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Review of Mermaids  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a beautiful little poem, and mermaids are such interesting creatures from mythology.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors.

What I liked: I liked the image your poem conveyed, I could visualize the mermaids. Also, I liked that you mentioned that they are children of Neptune. The way you described them made them seem real to me!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a very imaginative poem, full of action and life. I'll be the first to tell you I don't "get" poetry because I'm not a poet or a poem person, but even though I found it difficult to interpret your poem, I found it very colorful and interesting.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors, but a suggestion I have is to have a link at the bottom that takes you to a spot where you explain the meaning of this poem to those of us who find it hard to interpret poetry.

What I liked: I liked the colorful images your poem conveyed!
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Review of Just a Fairytale  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This must've been a painful poem to write, but surely there are other women who can relate to this.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors, but it might help if you wrote down the definition of a narcissist at the bottom of the page, so people will know exactly what type of man you're writing about.

What I liked: I liked that you got this out of your system by writing about it. Hopefully you won't fall for this type of man again.
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Review of Divergence  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a good story following a prompt, it kept me in suspense and I loved the ending.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors, and the only suggestion I would've had was to mention what contest the prompt was from, but you already did that.

What I liked: I liked the fact that if Luke and Diane had obeyed the tour guide, they would've been crushed with the other tourists. This was a very well-written short story.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a tragic story of two honeymooners. I guess I learned a lesson by reading this, never hike three days into the wilderness like that! You did a good job putting this together, it really kept me in suspense.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors, but I have a suggestion. You call this a storoem, maybe you could go into more detail about what kind of a story/poem this is. I noticed it was set up like a long poem such as the Iliad, but it didn't rhyme. It just had me curious.

What I liked: I liked being kept in suspense until the payoff at the end when he was rescued. I also like how realistic this was, not everything turned out great for them, which was more believable to me.
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Review of Dark Seasons  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a really well-written haiku about a woman and a vampire, I think it fits in well with the times because vampires are so popular nowadays.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors.

What I liked: I liked how this piece fits in with the current vampire craze, despite being written in 2007, well before the Twilight films or True Blood really took off.
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Review of Your Poem  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This poem showed a lot of emotion, and reminded me of poems written by professionals that I have heard or read before.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the strong words you used to express your love for this person. I wish somebody loved me that much!
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Review of Accused  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: This was a good take on an old concept, the guy who was guilty of a crime yet regrets his actions. I lost a little respect for him knowing he was a gang member, but I can understand why someone would regret comminting a violent crime.

Errors/Suggestions: In the fifth paragraph, the quotation mark at the end of the dialogue has a space before it, and after the quotation mark there is no space before the first letter of the next word of that sentence.

What I liked: I liked the visual imagery of the fog you described, it was very vivid and appropriate for this story.
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Review of Her Tears  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a haunting poem, well-written and full of wisdom. We can learn a lot from this poem, it sounds like the woman was in love with the man but he didn't pay attention to her.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the little poem at the beginning, before the main poem starts.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute little poem about a mother for her birthday. She sounds like quite a lady!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked what a full life this woman lived, and I'm pleasantly surprised that she lived to see her 80th birthday. I hope she has many more!
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Review of The Dark...  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem with a twist ending. It was just right for Halloween, while at the smae time being funny.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked when you compared the love life of the mannequin to the reader's love life, that makes some of us feel better!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a good poem, I liked how you left out an "e" and put an apostrophe in some places, I've seen poems like that before and I always think that's a good technique.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: I liked how you represented all of the major areas of the United States.
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Review of Skirts of Rain  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: The image this poem conveyed was very beautiful, I witnessed rain in the summertime once, and it is a beautiful sight. I think you did a very good job with this!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors, but as a suggestion, you might want to write out the definition of a pantoum at the bottom of the page for those of us who are not familiar with that type of poem.

What I liked: I liked how the first line and the last line were the same.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting point of view, different from my own, so it was interesting to read.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors, but as a suggestion I think you could go into more detail about why you wouldn't want a shrine built for you.

What I liked: I liked the unique perspective on a topic I haven't heard much about before now.
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Review of Fluffy  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a decent story using dialogue only, and you followed the prompt so well. I feel that you did a good job, and the story itself was entertaining.

