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Review of My Faithful Tree  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello iamfrank,
This is lovely !
A poem from the heart and so very thoughtful as well as very grateful.
It ryhmes beautifully and the message is full of love and the connection so strong.
Touching as well as inspiring.
I like the presentation too.
Thank you for the nice and wonderful read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello irish66,
There is great wisdom here. A short essay that described it all. The true sentiments of the heart that awakens the sleeping souls of mankind.
I hope that everyone has the same respectful view as you have and surely PEACE ON EARTH will be gained.
Thank you for the read that brightens my day like a ray of sunshine radiating its glorious way.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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603
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello dockingdragon,
The title is captivating as I love watching people dance that swaying and graceful act is truly an art.
You emphasized well the message of this work.
My suggestion:
"The dept of which I move an sway"
Please change this to:
The depth of which I move and sway
insterments.................................please change this word to......instruments
rythum.......................please change this to rythm
Also the presentation, possibly you may make this into three stanzas and minimize the spacing.

"Hypnotic sounds play
Drum in my ears
The depths of which I move and sway
Rolling of instruments like thunder."

(Then you can go on writing the next stanzas)
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of The Invisible War  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Rousseau,
Welcome to Writing.Com.
I salute you for sharing this highly intellectual piece. I admire your opinion in making American people's lives
easier and in one way or another your suggestions make sense. Let us say it in other words:
Make changes for the better or for the best of all.
My suggestion as far as editing is concerned in this writing:
"the invisible war of politics that will destroy this once great"
I believe this needs another word or two to end this statement.
"vital to this countries"
Please change this to:
vital to this country's
Thank you for the read.
Have a nice day !
Keep writing and keep posting.
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605
Review of Sisters  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello inkheart,
I love reading the lines that describe how important "Sisters" are in our lives. They are true blessings from the Lord.
My suggestion in this work:
The Presentation, possibly you may divide this into three separate stanzas as in:
Sisters are....
First Stanza with four lines
And go on until the last stanza without typing the words "Sisters are " above every line but only above every stanza.
Only a suggestion.
I admire each line that describes how great "Sisters" are.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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606
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello pandora,
A bipolar person's view of life and this is a poem that describes how such person with this problem feels.
The poem has a good flow and it is written in a free-verse.
My suggestion:
"Laughing and screamin" (The first stanza)
Please change this to :
Laughing and screaming
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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607
Review of No Ordinary Day  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Shelley,
This is written by a no ordinary writer.
I laughed, I smiled, I cried reading your no ordinary story.
This proves that God exists as well as God's angels in our midst. are always around.
I feel like I am watching a movie and my full attention was focused on the screen.
A very little editing is needed.
My suggestion:
"with stain windows and a gilded alter"
Please change the word alter to...altar
"I'm sure we looked to be quite a site"
Please change the word site to..........sight
A drama in real life, full of suspense and coloured with TRUE LOVE.
Thank you for the wonderful read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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608
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello dollzell,
Reading the title I had great expectations for joyful and a worthwhile read.
HAAAAAHaaaaaaaHAAAA!
Well, charge it to experience.
It is always refreshing when we think of the bright side of life by laughing at every experience either bad or good, beautiful or ugly. Hhahhahhhaha !
You carried away my emotion...
My suggestion in this Comedy:
This is a documentary so it would be more realistic if the title's first letter in every word be capitalized, so instead of "laugh before you delete" please change this to......"Laugh Before You Delete"
I also noticed the following:
i resigned
i'm not hungry
i'm innocent
Please change this to :
I resigned
I'm not hungry
I'm innocent
"my boyfriends name is not Dumber"
Please put an apostrophe in the word boyfriend's
"another filipina nurse"
Please change the word filipina to.....Filipina
Writing Comedy is a very special talent and I admire you for that.
Thank you for sharing your work.
See you again in this awesome community.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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609
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Wordsmith,
Welcome to Writing.Com.
The story behind the poem is drama in real life. Fascinating !
My suggestion in this work:
The title :
"Everyone's got a history"
Please change this to :
Everyone's Got A Story"
Also I noticed some words :
chirstmas..................please change this to Christmas
definetely....................please change this to definitely
revcovery...............recovery
"standing besides a modest shop"
Please change the word besides to........beside
tommorow.......Please change this to ....tomorrow
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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610
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello judity,
WHEW ! A story within a story and so true !
I can understand why there is a fear of old age but as you wrote in the last line" We're all going there someday",
one has to have a brave heart to face the truth when that time comes.
A well-written short story/experience that brought me to tears as it is VERY CONVINCING!
I have nothing to correct as I always consider reading your work is a learning experience for me as far as
Writing and sharing wisdom is concerned.
Thank you for the read.
See you again in this awesome community.
