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Review of Deception  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello ariesprincess,
It is always a painful experience when the person that we give all our love would deceive us.
The pain will always be deep.
The message of this poetry is deeply emotional.
My suggestion:
"I have to say good bye now that I see"
Please change the words good bye to one word , goodbye
"I have to say goodbye now that I see
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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852
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Professor Moriarty,
This is a brilliant piece for a 55-words-story.
Yes, Rated 18 +
I admire how you put the perfect words to complete such a very short story.
The drama of life and nicely presented in your own exquisite way.
Thank you for sharing "IN QUEST OF MANLINESS"
Write On.
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853
Review of The Song of Life  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Koyel,
The title offers great expectations.
A lovely work with beautiful rhythm and rhyme.
Nice, Nice, Nice !
A beautiful piece.
One more thing :
CONGRATULATIONS ! I am happy for you and I am so glad to see the yellow color of your port .
You well-deserved it, my friend.
WOW...
See you again.
Write On.
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854
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello maheen,
I like the title and I admire your spirit.
My suggestion:
The title :
Please capitalize as in:
A Positive Thought
Also the words "i hate you" and " i think"
Please capitalize the letter I
I look forward to read more of your works.
Surely there will be more that you can share.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
God Bless..
855
855
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Cosmic Chameleon,
A poetry with a horrible message and it fits the given genre.
My suggestion:
The first line in every stanza, please put a comma,
"Cursing, raving, spouting,
Clawing, scraping, beating
Also the third line of every stanza, please put a comma,
"the madness, the nightmare, the rotting dark
the suffering, the bleeding, the rotting
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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856
Review of The Lord's Prayer  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello AMReese,
Fiction or non-fiction, this is a very touching story as well as a very convincing one.
I admire the characterization and yes...there's a little editing needed but all in one, this is a beautiful story.
The title is great too.
A story so sacred, so powerful.
I am so glad to have read this.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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857
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello A.K. Thorn,
Interesting topic.
Based on the result I can see there's a lot of authors who participated in this poll.
Very relevant topic to all of us here who are enjoying this modern technology of computers.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
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858
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello DogWatchingMan,
The title is so captivating.
This is fun.
Yes...it made me very curious why such title was given.
Reading between the lines of this well-written and well-presented short story, I had a different reaction with the
comment of the owner.
Hahhhaa ..I admire how you concluded this "Never Take The Green Ones"
Thank you for the read and for the laughter of course!
Write On.
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859
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jack Malloy,
I enjoy reading this prose.
The presentation is unique in a dialogue form and I find your work very artistic in every way.
This is fascinating.
I am impressed !
A job well-done.
Thank you for sharing "The Price of Forever"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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860
Review of Dear God  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello opbroeko,
A poetry that also serves as a conversation with the Most High, telling Him everything in your heart and soul.
A very touching work.
The last two lines made this work a Perfect One.
Thank you for sharing "Dear God"
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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861
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello wdearth,
This is an interesting poll. There are many pet lovers here surely there will be a lot to join in this poll.
I wanted to answer two animals but only one is needed. haaaaahhahhahahA.
Thank you for the joyful read and for the opportunity for me to join this poll.
See you again.
Write On.
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862
Review of Secret Life  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Kbien,
Yes, this is really something that can make me think, especially the last two lines.
I wonder what the secret would be.
Anyway, I enjoy reading your work.
It is really very intriguing and interesting.
Thank you for sharing "Secret Life"
Write On.
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863
Review of Our Guest Book  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Payitforward,
The thoughtful gesture of sending the flowers is highly appreciated.
This is also a very fascinating guest book that expresses sincereness and friendliness.
Thank you for sharing and for the opportunity for me to join this wonderful forum.
See you again.
Write On and God Bless.
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864
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | N/A (Unratable.)
Hello again Fiona,
I explore your port and it makes me so glad .
You have wonderful works here and you also have a well-organized portfolio.
A very talented author.
You are truly blessed and I am happy for you.
I look forward to read more of your works.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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865
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello whitespiritcian,
The title made me very curious.
A short essay, biographical and written very sincerely.
Being truthful and that makes you a very happy and smiling person and that is who and what you are.
Keep smiling...
Keep writing and keep posting too.
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866
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello stef,
Wow ... a wide-reader. You have brilliant choices here. How I wish I could also read all of these books
that you are listing here.
Enjoy more reading and enjoy more books.
Thank you for sharing your wonderful listing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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867
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Rai,
A well-written poetry and descriptive of who or what the marines are..
I admire how you completed this poem with those wonderfully chosen lines that fit for the given title.
I have nothing to add and nothing to correct.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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868
Review of This I Believe  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello again Judity,
A monologue. Biographical.
Short but it shares a big impact to the readers.
Wisely written.
Very convincing and fascinating especially the last line, to quote:
"I believe in the magic of a mouse."
Reading your brilliant piece, you made me remember a very lovely song with some lyrics:
"I believe for someone who goes astray, someone will come to show the way"
Thank you very much for a joyful read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
God Bless You More In Every Way !
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869
Review of Solace  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello LaMourDuCiel,
An emotional piece.
A well-written poetry with a captivating title added with a very touching caption.
A sentimental journey as in a very sad story.
Descriptive and it expresses so much pain, the deepest pain.
A free-verse, and I have nothing to edit.
The presentation is great.
Thank you for sharing "Solace"
WRITE ON.
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870
Review of True Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Amanda,
Your own personal way of describing love and I find this work so wonderful.
The poem has a good flow.
My suggestion:
The third line,
"& true love is the perfect person"
Please do not abbreviate the word ....and
and true love is the perfect person
Thank you for sharing "Love's Love"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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871
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello STORMY INDIAN,
A poetry of a questioning soul.
Yes, I agree with the title simply because lif eitself is a mystery.
So as not to worry about, leave it just the way it is and if you know the Serenity Prayer then this answers to all
the questions of your heart.
"Lord, please give me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change and the wisdom to know the difference"
My suggestion in this work:
"oh lord"
Please change this to :
oh, Lord
"to solve it more complicated mysteries....."
Please change this to :
to solve it, the more complicated mysteries..."
"cant"
Please put an apostrophe........can't
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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872
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Rell the Writer,
A short poem with an attached great lesson into it. Five-lines poetry that said it all.
Oh...what's done cannot be undone.
Brilliant lines to complete this poetry.
I agree !
Thank you for sharing "Trying to touch a star"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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873
Review of Drawn Together  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Working and Writing,
The quality bonding time of father and child. Full of exciting experience.
I admire your work. The presentation is great and it has a sense of humor too and a lot of fun.
It is truly a joyful read to me.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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874
Review of Below the hill  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Kare Enga,
A poetry that expresses a story combination or a comparison of a hill and a life.
The message is philosophical and emotional.
This is well-written and nicely presented.
Deep and touching.
Thank you for sharing "Below the hill"
My best regards.
Write On.
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875
Review of Broken Heart  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello eternal poet,
How sad ! The sentimental journey in a painful love story through a well-written poetry.
The chosen words fit for the given title.
This is like a very sad movie and the audience cannot help but cry.
Thank you for sharing this emotional piece.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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