Hello again Fel,
This is deeply emotional.
It is well-written.
It has a good flow and I did not notice any error in it.
A poetry about a relationship that did not work out well.
It also expresses a feeling of sadness.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
Hello Fel,
An emotional poetry and it expresses the sentiments of the heart about this particular word.....it could be a feeling, a situation and I admire how you have the right words to fit its given title or topic.
The last four lines is very intriguing to me.
And so sad to note that it did not serve its purpose in one way or another.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello Neil,
A note and I like your positive spirit.
"I'm brilliant ! "
A strong affirmation of your whole being and I truly admire it.
I look forward to read the works of a brilliant writer.
Thank you the opportunity for me to read this note that offfers great expectations.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Sophie,
Reading between the lines it really fits the given title.
The poem has a good flow and it expresses a relationship that is like a game of hide and seek.
The last two line are most emotional.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
Hello xaleom,
Let me laugh to the fullest. I truly enjoy your work. Fascinating candidness. Very clever !
Philosophical as it is and I love it.
Please allow me to answer the question of what is the purpose of life ?
Is to enjoy life !
I have nothing to edit your work. I truly enjoyed reading it.
It brightens a very rainy day here in the Philippines.
WRITE ON.
Hello Ida,
This is unique and so fantastic. What a brilliant and wonderful idea. I admire you to have wonderful children who loves animals and have their own favorite pets.
Along with this review is a 20,000 gift points as donation.
Good luck and have fun everyone ...
God Bless..
Hello biddleconnie,
I love this cat story. I really do. I can relate in some other way.
We have nine cats in the house and one of them is Ben. He is black as in black is black with golden eyes.
Nobody wants to be near Ben, simply because the color is black. But among the cats , Ben is the smartest and Ben is my favorite.
"Blacky" is a very convincing story. I am so glad to have read this.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello airgirl,
The drama of life is the story behind the poetry. The title is very intriguing.
The poem has a good flow.
My suggestion in this work:
"Seperated by life....."
Please change the word Seperated to.........Separated
"to not know me "
Please change it to :
to not to know me
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
Hello Steven,
I was thinking, this must be a horror story or a story full of suspense as I read the first few lines.
Hahhahhaha! Poor, innocent little boy ....Good that the stranger told him that he was just kidding.
Nice story. Very realistic.
My suggestion(very minimal) but still the same I admire this work:
"no more than five or six years, old is sitting next to his dad."
Please put the comma after the word old not after the word years.
no more than five or six years old, is sitting next to his dad.
Thank you for sharing "Young Oblivion"
WRITE ON.
Hello Tim Chiu,
A poem that expresses so much positivenes and a full force of being united as one.
It expresses courage and bravery and warmth like the glorius sun extending its golden rays.
Very inspiring "A Force of One"
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello Austin,
Wow !
This is a fascinating work. Each line is wonderful itself.
I admire the way it was written and the conclusion is truly great:
"Loving me and calling me your friend"
Thank you for the sharing and for the joyful read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello pen2paper,
Very creative. Very realistic.
The story expresses a horrifying experience and wondering at the end.
Like a nightmare that makes the narrator of the story perspires and hoping that somebody would wake him or
her up.
A short story or a possible beginning of an interesting book.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello again,
The thrid part and a bit short and it is well-written and very intriguing.
The last three lines offers more suspense in the coming pages....
Well, not all are given this talent and potentials that you have. The capability of writing a wonderful fantasy story.
Use your talent/gift to its fullest and surely you will soon reap the rich rewards of writing.
I look forward to the completion of this book in your own God-given time.
Thank you for the great read.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello again,
Nice story. This chapter is a bit longer than the first one and I enjoyed a lot reading line after line,
paragraph after paragraph.
Interesting names/characters. I get to know some of them. Parker and Artemis....I guess are destined to
each other but I need to read the whole story...this is getting more and more interesting to me.
My suggestion:
"better fate then dying"
Please change it to :
better fate than dying
"his only daugther"
Please change this to:
his only daughter
"he was gorgous"
Please change it to :
he was gorgeous
See you next part..
Write On.
Hello Avitaria,
Wow !
This is brilliant.
This is a story that shows an example of your shining intelligence.
Reading between the lines I believe you are gifted with a great talent to complete this awesome "Trocia"
See you again as I surely look forward to read more of this story until the end.
WRITE ON.
Hello Skyfighter,
A well-written poetry.
The presentation is great.
The chosen words/lines fit for the given title.
A poem with a very sad message.
Emotional and very touching.
Thank you for sharing another of your best works.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Skyfighter,
Your faith and your your religion plays a great role in your life as I read between the lines of this meaningful
poetry.
The poem has a goof flow and it is a free-verse.
My suggestion:
"On the day of judgement"
Please change the word judgement to...judgment
On the day of judgment
Thank you for sharing "Allah the lord of all"
Write On.
Hello Fkywing,
This is an emotional and philosophical piece.
Written with the depthness of emotion.
The last stanza is so intriguing to me and I wonder why ?
"In my school
No breeze learns to conquer a man
Remember dear
Reconcilaition breeze blows in neverland."
Deep !
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
Hello Stormy Lady,
HUH !
What a story behind the poetry.
I felt I was watching a romantic movie. The honeymooners in slow motion, the gentle caress, the kisses, then
the union of bodies...
Here comes the sudden twist !
Very clever poet.
Not the ordinary love/romance poetry.
WOW !
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
Hello Naomi,
I am happy for you to have Nathaniel and Jeremiah as your twin brothers.
All your names are Biblical and I find them very nice and meaningful names.
It is a joy reading your work that deals with questions and answers to your brothers.
Precious quality family bonding time.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello River,
I admire the character of this poetry.
He is an inspiration to others as he lives a fulfilled life.
The poem has a good flow and each line touches the innermost soul.
I admire it the way it was written from the very beginning until the last line.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello Belest,
Religious, truthful and most meaningful.
Inspiring too.
I did not notice any error from the start until the last line.
"And now we all may have eternal-life"
Amen to that !
Perfect !
Thank you for sharing "God's Bridge"
Write On.
Hello Strlcuckoo,
A very meaningful poetry.
I admire the chosen words/lines that completed this "Yesterday"
"A new day has begun
Yesterday but a memory"
Very true, a memory that lives in our hearts.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
Hello Divyayjoti,
I like your unique name. Sounds so foreign to me.
This is really funny and oh.....so true.
I enjoyed much reading from number one to the last number also up to the conclusion.
My suggestion:
"your english"
Please change it to:
your English
"AIWAYS use the internet"
Please change the word AIWAYS to ALWAYS
Thank you for making my day !
WRITE ON.
Hello Chocolate Bunny,
Nice names you have posted here.
Possibly you can also include the meaning of their names or possibly something remarkable or somebody
having these names and they made a big impact to the world as they continue their jouney.
This can also be a beginning of a novel having these names as the main characters of the story.
Thank you for sharing "Names"
Write On.
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