Hello Dilly,
This is a lovely poem.
The last four lines are my favorite lines.
Rainbow always fascinates me simply because of its wonderful color combination and most of all seeing a rainbow always makes me feel so good, like reading your work.
Thank you for sharing "Rainbow"
PERFECT...
WRITE ON.
Hello Shannon,
WOW !
The creativeness is great.
The title is very captivating.
The characterization, the plot of the story added with much suspense and thrill makes this "You Can Sleep While
I Drive" truly admirable.
Very impressive work with a wonderful presentation.
Thank you for the read and for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello Foolishpride,
The chosen words and lines fit for the given title.
Sad and horrible.
My suggestion:
"My body all battered and beat "
Please change it to :
My body all battered and beaten
"Aparently they wont loose"
Please change this to:
Apparently they won't loose
Thank you for sharing your work,
WRITE ON.
Hello Judity,
A well-written and well-presented "The Sound of Trees"
Nostalgic and it also reminds the readers of how important and how lovely trees are to our lives.
I love trees myself and in fact there are many trees that surrounds our house.
I love also the swaying of the bamboo trees that our ancestral house has these bamboo trees nearby.
Thank you for sharing your story.
WRITE ON.
Hello kioko kozakura,
A poem whose message is for special someone and the desire of the heart.
The drama of life..
I like the title and I admire the chosen lines.
The last four lines are my favorite lines.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello SRISTAN,
An animal/pet lover and I admire you for that.
I have nine cats in the house too and I already buried three kittens which were sick and eventually died.
Reading between the lines I can imagine how great were those cats that you had and this poem is a proof that you
missed their presence.
Creative and thoughtful.
Thank for sharing "GHOST"
WRITE ON.
Hello DK,
A short poem that describes about this very interesting "The Eagle"
The poem has a good flow and I did not notice any grammatical error and no typo.
This bird is really very special and is considered the king of all the birds.
I admire the creativeness.
Thank you for sharing your poem.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Craigie Lady,
An interesting beginning of a story about children.
The characterization is great.
There is a good flow of the story and suspense...Whew !
My suggestion is at the caption below the title:
"The beginnings of a story about kids"
Please change the word beginnings to.....beginning
Good luck for the continuation.
WRITE ON.
Hello Deundrae,
The title is so captivating.
I have a very beautiful niece. Her name is Ayumi. I call her my doctor. I call her my angel.
She makes me glad when I am sad.
She gives a lot of love.
This poem reminds me of her.
My favorite lines in this poem:
"And I sing out to the world
I am a proud autistic."
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
Hello Lynne,
You are sharing a very beautiful story.
My only suggestion is possibly you can change the title to "My Angel, Beverly"
You are truly blessed to have her in your life.
She is a very precious angel so full of love, support, understanding and many more wonderful adjectives that describes her.
I am so happy for you.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
Hello Sean Fear,
The story is well-written and well-presented.
A short story that focus on a situation in a particular country, Kuwait.
Funny how you described the drivers in detail.
Well, have you been to Manila, possibly you can have another funny description.
Hahhahhha....
Thank you for sharing.
I enjoy the read.
WRITE ON.
Hello George,
Hahhahha..
You are a very clever author.
I was really wondering reading the first few lines.
The letter made me understood fully why this is satire.
Hahhaha! I was thinking differently..
Thank you for sharing "Laura" and thank you for making me laugh.
WRITE ON.
Hello glenna,
A poem with an interesting title that made me wonder.
Dedicated to a friend.
A short poem with a very important message to a very dear person.
Sad and touching.
Thank you for sharing "Birds Don't Sing to the Coming of Spring"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Redtowrite,
A free-verse poetry that describes the realities of life.
One of mankind's fear is OLD AGE.
It is also a sad fact that most of them are in the home of the aged rather than with their own families to be with them as well as to take good care of them.
I also believe that each one has a very valid reason why this has to be done.
We need to understand both the young ones as well as the young once in this situation.
The poem has a very good message and I have nothing to correct.
Thank you once again for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
Hello Judity,
A short story with a sad ending for the aliens.
Great characterization.
I admire the creativeness.
I have nothing to edit.
A story that is so realistic if one has to believe that Aliens are truly invading our planet. I do.
Thank you for sharing "A Holiday Adventure"
WRITE ON.
Hello Taiza,
A combination of suspense and comedy.
A reliable sister in times like these.
Very intriguing title.
The story has a good flow.
My suggestion:
"Bout time you guys got here."
Please put a punctuation mark in the word 'Bout "
"'Bout time you guys got here""
Good luck for the contest.
WRITE ON.
Hello Veneta,
A young and a very talented writer.
WOW !
This is highly admirable.
Heartbreaking and so convincing.
Written to honor your grandfather. Surely he is so proud of you.
I am so proud of you too.
Thank you for sharing "The Silent Way"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Maggie,
The title is so intriguing, true to its given genre, dark.
The poem has a good flow, and a beautiful rhythm and rhyme.
"Power wielded is a terrible thing
And yet somehow you still make my heart sing"
The last two lines that said it all.
Thank you for sharing "Beautiful Traitor"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Doug Rainbow,
A love story so uniquely written.
A product of a an author with a high intellect.
The story has a good flow .
PERFECT AS IN PERFECT.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Glass Lovers"
Write On.
Hello Monlit Werewolf,
Interesting poll as I believe that each one of has has our own style of writing as well as a favorite genre.
Nice choices too.
My suggestion:
Favorite Genere of Writing
Please change the word Genere to Genre
genere
please change it to :
genre
Thank you for sharing this poll and for the opportunity for me to vote.
WRITE ON.
Hello Metropolitan Aranyak,
This is unique in its own special way.
An interesting short story and i consider this very inspiring.
The best target...hahhaha...
A community service with excellence.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
HELLO CRUMB,
A sample of your work with teh same title as your user/pen name.
My suggestion:
"bye the fiery furnace i crept ......"
Please change the word bye to....by
by the fiery furnace i crept....
"at lifes feast"
Please change it to:
at life's feast
"upon loves door my ...."
Please change it to :
upon love's door my....
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello chermoni,
HUH ! What a horrible story. It made my spine quivered. I felt I just came from the moviehouse watching a story about a madman and the actor was very convincing.
The story has a good flow and it has a connectedness with the given title.
A confession of a crime that's intended to be done.
Horiibly terrible ! Terribly horrible.
You are a very convincing author.
WRITE ON.
Hello Daniel,
Interesting short story that is well-written and well-presented.
Nice topic to share too.
How fortunate is the human that was visited by an angel. An angel of peace and an angel of happiness or an
angel that gives un-ending protection without our knowing. This one is the story is an angel with a sorrowful eyes.
Thank you for sharing your story, "Angel"
WRITE ON.
Hello again motto-fighter,
hhahhaa.....I enjoy reading this piece. It speaks of the truth and the chosen lines sound like a tongue twister
to me and it has a bit of humor in it.
I strongly believe you are a very talented writer.
Well....consider each situation as a part of progress.
Progress means change, and we only need to embrace such change is for the better of for the best.
In answer to the question :
"Where have we gone wrong ?"
No, we did not, we just adapt and accept what is available and the easiest way. The present generation is the generation of the luckiest as far as technology is concerned when everything is available by just a touch or a click of the computer keys.
Thank you for sharing your work that also made me share my point of view on this topic.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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