Hello anastasia,
The title is so intriguing. You made me very curious to read about it.
The nurse and playing God at the same time.
Horrible...
The story has a good flow.The creativy is great.
My suggestion:
"incase he regained consciousness"
Please change this to:
in his he regained consciousness.
Is this for a contest ?
Good Luck.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello Mariah,
Eight-lines poetry and I find it so inspiring.
The title is for me so inviitng as I myself appreciates the "Mist"
The last two lines are my favorite lines, to quote :
"following a twisting, heedless code
that needs from gloomy night into shining day."
Perfect.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Hello Soilder Poet,
There is great wisdom in your work.
The flow is there as well as the rhythm and rhyme.
I admire each line that completed this poetry.
The conclusion is so meaningful.
Thank you for sharing "Bonds that Break"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Richard.
Children's poetry and dedicated to the parents and grandparents.
Very thoughtful.
My suggestion:
"We was inclined"
Please change it to :
We were inclined
"out of my minds"
Please change it to:
out of our minds
"our minds was in shards'
Please change it to:
our minds were in shards
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
Hello Sarge,
The theme of the poem is fun and full of action. I can picture a NASA activity and here you are the astronaut inside a space ship ready to take off.
My suggestion, but still the same I admire your work:
One, it's done !
Thank you for sharing "Count Down To Lift Off "
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello trkerr,
WOW !
A very happy poem.
My favorite lines:
"When I'm with him, The time stops
And all the problems are taken care of.
Life is free, life is happy,and above all
Life is Grand"
Beautiful, fascinating lines ...
Precious "The handsome guy of my dreams"
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Hello again Vipulya,
This is an emotional piece.
The story behind this poem is sad as the problem arises.
My suggestion in this work:
"To my Friends..."
Please change this to :
To my friends
"I ddnt cry"
Please change this to :
I didn't cry
"This Broken heart"
Please change this to:
This broken heart
Thank you for the read.
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Hello Princess,
The tornado and the family's house is not safe to stay. The basement of the parents house in the best place to hide but it is not near. What a problem and what a suspense !
My suggestion in this story:
everyones
Please put an apostrophe, everyone's
mum and dads
Please change this to:
mum and dad's
treachrous wind
Please change this to :
treacherous wind
Thank you for sharing "One Day ":
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Hello vipulya,
How blessed you are for having this Love in your life.
The season of all seasons and the best of season is the "New Season" with love.
It is always a wonderful feeling when you are in love and being loved, is the essence of this poetry.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello SeanFear,
Inspired by a photo and here is a wonderful and beautiful poem.
The creativity is great.
The poem has a good flow and speaks of love.
The lines at the last stanza are my favorite lines.
PERFECT !
Thank you for sharing "Mother Hugs Daughter"
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Hello Nancy,
The title offers great expectations.
I was thinking differently before reading the lines.
How nice is the story behind this poetry.
You made me smile too reading the last three lines.
WOW !
I enjoy reading "Two Pairs of Slippers"
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Hello Aylanna,
The aroma of the most delicious pie reaches as far as the Philippines where I am reading and enjoying your
poem.
The treasured moments with your dearest mother making some labor of love in baking pies.
The poem is so precious, so well-written and I enjoy its rhythm and rhyme.
It has a good flow too.
You made me hungry and craving for these delicious pies.
Very convincing "I Remember"
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello Diana,
A loving tribute to your mother on a special occasion of Mother's Day.
The story behind the poem is ver interesting.
The lines at the last stanza are my favorite lines and most meaningful.
My suggestion :
Nakid
Please change this to .........Naked
oyu
Please change this to...........you
dont
Please put an apostrophe
don't
Thank you for sharing yesterday.
WRITE ON.
Hello Madeiline,
I enjoy reading your poem that is so full of life.
Alphabet in an acrostic form of poetry.
WOW !
You are a very talented poet.
I did not notice any error I only have high admiration of your work.
Thank you for sharing "August" in an acrostic alphabet.
Write On.
Hello Hunter's Moon,
The title is so inviting knowing and believing that happiness is contagious.
The family precious family bonding time.
The story within the story and the story itself expresses warmth and joy.
I have nothing to edit.
PERFECT AS IT IS !
Thank you for sharing "The Happy Story"
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Greetings to you J,
The love affair described in a well-written and well-presented poetry. It expresses a wonderful moments shared
together and the wondering mind at the end...
The sudden twist as the conclusion added more color to the "Midnight Sea"
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello tepar,
A poem in a very unique presentation, in a letter form and a tribute to someone you truly love.
The story behind the poetry is also very nicely and uniquely done and a connectedness of yesterday, today and tomorrow.
I admire your work that expresses your individuality.
Thank you for sharing "Dear..."
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Hello babalu,
The power of forgiveness is the essence of the story behind this free-verse poetry.
As in "What a great release ! "
The last three lines were the most touching lines that gives the heart the instant healing after all those years
of pain.
"Fathers Day"
Please put an apostrophe in the word Father's
The most meaningful Father's Day in a lifetime.
Thank you for sharing "28 Years"
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Hello Tim Chiu,
A poem on how to advice.
I admire each written line.
It has a good flow and a lovely rhythm and rhyme.
It also speaks a part of you as in Biographical in some ways.
Perfect combination and a wonderful creation.
Thank you once again for another worthwhile read.
WRITE ON.
Hello Tim Chiu,
Reading between the lines I must say you are a Master or a Champion of this game.
Great poem so full of specific instructions in the most artful way and majestic way.
Thank you for sharing "The Sports of Bowling:Needs Pin Action"
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Hello writerzblok,
A creative poetry that described a horrible situation or a tragedy that shocks the whole world and you are documenting your observations through your work of art.
The story behind the poetry is full of fear and deeply emotional.
Thank you for sharing "Here We Stand"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Koyel,
A poem that putting "A Mother's Love" to pedestal.
Being a mother myself, I agree with every chosen word, lines that was written.
Very thoughtful and very admirable free-verse poem.
PERFECT as in :
Well-said.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Traveling Dan,
You made me smile reading your final note.
An essay written with all honesty and sincerity.
Yes, times have changed. The gays are much open nowadays and in a way accepted by society. I believe there are still some sectors who are against some issues about them, but for me , let us all stop being hypocrites !
We must welcome all gays with all our heart's and mind's understanding and mostly because they are a part of the human race.
I know a lot of gays who are very much successful in the fields they have chosen and plays a big role in making
this world a better place to live, so why deprived them to be happy ?
In answer to the question, "Is Gay Stiil An Insult ?" yes ....to some but not for me.
My suggestion:
Please put a question mark in the title:
Is Gay Still an Insult ?
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Violet Dawn,
Having a diabetic husband, the title captured my interest.
The article is well-written and well-presented and contents are fully understood.
You made me smile reading the last two lines.
My husband is back to being healthy and enjoying every food that he likes to eat and the coca -cola that he loves to drink, but everything is done in moderation. A little of this and a little of that.
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
Hello J.T. Moore,
I admire the candidness of this poetry.
This is what really a poem from the heart is all about.
My suggestion:
"when it has more problems then solutions?"
Please change the word then to ....than
when it has more problems than solutions
I find your work amusing.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
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