Hello Wally Setter,
The title is very captivating.
A combination of religion and Sci-fi.
Unique in all aspects.
This is well-written and well-presented.
I did not notice any error at all.
I admire your talent.
The last line is very intriguing.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello darbonne,
The first few stanzas, the lines written were full of life and love
The last few stanzas, the lines written were all sad still still full of love
The ending is most sad and still full of love.
An emotional poetry with a good flow, a love story of yesterday,today and tomorrow.
My suggestion:
"I cant take it"
"I cant live without you"
Please put an apostrophe in the word can't
I can't take it
I can't live without you
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello sramos,
A poetry with a very happy message and the happiness spreads across the world through the
"Love Chimes"
A poem so full of life.
I admire it a lot.
Very true,
"Life is so beautiful
When love is around."
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
Hello Captain Maelstrom,
This is a free-verse poetry that describes a very delicious shell, "Mussel"
The chosen words fit for the given title.
My suggestion :
Please check with the presentation of the poem. It is much better if it will be written at the left side or at the center.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Ida,
An emotional poetry that expresses a very sad and unpleasant yesterday and the sudden twist at the end makes
the poem so powerful and so wonderful.
Thank you for sharing your work that is also a very good release to all the pains of yesterday.
Truly, GOD LOVES YOU...
Happy Mother's Day !
Write On.
Hello Matty,
I am fascinated by your talent in writing short stories.
This one is PERFECT.
I have nothing to edit.
I admire the way it was written and presented from the start to the end.
A short story in a MONOLOGUE.
A job well-done !
Thank you for sharing "Without Light, I Am"
WRITE ON.
Hello Narcissistic Drama Queen,
This is a great release of an emotion. Keeping an unpleasant thoughts makes us sick and one of the best way
is to write them , let go and move on with life.
The drama of life.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello pOetic justice,
The lines are touching.
It expresses the value of friendship, the camaraderie and the wonderful moments together.
It also conveys that no relationship is perfect that there are small problems but true frienship strengthens
when the problem is solved by facing and talking, discussing about them, because we are not mind readers.
The last line is sad but hopeful and the wishful thinking..
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
Hello leshwar,
Wow !
I admire the whole story.
It is full of suspense......the idea of getting to know you and yet both were awkward if who will do the first move to talk or to open up a conversation.
The wondering mind remains...
The conclusion is wise.
Thank you for sharing "Boy in The Bus"
WRITE ON.
Hello jaya,
A wonderful description of "A mother's love"
A poem with a good flow and has a lovely rhythm and rhyme.
A beautiful poem that serves as a fascinating gift of a child to a mother on the very special occasion that we are about to celebrate, Mother's Day.
A poem from the heart.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON.
Hello again Matty,
A story about John and his escape but he was captured and tortured brutally.
The story has a good flow and the presentation is very impressive.
A sad ending.
I notice one word at the last paragraph:
"John past the thresh hold of the "
Please change it to:
John past the threshhold of the ..
Thank you for sharing "Golden Letters"
WRITE ON.
Hello again Wes,
A very interesting continuation in your life as you stay in Vietnam. The Vietnam Department of Tourism needs to read your work and surely they will give you an honorary title as an adopted child of Vietnam, because "A Different
Path" is a perfect advertising about their country.
Reading paragraph after paragraph I can vividly picture the country and its people.
I believe the best thing to do is make this a novel, a Bestseller of the year 2010.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Redtowrite,
Nostalgic and it describes a place so dearly loved.
It expresses it yesterday and today.
My favorite lines:
"Beauty trancends decrement, tender wrinkles of time,
lost in patterns of light and shadows of yesterdays"
The very good storyteller is also a great poet.
Thank you for sharing "A Lullaby of the Old South"
WRITE ON.
Hello Matty,
This is nice short story about two gods, interesting Enki and Kur.
The title is wonderful and the story line is great.
