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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello MainStreamPencil,
I like the title and I like the poem.
A very captivating poetry with a nice rhyme and you concluded it so wisely.
Dark and yet so meaningful.
Every line is my favorite line.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Thunder of Thoughts"
Write On.
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802
Review of Poetry, Japan  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello chomonkyo,
Japan fascinates me. I have never been there, but I am so delighted with its people, its culture, its gardens, and the Japanese language to the point that I studied and speak the basic Nippongo. Maybe in my previous life, I was a Japanese.
Reading the title, "Poetry, Japan" you made me very curious.
I read all of them and I conclude all of the poems are so full of life.
Domo Arigatto Gozaimasu.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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803
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Author00,
With these powerful lines that you learned as a mere child I believe your upbringing is truly great.
This also serves as a legacy that you can pass on to the next generation.
Precious words of wisdom.
I am so glad to have read this.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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804
Review of Independence Day  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Shannon,
Actually I was thinking differently upon reading the title. I expected a big celebration as in a party.
You started the story so brilliantly, very intriguing first paragraphs and I do not want to stop reading
until I know what the whole story is all about.
A love triangle and the realization at the end.
Wonderful story, with a great lesson to share.
Emotional, dramatic, suspense and the happy ending.
For a contest, I strongly believe this is a winning piece.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Independence Day"
Write On.
805
805
Review of Respect  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello kristilove,
This is fascinating.
The presentation is wonderful.
Wisely written and explained fully and nicely this topic that you wrote so meaningfully here.
A delightful piece to read.
I wish everyone can read this.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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806
Review of Addict  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Bri,
The title fits for the chosen words and lines that completed this poetry.
Deeply emotional.
I admire the wonderful presentation.
My suggestion is not with the poem but with the caption below the title:
"Tradegy of addiction"
Please change this to :
Tragedy of addiction.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
807
807
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Redtowrite,
Fiction and so convincing.
The life of Beth, the love of Beth, the family of Beth and the possible chance to love and be happy again.
So full of suspense. I was holding my breath for awhile wondering if Brian and Beth will make it through.
I was so relieved with the happy ending.
Another wonderful work from one of my favorite authors in this community.
Thank you for sharing "A Date with King Neptune"
Write On.
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808
Review of Religious ideas.  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello E.P.Strowbridge,
Religion is a very wide topic that even my lifetime is not enough to discuss about it.
The title captures my interest and I respect your opinion being shared and this is based on the quotation by
Blake.
My suggestion:
Please divide this into three paragraphs.
"Would you calla dog"
Please change this to :
Would you call a dog
"Wha is truly wrong"
Please change this to:
What is truly wrong
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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809
Review of The Pineapple  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu,
The great poet that you are made this delicious fruit more and more delicious.
A free-verse poetry that describes fully and wonderfully this fruit.
A connectedness with the farmers and these exotic fruits is well-expressed in this work.
The last five lines are my favorite lines.
Reading your poetry made me craved for "The Pineapple"
Write On.
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810
Review of The pain within  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello jaya,
This is deeply emotional and it fits for the given prompt.
There is a good flow and how sad is the message of this poetry.
I have nothing to edit here.
Written for a contest.
I wish you luck,
Thank you for sharing "The pain within"
Write On.
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811
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Wybo,
Truly a rant.
The truth is I was laughing reading this. Simply because I can relate to the situation, and everytime my anger
starts to boil I calm down because I always remember the voice of my daughter :
"If you find it too loud, you're too old !"
Funny but oh, so true.
Music is always beautiful but when it is too loud, it is no longer a music but a noise.
What can I do ?
AHA ! This generation is completely different from mine and possibly from yours.
I only need to accept inspite of the fact that there are times when we feel like scraming to this people to the
top of our lungs....But ..my daughter will always remind me;
"Ma, the one who angers you conquers you ! "
Hahhaaha ...another question : What can I do ?
I am happy for you because you were able to write this "Angry rant about noise"
Surely you feel much better now .
I had a nice time reading your work.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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812
Review of Beautiful  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello nokichi,
The title offers great expectations.
Yes...I believe this is a wonderful novel to read.
A very inviting story and I look forward to read more of this work.
Fascinating...
