Hello violet Vixen,
The presentation is lovely.
The chosen words described a wonderful experiece.
A work of art that has its own uniqueness and it has a good flow.
A poem with positive expectations of tomorrow.
Thank you for sharing "My Daffodil"
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Hello Jaye,
The title is very captivating.
A golden wedding anniversary. The most awaited event and the accident happened. How sad !
An emotional pice and you are a very brilliant storyteller.
I have nothing to add and nothing to correct.
PERFECT.
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello again Sara jane,
A du du du, a da da da....you made my day.
I am so glad to read your humorous works.
You are really you are .....A very talented writer...
Hahahahha ...Surely no dull moments with you.
I will check some more of your stories because I enjoy your style of work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello ladypsich26,
The message of this poem is great.
Thanking oneself for a new me, a new and wonderful beginning of one's jouney with full of
eagerness.
The poem has a good flow and it has its own beautiful rhythm and rhyme.
It has also a good flow.
I did not notice any error in it.
I find it very inspiring.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello pOetic justice,
WOW .....Fascinating and captivating title.
Very interesting lines that completed this poetry.
It reminds me of the lyrics of one Wishful Song that I enjoy it goes this way:
"I never stop on wishing, til my wishes come true."
Yes....keep all the wishes in your heart.
Someday it will become a reality.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello unknown,
The unfaithful heart or the feelings for the present girlfriend is now gone because there is someone pleasing in your eyes. Sad.. but this happens.
My suggestion for this work:
This is a short story, please capitalize the letter I.
i can't........................I can't
i knew.......................I knew
i can .........................I can
and so on .....
"21 year of life"
Please change this to:
21 years of life...
The story expresses a physical attraction to the girl.
Thank you for sharing "The Day I Met You"
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Hello Summer Grace,
I enjoy the lyrics of the song.
So full o flife, so full of life and I simply love it.
A song that expresses an innermost desire and the plead of loving with all might through "Kiss My Lips"
I believe this is a happy song with a fast beat.
Thank you for sharing your music.
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Hello EXPLORER,
Wonderful work. Unique way of telling a love story and it is highly admirable.
It is a work of art that expresses an invitation with great expectations.
So full of life and romantic exploration.
Fascinating saga of love.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Hello Redtowrite,
There is great wisdom in this story.
Too late to regret ! VERY SAD..
Very convincing author.
This is well-written and well-presented.
Emotional.
Thank you once again for a wonderful read.
Perfect title, perfect story.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Parhelionyaw,
It is really a very sweet poetry.
It is full of life and so enjoyable to read.
I have nothing to correct.
I admire the way it was written from the very beginning until the end.
PERFECT AS IN PERFECT.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello J.M.Estrada,
The agony of waiting and the fear of losing someone very special in our heart is the message in this poetry.
The sudden twist at the end making it a happy ending.
I admire the creativity and the thoughtfulness.
My suggestion:
"shes safe in his care"
Please put an apostrophe in the word she's
she's safe in his care
"Where shes at?"
The same, please put an apostrophe in the word she's
"Where she's at ?"
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Hello Sarge,
How great is your admiration to this girl and it shows it here in every line that was written in this very inspiring
"My Star"
A guiding light..
Yes, when you are in love the world is so wonderful and everything is as glorious as your "first and only star"
I enjoy reading "My Star"
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello shadowrev,
Whew ...A story so full of suspense.
The innocent or the willing victim,Jonathan.
Possibly Elise is also a part of the conspiracy.
The characterization is great, the plot of the story ...and the thrill of it.
Very talented author.
I did not notice any error in it.
Thank you for sharing "Downward Spiral"
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Hello Brenda,
This is an amusing story about the homework and all the animals that you have.
Nice names for each one of them.
Fantasy ....I admire your creativity.
My suggestion:
"home work"
Please change this to homework.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Hello jblackglove,
I noticed that your works are mostly dedicated or a loving tribute to your brother.
This shows that you and your brother have a very pleasant relationship as in the true love and care, respect and honor to each other.
"You'd find love and friendship
He is a handsome man"
Interesting lines that features an interesting person, a brother who has brown eyes and all the wonderful traits
that he possesses.