Best regards and God Bless !
WRITE ON..
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Review of Father  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello SeanFear,
The title is captivating to me and the presentation is nicely and uniquely done.
Emotional and as I read it the more I thank the Lord for truly how blessed I am.
I admire your work through a very nicely written "Father"
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of money  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello hopeful,
Very interesting topic to write as a poem. Yes ! It is !
I enjoy reading your work. I believe a lot of people can relate.
My suggestion :
"But...yes ther is always a but.."
Please change ther to......there
Also the presentation, please try typing it not at the center but at the left side of the page for the lines to fall in correctly.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Happiness  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings idd530,
The title captures my interest simply because Happiness is a very special feeling that I wish to share and to give to everyone in the world and that is the main reason why I am presently making happy baskets.
This is an emotional poem that expresses the true feelings of the heart.
Please allow me to share a few words about HAPPINESS:
Our opportunity for happiness is guaranteed if we choose for it today and in everyday of our lives.
Happiness lies within us. Each day is as full and as ripe with adventures and meaning as we choose to make it.
Anything that enriches the moment, for ourself and to others is worth doing. The precious time is all ours to
enjoy. Be free to respond happily to whatever comes.
Live with the laughters !
Have a very happy day !
Thank you for sharing your work and for my chance to share some lines.
See you again in this awesome community.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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614
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Joan,
The poem has a good flow, has a good rhyme and its rhythm is magical as in spreading joy to the readers through your love and thoughtfulness for your dearest sister.
You are a blessing to each other and I am blessed too reading your work.
Keep the love glowing in your hearts.
Happy 18th Birthday to your sister !
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of I Promise  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Angelus,
A precious promise and the clear message of true love.
Very touching work and the highlight of this wonderful poetry is the last four lines which are my favorite lines.
A promise is a promise never to be broken but to be fulfilled no matter what.
I enjoy reading your work that has its own sentimental story behind the poetry.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review of A Gift for Pop  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Mia,
This is a beautiful short story and very touching. How wise and how nice of you to find the best gift for your Pop.
Thank you also for sharing us this translation of this great prayer in your Pop's native tongue.
Truly this is Precious.
A job well-done indeed!
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of You Are...  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Volleballover,
A nice poem that describes someone you know very well and the last line describes it all.
My suggestion in this work:
" i am down" .........please capitalize the letter I
sitution.........................please change it to.........situation
excitment .......................please change this to .......excitement
genetly...............................please change this to........gently
fridgid...............please change this to.......frigid
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of I gave you away  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Suu,
Sad and so sad but there is always a reason for everything.
The story behind the poetry is a drama in life that happens to some but we cannot and can never ever judge these people who had this decision of "I gave you away".
This is like a sad movie that makes me cry.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu,
An eternal devotion to one another.
A very inspiring poem with a good flow and the message is so full of life, so beautiful, so wonderful.
Hand in hand with harmony, happiness and joy will be plenty.
God Bless to both of you..
Thank you for another worthwhile read.
WRITE ON.
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Review of Grandmothers Know  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Suu,
The message is clear and that is "We need to love and respect our grandmothers" simply because they deserved such.
I admire your style of writing poetry as an honor to all the grandmothers in the world.
My grandmother died when I was young so we did not spend quality bonding time together but I always remember her as the woman with the most beautiful smile.
How I wish to be a grandmother but my only child still not decided to marry this year, so maybe next year.
I admire your work from the start until the end.
This is VERY PRECIOUS ! Every line shares a wisdom.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Happy Sandman,
This is not poetry so I rated this 4....
The contents are fully understood and surely you will receive a lot of feedback from interested authors in this awesome community.
Good luck for all your endeavors.
See you again.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello milhaud,
True story and I truly admire it from the title to the last line," Our television arrived the next day."
The story with twists and turns and is well-written and well-presented.
NOSTALGIC and honest as children are always honest with their feelings.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Anarkist,
Yes, deeply emotional.
The title offers great suspense.
The poem has a good flow.
My suggestion:
The second line,"time to undwind"
Please change the word undwind to......unwind
A poem that gives encouragement and inspiration to move on with life.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review of I let him down  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Teresa,
The very trusting soul, and this story has a lesson to share.
My suggestion in this work :
Possibly you can divide this into three or four paragraphs.
Also please take note :
"not a good sighn for me"
Please change the word sighn to .......sign
"I dont know"
Please put an apostrophe in the word don't
"and she tells me ..."
Please change this to:
and she told me
"i gave her the whole thing."
Please capitalize the letter I
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings dwaynpepper,
I know the song and I love singing it too.
The stories behind the poetry are all amazing.
This poem proves that miracle is repeated everyday.
I am so glad to have read this.
You presented it in your own unique way.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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