Very impressive way of expressing a feeling called love. The writer does not fear melting completely and forgetting his/her own identity in love, but fears rejection, lonliness, ditch and seperation. The unexpected way in which someone has become the whole world to the writer is remarkable.
I enjoyed reading this.
Kmurphy helped me too on WDC when I was very new to it. She gave me brilliant advises, suggestions, motivation and had always a chirp so positive. Someone gifted me an upgraded membership on WDC anonymously, and from day one I believe its KMURPHY.
Thanks for writing this for her. Words are too few to let her know our sincere gratitude. Kathy you are an angel to us. we love you
This was one of the best items I have read so far on WDC. Apart from a story, It has a message to tell each one of us. And the message strong enough for all of us to understand and relate to. Communication gap as they say, or miscommunication as we perceive does do a lot of damage to our relationships. They say Blood relations and all that, but a true relation of the heart is the relation of love, selflessness and kind heartedness. Emma was deceived in her love life, she was neglected, she felt alone. But that faded away once the gap was bridged between her and her family members by give and take of words, expressions and a body language called HUG. A gentle caring hug does not boasts to perfect everything, but it can heal lot of wounds and correct lot of dentures.
I liked this one.
Apart from one typo error(which I think can be neglected) "They had never spoke spoken about her mother" , it was flawless.
The poem is filled with such intense romance that people have just dreamt of having one. The writer is happy for that fact that the love of her life is present in front of her eyes. So she does not want to sleep and does not want to dream. The moments are cherished in her thoughts, her words and her feelings. Ignorance of the world is best described as the writer is lost in the arms of her love.
How can someone be in this intense love. Its quite surprising. At the same time, every one will wish to get such nights everyday of their life.
I really enjoyed reading this.
Thoughts of a domesticated pet cat exposed !
Gives one more dimension for us humans to think, what might be going on in the pet's mind.
The most funny part in this was that the Hell Kitten thinks of humans as her slave. And still she cannot do anything when they discuss of tying a bell to her tail. The prompts and muse are very nicely used. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
A very touching preface about a mother who knows that these are her last moments, about a husband who is disturbed with the same news. About a girl, who does not know whats wrong, but she wants to see her mother to confirm she is fine.
Promise - the title is suited perfectly with the flow and the gist of the story.
You can definitely make something out of this and I am sure it will turn out great. Would love to read the extension of this.
Keep the words flowing !!!
Strength mocking weakness, and in return strength gets weaker.
This nicely written short story has a moral to it.
A naughty guy makes fun of a disabled girl. However, time teaches him a lesson, and in the end he is more disabled than the girl.
After reading this I laughed from the girl's perspective and said "tit for tat".
The lesson taught is : Never laugh at weakness, one day you'll learn a lesson in the hard way".
I really enjoyed reading this.
Being accused of something not done brings a lot of disturbances - emotionally and ethically.
The world has turned its back onto the writer and punished him/her with lonliness and decaying self-respect.
The mirror laughs on the writer, and he suspects his shadow too. I have been through such a situation previously, and I know how it feels to be punished for no reason at all. The silence kills. And we are left to the mercy of others to get back to us. Takes time, but till then we are completely destroyed internally. The courage, self- respect and dignity are blown to pieces.
I would like to say " Time heals and teaches". The patience to wait for such a right time kills.
I am touched reading this.
Thanks for sharing this on WDC.
Write On!
You have described the time of the year that is the most colorful one in terms of new beginnings and new hopes. The chirping of the birds, the trees shedding their dry leaves and making a room for the new ones to come. The "hmmmm hmmmm" of the dove has always something to tell us. The whole of the scene was coloured in sepia as I was reading this poem.
Why did the thunder come as an answer, because its just the autumn time.. I would love to know.
Or May be because it is autumn,the thunder wants to be followed by showers for a new life to begin.
A very nice read for this morning.
Its not the wrong time, as the writer said. Its just that sometimes we need to re-look at certain things. And I am glad I saw autumn in the month of March.
Write On!
This poem has a very sad note to it. I felt really sad to read that the writer is in want of a Love in form of a special someone.
The writer wants to spend the starry night hand in hand, write for that someone who is wanted to be a motivation factor for the writer.
Thats charm , that brightness, that vivid experiences in the life of this writer is missing in the form of a Loved One, and thats all he/she wants.
I loved reading this. Made me think from the writer's point of view, and let me tell you it was very much heart-aching.
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You seem to have been in a deepest love relationship. And it brings a smile on my face everytime I read your work. It is so full of emotions and feelings.
What I liked about this item:
The best opening line I have ever read " The Sun was yawning in the east".. never imagined to write it like this. Bravo to you to have actually put it in words.
Suggestion/s (if any): None to mention. It was flawless.
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The poet is so much filled with love for her beloved, that she can feel his presence everywhere. In ever aspect of life, in every stride, in every miniature resemblence of mother nature she found, felt and missed the love of her life.
What I liked about this item: The intensity with which this poem is written turly requires a huge round of applause. I cannot imagine a feeling more intense than this one.
