Hello Garth,
A poem with a very captivating title.
The poem has a good flow and it has a good rhyme.
My suggestion:
"Built by you, built be me ?"
Please change this to :
Built by you, built by me ?
The last two lines are most meaningful.
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
Hello gemini,
A very interesting title. There is a good flow of the written essay.
My suggestion:
The last line, it has no period and no comma, possibly there is still a continuation of this work.
I look forward to read the full context of "The National Stuttering Association"
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Redtowrite,
The title offers a great read.
The poem expresses a historical message as well as cultural.
It has a good flow and the story behind the poetry explains fully of what is this all
about.
A very wonderful write.
Thank you for sharing "Treasures of the Lord"
Write On.
Hello pookie,
YES !
I agree with you.
This is a very good opinion and this is written with all sincerity.
Nobody's perfect because nobody is.
I admire your opinion and you put the right words into it.
Thank you for sharing as well as for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello loki,
A love poetry in a Haiku form.
Yes...I agree ...."Love is in the air"
This is a beautiful poem that expresses a life full of life.
Possibly you can give a nice title for this wonderful work.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Jaiam,
In the three works of yours that I read today, there is a great connectedness with my life.
I believe that somewhere along the way God finds each moment very special
as I enjoy reading your creations that made me reflect with my deep understanding of the faith in my heart and soul.
I believe that the Holy Spirit is working and I PRAISE GOD MORE for this
very special day.
I feel so blessed reading them.Thank you very much.
See you again.
Write On.
Hello again,
I am a firm believer of the word HOPE and this poem touches my innermost
soul.
I wish to shout "AMEN" after reading this very precious "A Father's Love"
A poem that for me sounds like a wonderful gospel song.
Yes ! to every line written.
Thank you once again for a very fruitful read.
Write On.
Greetings to you Jaiam,
This is a very meaningful and touching song with a beautiful message.
It also serves as a conversation or a heart to heart talk with the Lord.
I am so glad to have read this.
Truly beautiful.
Thank you for sharing this.
Write On.
Hello Book sponge,
Truly a short story whose written lines fit for the given title.
The story is well-written and the presentation is wonderful.
It has a good flow.
You made me smile reading "The end for now"
This means there is a possible continuation.
Thank you for sharing "Understudy"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello kitty,
This is an emotional piece.
A poetry that expresses a true feelings of a heart that's being hurt.
My suggestion:
"My legs wont move..."
Please put an apostrophe in the word won't
My legs won't move
Do not worry, be happy. It is not your loss. It is the loss of the one who dumped you. All is well and Smile !
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Knight Master,
I am a morning person and the title captivates my interest to read your work.
Reading at the three lines these look like a code that needs to be decipher.
I look forward to read it in its standard writings of Poetry.
I also look forward to read more of your works.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you horses,
A prose that expresses of a situation where friendship matters and is lost.
My suggestion :
"freindship"
Please change this to........friendship
"more then"
Please change this to : more than
"witch"
Please change this to.............which
Thank you for sharing "just out of place"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello again jessie,
If not for the misspelled words, this poem is truly beautiful.
The flow of thought has a continuity and the message is clear.
My suggestion:
"Some times I wonder can you see me to ?"
Please change this to :
Sometimes I wonder can you see me too ?
Ma by .......please change this to.....Maybe
"Your to beautiful"
Please change this to :
You're too beautiful
Thank you for sharing "Shining star"
Write On.
Hello JudyB,
This is a story that I believe a lot of authors can relate.
Yes, those were the days and the memories linger.
I agree with your words "I can't believe I did that !"
I have nothing to edit and somehow reading this made me remember those
silly things I did myself when I was a child.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
Hello frozenghost,
This is a very touching War poetry.
It expresses a very uneasy experience and the bravest of hearts as one has to undergo in doing such a very courageous work. To fight for liberty of one's
country.
The poem has a good flow and I find it highly impressive.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
Hello elize,
The story behind the poetry is very intriguing.
My suggestion :
The title:
The swadow
Please change this to :
The shadow
and please change the following words to :
big gar............................bigger
breve...............................brave
shat.................................shut
Ma by...............................Maybe
vised................................visit
Once corrected I believe this is a very interesting poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Rudi,
Welcome to Writing.Com.
Surely you'll love it here.
Thank you for sharing your very informative and useful as well as helpful article that is well-written and the subject matter was fully explained.
I look forward to read more of your works.
Keep writing and keep posting.
God Bless !
Greetings Glavin,
The title expresses a sentimental journey.
A poem so full of drama in the real sense of existence.
Sad as in sad.
It has a good flow and I did not notice any error at all.
Thank you for sharing "Lost Dream"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello autumn,
The title is so captivating as well as intriguing thus made me more interested to read your work.
Biographical and written with all sincereness.
My suggestiion:
In writing a story , please always capitalize the letter I.
I will just
I just
I didn't
and so on...
And yes, writing is the best way to release all these emotions, so thank
you for sharing and keep writing and keep posting.
Hello RatDog,
This is YUMMY !
Full of fun too especially instruction number 1.
Amusing, interesting, amazing, fascinating !
Perfect for lunch or dinner, AHA !
You gave me an idea of what to prepare.
Thank you for sharing this special work.
Write On.
Hello tonilove,
The story behind the poetry is so sentimental. Very touching work.
Poor Polly !
My suggestion:
"All I get is funny looks form kids"
Please change the word form to .....from
All I get is funny looks from kids
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Dilly,
I like this poem.
It is so full of life and it expresses true joy and wonderful moments.
This is well-written and well-presented.
Fun-filled poetry, true to its given title, the chosen words fit in.
Thank you for sharing "Summertime Remembered"
Write On.
Hello River,
A political, philosophical, historical and let me describe it also as a heroical as well prophetical message being combined in this uniquely written and highly impressive work.
It has also given an importance of a connectedness of our yesterday, today and tomorrow.
Yes....time is the essence of this poem added with briliance in the choice of words to complete this work of art.
Thank you for the insight.
Thank you for sharing and for the read too.
My best regards and I salute you for a job well-done.
WRITE ON.
Hello Akira,
Rated 18+
The title is very intriguing.
Reading between the lines I can understand fully the caption written below the poem's title.
The poem has a good flow and what a journey of the "Tattered Angel"
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE On.
Hello BookGoddess,
A two-lines poetry and I truly admire it.
There is great wisdom in each line, it is like a food for thought.
I also like the title that offers great concern and well-wishes.
I look forward to read more of your work, possibly a longer poetry.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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