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Review of Innocence  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Breanne,
This is a very inspiring work.
This poem has a good flow and a good rhyme.
Every line is a wonderful line and I consider this work very special in every way.
"Dreams are a never ending possibility"
My favorite line and I admire how you described it.
Thank you for sharing "Innocence"
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu,
I agree with the very captivating title.
Why keep hatred in the hearts when love is beautiful and most wonderful feeling to experience and to share.
How many countless victims because of the harmful effect of hatred.
Sad but this is happening all over the world.
I admire your work.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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778
Review of Come  
Review by tsurtidogni
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello diamantia,
A short poetry that expresses an invitation.
This looks like a haiku poetry to me.
Concise and wise.
I find this poem so wonderful.
Thank you for sharing your work.,
Write On.
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779
Review of Honesty  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello A Poet of Sorts,
A poetry from the heart.
A free-verse and it expresses a relationship that turned unpleasant.
The title is captivating knowing and believing how important is the word"Honesty"
My suggestion:
The last line, please put a question mark.
"What did it lack ?"
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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780
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Jaiam,
A very inspiring work.
There is wisdom in this poetry and I am so glad to have read this.
"No, my child, this is not for you"
The line that explains fully.
"Perhaps that is why
YOU are
The GOD of all things."
Amen.....
Thank you very much for sharing and best regards.
See you again.
Write On.
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Review of Grandma's Angels  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Daniels,
A very touching short story that serves as a loving tribute to a very special person in your life.
The story has a good flow and descriptive.
Your grandma is truly loved by everyone including the angels up above and most of all surely she is
very happy now watching over you and to all that she loves.
Thank you for sharing this wonderful "Grandma's Angels"
Write On.
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782
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lean,
A poetry and an explanation.
Perfect combination of both, Time and Money...It has its own value as well as its own interest as far as principles and elements are concerned.
You are a Master of Philosphy..
Your works are amazing and they always activate my mind.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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783
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu,
A biographical poetry describing such an unpleasant situation of a career person.
Well....Charge it to experience.
A highly educated that you are surely there are more opportunities that comes along, accompanied with prayers,
a strong determination and a courageous heart, you will make it !
Thank you for sharing this free-verse poetry.
See you again.
Write on and God Bless.
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Review of My Life  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Southern Star,
A biographical piece and emotional and yet I can see the word "Hope" and it is all that matters as far as
our lives are concerned.
Surely is is sad to note when we are not physically fit or when we are not healthy, but there is another word
that proves to be repeated and is repeated everyday"MIRACLE !" and God our Almighty is the giver of all
these miracles and one last word that I wish to share that is a very powerful word "PRAYER"
Yes, prayer is all powerful and God says "If two or more of you pray, I will be in your midst"
From this very moment, I pray that you are fully healed in mind, body, spirit and All Is Well, In Jesus Name,
I pray. Amen !
Thank you for sharing "My Life'
See you again in this awesome Writing.Com.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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785
Review of Unknown Abilities  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Aaron,
Welcome To Writing.Com.
You wish to have an honest opinion about your work from the reviews of your readers.
Here is my honest opinion:
I believe you are a very talented author who knows how to convince your readers to read your work as in
reading a book and turn it page after page and you do not want to put it down until the last page is read.
The story has a very intriguing title and a very interesting plot.
The characterization is great and I am fascinated by the character of James.
It has a good flow and the presentation is wonderful.
I look forward to read the continuation of this story as well as up to the end.
Suspense thriller in progress ! This is something unique !
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of I will be okay  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello natharocksu,
A wonderful way of ending a relationship as in "no hard feelings."
My suggestion in this very meaningful prose:
"thats how I'm feeling"
Please put an apostrophe in the word that's
that's how I'm feeling
"I wont be grieving"
Please put an apostrophe int he word won't
"Just livit it up"
Please change this to:
Just live it up
"lets move on"
Please change this to:
let's move on
"well both persue"
Please change this to :
we'll both pursue.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello HOOVES,
This is truly fantastic !
Written with all honesty and I admire your wholesome sense of humor and the wisdom I learned reading this line:
"Just as in life, timing is everything. Good luck with your timing ! "
Well-said !
I like the image of the very healthy Moooooooo below the essay.
Thank you for the great read.
See you again. My best regards.....
God Bless..
