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Review of Mans Best Friend  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello winddancer,
This is a very touching story. So full of love and honor to a dear friend/pet.
My suggestion :
The title , "Mans Best Friend"
Please put an apostrophe in the word Man's
Man's Best Friend
Thank you for sharing your short story.
Keep writing and keep posting.
702
702
Review of Because  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Lane,
The title captures my interest.
My favorite lines in this work:
"so go home and say i love you
to everyone that is around you"
My suggestion:
"because its all we can be
becasue its all we know"
Please put an apostrophe in the word it's
"so you shoud be happy
and grateful to"
Please change this to:
so you should be happy
and grateful too.
"so dont turn your back"
Please put an apostrophe in the word don't
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
703
703
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Ben,
The explanation below the poem is very informative and educational.
Reading the title, it also made me reflect that later, my time will also come to rest in peace since there is no exception to this reality. And it is best to know
that deep within our hearts we are ready to face the said moment.
The poem is well-written and well-presented and I strongly believe the chosen words fit for the given title.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
704
704
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again Magoo,
I love this poem from the start to the end.
A very good rhythm and rhyme.
It has a good flow and a wholesome fun.
Thank you the joy I gain reading your work.
Write On.
705
705
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Magoo,
A poem so full of action or a family bonding time that expresses fun and thrill.
I can vividly picture the situation as if I was one of the spectators nearby.
Hhahhahhaha !
I enjoy reading your work.
I have nothing to edit.
Thank you for sharing "I Can Wrestle My Dad"
Write On.
706
706
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello heftynicki,
A personal experience as in a drama in rela life.
I admire the presentation as well as your style of writing the story.
The suspense, the love story and many more blended harmoniously through
your great talent of writing.
A job well-done !
Thank you for sharing "In The Face Of Danger"
See you again in this awesome community.
Keep writing and keep posting.
707
707
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello marcusi,
The ending as a sudden twist that shows Bryna's true identity.
The story has a good flow. The characterization is great.
Well, this story reminded me that in our journey we always cherish the child in us like enjoying those special moments watching and playing the toys that the child within us used to play, but change is also a part of the journey, like what the main character is doing in this story.
Thank you for sharing your work.
See you again in this awesome community.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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708
Review of Normal  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello juliakaye,
A poem that expresses the true events at home and the mother's instructions to her children and yes the title fits for the chosen lines.
My suggestion:
"you'll see what i mean"
Please capitalize the letter I
you'll see what I mean.
Thank you for sharing this realistic poetry through "Normal"
Keep writing and keep posting.
709
709
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello jncobbs,
A very captivating title.
A story from the heart so full of love, respect and honor to a very special person
in your life.
It has a good flow and it expresses the journey of life which includes death of a loved one.
This is well-written and well-presented.
This is truly a story that cannot be forgotten because the bond between you and your grandfather is so strong and it lives forever in your heart.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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710
Review of Life of a Clown  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Koyel,
A free-verse poetry that describes the life of an entertainer that makes us laugh when we are blue.
Emotional.
The poem has a good flow and I did not notice any error in it.
Thank you for sharing a story of a part that a clown must play through "Life of a Clown"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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711
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello babalu,
A poetry that sounds like a gospel song to me.
It is a poem from the heart as in a precious conversation with the Lord.
The message is very inspiring and touching.
I admire the way it was written and presented.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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712
Review of VIRTUES AND FLAWS  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello again Lean,
A sample...
You are sharing to us a very interesting topic written in your own unique way.
In our interaction with others there are so many times thaat we considered some persons are being so arrogant, but if we know the person or these deeper this person or persons are just being misunderstood, because I believe
that there is always goodness in everyone's heart.
Thank you for another great read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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713
Review of Together  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Michelle,
A poetry that expresses a wonderful experience.
The lovely sea and the very important person beside you holding hand, I can picture the beautiful scene.
My suggestion :
I don't think the last stanza is needed. It is ony a repeatition of the first stanza.
I like your poem that spreads warmth to the readers.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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714
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello The Critic,
A very interesting poll simply because I consider Time as an essence of my
existence.
i just wonder why the choices are being repeated.
