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501
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello MiaMac,
I like the rhyme and I admire the chosen lines that completed this inspiring piece.
A poem, a prayer, and the words fit for the given title.
Perfect as it is !
All lines are my favorite lines.
Thank you for sharing"Perfect Driver"
Write On.
502
502
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello ladysaku,
I agree with this work that explained "A Real Work Of Art".
Reading this work made me believe that you yourself is true artist who has the special gift of writing.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
I do enjoy this work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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503
Review of The Future  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello kaitlynn,
The worrying for the future is the message of this work as I read the last two lines of this poem.
The poem has a good flow and it is a free-verse.
My suggestion:
The caption below the title:
" Somthing short i wrote about........"
Please change this to:
Something short I wrote about...
Also the presentation, possibly you can make an improvement with the presentation by making this work into three stanzas.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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504
Review of Untitled  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello carol7267,
Surely you can give a title to this well-written and emotional piece.
Nostalgic, painful, sad and so touching, making me misty-eyed.
Thank you for sharing your work.
I have nothing to add, my only suggestion is to have a title of this work.
Write On.
505
505
Review of My Rock Has Gone  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Gosha,
The storm of life' s loss of love.
An emotional piece that describes the aching heart.
My suggestion in this work:
"But now i've faded.........."
Please change this to:
But now I've faded......."
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
506
506
Review of The Circus  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello gvg,
The words are magical like the circus itself. I felt I was an observant as you wrote descriptively about this special day and the inviting activities at the circus.
I truly enjoy reading this well-written and well-presented short story.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
507
507
Review of The New Life  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello ms woodward,
The story that I believe so many can relate. The great expectations and the double jeopardy in trying to gain freedom and new insight.
There is a good flow of the story and I was amazed on the conclusion that you allow your readers to imagine
if what will happen next.
My suggestion in this work;
"to be free and on her on."
Please change this to:
to be free and on her own.
The older woman asked here..
Please change this to:
The older woman asked her.
"The headed towards the cafe"
Please change this to:
She headed towards the cafe...
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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508
Review of Crypt of Flesh  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Daniel,
The explanation below the poetry gives your readers a broader idea of what is this form or type of poem.
Thank you for that.
This is a deeply emotional poetry that describes the very controversial problem of society , "abortion"
So sad.
My suggestion is about the caption below the title.
The word foetus.....Please change it to fetus.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
509
509
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Princess Megan,
This "Forum" of yours is one of the many reasons in making Writing.Com. an awesome site.
It is so wonderful to know that there are so many things to keep a person busy and doing such hobbies is no work at all but a sure fun.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to join in this forum.
Have a Happy Day and God Bless !
510
510
Review of Standing Short  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello colorguardian,
Hhahhahhhahhhahahaaaaaaaaaaaa!
Fun to read.
Yes.....Height doesn't matter.
What matters most is the goodness of the heart.
I enjoy reading your work.
Comedy as it is, BRAVO !
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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511
Review of "Love yourself"  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Vijen,
True, before we love others we need to love ourselves first, then the loving is so easy to flow.
I believe this is the beautiful message in this work.
My suggestion:
"Luv yourself"
Please change this to ....Love Yourself
I believe there is no short-cut in writing poetry, so that is the reason why I am giving this suggestion
luv..............please change to love
u.................please change to you
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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512
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Seamus,
Hahhahhahaha !
I enjoy reading this. especially the red letters. I can relate as we are experiencing an extreme summer heat in our country.
Wonderful three lines that completed this Haiku poetry.
Thank you for the joyful read that ease the discomfort of a very hot day.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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513
Review of Forgiveness  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello gvg,
A very important topic to write and it is a healing and powerful word to everyone concerned that includes you and me and the rest of mankind.
This writing proves that you are a winner because a forgiving heart is a winning heart.
Thank you for sharing this touching and deeply meaningful work that is well-written and well-presented.
Keep writing and keepposting.
514
514
Review of Pure Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Visbella,
A drama through poetry. This is also like a lyrics of a love song or ballad with a lively melody, then chorushed with a sad tune and ended with the highest notes.
Romantic, philosophical, and yes ! so "Pure Love"
So lonely yet so entertaining.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
515
515
Review of Goodbye  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Whitewolves,
A poem that expresses a relationship that did not last forever. Hurting words are like a knife pierching to the heart and surely it hurts. Truly an emotional piece. A free-verse.
"but you had my heart"
As in, it is better to love and lost, than not love at all.
Sad and yet we can charge it to experience and experience is a best teacher.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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516
Review of the lake  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello sabrina,
A prose and a sad one.
My suggestion:
The presentation. Possibly you may put a space before another word after a comma with regards tothe third line.
The letter i "i have,"
Please change this to " I have "
The title, please change it to "The Lake" instead of "the lake"
Suggestion Only.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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517
Review of The Counter World  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello GOODMEAN,
This is a very powerful poem. Powerful as it speaks of the truth in every existence.
The poem has a good flow and I admire the rhythm and the rhyme.
Touching in its deepest meaning.
I love the way it was written and presented.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
518
518
Review of Morning Sun  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello happytobehere,
I love this poem. The message gives hope for a new day, a new beginning as in a colorful welcome sign
Beautiful as the title.
Thank you for sharing your talent and I look forward to read more of your works.
Keep writing and keep posting.
519
519
Review of Home  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Breanne,
The title is captivating in as much as it is truly an important topic to write.
I admire the creativeness of your way of describing a "Home" through a poem.
A special place where our hearts do belong.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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520
Review of Life  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Alicia,
A prose or an essay or a short column, whatever you call this work, this is so full of life by itself.
Soul searching and the conclusion is most meaningful."I want to live." Four powerful words that guide us as we continue and enjoy the journey.
Keep living and keep loving. Live with the laughters and spread them with joy !
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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521
Review of Things I've made.  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello BIG BAD WOLF,
Wow ! I am so happy for you to have so many blessings especially in making your time so productive.
A perfect compilation of a job well-done.
This shows your talent as a writer and your greatness as a person.
Yes, a busy person is a happy person.
Thank you for sharing "Thing's I've made"
See you again in this awesome community.
Write On.
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522
Review of Violets  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello T.L.Finch,
A beautiful poem and especially dedicated to your son's teacher. I admire this work that is so meaningful and surely the teacher will thank you and appreciate your talent as well as your thoughtfulness.
The lines are like the lines written in a beautiful greeting card.
I truly like it.
Thank you for sharing your work of art through "Violets"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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523
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello JADED,
Captivating title.
I look forward to read this special project that shows your talent in writing. Surely this is an interesting one that keeps my reading and my reviewing worthwhile from moment to moment.
Thank you and God Bless.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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524
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello youme,
A drama in real life and the family is involve.
A lot of suspense here.
My suggestions:
"and looses some bruses..."
Please change the word bruses to....bruises
"He desides to talk to his...."
Please change the word desides to...........decides
"fathers new room........."
Please put an apostrophe in the word ....father's
"I though you were senile."
Please change the word though to.....thought
The last line:
"one for every year Johns little.........."
Please put an apostrophe on the word....... John's
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
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525
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Elizabeth,
A prologue and a convincing one.
Interesting characters that gives the title of this novel.
My suggestion:
The presentation.
The two lines before the Prologue ended ? Please delete those lines.
Good luck for the continuation as I look forward to read more of "Peter and Evera"
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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