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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello By His Grace,
Inspirational as well as biblical.
My suggestion :
Please put an apostrophe of these words:
Stephens..............Stephen's
Peters....................Peter's
Gods list.............Please change this to : God's list
Thank you for sharing this wisdom.
Write On.
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Review of That One Person  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Angela,
The questioning heart that expresses a deep hurt...
Sad and lonely.
The poem has a good flow.
My suggestion:
"They're the one person you trust"
(This refers to one person so possibly you may change this to:)
He or She is the one person you trust
(So do with the remaining words "they, they're" in the first and second stanza.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Love is...  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Waffles,
To a person who honestly said that "I've never been in love", you describe Love, in its best way and I admire
what was written.
Surely this feeling called "Love" will conquer your very own soul, possibly today at this very moment that I am
writing this review.
Each line is worth to read with a smile.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of GARLIC  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello songofsolomon,
This is an amusing tribute to the one of the most important items in every kitchen.
Very creative.
Nicely done.
I can smell the wonderful aroma of roasted peanuts with lots of garlic in our kitchen as my husband
(my favorite chef) is preparing for his watching his favorite tv show and it goes well with an ice cold
coca cola.
A very interesting poem.
I love it from the start to the end.
WRITE ON.
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Review of Parenting  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings !
AHA ! The heart speaks !
A poem that is well-written and each line is like a song from the heart.
The note below the poem explains fully the story behind the wonderful and touching work.
Life is full of surprises !
Another great read.
Thank you for sharing.
Write ON.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings !
A very enlightening topic to share. I agree with what you wish to convey. This reminds me of the very important
phrase that I put in my desk :"PUT GOD FIRST"
My suggestion :
The word "coz"
Please change this to ....because
"we loose what is more important"
Please change the word "loose " to ....lose
Thank you for sharing this inspirational piece.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of A CALL  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings tosca,
A poetry for the best of reasons. This shows how you care the world and all of God's creations.
The poem has a wonderful message and has a good flow.
My suggestion:
The sign &
"Sitting & thinking
innocence & youth"
Please change this to the word ....and
Sitting and thinking
innocence and youth
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Sisco,
This is a beautiful poem with a nice rhythm and rhyme.
A bonding time between father and daughter and surely so many authors can relate to the story behind the poetry.
This also reminds me of a song that I love to sing "Sing Me A Song Again, Daddy".
This is so beautiful.
Thank you for sharing "What is love, Daddy?"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Baby in the Snow  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you Alice,
This is an emotional piece.
Nicely written and wonderfully presented.
There is heavy drama here both spiritual and physical and there is also a philosophical.
Very sad.
You are blessed with a great talent as a poet , as a writer.
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
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Review of Imagine  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Travis,
Wonderful creativity of a short story.
The title of this story fits for the chosen lines that speaks a part of history and today.
I have nothing to edit.
Grammar, punctuation and spelling....nothing to correct and the story is well-written and well-presented.
Highly impressive !
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
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Review of Five Seconds  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings BScholl,
The titles offers a great read as in reading the title alone makes me imagine a story so full of suspense.
And YES ! it is !
Nicely presented, has a good flow and the storyline itself is highly admirable.
PERFECT, AS IN PERFECT !
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jossiebabyahh,
A short story and a sad one. This can be made as a beginning of a love story novel whose characters leads to more intriguing
situations.
My suggestion:
"Night came and the darkness took you in dressed in a red."
Please put a comma after the words "took you in,...."
Night came and the darkness took you in, dressed in a red.
Thank you for sharing "The Secret Life of Daydreams"
Write On.
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Review of Home  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Greetings Julie,
The poem has a very good flow and the title is captivating.
My suggestion:
Possibly you can divide this into stanzas for a better presentation.
The line number 12:
Please capitalize the letter I :
"But I never made it home"
The last two lines makes a wonderful conclusion.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings !
Truly very inviting. I can smell the wonderful aroma from your end to our end here in the Philippines.
Surely everybody enjoys sip after sip, cup after cup.
A great forum, artistic and realistic.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to read as well as to send this review.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello megan,
WOW !
How majestic is this love story through a well-written poetry.
Nice as a song, nice as a poem.
This reminds me of "Listen to the rhythm of the pouring rain"
This is great !
Congratulations for a job well-done.
Thank you for sharing.
Write on and on.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings highhopes,
Truly an inspiring poetry.
There is wisdom being shared to all the readers.
It offers hope as well as a great promise that "All is well !"
Nicely written.
Every line is my favorite line.
A great read worth to be treasured.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings judity,
Informative and very useful to each and everyone here.
The modern world tool/guide to success especially written for the wonderful people of this awesome community.
Thank you for sharing this and I look forward to read the continuation of this work.
See you again.
Write On.
GOD BLESS ....
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Tim Chiu,
Whew ! True emotions are showing here and there is Wisdom and Great Lesson too.
Wonderful presentation and a free-verse.
The last three lines ?
Brilliant conclusion !
Thank you for sharing and for another great read.
Best regards...
WRITE ON.
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Review of The Perfect Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Hunter's Moon,
Amusing and so true.
The title fits for every line written.
I have nothing to edit and nothing to add.
I only say "I agree"
Hahhahhahahaha !
Thank you for making me laugh.
I truly enjoy reading this.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of To Be Like You  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello MakeMe,
You are blessed to have a sister and your "big sister" is truly blessed too to have you in her life.
This poem shows how you admire and love your sister a lot.
My suggestion:
"She is loves"
Possibly you may change this to:
She is full of love.
Thank you for the joyful read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of King of Nothing  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings...
This is a poem that has a very captivating title.
The presentation is unique and there is a good flow.
My attention was focused more on the last line.
Possibly you can change it to make it clearer.
All in one, I admire your talent.
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
GOD BLESS !
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Review of Standing Alone  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello riley,
A short story that surely makes someone think and to do something to make this world beautiful to live in.
My suggestion:
The caption below the title:
"of the only tee"
Please change the word tee to.....tree
of the only tree
"not by a gun, a kife,...."
Please change the word kife to.....knife
This can also be a beginning of a beautiful novel.
I admire the creativity.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
GOD BLESS...
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Review of Goodbye  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello skillz,
Sadness is the most prominent emotion of this love poetry.
The love triangle that one has to sacrifice to gain harmony and peace of mind.
The earlier the better.
I admire your talent of writing poetry than can be used as lyrics of a sad song.
My suggestion:
"I love you too much too see you play this game"
Please change this to:
I love you too much to see you play this game
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello again youme,
The title is captivating simply because it is so.
The story is nicely presented.
My suggestion is more on grammatical in the fourth paragraph.
"two hundred people are held...."
Please change this to:
two hundred people were held...
Most of the beds are emptied...
Please change the word are to....were
Most of the beds were emptied in cold storage.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Happy New Year Judity,
Hahhahhaha!
I enjoy reading this.
Wise lady !
This is well-written, truthful and very amusing.
In the spiritual side of life this story reminds me of the Serenity Prayer.
AS A WHOLE, this is another product of one of my favorite authors in this awesome community.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
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