Greetings to you Harshal,
A poetry so full of life. The true feelings of someone being in love as in the world is so full of joy.
The poem has a good flow and I did not notice any error in it.
The happy heart.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Flying In Love"
Write On.
Greetings to you celticvampire,
Yes, it is really a "One last gift".
A tribute to your late grandmother.
The chosen words and lines fit for the given title.
The last three lines are my favorite lines.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Mario,
A song that is so full of deep emotion.
Philosophical as well as very intriguing lines too.
My suggestion is with the title:
I Kant Get Enough of You, Baby
Please change the word Kant to.......Can't
"I Can't Get Enough of You, Baby"
I wonder what the tune would be.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello pappuwrites,
I admire the given title. It expresses positiveness and so powerful.
Yes, I agree, what your mind can conceive, you can achieve, and the rewards are to those who fight bravely.
My suggestion:
In the title possibly you can put an exclamation point,
"Yes ! you can"
Also at the last line:
I can, Yes ! we all can
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Kevin Nelson,
I admire your spirit. Brave to face the world and its harsh realities, and courageous to think positively inspite
of all the struggles that the world is facing.
"So why stress?"
I do agree..
It reminds me of the saying. "Those who do not know how to fight worry, die young ."
So why worry.?Life is beautiful and worth living for, inspite of all the hassles and the bustles.
Inspiring title and a very brilliant piece.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello River Mckenna,
A poem about men in the woman's point of view and I agree with the chosen lines.
The women of today are completely different from the women of yesterday but still the same women needs men
in their lives and it remains a fact forever.
I find great wisdom in this ode.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
Hello vantha,
This is an interesting poll.
It is not easy to forget someone you love. But one has to move on if the relationship is over. Do not dwell on the past as in Let go, Let God and Let Live.
And most of all, learn to forgive, and All Is Well.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to join this poll.
See you again in this awesome Writing.Com.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Deadwood,
The story behind the poetry is emotional.
It is about yesterday, today and tomorrow.
A poem with a very sad ending.
"The shore was dry and bitter
His duty was no more "
As in remembering those were the days.
I like this piece, very touching.
Thank you for sharing "Ocean's Roar "
Write On.
Greetings to you Sean Fear,
CONGRATULATIONS for winning. This is a very inspiring piece.
The presentation is perfect and everything about the poem is truly amazing.
I am so glad to have read this.
Thank you for sharing "With The Voice of The Silence"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Paul,
The poem has a very touching and meaningful message.
My suggestion:
"The moon which sings her lulluby"
Please change the word lulluby to.....lullaby
"Taking us to worlds afar and deep"
Please put an apostrophe in the word world's
Taking us to world's afar and deep
Thank you for sharing "Night Time"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Lala,
A poetry written from the heart.
My suggestion :
The presentation :
Possibly you can write it this way,
"My thoughts have made sound
My world is tumbling round
And to you, I am not bound."
Then you can go on and on.
This is only my suggestion. The decision is all yours.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write on.
Greetings to you Kings,
A very beautiful poem that sounds like a very inspiring Gospel Song to me.
I admire the chosen words/lines that completed this poetry.
Very Precious.
My suggestion is at the caption below the title, but all the same your work is truly impressive.
"Give God yur best and He will do the rest."
Please change yur to ......your
Thank you for the joyful read.
Write On.
Greetings to you figurefour,
There is uniqueness and true beauty in your style of writing.
Witty and Perfect.
The narration and the presentation is great.
I find this piece extraordinary.
Thank you for sharing "Less Than A Second"
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Friendly thinker,
The poem is so captivating by reading the title alone.
This is wonderful.
It tells of a fascinating story about Kagome and Chiharu.
This is perfect and truly great.
Thank you for the read.
Best regards.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you ljjmfour,
I like the title simply because it expresses a positive message.
The song is very short and it looks like a Haiku poetry to me.
Is there a continuation for this or this is it ?
Anyway, thank you for sharing your Irish song with an English translation.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you xxyesterday,
The presentation is wonderful. The title is very meaningful.
The poetry is deeply emotional and touching.
This is well-written and I have nothing to correct and nothing to add.
Thank you for sharing "My humble heart's confines"
Write On.
Greetings to you girlwho wearsadirtyshirt,
Whew !
What a story.
Yes..Rated 18+ and how you made me laughed and glued to every line written in your work.
Amusing, intriguing and really a brilliant author, that's who you are.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
Greetings to you Tim Chiu,
What a perfect description !
The poem has a good flow as well as a good rhyme.
You made me smile reading this.
Very true, "Mother Nature and God have so wonderfully planned."
Thank you once again for another joyful read.
Write On.
Greetings to you foster,
A poetry that describes a belonging to this genration of the modern world.
My suggestion:
"we should atleast wear a smile to the grave"
Please change the word atleast to two words, at least
The caption below the title of the poem:
this is the balad
Please change this to:
this is the ballad
I admire your work that speaks of the truth and it so full of life.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Katie Marie,
A poetry that I guess a lot of people can relate.
With the high cost of living I believe you are not alone in this situation.
My suggestion in this poetry that was written with all candidness:
"What can I do "
Please put a question mark at the end,
What can I do ?
My personal opinion in answer to the question written at the last line :
Simplify your life.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings to you Ellie,
Wow !
This is a very beautiful work that describes a real friendship.
Friends are treasures and having a friend means your are truly blessed.
The poem has a very good message and I agree with the first two lines of your work and I am happy for you to be
blessed with a relationship that "will last longer than time."
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
Greetings to you Rhian,
This is an emotional piece.
The poem expresses a relationship between friends and I admire how you conclude it, as in a sudden
twist at the end, and making the lines of the last stanza my favorite lines.
Thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On.
Greetings to you Layton,
I like your style of writing this short story. Based on the biblical situation and I admire the chosen words that completed your work. The lines are so wisely written like a lovely prose and this reminds me of the lyrics of one
of my favorite songs "Creation" wherein part of the lyrics stated :
"More than the image of His maker,
Man shall dominion over all
But because we're nothing more than human
Sometimes we stumble, sometimes we fall"
I find your work highly admirable, from the start to the end.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
Hello crafty kbl,
Reading your poem made me craved for these delicious and my favorite sweets.
Very entertaining. I like it.
My suggestion:
"Poeple adore you
But most poeple say
I dont know what I'd do"
Please change these to :
People adore you
But most people say
I don't know what I'd do
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
Greetings to you sweet dreams,
I believe that this is going to be a very interesting novel. The theme is very convincing and the characters are so intriguing making the readers want to know what is this all about.
GO FOR IT...
Good luck for the continuation until its completion.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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