My suggestion:
Please change the choices that were repeated for the readers to appreciate it more.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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715
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Carrie,
A prose and how sad is the story behind it.
Yes, this is deeply emotional that speaks of the true happenings in a relationship.
It is like the song with the lyrics " I remember the boy, but I don't remember
the feelings anymore."
Sad but life goes on...
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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716
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Ldyphoenix,
I find this survey a challenging one as well as very useful as far as we authors are all concerned.
Hahhahhhahha! Thank you so much because you allowed my mind to activate.
Interesting !
WHEW !
Thank you for the opportunity for me to join this survey.
See you again.
Write On.
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717
Review of the mistake  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello red14lili,
Whew ! A drama in real life.
I can imagine the shock and the agony of hearing such news and the relief that it was a mistake. Interesting short story.
My suggestion:
The title:
"the mistake"
Please change this to :
The Mistake
The caption below the title:
"she thenked god"
Please change this to:
she thanked God
The first paragraph:
Please divide this into three paragraphs.
"I am calling from the local hospitable"
Please change the word hospitable to.....hospital
"I asked hopping"
Please change the word hopping to....hoping
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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718
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello SimpleMan,
A poem with a philosophical message.
Your first poem and surely there will be more and more ...
My suggestion:
The caption below the titlle:
"My first poem writen."
Please change the word writen to....written
My first poem written.
The last line:
"it never sleeps nor do i"
Please capitalize the letter I
it never sleeps nor do I
I look forward to read more of your works.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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719
Review of Forget Me Not  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Shadow,
You are very clever !
This is a unique short story and I admire your talent.
The lady character is so intriguing and even the ending is also intriguing as in you let me asked about her as who she really is, and that is why I like your work, not the ordinary one.
The title ? I like it like the way I used to sing the song with the same title.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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720
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello marcusi,
A beautiful short story, I considered myself so blessed to read this one.
This is like a movie that I do not want to miss a single moment.
So lovely !
The story itself is great.
The characters are fascinating.
There is a good flow.
There is no grammatical error and no typo.
A work of a professional.
I have nothing to edit but I have something to truly appreciate and that is
how glad I am to be able to read "Knight in Rusting Armor"
Thank you very much for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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721
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello jacobbooker,
I am living in a village known as "Scuba Divers Paradise" and reading the title of your work, it made me very interested as well as very curious to know your story.
Hhahhahhhaahaha !
What an experience... A genius and an adventurer ! Wow !
All in one, you are truly blessed to have a very supportive family in all your undertakings, that was many years ago and believe it is going on that way until
this time.
The story is full of suspense and you wrote it in such a way that I was so amused.
Thank you for sharing "Underwater Adventures" and I look forward to read more of your works.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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722
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Lathana,
This is interesting and the prizes at stake are very inviting.
Thank you for sharing this informative article.
My suggestion in this work:
"The them is Speculative Fiction."
Please change the word them to....theme
The theme is Speculative Fiction.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello bristelstomp,
The heart speaks ....That was twenty years ago. Surely you made it through
the rain and the sun is smiling brightly now.
An emotional piece.
My suggestion:
"I can't stand to loose you"
Please change the word loose to....lose
I can't stand to lose you.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Remember Me  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Ashleigh,
A beautiful love poetry.
It has a good flow as well as the rhythm and rhyme is wonderful.
My suggestion is not at the poem but at the caption below the title:
"impending seperation or distance"
Please change the word seperation to.....separation
Thank you for sharing "Remember Me"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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725
Review of Retaliation  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Koyel,
First and foremost, CONGRATULATIONS for completing your Masters.
That is truly a great achievement.
Back to the review :
This is an emotional piece and the explanation below the poetry made your readers understood fully of what form of poetry is this and thank you for that information.
There is sadness as well as anger in this poem that expresses a relationship that did not work out, like a double jeopardy if revenge will reign.
How about forgiveness as in "Let Go, Let God, and Let Live !
I have nothing to correct.
Thank you for the read and Write On.
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