Hello Inspire Hope,
I like your pen name. It offers a brighter tomorrow.
I like the chosen words that completed this poetry, it expresses a great faith in God.
My suggestion.....
Possibly you can divide this into four stanzas using four lines in every stanza and the last one line as conclusion.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing your poem with a very powerful message.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello DiamondGirl,
Oh....What a story, so real, so sad, so very sad that it gives a very BIG IMPACT n my reading time. How many thoughtless mother in the world doing that to their children.
The ending... I agree with the narrator of this story. This is really an awakening to all the parents especially the mothers that they have to consider the emotional effect of their children with their unpleasant actions.
I admire your very impressive story.
Short and direct to the point and yet so convincing, so well..written.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
Hello dogwood,
A poetry straight from the heart with a very straightforward message.
The title is captivating knowing and believing how important it is in our everyday existence.
The presentation is wonderful.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Bellafulks,
I was thinking differently while reading the title that makes me crave for the very tasty fruit.
Hmmmmm......
Reading between the lines, I must say Ouch....the pain that this poetry conveys..
It has a good lesson, I believe so.
Philosophical love poetry.
Very Nice !
Thank you for the read...
Write On !
Hello sunrise,
The poem is descriptive of what a beautiful garden is.Inviting.....
The last stanzas are more on philosophical words that describes what this garden is.
Mesmerizing and makes me feel like to be with my garden once again anytime today after writing some reviews.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
Hello flamefighter,
Memories, and full of action that made this short story.
Like the past events keep flashing on...
My suggestion....
There coming Sir what do .......
Please change it to ......They are coming Sir what do ...
Sir your ok, I am a paramedic, your ok.
Please change this to .....
Sir are you okay, I am a paramedic, are you okay ...with a question mark.
The conclusion or the last line explained it all.
Thank you for sharing you work.
WRITE ON !
Hello ikiyasama,
Highly educational. The instructions are clear and easy to understand although I must admit that doing this is my weakest point as far as my computer knowledge is concerned. But I also believe that if I put my heart into it I can do it.
Your article makes Writing.Com. so awesome moment to moment, in every wonderful stay of this great community because it is composed of awesome authors and moderators like you.
I SALUTE YOU !
My best regards and GOD BLESS !
Greetings Senita,
Captivating title.
Actually I have not been there in Miami. I have seen it only in TV series MIAMI VICE.
I am happy for you that you are now at the Miami University.
Back to your article.
My suggestion....
Please divide this into three paragraphs and we will see how it appears as a better and nicer presentation.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep the thoughts flowing, keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings saksham,
Oh ! What writings are these ...what language, what country, this is very artistic.
I wish you can have an English translation to this so all of us here in this awesome community can appreciate more of your art.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
Hello Bikerider,
A fiction that seems like a non=fiction. So real, so convincing like a movie that can never be erased from the mind.
Great story. Great presentation. Great and captivating title.
Historical as it is.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Great Job !
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello liveloud,
I wish you can have a title of this poem soon.
Dark and it is like a bad dream.
I appreciate your creativeness.
The last line....the word greave.....Please change it to grieve. Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello princess,
A poem expressing the pain of your aunt on the death of your uncle.
I admire your creativeness and your concern for your aunt.
My suggestion......
The caption below the title...
wat my aunty was feeling.......please change this to......what my auntie as feeling
A poem so full of longing and so full of love.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On !
Greetings !
The title is captivating.
The writings are biblical and the message is clear that this shows your great faith and reverence for the Lord.
I am happy for you...and yes! In Jesus Book of Life, may your name be forever written
in gold.
Thank you for sharing your wisdom.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Carolyn,
A poem or a prose or a short story and you made me laughed reading the last line.
My suggestion.....
Possibly you can make this into four stanzas using four lines in every stanza.
Suggestion only for the poem to have a more appealing presentation.
Thank you for sharing Las Vegas ....
Write On.
Hello less than three,
This is deeply emotional pierching my heart as I read every line, every stanza.
Sad and so sad.
The feelings are thoroughly expressed in every chosen words that releases all the pain
and I hope and pray that by doing or by writing this, the healing begins.
A poem that leaves a great impact in my reading time.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings alockwood1,
A loving tribute to the soldiers who fight for liberty.
The presentation is great and the poem itself is great !
Touching and so true as it expresses the braveness and the courageousness of the men and women who died for the freedom of their nativeland.
This is so precious in all aspects.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
Greetings tbeshers,
I was curious by just reading the title. I always love Haiku poetry. It is always inspiring to note that this awesome community has many talented poets who can create wonderfully a Haiku poetry and you are one of them.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
Hello turtlemoon,
Wow !
I wanted to sing along with the wonderful lyrics that completed this song that you created,
Lovely. I wish I can hear your very own tune.
Every chosen word is great and pleasing.
Thank you for sharing your work, your music.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings motwnbro,
The title is fascinating. It offers cheers and happy moments.
The story is presented in a poetry form and I consider it unique, not the standard way of writing a story.
This is like a lyrics of a song.
for many reason.........Please change this to....for many reasons
Thak you for sharing your fun and happy writings through
....ching a ling......
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello shruthi,
You are a very good storyteller and like Sam and Cia I wanted to know the whole story simply because the title is captivating and the story itself is interesting.
I wonder why the name of Cia and Sam were not wriiten in capital letters, the first letter of their names...
All in one, I consider it a joyful and interesting read.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Persephone,
A love poetry that expresses fully your feelings to this particular person.
This sounds like a love song that offers a promise of love.
I admire the creativeness.
My suggestion ....
I need you know and forever
Please change the word know to .....now
I need you now and forever
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings Arpita,
This is a very important topic that you share to this awesome community and to the whole world.
It shares a very good lesson and your thoughts are harmonizing so well.
Yes, I agree with you that honestly is still the best policy and will always be.
In my own opinion cheaters are losers, so if one wishes to win in life, one has to completely disregard cheating.
You are a wise writer and a brilliant student.
Thank you for sharing your great talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings mirtx,
It is indeed my joy to read once again the work of one of my favorite poets and author in
this awesome community.
The poem that fully describes the realities of life and I believe that everyday is always filled with hope to look forward for another tomorrow and the right moment comes with all the blessings that God Surely Bestows.
Thank you for another great read and my best regards.
WRITE ON !
Hello outloudgirl,
I admire the character of Cali. Brave and courageous that not even death can stop her to win in her goals in life.
The word.......;.agian.........Please change it to .... again.
Thank you for sharing your talent .
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings Ipankey,
This is deeply emotional and I admire your courage of sharing your story to all of us in this awesome community.
I pray that All is well for you and that All will be well for you.
The miracle is repeated everyday and it will be happening to you.
God Bless You Always.
Write On !
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