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Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. It's interesting that you chose to dwell on three main concepts in this poem: college, work, and romance. I'm in college now, so I can relate to that part, and the section about working seems realistic, from what I know about it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you broke three subjects down and wrote about them in poem form.
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Review of Packard Lane  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. Your story was realistic and the characters seemed to be alive. I thought "Lobo" was a unique and creative name for a fictional town. You managed to create suspense throughout the story up until the very end, I enjoyed reading this story.

Errors/Suggestions: You misspelled "delapadated" in the first paragraph. I think it is spelled "dilapidated"

What I liked: I anticipated a tragic ending, but wanted a happy ending, and I was pleasantly surprised. You did a good job of establishing drama.
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Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. The theme of lost youth was interesting to me, you were lamenting your lost childhood but still had hope for the future. I felt you achieved a delicate balance of yearning for the past while still anticipating a good future.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how the first letter of each line spells out "Lost and never found" that was creative!
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Review of Fr. Ninja  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. I enjoyed this short story, the protagonist was in a tough situation and he acted in the only way he was trained to. The terrorists thought he was just another victim, but he had a surprise in store for them.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I like the twist/surprise ending, I didn't see that coming.
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Review of Dear Me  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. This is a very extensive list, I hope you were successful in following through on at least some or most of these resolutions. I have creative resolutions every new year also, but mine involve drawing at least one drawing a day. So far, it's March 11th and I've succeeded in my goal. Last year and the year before I didn't even make it to February.

Errors/Suggestions: I found no technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion, I think it would be interesting if you provided an update at the bottom of the page to let readers know how you did on following through with your resolutions.

What I liked: I like how these resolutions encompass a wide variety of goals, creative goals and staying in physical shape with exercise, and cleaning the basement.
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Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature, I can relate to this a little bit because I am much heavier than I was at 22, and I look different now and I would love to go back to looking like I did when I was younger. I think that's a universal desire.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how I could relate to wanting to look younger, if I lost some weight I could go back to looking pretty good, despite some gray hairs.
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Review of Ash and dung  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. This was a macabre story, but it was written in good taste. Suicide is a controversial topic, but you handled it well.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how maturely you handled such a controversial topic. I like how you described such happy emotions in spite of writing about something so sad.
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Review of Dear Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. I think it's cute that you wrote a letter to yourself for New Year's to give yourself a kick in the pants to motivate yourself to get published.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I thought it was cute that you kept referring to your self as "Me," that was a nice touch.
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Review of Heading For Venus  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. This was a way out poem, it was very surreal, and I enjoyed it. I can relate to wanting to get away from my daily life and escape to a fantasy world where all my problems are gone.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how you put this poem together, without considering that the atmosphere of Venus is hot enough to melt lead, you developed this mythical place where all of your problems are solved and made it seem habitable and nice.
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Review of Stinker  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found your poem with the random story feature. This was a cute poem about a baby's dirty diaper, you did a good job of making a personal experience cute and funny.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you wrote about what kind of poem this was at the bottom of the page and described it in detail for those of us who might not know. Thank you for enlightening me!
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Review of The Winter Moon  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this poem with the random story feature. This was an interesting poem based on a prompt for a poem contest, you wrote a very brief poem but you were able to convey so much with so few words.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the brevity of your poem and the winter's sky scene at night you described.
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Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this poem with the random story feature. I enjoyed it, you pieced it together nicely. I enjoyed the subject of this poem, relationships are always interesting to read about in a poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion, you mentioned that the poem is a quinzaine in the description, maybe at the bottom of the page you could briefly describe a little more about quinzaine form.

