Hello dandy,
I always honor my teachers and surely each and everyone of us has a best
teacher.
A poem as a loving tribute to your best teacher.
Short and direct to the point.
My suggestion:
"i will remaber you ture my whole life"
Please change this to :
I will remember you for my whole life
"i wish all my teacher were like you "
Please change this to :
I wish all my teachers were like you.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Ichigo,
This is well-written and well-presented.
A letter that made me cry.
I can feel the words that you wrote down to the deepest chamber of my heart.
It is not that easy to miss someone very special in our lives.
I am so blessed reading your work, because the love and respect to your late father as well as your care and concern for the whole family is truly admirable.
This is letter number one. I look forward to read more of your works.
Yes, writing can help ease the pain of the longing heart, and cry if you feel
like crying too.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello resh,
A very sentimental title.
The chosen lines fit for the given title.
I admire the sudden twist at the end, to quote :
"These were my concerns until times so near
But now I know, without a soul, why should I fear "
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
Hello Selenium,
The title made me very curious to read your work.
This is a nice poem.
My suggestion:
"The only happiness that exsists is in your pathetic dreams !"
Please change the word exsists to ....exist
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
Hello Madison,
A true story that makes me sad and very mad.
How cruel these persons can be doing this horrible act to the couple who were so very kind to these bastards brothers.
You are a very convincing author you carried away my emotions.
This story can make a change of heart to those people who has all the good intention to help others and by reading this story, any driver would find it so hard to take in hitch-hikers.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Oh... for a contest ?
I wish you win ! Good luck !
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings deemac,
Hahhahhahha!
This is witty, funny, wacky, and in the Philippines I may shout "GRABE ! "
This is truly a mind refresher as in truly impressive.
WHEW !
I had a nice time reading all the entry.
Thank you for a very joyful read.
WRITE ON.
Hello caseypete,
This is a beautiful poem with a captivating title.
It reminds me of a song whose tune I really like.
This poem expresses a sentimental message and this is well-written and well-presented.
The poem has a good flow.
Thank you for sharing "Speak" whose words were unspoken.
Write On.
Greetings to you Bri,
I always love to read Acrostic Poetry, I have it also in my port.
This one is doubly wonderful as both the first letter as well as the last letter of the line formed a dual acrostic.
A brilliant idea.
The message of the poem is like a drama full of suspense.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
Hello A Captivated Soul,
A song that speaks of the truth as in a conversation with the Lord.
My suggestion:
"have dissapeared"
Please change the word dissapeared to....disappeared
"to want hapiness"
Please change the word hapiness to......happiness
Thank you for sharing "Fly From Here"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Charmed,
There is a great lesson being shared in this story.
This is well-written and well-presented.
"How many Arnold's in this world?"
I admire how you ended the story.
"Arnold was beginning to feel lucky again."
YES.. and I believe between right and wrong, he has a choice to make and must make.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
Hello Kay,
The title is so inviting, knowing and believing how everyone look forward for a beautiful Sunday full of activities,
family and friendship bonding.
The article is well-written and well-presented.
Descriptively fantastic.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
Hello Sarge,
The note below the poetry made me understood fully your work.
The last three lines said it all and these are also my favorite lines, to quote :
"We all know him
His name is mankind
we must find our lost soul"
Well-said !
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
Hello Sarah,
A very emotional piece.
You had my full attention reading between the lines as the story behind the poetry is so overpowering.
Reading the last line, you made me sighed with a big relief.
A well-written and well-presented poetry with a sudden twist at the end.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Rainbow,
This is a very touching work.
It has a very good flow and rhyme.
I admire the every written line.
Wonderful conclusion, to quote :
" I'm close and I'm with you, I'm right in your heart."
Beautiful line, so beautiful.
Thank you for sharing "Why do you look for me ?"
WRITE ON.
Hello Nichole,
This is wonderful....
The images are inviting and mesmerizing.
All of them.
Fascinating work that you are sharing here.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to join in this forum and to be able yo appreciate your art.
"The Enchanted Forest" is truly great.
See you again.
Write On.
Hello Kamayani,
A very captivating title.
A poem with a meaningful and powerful message.
My suggestion:
"i am your GOD"
Please capitalize the letter I
I am your God
"WE LOVE FOR WHAT YOU ARE"
Please change this to:
WE LOVE YOU FOR WHAT YOU ARE
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello Destini,
An emotional piece.
It expresses the true feelings of the heart.
My suggestion:
"i felt alone"
Please capitalize the letter I
I felt alone
"how u got caught"
Please change this to:
how you got caught
The poem has a good flow and a good rhyme.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
Hello Havoc,
I enjoy reading your love poetry.
It's fun and heartwarming like the captivating title.
I admire how you started as well as how you concluded it.
The last two lines are my favorite lines.
Perfect "Heart"
Thank you for sharing your talent..
WRITE ON.
Hello Everett James,
A poem that is refreshingly frank and deeply personal.
It has a good flow and written with all sincereness.
My suggestion:
"i would, i doubt"
Please capitalize the letter I
I would, I doubt
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Benjamen,
A very short poem and so perfect to me.
Sad and sentimental.
This sounds like a very lonely song to me.
It also looks like a Haiku poetry.
Yes, short and it fits for the given title.
Thank you for sharing your deeply emotional work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Benjamen,
I consider this as a prose. Deeply emotional.
My suggestion:
"and itmade.."
Please change itmade into two words....it made
"almost to unreal to be believed"
Please change this to :
almost too unreal to be believed
"Still i pressed on"
Please capitalize the letter i
Still I pressed on.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello whitespiritclan,
You made me very curious reading the title of your work.
Very interesting ....
My suggestion is at the last line:
I had 14 reason not to love......
Please change the word reason to....reasons
I had 14 reasons not to love a person who does not know how beautiful the world is.
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
Hello Fairport,
The title is very interesting as Belest works also fascinates me.
The poem has a good flow and it has a connectedness to the given prompt.
My suggestion:
"Judgements made by that of guess"
Please change the word Judgements to...Judgments
It is a joy to read your work that served as a tribute to one of the poets/writers in this community whose talent I also admire.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Abby Isis,
I am sorry about your sister.
A poem written as a tribute to your dearest sister.
So young to die.
I agree with the wonderful conclusion.
Yes..she is in heaven with the Lord.
Thank you for sharing "My Sister's Window"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello allfrisco,
I love this a lot. Very helpful and very inspiring.
Like a food for thought.
Truly a gift of wisdom that I consider each line so precious.
Amazing, wonderfully amazing.
Thank you for sharing "random advice"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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