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Review of I Stand Alone  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Jazz Smith,
A letter or a memo to someone close to your heart.
This looks like a prose to me.
The last two lines has doubts and yet it affirmed the existence of GOD.
My suggestion:
"I had no claims to your existance."
Please change the word existance to.....existence
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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727
Review of Ek kavita  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Jogi,
The title captures my interest.
I wonder why this has to be written this way.
Possibly an explanation below or above your work so we can all understand what is this all about.
Very intriguing to me.
I look forward to read more of your works.
Keep writing and keep posting.
728
728
Review of Rain  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello moonshinestar,
A short poem that describes the innermost feeling of longing the presence of a
very special someone in your life.
A poem that also desc ribed that you are in love.
Yes, an emotional work.
My suggestion :
How about a comma in some lines and a period at the end of the poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
729
729
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello kenny,
I like the captivating title and I like the story.
I look forward to read more of this becasue I wish to know what will happen next, will she eventually
meet her parents ? I hope so.
My suggestion in this work:
"Mom was still work on breakfast..."
Please change this to :
Mom was still working on breakfast
"for the new of my parents, I had no new about my parents"
Please change the word new to......news
for the news of my parents
I had no news about my parents
Also please put a space before starting another paragraph.
Thank you for sharing "The Blue Handkerchief"
Keep writing and keep posting.
730
730
Review of Music  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prince,
I admire how you described this five-letter-word, MUSIC.....that keeps the world moving and united in every
way.
Splendid !
This also reminds me of a song with the lyrics to quote:
"All things shall perish from under the earth
Music alone shall live, Music alone shall live,
Shall never die ! "
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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731
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello kid writer,
A love poetry and the secret love is now being told.
I like this poem.
It has a good flow and has a good rhyme.
The lines written at the last stanza are my favorite lines.
Thank you for the read and for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
732
732
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello K.T.Lauren,
I love your poem.
It is so full of life and the wishful thinking.
You made me smile reading the lines where the famous songs of the equally famous band were written.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Warm Summer Nights"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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733
Review of LOOKING AHEAD  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello mimi,
An article that is well-written and well-presented.
This expresses your deep love of this country and its people.
An opinion of an intellectual person with a loving heart.
The last paragraph is most meaningful and very inspiring.
Thank you for sharing.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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734
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello logan,
A poetry from the heart.
My suggestion:
The caption below the poetry:
"that is eteranal and loving"
Please change the word eteranal to ...eternal.
"i love you, i felt down and out"
Please capitalize the letter I
The poem has a good flow and inspiring.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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735
Review of Hope  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Taya,
I love the title simply because I am a firm believer of the word "Hope"
I admire how you expresses the wonderful words that completed this poetry.
My suggestion:
The caption below the title:
"Something happy and inspriational."
Please change the word inspriational to....inspirational
"i lay, i sleep, i weep"
Please capitalize the letter I
I lay, I sleep, I weep
Thank you for the joyful read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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736
Review of Journey Together  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Iniyaazh,
A free-verse poem that expresses life's journey with someone destined to be holding hand in hand, facing life as in united we stand, divided we fall.
Nice flow of thoughts.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Journey Together"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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737
Review of Don't Worry Mom  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again ToddF,
This is a lovely prose.
Touching as well as inspiring.
The last line is most meaningful.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Don't Worry Mom"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of My Friend  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello ToddF,
This is an emotional piece.
I believe there is still a continuation to this and surely your writings were clouded with your emotions that you stop it right after the word "GOD"
Yes, a friend is always and will always be a friend.
We can always pray for the souls of our dearly departed for them to rest in peace and we can move on with our lives keeping them and their memories in our hearts.
Thank you for sharing "My Friend"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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739
Review of Only a Portrait  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello sammijeet,
This truly made me wonder too. Funny ..hahhahha..
A very intriguing story behind the poetry.
I enjoy reading your poem or prose.
I admire your imagination.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Only a Portrait"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Not so Sweet  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello marcusi,
The title is very intriguing and it captures my interest.
I like the story and I admire how you concluded it with hope.
A story about friendship and the secret love that was revealed in the day of the
hearts.
It has a good flow and yes, the intiguing title fits for the chosen words that completed this beautiful "Not So Sweet"
Thank you for the great read.
Write On.
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741
Review of ALL ABOUT ME  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Mousie,
AMEN !
I admire this very inspiring and touching piece.
My suggestion:
When I was new at this awesome community, I used to write in capital letters, then I received constructive and friendly reviews not to write them in all capital letters and it worked for me and it improved my skills, in this connection, I suggest to please not to write this in all capital letters.
"No man can squash my joy
GOD gave it to me
And only He can take it away."
All in one, I admire your strong faith.
Thank you for sharing your work.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again Redtowrite,
A great author of short stories is now sharing a free-verse poem whose story behind the poetry is nostalgic and emotional.
The poem has a good flow and surely a lot of people can relate especially the last
line that expresses an inspiring "Letting Go" of someone being loved.
Another job well-done.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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743
Review of My Dog: Ozzie  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello kjdauncey,
Nice name for a dog. I believe you are a blessing to each other.
My suggestion in this work:
"he has een with myself"
Please change this to:
he has been with myself
"has recieved plenty of treats"
Please change the word recieved to...received
has received plenty of treats,
"im unwell"
Please change this to :
I'm unwell.
"childs mouth"
Please put an apostrophe in the word child's
child's mouth
Thank you for sharing to us your wonderful dog.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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744
Review of The Box  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello blue jellybaby,
I love reading short mystery stories and you truly captured my interest word after
word, line after line.
My suggestion in this work:
"One minute I was stood talking to my friend,"
Please change the word stood to...standing
"One minute I was standing talking to my friend,
"I approached the man stood behind the stand"
Please change this to:
I approached the man who stood behind the stand.
Thank you for sharing this interesting "The Box"
Write On.
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745
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello jjseabird,
The title expresses a questioning heart.
The chosen words/lines fit for the given title.
My suggestion in this work:
"Recieved, not judged,......."
Please change the word Recieved to.....Received
Received not judged,
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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746
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Simona Rich,
I am an early bird thus your title captures my interest.
Very clever .
The truth is, I am for the four strategies but not the last strategy, simply because
I believe that the truth will always matter.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Simonarich,
This is informative and very useful as well as helpful.
The title is truly captivating especially to busy people and to those who wish to reach their goals and maximize their potentials.
Thank you for sharing this to all of us.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Love's Too Blind  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello musique,
The story behind the poetry is deeply emotional.
A relationship that did not turn-out so well.
Very good at the beginning and the true colors of the heart was being exposed
that caused the end of it.
My suggestion is for the title:
Love was Blind...possibly you may change this to :
Love Is Blind
This reminds me of the comment of my daughter in a very unhappy relationship that her best friend had years ago, she said :
"Love is not blind, only the lovers refuse to see"
Thank you for sharing your poetry and yes, writing our emotions can make us feel better as in refreshed to start anew.
See you again.,
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of THE PROMISE  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Allie,
A very nice story of true love and friendship that was being sealed with a promise. A story with a sad ending and it is deeply emotional.
The first paragraphs sounded like a lovely prose of two children so full of life.
Memories linger forever in this beautiful friendship.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "THE PROMISE"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello again Redtowrite,
This is well-written and well-presented and you always give a captivating title in your works, like this "A Messenger In Rags"
Written with all honesty and there is great wisdon in this story.
Thank you once again for another great read.
See you again.
Write On.
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