Hello Anna,
This is fantastic..Very nice idea...There is a contest like this is our country's television noon show.
My suggestion:
Please ask more questions. hhahhahha !
It's fun.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to answer this Online Quiz "Name The Song"
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Hello SummerGrace,
An inspiring song. It is like a ray of sunshine in a gloomy day that brightens the spirit.
Knowing that He is always there..
A song of complete trust.
My suggestion:
"more then you can handle"
This words were being used three times in the song.
Please change the word then to.....than
more than you can handle
Thank you for sharing this song "Never Alone"
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Hello Ermacion,
A beautiful prose blended with special quotes from your favorite authors and I love the way you concluded it.
My suggestion:
The title "Rainy Saterdays"
Please change it to "Rainy Saturdays"
"To fully comprehend all that was happing"
Please change it to :
To fully comprehend all that was happening...
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello Maggie,
Nice poem and I like the color combination of each letters.
The very inviting sea. I took a quick splash today. Then suddenly the waves became bigger and bigger like
the way you described it here in your Haiku poetry.
It is always a wonderful day for me everytime I enjoy swimming and playing with the majestic waves and all
the ocean's glory.
Your poetry added more joys to me.
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello StarMax,
There is great wisdom in this poem. The message of positiveness. In any relationship there is always a situation that two minds cannot agree. As long as both keep the hearts united as one, then there is no storm
even how strong it is can stand firmly between the two. Love will always prevail. The most important thing to do is to keep the communication open and there must always be a forgiving heart.
I admire this poem from the start to the end.
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Hello chefnessr,
The beginning of your poetry.
It is philosophical and is well-written.
It has also a good flow.
My suggestion:
"My smooth faults magified with...."
Please change it to :
My smooth faults magnified with..
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Brigette,
Part one-Chapter one.
This is a narrative form of story.Fiction.
An action or a suspense thriller being an undercover story.
My suggestion(very minimal)
"and this Is the closest"
Please do not capitalize the word Is:
and this is the closest
Thank you for sharing and good luck for the continuation.
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Hello Alesia,
Written in 1995 as a grade school student.
This is a very thoughtful, loving and caring work.
A nicely-written prose and very good that you were able to keep it and mostly that you are sharing it here to all
of us.
Your teacher surely loves it as it was a part of the fair. I love it too.
Thank you for sharing "A Day as a Dog"
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Hello e,
After reading your work now I can fully understand why such a title and the caption below the title was written.
This is deeply emotional.
Sadness and anger blended together.
My suggestion:
"the april showers"
Please change it to :
the April showers
"now i'm here"
Please change it to:
now I'm here
Thank you for the read.
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Hello Garnet,
Wow !
The begnning of the month gives you the inspiration and the motivation to set goals in your life for the whole
month.
I am happy for you.
Yes, Goals are important because they give us the will and the determination to accomplish something very
meaningful in our journey.
Thank you for sharing and surely you can realize all your goals as I read how you brilliantly concluded this.
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Hello mysteryanonymous,
I love this....I admire how you started it with a warning.. That gives me more reason to read on.
I believe this will eventually be a wonderful novel that every page I really want to read until the end.
Good luck for the continuation:
My suggestion:
"i have fully..."
Please capitalize the letter I
"lets just say"
Please put an apostrophe in the word let's
"lunch breaks"
Please change it to:
lunch break
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Hello MAKAVELI,
A poem so full of love to one particular person who made you learn to trust again and what a great reason to fall
in love.
This poem is lovely and very meaningful.
I wish that the person that this poem is dedicated can read this and love is being shared in a most fulfilling way.
Nice title too.
"No matter how it wont happen"
Please put an apostrophe in the word won't.
Thank you for the read.
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Hello giron,
A deeply emotional piece written from the heart.
Sentimental and full of love.
Yes... a friiend is always a treasure in our lives, this is how I understand this very meaningful and sad poetry.
Thank you for sharing your work.
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Hello catty,
This is a beautiful and so emotional story about Jon-Jon,
You have a very kind soul.
I love cats and at the moment we have nine in the house and each cat has its own trait.
The story has a good flow and very touching. I can understand your feelings when Jon-Jon was gone.
Thank you for sharing "Jon-Jon's Peace"
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Hello Ayesha,
I like the story behind the poetry.
A short and a very entertaining work.
It has also a good rhyme.
My suggestion at the title:
"the singer who couldnt sing"
Please put an apostrophe in the word could'nt
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello i love writing,
I am sorry about your loss.
A poem so full of love to a dearest sister and a friend. The last two lines are most touching lines of your work.
My suggestion:
"Soometimes"
Please change it to : Sometimes
"everyones"
Please put an apostrophe:
everyone's
Thank you for sharing your work.
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Hello sarge,
A new group of poets in this awesome community. Good luck and more power to this group. I will check once in a while if what will be the activities in this group in the coming days and I hope I could join.
More power and keep up the good work.
GOD BLESS.
Hello Sarge,
The horrifying effect of the irresponsible gun owners or gun users. This is how I understood this very creative
"Bang"
My suggestion :
"Bodys in the"
Please change it to :
Bodies in the ( possibly you can add one word into it )
"To many shots"
to many people"
Please change it to:
Too many shots
too many people
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Hello Calypso,
Precious "A Circle of Friends"
Nice choice of characters.
You made me smile reading the sound effect of "Awwoooooowww"
Very creative and it is a joy to read.
Thank you for sharing this short story that the children enjoys as well as the adults.
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Hello EMStilson,
The first glance that takes a lifetime. Wow ! How great is the value of this first glance.
A romantic poetry so filled with life, with deep emotion.
This sounds like a happy song to me.
Great work.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Hello Jello,
A poetry that expresses of the poet's love for mountains.
The poem has a good flow and it also conveys the importance of mountains as a part of God's wonderful creations.
My suggestion:
"mountains are the place to go"
Please change it to:
mountains are the places to go.
The last two lines are my favorite lines.
Thank you for sharing..
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Hello Fel,
I enjoyed exploring your port.
I know that a way to a man's or woman's heart is through his or her stomach. And I also know that the way to know the man's or woman's heart is through his or her poetry.
That is why I do love reading poems because of the connectedness of the heart and soul.
Thank you for the wonderful time reading your works/poems. You are such a very talented person.
See you again.
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Hello Fel,
A woman's view about this day, Sunday.
Ohhhh.....This is amusing and so true especially the second stanza.
My suggestion:
"And I learned from Sundays past"
Please put an apostrophe in the word Sunday's
And I learned from Sunday's past
Yes, experience is really a best teacher.
Thank you for sharing "Super Sunday"
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I love the rhyme of this poetry.
It wipes out the Monday blues.
Reading between the lines, it proves that Monday is not everyone's favorite and this includes you.
This is understandable because after the week-end here comes Monday and everyone is still having
the longing of extending the holiday.
Very creative.
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Hello again,
The true feelings of the heart and the importance of this five-letter-word, truth.
Another emotional poetry that has a lot of anger of being hurt.
Good that you release all the emotions through poetry.
The last two lines? WHEW !
Let go, let live and let love....and Let God !
Write On.
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