Full of action too. A story about the good and the bad and precisely the good always wins.
The ending is highly admirable.
"Live "
Brilliant piece !
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON...
Hello Richard,
This poem expresses the struggle with pain. Pain in its deepest meaning, not the bodily pain but it is in the
mind and it overrules everything.
"My suggestion"
"It might be gone and but back again"
Please change it to :
It might be gone but back again
There is a very good solution to this pain, not only very good but the best.
PUT IT ALL IN GOD'S HANDS AND SURELY THIS PAIN WILL BE GONE WITH THE WIND.
Thank you for sharing "This Pain"
ALL IS WELL.....
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello river,
The first and second stanza is full of life as in GLORIUS !
The third and the last stanza is full of frustrations.
This is how I understand this philosophical and well-written poetry.
Like the famous words "It's so lonely at the top"
That also expresses that the dreams were realized but stiil the dreamer possessed a lonely heart.
There is something that is missing to have a life of completeness and fulfillment.
A poem so deep.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
Hello Tim,
Inspirational and philosophical message of this poetry about the celestial bodies, "The Sun and the Moon"
Well-written and the last four lines are my favorite lines.
A connection of life and dreams.
Thank you for sharing your work.
WRITE ON.
Hello Martha,
A Sci-fi full of action and a bit of humor added into it.
Captivating title.
You made me smile reading the conclusion about this Sci-Fi lady that turns to cooking at the end.
Very Creative.
A job well-done !
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello dbruso,
The story is well-written and well-presented. It's a horrible plight for the farmer and his pregnant wife.
Very convincing work. A thriller..
Full of suspense, action and horrible deeds...
I have nothing to correct.
This "Prologue" is highly admirable.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello Iowegian Skye,
This is fascinating.
I was curious as I read the title because it sounds so new or so foreign to be.
What a lovely sight before the six lines poetry.
The chosen words truly described a beautiful Holland, a place I dream to visit and to enjoy someday.
Thank you for sharing "Cygnus"
WRITE ON.
Hello Matty,
A story with 9 short chapters.
Drama, suspense, action, dark. fantasy...Perpect combination.
The charactreization is unique. No given or particular name, only the adjectives that described each person.
The poet, the lady, the guy, the biker.
My suggestion and mostly TYPOS:
1) entered out world........Please change it to:
entered our world
2. buisnessmen (please check this word was misspelled three times)
businessmen
3. beard with steak
beard with streak
4. elegent
elegant
5. another ads
another adds
6. eachother
each other
7. loosing track
losing track
8. crowed
crowd
9. staring intensly
staring intensely
Thank you for sharing your talent through "The Poet"
WRITE ON.
Hello Koyel,
A poem from the grateful heart.
It expresses a word of appreciation to someone who inspires you and gives you the motivation to go on with what you love to do most.
A friend is a treasure and you are very lucky to have a friend and friends as you enjoy and continue your journey.
Thank you for sharing this Haiku poetry that was written with all sincerity
and truthfulness.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello again Koyel,
You have wonderful creations here.
You also have a well-organized portfolio.
A young and lovely poet.
I am happy for your blessings.
Thank you for sharing your Haiku poems, the winning entries.
GREAT !
Keep writing and keep posting.
Hello jackmaster,
The poem from the heart.
A special message to someone you love.
My suggestion:
"thats fine" Please change it to..............that's fine
"me heart brake"................................................my heartbreak
"a idoit" ....................................an idiot
"im sorry" ..............................................i'm sorry
"but i no" .........................................but i know
"and you no" .................................................and you know
"they all no".........................................they all know
"so its" ...............................................................................so it's
Thank you for sharing "love and love"
WRITE ON.
Hello Shen,
This is truly a short poetry that fits the given title.
The three lines has a good rhyme and the last line as a sudden twist of the story behind the poetry.
This is like a Haiku to me, concise and wise/
Thank you for sharing "Short and Sweet"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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