Good luck for the continuation until the completion of this novel.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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813
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Kiya,
Reading this forum, made me admire this awesome community more and more.
Once again this proves that this is a community whose aim of sharing, inter-action, and caring to each other truly
exists.
This is very special.
I salute you with my never-ever-ending respect.
A very touching gesture.
See you again.
God Bless You more in every way.
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814
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Southern star,
A very interesting question as a wonderful title of this poetry.
Very true, a question that each person answers in a different way, depending on their individual outlook, opinion or possibly an experience.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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815
Review of Missing You  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Caul,
The story behind the poetry is expressing a horrible event.
The last three lines are most meaningful and so full of love and concerned.
My suggestion:
"That it does not look to good"
Please change this to :
That it does not look too good
Thank you for sharing your poem that is so full of longings.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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816
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Yasaman,
The spirit of the glass and you did it for fun..
A very dangerous game. ...I knew some people who tried doing this in my country, here in the Philippines and
they were amazed because who came out were the spirits of the Presidents of many countries, as if it was a
worldwide convention. This needs the bravest of hearts and the most courageous people to do this but I will
never ever try this myself. What I do, I pray for all the souls of my loved ones and those all who passed away, that may their souls rest in peace.
You have written a very captivating story. I understood it fully as you vividly described the situation.
You are a very talented author and a very good storyteller.
I look forward to read more of your works.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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817
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Yasaman,
A wonderful tribute to the very talented person who touched the lives of the American people as well as to the
whole world. M J's music will live forever ..
Very touching as well as very meaningful.
I agree and I admire the chosen words that completed this work.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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818
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello j. beezy,
This is a lovely free-verse poetry.
My suggestion:
The title : FIrsat Day of School
Please change this to:
First Day Of School
"Its the first day of school she's dressed cute but shes nervous"
Please put an apostrophe in the word It's and the other word she's
It's the first day of school she's dressed cut but she's nervous
"Shes insecure..."
Please put an apostrophe :
She's insecure
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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819
Review of Vision  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Irish Jon,
A love poetry so inspiring and so full of life.
It expresses a wonderful experience of seeing someone as in the morning sun and all its glory radiates to give
a very warm feelings for the heart.
The presentation is great and the chosen lines ?
I love them !
Thank you for sharing "Vision"
Write On.
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820
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello again Lean,
This sounds like a riddle to me.
Reading between the lines, I find this very inspiring and so meaningful.
The last two lines said it all. This is a great work.
Thank you for sharing "UNWRAP THE GIFT OF THE PRESENT"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Angels  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Shannon,
This is a poem written from the deepest chamber of the heart.
Yes, I believe in angels too.
I am happy for you that you have an angel in heaven as well as an angel with you to share the special moments in life.
My suggestion in this work:
"Your sure to hear...."
Please change the word Your to .......You're
You're sure to hear or see your angel.
"Ones in heaven, ones with me"
Please put an apostrophe in the word One's and one's
"He is very specail to alot of people"
Please change this to :
He is very special to a lot of people
"laughter and sarcazime"
Please change this to :
laughter and sarcasm
"This angel will be in are hearts for always"
Please change this to :
This angel will be in our hearts for always.
This is a beautiful poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of My Anchor  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello St. Bourbon,
The story behind the poetry is sentimental and so sad to note.
The poem has a good flow and a free-verse and philosophical.
My suggetsion:
"The Anchor was to heavy for my ship "
Please change this to:
The Anchor was too heavy for my ship,
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review of BirthdayGrams!  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings !
These are wonderful cnotes and I truly admire each one.
I am so glad to have send one of them to one of the brilliant authors in this community who is celebrating
her birthday today.
Thank you very much for posting these cnotes here.
See you again.
God Bless.
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Review of This Stool  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Kitkat,
A very thoughtful piece.
My suggestion:
"I use it to watch nina cook and bake"
Please change the word nina to....Nina
I use it to watch Nina cook and bake
"or even grab a peice of cookie or cake
Please change this to :
or even grab a piece of cookie or cake
"I us it "
Please change this to :
I use it..
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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825
Review of Moments  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello K.D.B.
This is a prose with a very emotional message.
Sad and very touching.
This reminds me of the song "One Moment In Time"
I look forward to read more of your works.
Thank you for sharing "Moments" the very precious moments.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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