Hello Gorja Blanch,
Greetings from the Philippines !
There is great wisdom in your poem.
A brilliant idea to tell a very good friend as a word of advice.
I admire the chosen words and every line written.
Very meaningful and touching.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
Hello Molly,
A wonderful introduction of a novel. I find this fantastic.
Very interesting title, another STAR TREK in the making, I believe so.
Good luck for the coming chapters.
Thank you for a glimpse of "Destination...Future"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello crazycarly,
This is an emotional work. The title alone offers sadness. A sentimental journey.
My suggestion:
"twas loss that"
Please put an apostrophe in the word t'was
t'was loss that
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello summbalbutt,
I like the title very much. It is so full of insight and very powerful.
It is well-written and well-presented.
I did not notice any error at all.
Perfect and brilliant editorial.
Thank you for sharing "A Word is a World"
You're Right !
Write On.
Hello asnoted,
A precious poetry with a philosophical message.
Very deep in the real sense.
It is well-written and well-presented.
I admire it from the staret until the very end.
Thank you for sharing "There Are No Gifts'
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Tim,
This poem has a very good rhyme and a very powerful message.
It conveys a very courageous spirit and a brave heart.
I agree with the chosen lines and I admire the poetry more as you added a wisdom from one of the great leaders, Gandhi.
Thank you for the read and my best regards.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello again Darbonne,
A combination of crime and detective investigative story.
This part is well-presented and well-written.
There is a very good flow of thoughts.
Like I said while reading at the prologue, this can be a future bestseller andf a very good piece for a movie.
I truly admire your talent.
God bless you in allyour undertakings.
I have nothing to edit. I suggest you keep on writing and posting and use your talent to its fullest.
WRITE ON.
Hello again Darbonne,
The first part.
I admire how you presented the story as a a script wherein the dialogue was wriiten and presented wisely.
Easy to present to the movie producers in the future.
This part I get to know more of the characters of the story.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Darbonne,
A very full of action prologue.
I expert more of action, thrill and suspense in the coming chapters.
Reading the title it offers great expectations of a suspense-thriller book that can best qualify for a top grosser
movie in the future.
Good luck for the continuation as well as for the completion of "Bloody Money"
Write On.
Hello Andy,
It is always so good to love and be loved.
This is the beautiful message of this very happy poetry.
My suggestion:
The title "Its your Love"
Please put an apostrophe in the word "It's"
It's your Love
"And i feel you are holding me tight"
Please capitalize the letter I
And I feel you are holding me tight
"All because you said its true"
Please put an apostrophe in the word it's
All because you said it's true
Also teh caption below the title:
"This is wot love can do to you"
Please change this to:
This is what love can do to you.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep living and keep loving.
Keep writing and keep posting too.
Hello Sarge,
I admire the story behind the poetry.
It expresses a VERY COURAGEOUS SPIRIT.
I like the title too.
My suggestion is at the last stanza, the word imprisionment, please change it to :
imprisonment
Thank you for sharing "I Run Free"
WRITE ON.
Hello Sarge,
A very warm welcome and a very easy to join group.I wish there will be a lot of authors or poets who will join in this group.
My suggestion:
"welcome to the Next generation Poets Society"
Please change this to :
Welcome to the Next Generation Poets Society !
There are no group requirements, except that you must notify all members when you create a new poem.
I will do the same.
So, have fun and I hope to see some great poems.
Please emphasize the period, the comma, and the exclamation point.
WRITE ON.
Hello catrien,
This is well-written and well-presented.
Very touching and deeply emotional.
Perfect answer to the captivating title "Yes"
I have nothing to edit.
A very sad story knowing how painful it is to lose someone that you truly love.
I can relate to the pain in my heart as I lost a brother.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
Hello sahara,
A very interesting and captivating title.
The chosen words and lines fit for the given title.
My favorite lines are the last three lines and they are most meaningful and touching, to quote :
"Don't let them tell you
Don't let them control you
You're someone they'll never be."
WELL SAID !
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
Hello Professor Moriarty,
The story with a sad ending.
Thank you for bringing me into another place/country of India, and the fishing village where Abdul lives.
The story has a good flow and it expresses a man's dream, ideals and sadness at the end.
My suggestion, but still the same I admire the creativeness of "THE VERDICT"
"And He could not wait for his baby to grow up"
Please change the word He to .........he.
And he could not wait for his baby to grow up........
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
Hello Dazzled,
I love acrostic poetry.
This is a poem written with all truthfulness and honesty.
Yes, life is hard but as long as there is hope there is tomorrow and "ALL IS WELL"
I enjoy reading your very meaningful and touching "Life is Hard"
I admire how you concluded it :
"Doing what you love makes it all worthwhile."
That's the spirit.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello Evan,
I like the creativeness.
A very interesting story about John and his dreams or nightmares or whatever it will be as you add on more twists and turns of the story.
It has a good flow and it is perfect.
Good luck for the continuation.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Ben,
Congratulations for the blue color of your portfolio.
Congratulations for winning first place three times and you truly deserved it.
This is a spirit-filled and most meaningful "Beside Quiet Waters"
This is highly admirable work of a very knowledgeable poet.
Thank you for sharing and for the read.
WRITE ON.
Hello Koyel,
Reading the title I can imagine a horrifying story ahead.
True to its given title the story behind the poetry really fits.
The poem has a good flow.
My suggestion:
"On being aked the reason for her cry"
Please change the word aked to ........asked
On being asked the reason for her cry
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
With this review is my best regards.
Greetings to you,
I like the title. It offers great expectations.
I admire the story it speaks of the truth.
The characters are great. The dialogue is perfect.
I did not notice any error at all.
I am happy with the conclusion.
I wish you win in the contest.
Thank you for sharing "Promises of Tomorrow"
WRITE ON.
Hello allanstales,
I am fascinated by the title as well as what you have written.
Biographical and fun.
My suggestion:
The title:
"A Passionate Mans Write To Life"
Please put an apostrophe in the word Man's
A Passionate Man's Write to Life
TYPOS:
extrodinary..........please change it to ........extraordinary
storey.......................Please change it to.................................story
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Lani,
The title is captivating.
The poem has a good flow and I appreciate the sudden twist at the end, to quote:
"but how does one
mend a broken heart ?"
A forgiving heart is the answer, because forgiveness is always divine.
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
Hello Shy,
You are very lucky to have a friend who truly cares for you as a father.
A poem full of love and respect and a special dedication from the heart to this particular person.
The poem is free-verse and has a good flow.
My suggestion is not at the poem but at the caption below the title of this poem:
"I have made this for my freind..."
Please change the word freind to....friend
I have made this for my friend....
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
Hello Nichole,
The caption below the title of this work made me smile and made me most willing and interested to read
"The Making of Me"
A biographical work that expresses a young person with so much interests in Arts and in life.
Great ! I am happy for you.
My suggestion:
"sophmore english, Advanced Junior english"
Please change this to:
sophomore English, Advanced Junior English
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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