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751
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Daesu,
You made me cry reading this story.
A drama in the real sense, and you did write it so well.
Yes, the truth hurts but it is the truth, and for me it is all that matters.
Captivating title.
Fascinating love that lasts even after a lifetime.
A sad story like a sad movie that always make me cry.
I thank you for the opportunity for me to read "The Love of Morayta"
I have nothing to edit.
Keep writing and keep posting.
752
752
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello StreamBell,
A very interesting topic indeed !
Reading between the lines, I conclude that you are a writer with a high caliber intellect.
"Therefore, tolerance is the least request a person has to bear"
A brilliant conclusion.
I look forward to read more of your works.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
753
753
Review of Not A Choice  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Riley,
An interesting topic to share.
Gays are accepted nowadays in comparison to the previous generations.
And yes, you can be happy even if you are gay ! I have so many gay friends and they
are very successful in their fields of choice as far as career and personal situations.
It's not easy I guess only at the beginning, but when people know your true identity
especially friends and families surely or eventually they would accept the fact.
My suggestion in this work:
"they decided the could accept that they were"
Please change this to:
they could accept that they were
"verbly say the two, simple words."
Please change the word verbly to..... verbally
Young and talented that you are, do not worry, just do your best in every situation and God will do the rest.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
754
754
Review of just sayin hi...  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello to you too, arabiangrl,
Welcome to Writing.Com !
Surely you will love it here. The authors are friendly and helpful in such a way that in my stay here in this awesome community, I am proud to say, that my writings improve and I learned a lot as well as I enjoyed all the readings and reviewing that I did.
My suggestion in this work:
"i hope, i am"
Please capitalize the letter I
I hope, I am
"im new, im married,"
Please change the word im to.....I'm
"i am happy to wrrite"
Please change this to :
I am happy to write
"cant wait to get feedback"
Please put an apostrophe in the word can't
I look forward to read more of your works.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
755
755
Review of SIGIRIYA  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Amaltas,
Thank you for bringing me and all the authors in this awesome community to Sri Lanka,
through your descriptive and free-verse poetry "SIGIRIYA"
Truly an interesting place to see, to visit and to explore.
A job well-done !
Keep writing and keep posting.
756
756
Review of Eulogy...  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello everlong,
A poetry that expresses a deep emotion and with a wishful thinking at the end.
How sad is the journey or is the love story behind the poetry.
The love relationship that went wrong and here is the "Eulogy" that described it fully.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
757
757
Review of CHOCOLATE  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello markymark,
The title is very inviting.
Having this food as one of my favorites surely I wish to read what is this
"Chocolate " poetry all about.
Aha....the secret of body-beautiful is being revealed here, lipo-suction.
Hahhahha.. It is a fun reading your work.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
758
758
Review of Forget  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello His Angel,
A poetry that expresses a relationship as well as the essence of our existence, Time.
Emotional and speaks of the truth.
My suggestion:
"If i forgot you and you forgot me"
Please capitalize the letter I
If I forgot you and you forgot me.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
759
759
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Chene006,
Written with all honesty and sincerity and I like this a lot !
A short story that sounds or looks like a happy prose, so dramatic and so cleverly written.
Nostalgic and so beautiful.
Thank you for sharing your work.
See you again.
Keep writing and keep posting.
760
760
Review of Dream World  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello manjuri,
A beautiful thinking through a beautiful poem.
Truly a "Dream World"
I admire how you described such a beautiful world and each line is great to read.
I like this work from the start until the last line.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
761
761
Review of Maria  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello River,
A short story and yet so touching.
How lucky is Maria to have you as an acquaintance and eventually became a friend.
In life, what makes our journey wonderful and meaningful is when we learn how to reach out to others, regardless of age, color of skin, financial status and surely you will encounter more "Maria" in your life, and there
will be more to be blessed as you are going to be blessed too.
I admire your biographical short story that was written from the heart.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
762
762
Review of I Believe  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Zodiac,
This is a very inspiring essay. I admire every paragraph and I am happy for you to have such strength, enthusiam, and beliefs. You possessed a very wholesome and wonderful soul.
The essay is well-written and you explained fully what you wished to convey.
There is a good flow and I did not notice any error at all.
Thank you for the great read.
Keep writing and keep positng.
763
763
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello mastermind,
A very intriguing title.
OH.....Yes, the twist at the end.
Very funny..
My suggestion:
"They tell me your not at all well lately"
Please change the word your to....you're
They tell me you're not at all well lately
"no effect on him what so ever"
Please change this to:
no effect on him whatsoever
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
764
764
Review of Fate O Fate  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello wanderer unbound,
How nicely you described this word through a well-written and well-presented
poetry.
It has a very good rhyme and nicely presented.
I have nothing to add and nothing to correct.
I admire this "Fate O Fate"
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
765
765
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Goldie,
Reading the title , I had an answer in my mind.
Reading the choices, I believe that "Absolute freedom" is surely my choice.
This is fantastic and I enjoyed this poll.
Thank you for the opportunity for me to vote.
See you again..
Write On.
766
766
Review of My Love...  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you crimson,
This is so full of life and so full of love.
A poetry that expresses a love and devotion so deep and so strong.
The poem is like a beautiful ballad that makes me feel so in love with
your work.
A job well-done !
How wonderful it is to be in love, it makes the world so wonderful too!
Thank you for sharing "My Love"
Write On.
767
767
Review of Just Ask  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Kings,
A very captivating title.
The presentation is great.
The poem is an inspiring piece.
I admire the chosen lines and the wonderful rhythm and rhyme.
The caption below the given title speaks of the truth, the most powerful truth.
Thank you for sharing "Just Ask"
See you again.
Write On and God Bless.
768
768
Review of On Dreaming  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Peach,
A poetry that describes a dream and ended with a connected to reality.
A poem that expresses a dream that has to do with nature and some activities
and it keeps on haunting.
My only suggestion:
Please put 2 spaces right after the poem before putting the word Peach
so as not to consider it as a part of the poem. What I mean is for a nice
presentation.

