. I wish I could see the picture which inspired it. I think it would help me to understand it better. I read it through twice, but I was still not quite sure what was happening. I couldn't tell whether the person telling the story was male or female. Maybe it is just me. It is a nicely written story. There are some instances where the tenses of the verbs seemed jarring to me. Should it be past tense, or present? Anyway, I enjoyed the ending.
This is an interesting little piece. You have done a good job with the parameters, and one can tell you know your subject matter well. I see no grammatical or other errors to detract from the reading.
This was an interesting read. I can see that you have done some research on indoor waterfalls, and also that you have followed the parameters of the challenge. There are several grammatical errors which need to be addressed. And also it would be nice to leave a double space between the second and third paragraph also. It would look nicer on the page.
your company will most likely to produce more and make more money. - no "to" needed in this sentence.
something as simple adding an interior - as simple "as" adding
you will be amazed when you see how breathtaking your large indoor waterfalls appeal to all those who walk through your doors. - either say "how breathtaking your large indoor waterfalls are, and the appeal they have...l" or ' you will be amazed to see how your large breathtaking indoor water falls are, and...."
I see you are still pretending to be a writer. While you have asked some interesting questions, this piece needs a lot of work. There are many grammatical and typographical errors which need to be addressed. I definitely think you could do a better job.
This is a nice little piece of writing with an interesting premise. It doesn't really strike me as a poem so much as prose written in poem form. I think it has potential, but could use some work. Also, there are some problems with your tenses, and I think this has too many different ideas in it.
I enjoyed reading your poem about love at first sight. I wonder if this was based on personal experience. This poem has a nice sentiment. I don't see any grammatical or spelling errors to detract from the reading. You have done a good job with the rhymes, and this has a nice rhythm and flow.
I enjoyed reading your poem. It has a very nice sentiment. It has a good rhythm and flow, and you have followed the format for this type of poem well. It is similar to the sestina form. I saw no grammatical or spelling errors in your work.
Congratulations on being featured in a "Newbies Newsletter." This is a nice free form poem. I think it is interesting that you have capitalized every line. It gives the poem an interesting flow. I really liked the ending, and the thought that the depression one feels can be repaired.
Congratulations for being featured in a "Newbie's Newsletter." This is a really neat little story. Even though you kind of know what is coming you keep reading. You did a great job telling your story.
I didn't see any obvious grammatical or other errors. You have a good style of writing. Keep up the good work.
I found your poem in the newbies only poetry contest. This is a nice, and very short little poem about winter. I think you have captured the essence of winter very well in just five lines. I found no grammatical errors to detract from your writing.
Hi, Theday, I see you have been around writing.com for a long time and that this is one of your older pieces, so I wonder if you have read it recently. I also am wondering whether or not you are a native English speaker. This story has a good premise, and is interesting enough, but it needs a lot of work. There are many grammatical errors which need to be cleaned up.
For example, your first two sentences are not written as they should be.
The blue sky fit perfectly with the forest as I entered Greenton, a small town next to the lake looked so peaceful. - Put a period after 'Greenstone', then say "It was a small town next to the lake which looked very peaceful.
I'm so glad to have chosen this place to work in - it should read "I am so glad to have chosen this place in which to work." You should not end a sentence with a preposition.
OMG W.D, You definitely need to get a life. You have WAAAYYYY too much time on your hands. Well, as soon as I finish laughing uproariously I will try to finish this review. (cough, cough) Sorry. I got the WING stuck in my throat.
Being a great Lord of the Rings fan, I loved this. I am keeping it in my favorites for the next time I need a good laugh.
Hi, Jeff, Happy New Year. I hope your life is becoming a little less complicated this year. Often we need to take a break from things. I hope you will be back soon. And I hope, and am pretty sure, that you are at least still writing.
I loved reading your very short story about the carousel. I was glad she picked the tiger. That would have been my choice too. I especially liked the silence of the scene. My grandfather owned a circus/show from the mid-30's to 1954, so this story was one I could really relate to.
I saw no obvious grammatical errors, and found nothing else to criticize. Keep up the good work.
I loved your warped little story. LOL. Especially the end. I am still laughing. Okay, there were times when it was a bit hard to figure out who was talking to whom. But other than that I found no obvious grammatical errors.
I don't know. I could see this being published in a magazine as a Halloween horror/comedy story.
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