Errors/Suggestions: I don't see any room for improvement, normally when someone follows a prompt, I suggest that they put up a link to the contest they entered if they failed to do so, but you have already done that here.

What I liked: I liked how you took such a surreal situation and made it seem so real.
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Review of Tea Kettle In Awe  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute, well-written poem about a tea kettle. I think you did a good job with this!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors.

What I liked: I like the way it rhymed. I also liked the way you infused the tea kettle with sentience; it wasn't even a question that the tea kettle could think and reason like a human being. Good job with this poem!
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Review of NYC  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem about New York city. I've never been there, but I can tell by the way you wrote this poem that you love it there.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors.

What I liked: I like the idea of a poem about New York written from the perspective of a person who loves it, considering that I've never been there. This poem accomplished that. Good job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a top rate poem about a guy who feeds pigeons. Interesting that you could take something so mundane and make it so vibrant.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors in the poem, but the link to the contest this poem was entered was long since vanished; that user must've quit this site and their username was retired. Maybe you could go through and mention the name of the contest and remove the old link that doesn't work any more, and mention the name of the person who ran the contest, even though they're not around any more.

What I liked: I liked the way this poem rhymed, you did a really good job with that!
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Review of Purpose  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You have an interesting life story, it's too bad you were kicked out of college. I wish you could've explained to them that you weren't involved in the protest.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked the upbeat ending, it is such a contrast to the bad news you had to report about your life. I'm glad you can see things in such a positive light.
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Review of The World Goes On  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: You were able to capture a lot of emotion witrh this flash fiction story. The intensity of the protagonist's feelings really came through.

Errors/Suggestions: In the fourth paragraph you have the word: "Hello?" and the next paragraph starts in the next line; you need to put a space between that word and the next sentence, because throughout this story you have chosen to skip a line between paragraphs, so you must do it here, as well. In the seventh paragraph, you have: "No Kelly. It really can’t" but I think you should have a comma between "no" and "Kelly"

What I liked: I liked the intensity of your protagonist's emotions, and the powerful drama of th backstory of her husband dying. I also lke how creatively you used the three words you were given to make a story with.
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Review of Father's Day  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You did an excellent job of informing us of the history of Father's day with this piece. I just had to review this to celebrate Father's day! Sonora Smart Dodd was a dedicated woman to spend so much time trying to turn Father's day into a national holiday. I always thought June was chosen as the month for Father's day because it immediately followed the month that Mother's day is in, May. I didn't know it was because Sonora Dodd's father's birthday was in June. You educated me!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors or areas that need improvement.

What I liked: I liked how informative this article is!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You raised an interesting question with this poll. Personally, I don't think the software companies are responsible, but I don't think it's impossible that a software company might stoop to doing something like that. I chose they're not responsible; until I see evidence proving otherwise, that's my viewpoint on the subject. I think it would be interesting if a software company ever got caught red-handed creating viruses.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked how creative this poll topic was. I saw it on the main page and clicked on it because it was so interesting!
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Review of A Dis-Ash-ter  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a poem about losing an old friend, but the friend turned out in the end to be a tree. If this tree meant that much to you, then losing it was like losing a true friend.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the surprise of finding out that the old friend you lost is in fact a tree! I'm glad it wasn't a person.
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Review of Reveille  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting story, I love science fiction. The problem with this story is that it doesn't seem to have a solid conclusion, your protagonist is just left hanging. I think it would be good to write a better ending, or write a second chapter to this and provide a link to it from this story.

Errors/Suggestions: In one of the final paragraphs toward the end, you have: "The numbers didn't quiet add up, and I think "quiet" should be spelled as: quite." In the next paragraph, you have: "The artefact" and I thnk that's misspelled, it should be spelled as: "artifact"

What I liked: I liked the futuristic stuff you described the future military as having, it was cool!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: Your life story is interesting and inspirational. I think it's good advice for a writer to read as well as write, even Stephen King recommends that.

Errors/Suggestions: There is a place where two paragraphs run together, you should separate them with a blank line between them. Also, if you're a writer, it might be interesting for you to tell us about any stories you might have had published.

What I liked: I lik that you were a favorite author at a writing site, it's too bad it closed down.
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