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Review of Don't Cry My Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Southern Star,
A very touching poetry. i heartily agree with the chosen lines.
This is well-written and it has a good rhyme.
I love the positiveness of this poetry and the message is inspiring.
So full of love.
Thank you for sharing "Don't Cry My Love"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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789
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello akaxxander,
The caption below the poetry made me wonder why such title was given.
Dramatic and philosophical work.
A very wishful thinking at the end:
"us together
forever"
Thank you for sharing "you can never hurt me'
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of No Longer Judas  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello nisha,
The title is very intriguing.
The poem has a very good flow.
This is well-written and well-presented free -verse poetry.
A love story behind the poetry that ends well.
Thank you for sharing "No Longer Judas"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello SavvyKing,
A very interesting poem with a questioning heart at the end.
My suggestion:
The main title:
"Im No Miranda Kerr But..."
Please put an apostrophe in the word I'm
I'm No Miranda Kerr But....
"but im here"
Please change this to:
bu I'm here.
"dreams to, feelings to"
Please change this to :
dreams too, feelings too
The word "im"
Please change this to :
I'm
"I'm not ugly
My favorite line:
But "we're not disposable, and we're not useless"
The message in this poem is inspiring.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Write On.
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Review of Pain Within  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Southern Star,
Yes, it is always hurtful when we lost someone that we love.
This is a very emotional poem that describes the innermost feelings of the whole being.
Except for the last stanza, the poem has a very good rhythm and rhyme.
Thank you for sharing "Pain Within"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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793
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello harycubbybear,
How great is your love and how deep is your feelings for this particular person that this poem is dedicated to.
The lines are so wonderful to read like a beautiful rainbow that gives color to the vast skies.
I am happy for you that you have this love in your heart and surely you are being loved in return.
A job well-done !
Thank you for sharing "The Nearness Of You "
Keep writing and keepposting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Poetry Inspiration  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Rhys,
The description in the first few stanza's were wonderful.
A nice poetry.
"But is a flower still a flower,
After all the petals die? "
Brilliant conclusion and may I answer the question with "YES"
Thank you for sharing "Questionable Controversy" whose title fits for the chosen lines.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Secrets  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello thenightwriter,
A very captivating title.
In my own personal opinion a secret is a secret and is sacred, but it is not easy to keep a secret because
the truth will always come out.
Some people will tell their secrets to a very special person or persons in their lives, some people will bring their
secrets to their graves.
This is a very interesting work and you made me smile reading the last two lines.
My suggestion:
"Can i tell..."
"Can i spill....."
Please capitalize the letter I
Can I tell you a secret ?
Can I spill your deepest emotions too?
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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796
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello horosuma,
A poetry that has a philosophical message.
Yes, I agree, our tomorrow has a connectedness with our yesterday and our today.
The poem has a good flow and it has something to do with a relationship of two persons that did not work
out well in the past, and here comes a poetry longing to rekindle the flame of the dying love.
My suggestion in this work :
"Late at night, when your alone"
Please change the word your to...you're
Late at night when you're alone
"When you think it forgotten, and lost for ever"
Please change this to:
When you think it was forgotten and lost forever,
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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797
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Curtis,
The title made me very curious to read your work.
Yes, I also experiences this "Deja Vu" myself.
Reading between the lines, you answered my wondering mind.
A prudent theory of what is the given topic all about.
This is well-written and well-presented.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with WDC Frontliners Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello M.J. Mitchell.
The story behind the poetry is so full of life and so inspiring.
This expresses a very wonderful emotion, a joyful one.
My suggestion:
"Held in your had was a shimmering red rose"
Please change the word had to...hand
Held in your hand was a shimmering red rose
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review of Wings of a Dream  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello dstarindia,
The message is inspiring.
My suggestion:
The presentation:
Please divide this into three paragraphs and put a space in each paragraph.
"i have interpreted, i am trying, i want, i am'
Please capitalize the letter I
I have interpreted, I am trying, I want, I am
Thank you for sharing "Wings of a Dream"
Write On.
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Review of My Ranch  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM T...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Pony Tale,
Descriptive of a wonderful place.
So full of life and a delightful piece.
"When you don't wish to roam
But long for the light
As it welcomes you home"
Beautiful conclusion for a lovely poem.
Thank you for sharing "My Ranch"
Write On.
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