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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings to you Lucygirl,
A very touching short story so full of kindness and love.
This also shows the beauty of your heart.
My suggestion:
The spacing in every given paragraph. Possibly you can shorten the spacing.
"i was falling in love with Zoey."
Please capitalize the letter I
I was falling in love with Zoey.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
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Review of Flying with love  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings little meany,
A love poetry that can be made into a beautiful love song.
The last five lines are my favorite lines and most meaningful.
The chosen words fits for the given title. Joyful !
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Merry Christmas !
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings !
An emotional piece. A love story with a very unhappy ending like a sad movie.
There is a good flow.
My suggestion:
"She didnt want to hurt him anymore"
Please put an apostrophe in the word did'nt
"She knew there was noone...."
Please change the word noone to....no one
She knew there was no one
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
MERRY CHRISTMAS !
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Review of Bad times sad  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings !
A poem with a good flow and a good rhyme.
I admire most the last two lines because it offers a better or a bright tomorrow.
My suggestion:
LONLEY STREETS....PLEASE CHANGE THIS TO .....lonely streets
I believe that when this poem will be written not in all capital letters this would surely be more admirable.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
MERRY CHRISTMAS !
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
MERRY CHRISTMAS TIM CHIU,
A VERY MEANINGFUL MESSAGE FOR THE JOYOUS SEASON.
A poem with a good rhythm and rhyme that spreads happiness to every reader.
Very true :
"The gift of all tomorrows..
Let us never display regret."
CHEERS .....
WRITE ON because I read on.
See you again in this awesome Writing.Com.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Katie,
Historical and a loving tribute to the victims of a very ugly past.
Sad..deeply emotional.
The poem has a good flow, free-verse and written with great care.
I have nothing to edit.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Merry Christmas !
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Review of Waiting  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings Caitlin,
Truly a drama series through a poem.
My suggestion:
The caption below the title:
"Figuring out how to pick up the peices."
Please change the word peices to..........pieces
"What am I suppose to do,"
Instead of a comma please put a question mark at the end:
What am I suppose to do?
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
MERRY CHRISTMAS !
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Review of Happiness  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Debbie,
The caption below the poetry is philosophical, intriguing and very captivating.
I admire the red-color-letters that completed this poetry.
Yes, Happiness is contagious and regardless of whereever and whatever happens in our lives happiness is a state of the mind.
Thank you for sharing your talent through a wonderfully presented poetry.
See you again in this awesome Writing.Com.
MERRY CHRISTMAS !
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Review of Freedom  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Christen,
Nicely written.
Great title, wonderful lines and I consider this work very entertaining.
The last three lines are my favorite lines.
The conclusion ? I like it.
Thank you for sharing "Freedom"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Merry Christmas !
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello again Tim Chiu,
OLE ! Interesting ! The games/sports poet on the move.
This reminds me of a wonderful picture frame with a title "Plaza de Torros de Manarez"
I can feel the real action reading your work.
Another job well-done.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
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Review of I Miss You  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings !
A poetry that expresses a story and a great lesson.
Yes, it takes a painful experience to change our ways and life is a series of lessons and the most important is we recognize and accept our mistakes and would do something not to do it again.
"I wish you where here"
Please change the word where to....were
I wish you were here
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Merry Christmas !
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Thinking thoughts,
I admire the courageous spirit as I read line after line of this very meaningful work.
My suggestion:
Please do not abbreviate the work like:
u.........it must be written as you
N -------it must be written as And
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
HAPPY HOLIDAYS !
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu,
The story behind the poem is so full of life.
The boy, the dog, the neighborhood and the poet's great observations.
I always admire your work from the very first moment I made my first review and that admiration will always stay because I always enjoy reading your works today and in the future.
Or in other words....you have a fan from the Philippines.
GOD BLESS !
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Tim Chiu,
The title made me very curious to read this poetry whose main topic is the tomato, one of my favorite ingredients in my cooking kingdom.
Hahahhahhahha...This is fun.
What a poem ! Nice work again !
Thank you for sharing.
HAPPY HOLIDAYS !
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Review of Subtle lonelyness  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings to you Melissa,
An emotional piece that speaks of the true feelings of the heart and the conclusion is wise.
My suggestion...
The word loneliness............please change this to loneliness
' and its funny'
Please put an apostrophe in the word it's
Yes i believe you will find happiness sooner than you expect...HOW TO ...
Reach out to people from all walks of life....
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write on..
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Judity,
WHEW .....That was close. Blame it to the shoes and the working of the Guardian Angel proves once and for all
that they truly exist in our midst.
A STORY FULL OF SUSPENSE.
Nice presentation and you made me held my breath for a while.
Thank you for sharing an unforgettable experience.
Best regards.
WRITE ON AND GOD BLESS..
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Review of Me vs. Him  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Bunny Chick,
A free verse poetry about a relationship and I those lines were written from the heart.
My suggestion:
"and this time I wont let him go."
Please put an apostrophe in the word won't
and this time I won't let him go.
Thank you for sharing your talent through" Me vs. Him"
Write On.
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Review of A Season  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello sammijeet,
A poetry that describes someone close to your heart and how it gives you a reason to live.
The caption below the title of the poem captures my interest.
The poem has a good flow and inspiring.
Yes....there is always the best reason for everything.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
See you again in this awesome Writing.Com.
Write On.
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Review of Dead Tissue  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello sadr,
The first few lines are truly alarming, as in "See a doctor as soon as possible."
However, reading the last line you made me admire your courageous spirit.
I like your poem so unique yet so realistic.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Dead Tissue"
See you again in this awesome Writing.Com.
Write On.
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Review of On Being Alone  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello again babalu,
A biographical and a prose.
The topic is of being alone. How sad to note when there is no one to care for.
But there are a lot of people to care about. Yes, there is a physical longing
that is a fact, but what we must do to beat loneliness is to be the first one to reach out to others so we can be alone but not lonely.
Thank you for sharing your work that gives an insight to your readers.
See you again.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Inker,
This work is truly impressive from the start to the end.
I look forward to read more of this as I believe that there is a continuation.
The presentation is great and the lines or paragraphs are wonderfully written.
Nostalgic and the descriptive words are so beautiful as it expresses how marvelous God in His creations.
You are blessed and I am so happy for you.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Stephii,
This is an emotional piece. I like the rhythm and rhyme.
The poem has a good flow.
The last line offers a wonderful tomorrow and the lines at the last stanza are my favorite lines.
A job well-done !
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Romantic Idealist,
I admire the topic that you are sharing in this wonderful forum.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to join and to write my story too and I enjoy
reading the posting of the authors around.
See you again in this awesome community.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow,
I love acrostic poetry. I always find them enjoyable to read.
Autumn, one of the seasons that I never experienced in my lifetime as I am living in the tropical Philippines.
Your poetry made me understood fully the description of this season through
your well-written and well-presented "Autumn in Las Vegas"
Thank you for sharing your talent.
See you again in this awesome community.
Write On and God Bless..
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello mywritings,
This is truly very helpful and informative. How nice of you to share this to all of us.
I am so glad to have read this even though I am not a resident of America.
This is really a great read.
Thank you and God Bless.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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