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Review of Early Morning  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello bluwriter,
The title made me very curious to read your work.
This is biographical and the chosen words and lines fit for the given title.
My suggestion:
The presentation. Some lines jumped right away as in it needs a proper alignment.
Thank you for sharing "Early Morning"
Write On.
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Review of Love is...  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello kristilove,
This is a very wonderful illustration of what love is and yes......you described it
uniquely in your own precious way.
I admire everything about it.
Artistic, poetic and beautiful.
Thank you for sharing "Love is....."
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of To Pest  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Deundrae,
Hahhahhhha...Honestly there are some words that I only encounter now
and reading those words made me laughed as I can imagine how anger
rules the day.
The poem that releases all the emotion away and that is fine, but in the real sense, I believe that the one who angers you conquers you.
But it is also a very nice way that you wrote them down, I believe after writing
this you felt so much better.
Thank you for the wonderful read.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Deundrae,
This is a very inspiring poetry and the lines expresses fully about the given title.
There is one word that made me wonder, I may not be aware that there is a fruit by this name, "ugli fruit" but if there is no such kind of fruit , then I suggest that
please change the word ugli to ...ugly
All in One, I admire your very touching work.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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Review of Money and honey  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings to your deephase,
The title reminds me of the famous slogan or saying "No money, no honey"
Or it also reminds me of my brothers joke when asking money from our parents when we were kids,"No money, no son "
Anyway, I enjoy reading your work.
It expresses some facts of life.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review of Timeline  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello smiles4smiles,
I like your poem. It is fun reading it.
It expresses a happy you with happy thoughts.
Nicely written and nicely presented.
Biographical and I truly admire it from the title until the last line.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Shelly,
Short stories fascinate me and this one is truly wonderful.
The characterization, the plot, and there is a good flow.
It is for me full of suspense.
My suggestion:
"She screamed the girls name over and over with no result."
Please put an apostrophe in the word girl's
She screamed the girl's name over and over with no result.
Thank you for sharing this great experiment of writing a short story.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of One Summer  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Emmie,
This is like an entry of a diary as in " A day in the life of Emily"
My suggestion:
"named Emily me."
Please put a comma after Emily, me
"some times"
Please change this to:
sometimes
Also please divide this into two or three paragraphs.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Richard,
The truth is I am not familiar with this and that this is making me very curious so
I joined and voted. I am happy with the result.
Thank you for giving this opportunity for me to join and to enjoy at the same time.
See you again.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Mojosolid,
WOW ! Captivating title.
You are a very good storyteller.
You had my full interest from the start until the end as if I was watching a movie.
Nice plot, great characterization, nice flow of the story and you are also a very convincing writer as you carried away my emotion reading your work.
WHEW !
You deserved a standing ovation for this work.
You are truly blessed.
Thank you for sharing "My Heart Belongs To The Sea'
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Contemplation  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you Hollie Rosey,
This is for me a very witty poetry.
It speaks of the truth and nothing but the truth.
I admire the lines that completed this poem.
You are a very talented writer.
PERFECT...
Thank you for sharing "Contemplation"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of What do you do?  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings to you ladii lovely,
An emotional piece and a questioning heart.
The solution to the problem, as I read the last line of this work.
Smart conclusion.
My suggestion:
"You can't walk out but you can't stay, theres not a another way."
Please change this to:
You can't walk out but you can't stay, there's no another way.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Sarge,
This is a very meaningful poem, and the last line said it all.
Yes... we must keep on dreaming dreams and wishing wishes...
My suggestion in this work, TYPOS:
acheive........................please change this to....... achieve
reveiw..........................please change this to.........review
nurish .........................please change this to.........nourish
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review of Little Girl.  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you xxLaLaLand,
This is fantastic !
I love this and I admire your style of writing poetry.
Deep and so meaningful.
In answer to the question:
"Have you heard of her ?"
My answer is YES !
Beautiful poem.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review of Typical Day  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello ephibel,
This is an interesting story., as in a day in a life of a career woman in the corporate world.
There is drama and the main highlight was the unexpected presence of someone in your past that made a big impact on your today.
You can possibly make this as a beginning of a novel as in an autobiography kind of thing.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review of Deeper  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings to you Venton,
True to its given genre"Dark" the poetry has a very sad and emotional message.
The presentation of the poem is nice and admirable.
My suggestion:
"I wrap my self in"
Please change the two words my self to one word......myself
I wrap myself
Thank you for sharing "Deeper"
Write On.
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Review of PIECES of POETRY  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello gallia,
There you are , the poet by heart !
These are two beautiful short poems.
I look forward to read more of your works.
I find these wonderful art fascinating.
Thank you for sharing this "PIECES OF POETRY"
I am impressed.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings to you domissouri,
There is so much drama in this short story. This story is being focused on one student and a female.
The story has a good flow and I believe this training is only for the physically fit students and those who have courageous spirits. It's not an easy task to be at the marines so rigid training is a must.
By the way, correct me if am wrong, ROTC means Reserved Officers Training Course ?
Ah... I had it many years ago and the truth is....it was not easy for me.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Michelle,
This is a comprehensive explanation and easy to understand.
Thank you so much for sharing this to all of us.
WOW....Very impressive.
Now I know it fully and I am most grateful to your work that gives a complete information about this topic
which surely everyone appreciates.
WRITE On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Ben,
This is a great poll. Yes, I review the works of the moderators.
To be honest, I learned a lot from my reading in their works.
I studied their style, the presentation as well as their varied interests in different genres that makes me conclude
there is an improvement in my works through my own interest of reading and reviewing them.
I am so glad and I feel so blessed that they all exist in this awesome community and they are most helpful and accommodating as far as SHARING is concerned , which I believe is the essence of WRITING.COM.
Thank you for the opportunity to join this poll.
Write on and GOD BLESS !
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Abby Isis,
The animals and their activities of the day and it has a connectedness with each existence.
The title fits for the written lines.
I have nothing to edit.
I enjoy reading your work and you have nice choices of animals here that completed your work.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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Review of Ocean so deep  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello again Jessie,
This is a lovely poem that gives a special interest to an ocean and all its beauty.
My suggestion:
The caption below the title:
"The ocean will always be a mistry to mankind"
Please change the word mistry to.......mystery
The last two lines :
"But I thank God your are the ocean so deep"
Please change this to:
"And all your seecrtes for your"s to keep"
Please change this to:
And all your secrets for you to keep.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
But I thank God you are the ocean so deep
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Review of My Life Thus Far  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you Harry,
An autobiography through a well-written and well-presented poetry.
Wow !
An achiever and most of all, you made me very happy for you as I read
the last three words,"I know contentment"
You are truly blessed living life to the fullest.
Great poem, great story behind the poetry and a great man, Harry !
Thank you for the joyful read.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you Dee Clark,
Beautiful title for your poetry that fits the four lines of this wonderful acrostic.
Watching a kite high up in the sky is a pleasure and how fortunate are the people
who are able to enjoy such moments of wonderment.
I have nothing to edit in your poem.
This is PRECIOUS !
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you SummerLyn,
Wow ....This is truly amazing.
The image is great, the lines are fascinating and the complete work or essay is
fantastic.
There is a beautiful wisdom in the last line.
PERFECT as in PERFECT !
Thank you for sharing "I Must Be Dreaming"
Write On.
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