How blissful is this poetry.
Thank you for sharing "MY BROTHER'S EYES"
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Hello Redtowrite,
I am sorry about your loss...
An emotional poetry written with all the loving feeling and the sad moments of somebody that you love and care for.
The last stanza offers great consolation of the aching heart.
Thank you for sharing "Passages"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Redtowrite,
A love/romace poetry so full of life and those memories of sweet togetherness linger forever.
The language of love in so many perspective and the poem expresses it wonderfully.
Thank you for sharing "A Memory Moment"
A poem with perfect harmony.
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Hello Redtowrite,
A real drama here.
Descriptive of the lady on a swing, except for her face as her back was facing.
The questioning heart and being stopped by the father.
Very intriguing "The Only Photo of my Sister"
This is like a television soap.
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello Sweet Trouble,
The judmental that we are.
Yes...this happens...The realities of life, of friendship and all the relationship when one has to be judgmental
then it surely will result into a problem.
This is where communication fits in as in, facing and telling the truth no matter how it hurts rather than
saying " I thought" because what if what we thought was wrong ?
There is a very good lesson in your poetry.
Very creative and wise.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Hello Pen Point,
The most sincerest prayer of a child and it is so touching.
My suggestion:
The title, "A Childs Prayer"
Please put an apostrophe in the word Child's
A Child's Prayer
"Thank you lord"
"So lord"
Please change these to :
Thank you Lord
So Lord
A very meaningful poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Ink,
The title is very captivating knowing and believing of the given words"I reap what I sow"
The story behind the poetry is about a relationship and the realization at the end.
Setimental.
My suggestion:
"Now your mine"
Please change it to :
Now you're mine
Thank you for sharing your work.
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Hello Harley,
A wonderful work of art that gives an assurance to one and all in the most brilliant way through words that completed this poetry.
The poem has its own beautiful rhythm and rhyme.
Very inspiring that leads to a most meaningful journey.
Thank you for sharing.
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Hello Redtolife,
A poetry about family, love and the realities of life that mostly deals on the topic of the aged.
A sentimental story to tell through "Our Last Home On Earth"
One of the greatest fear of the living is the "OLD AGE" because some are forgotten and neglected when this is
suppose to be the best time to show love and care by attending and taking good care of the old generation.
Old, wrinkled and the loss memory.....a lonely road .
The poem has a good flow and very touching.
Perfect.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello gunjanb,
An article about coconuts. There's a sense of humor and truth in your writings. Yes, fresh coconut water is so
refreshing and in the Philippines we have them as drinks for those people with kidney and gladder stone problems. This has many uses all parts of the tree as well as the fruit, they are all useful. One of God's wonderful
creations. The latest swine flu that makes the world panic , our health oficials suggest to take a drink of the
pure coconut oil as a cure for this horrible flu. My father is a coconut wine baby. His mother was sick and milk
was not available in our village, so my gradparents let him took the freshly gathered coconut wine we called
Tuba in a creamy color. It's really sweet. The whole village was so grateful to the coconuts simply because for
so many years until today my father is the active village chief whose wisdom are being listened by many.
HUH ! Thanks to the coconuts....
The list is endless of its uses...
Back to the review:
My suggestion:
"homes & families"
Please change the sign & to the word .....and
homes and families
"sweet n clear water"
Please change it to :
sweet and clear water
"atleast"
Please make this into two separate words:
at least
"Cant stop"
Please put an apostrophe in the word Can't
"why isint"
Please change it to :
why isn't
"u see"
"u drink"
Please change these to :
you see
you drink
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Little Tan Dancer,
Interesting essay.
A very unique you who loves animals mostly horses and who loves to write.
I admire the way you introduce yourself. A person whose interests are broad and surely you can be good at
anything you concentrate on doing.
Enjoy life as you expand your horizons.
I love how you concluded your essay with a very intelligent and touching line.
My suggestion (minimal):
"I adopted my sophomore year in college."
Please change it to:
I adopted during my sophomore year in college.
Thank you for sharing "Introducing Me"
WRITE ON.
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