What I liked: I liked the positive aspects of a relationship that you touched on in this poem. I also liked the blue and red coloring of the letters.
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Review of At What Price?  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature, after reading the story and seeing the three prompts that inspired this story, I think you have a vivid imagination and a talent for writing. I enjoyed the fantasy element of the fountain of youth, and the story itself was interesting.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how you came up with a complex story inspired by three simple prompt words, I loved it! I don't think I would've came up with as imaginative a story with those same three words as you did with this short story.
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Review of Santa's Mission  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I used the random story feature to find this item, I was expecting some kind of miraculous element in a story like this, but I wasn't disappointed with the results. I like how this is a story that could occur in the real world, and I liked the happy ending.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I really liked the happy ending, and I'm glad the story was in a real world setting, it was really believable. My dad was in the Marines, so I like seeing the Marines portrayed in a positive light.
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Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random story feature. I don't usually "get" most poetry, but I was able to catch the meaning of this poem; it seems to be about a beautiful day either in the summer or spring time, am I right? The waves suggested a paradise like Hawaii or some other tropical location. If I didn't completely get it, I still thought it was a beautiful poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you took the time to explain what kind of poem this is, to those of us who may not know that much about poetry. Thank you for enlightening me!
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Review of The Right Amount  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. This was a nice poem with an interesting theme, I've never heard of the concept that if you worry about something enough, it goes away. I found that interesting.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the theme of this poem, that if you worry about something enough, it goes away.
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Review of Delivered  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This poem was very dramatic, and you came up with an interesting situation based on scripture from Revelations. This seemed like the beginning of a horror story of some kind, you did a good job packing so much drama into such a short poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I like the way you included the quote from Revelations that inspired this poem, otherwise I would have never known the meaning behind this poem.
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Review of The Watermelon  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I like this homage to the watermelon, you did a good job of stirring up my taste buds, as I read this my mouth started to water and I could visualize the fruit you were describing. This poem made me feel like it was summer again!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the lengths you went to in order to properly show the respect to watermelon that it deserves. I enjoy it in the summertime.
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Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I like the way you were able to tell a cohesive story in poem form. Most poems are difficult for me to interpret, but yours was easier for me to understand. You must be a very experienced bowler to know so much about it, I haven't bowled in about a year and a half. The conflict presented by learning a new style of bowling technique presented some interested drama, I like how people reacted to it, that was realistic and an accurate reflection of human nature. I hope you mastered your new technique!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the lifestyle this poem indicates that you lead, having a hobby like bowling is all American and interesting!
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Review of "Gasp!"  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I enjoyed this homey and down to earth story, the characters were lifelike and interesting. It seems like you could make a series with these characters. I like the drama with the alligator, glad the situation got under control. The characters were very realistic.

Errors/Suggestions: I spotted this error: I usually stored my new friends in a pillow cases I always kept handy. I think the "a" should be omitted, because "cases" is plural.

What I liked: I liked the down home feel of the location and the characters in this story.
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Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem, I like how it was shaped like a diamond. The subject you chose to write about was something we can all relate to, the human body. Taking the time to explain the type of poem you wrote shows that you went above and beyond in my opinion.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind. Good job!

What I liked: I like that you chose to explain what diamante form is to those of us who weren't in the know and wanted to learn more about it.


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Review of The Monster  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute little story about a young girl on Easter morning. The events were plausible, and the reactions and emotions of the characters made sense.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors in this story, good job!

What I liked: I liked the reactions of the little girl, it made sense within the context of the story that she would be frightened like that over nothing. Her reactions were realistic, she seemed like a real little girl.
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Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature, it was a nice homage to the process of boiling water. I think it's creative that you could take such an ordinary, every-day part of our lives and turn it into a poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way you capitalized each word at the beginning of each line, that was a nice touch.
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Review of Howling Halloween  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. I enjoyed this poem, you did a good job with it. I liked the way it rhymed, and it sounded cool, too!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind, but you do have a broken link, it says invalid item.

What I liked: I like the color scheme you chose, green and orange, and I like the way you designed the poem. Good choices of wording, and nicely done!
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Review of Tired  Open in new Window.
Review by Token-Jester Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the dice feature. Nicely constructed poem, I think you did well with this. Amazing that you could convey so much with so few words.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how this expresses the Christmas season in such realistic terms! You got right to the point with this poem, good job.
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