Suggestion/s (if any): None. It was flawless.
What I would like to know: " O my dear", was used intentionally for the poetic effect or does it have any other reason behind it. I would like to know this just for my knowledge. No criticism intended.
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This poem is written with a very happy note, full of romance. The feelings expressed are very well. Proper use of words, pauses, very impressive.
What I liked about this item:
The expression of joy and anxiety in relation to the veling and unveiling of moon is very imaginative, and one of its kind. Never read a simili like this before. very nicely done.
Suggestion/s (if any): Towards the end, the repetitions of roses, fragrance, moon, stars can be avoided. This is just my suggestion. Please feel free to neglect it. No intentions to hurt the true sentiments of the poet were kept in mind.
Otherwise the work was flawless.
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It was very touching to read this poem. It really gave me goose-bumps. The title is well suited.
The very state of being in the mental asyllum runs jitters, and the explanation is very impressive.
What I liked about this item:
The detailed routine of people admitted in the asyllum is really breath-taking. And you have effortlessly expressed it in this poem. The thoughts have come out eventually and a result is a wonderful peom like this.
Overall Impression: This poem brought about intense feelings for myself, as I imagined myself here, what if I was in the character's shoes. the wait is expressed very brilliantly.
What I liked about this item: Every woman is blessed with a feeling BEING JEALOUS. Lets be frank, its quite natural. But here, a woman is shown with a strong sign of maturity, as she is willing to wait till a day when the love of her life, comes back to her with a smile meant only for her.
Suggestion/s (if any): None. the work is flawless. Tag:
What I would like to know: I would love to know, how can a woman be not jealous. I would be definitely, seeing myself in the character's shoes.
THIS IS JUST MY OPINION : There is someone who is truly missing love in his/her life. The words speak in your poem and they are full of " I wish" feelings, so much intense that you have described almost every adjective for LOVE.
What I liked about your poem : The poet has described the want of love by all 5 senses of cognition viz, words, touch, beauty, taste and fragrance.
there is nothing else that can describe the want of love better than these senses.
Misunderstanding over the phone - expressed well. And after my first read, I kind of bursted into a huge roar of laughter, reading that Chester was a cat. The open statements and despritions made about chester are just too apt to make a reader think that chester might be a boyfriend. It was too hilarious towards the end.
very nice work.I really like it.
Love of a father towards his daughter is well expressed.
He promises to protect his daughter, all throughout his life, even till his last breath.
There are promises of being together, being the strong support when the clouds of darkness shadow over the daughter.
From being a friend, philosopher and guide, this father loves his daughter to a very great extent. He cannot think of a moment without her.
This reminds me of my dad, who is still my strongest pillar.
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Love is a coin with two sides, each one having its own significance. We dread to see the other side of the coin, if we are in receipt of good signs. Isnt it? But some love stories do have a sad ending, and it leaves both of them hurt. The one who leaves feels the guilt (some day perhaps), and the left one feels instantly at the moment. Its a very heavy feeling.
Love is one such relationship where its only Give and No Take. It makes you tickle all over your body, with giggles spread out across the Halo of your own, But when it leaves, it leaves scars. Unhealed over time, age and experience.
yet, once abandoned, we are ready to face the music once again, because we see the happier side in more proportion than the darker side.
Content well explained.
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This item is great. i could actually type in and see if my answers were right ones or wrong. It helps all the members to know where they are, and what all they know, what all they need to know further to enhance their creative writing skills. How do we verify the answers written is my only concern. Otherwise I really enjoyed taking this online crossword.
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This is a wonderful piece of work While I was reading this, I could actually picturise that all the writer saw, as if it was live, in front of my eyes. This made me go back to my hometown, 600Kms away from where I am presently located. And as i see the town developing, the memories of yester years grow more stronger in time.
I liked this very much.
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This is a amazing experience for the writer. When he sees this stranger for the first time, he does not know that he's an uncle to him. Grandma's love for her children is shown very emotionally here, as she stops the pendulum at the time Roy leaves for the war. Its only a feeling that a Mother feels. We can only write about it. The cild's life is empty without his father being present, but he finds a father in his uncle, who once was a stranger.
very nice read for this morning
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Here's a lady whose got ready to go to the ball, wearing a new frock. She asks her mirror how does she look. The mirror is hesistant a bit in the beginning, but as she turns the mirror says that she does not look fat. The lady feels happy hearing that. She thinks she could be able to attract a smart and hansom prince at the ball. The mirror does not encourage her by wishing her luck.
And moral is very nicely explained with the help of prompts like mirror and the lady. Truth is not only the spone words, sometimes the silence tells many things true.
Nice read for this day
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Its quite funny that Emily finds the dragon like her mommy. The thought that Emily enters another world of her imagination by seeing the clouds, is just too good. Yes as a child, we too formed many shapes out of the fluffy cloud going by. For an instance it used to be an elephant, and at some other point of time the same cloud looked like a boat - courtesy wind.
The reason she thought that the dragon was like her mom was because he uttered the same words " Work first, play second".
Very funny read. Nice imagination
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