"is a dream
that daily haunts me."

Peach
April 3, 2009
1:45 am
Arlington, Virginia

Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
769
769
Review of Ambition  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello C. Elise,
You made me laughed reading the last line.
A poem that was written with all honesty.
A very interesting title, knowing and believing that "Ambition" guides us to raech our goals.
My suggestion:
"To be experience,"
Please change this to :
To be experienced,
Well, in life we can move slowly but surely.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
770
770
Review of Our Beginning  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello WhoMe,
A beautiful poem with a happy message.
Truly what a wonderful beginning.
The poem has a good flow and I admire each line that completed this poetry.
I am happy for you.
Thank you for sharing your talent through " Our Beginning"
Write On.
771
771
Review of Moments  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello seastories,
This is a very inspiring work.
It expresses a grateful heart.
I agree with the chosen words/lines that completed this lovely poetry.
"Thank you God...
for
"all"
those moments."
Wonderful lines that said it all.
Thank you for another worthwhile read.
See you again.
Write On and God Bless !
A warm smile from the Philippines !
772
772
Review of Doll  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Irene,
The title captures my interest simply because I love making dolls that makes the children stay in our place just
to play with them and the funny side of it is they always want to bring them home.
Back to my review :
Oh...How sad is the message of this poetry.
Philosophical and sentimental.
This is deeply emotional and so well-written and well-presented.
Thank you for sharing "Doll"
Keep writing and keep posting.
773
773
Review of Spin Cycle  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again seastories,
This is biographical and written with all honesty and I find it fun to read.
I admire your style of writing free-verse poetry which happens to be one of my favorite form of all the kinds of poetry
that I read in this awesome community.
I look forward to read more of your work, like short stories and many more.
Thank you for sharing "Spin Cycle"
Keep writing and keep posting.
774
774
Review of Lake Village Cafe  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello seastories,
An unforgettable experience.
Very inviting "Lake Village Cafe"
With a food server who owns the most beautiful smile surely the customers are coming back soon.
A free-verse poetry and this is well-written.
Descriptive and wonderful.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
775
775
Review of Writer's Block  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Darkened Heart,
A very captivating title and I believe all authors in this community can relate to the experience.
My suggestion:
"So many topics to chose"
Please change the word chose to......choose
So many topics to choose
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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